FanFic Good? Bad? Or something else?
This story is going on since 2012 and is, in my opinion as a writer and reader with some hundred read sci-fi books, one of the best, interesting, storys i found written on paper and in the net.
Why? The story is fascinating, you have nice characters you love or hate, a fascinating storyline with many details, which give it its flair.
All in all, i would suggest the autor(s) to throw the warhammer-franchise out of the window and convert this story to a stand-alone fic. Its on pair with many nice sci-fi storys you have to pay for. I would gladly pay some bucks for this well written work.
Personaly i would give 10 of 10.
FanFic It's a badly constructed Fanfic.
This work is in both parts badly written and badly paced. The encounters between Warhammer world and Germany are done in one paragraph or two, were both parts get barely a surprise in the changes of the other world before it's glossed over. The thematic of Fish out of the Water and Values dissonances, which are the cream of the this types of literature are terrible presented, with the people accepting the changes, the leaders uniting with only a couple of discussions and both explaining and not explaining the difficulties inherent in this types of situations.
The overuse of italics, the constant changes of points of views, the dialogs which are wooden and unnatural and the lack of excitement in so many parts of the story completely broke my interest and willing suspension of disbelief.
It's a great idea, but it really needs a beta reader and a good rewrite from the beginning.
2/10
FanFic Great potential, not so good execution
The idea behind this story is quite sound and interesting - dropping a modern, advanced Earth nation in the Warhammer World - but sadly the author does not seem to cross the line that would make it great.
For example, it is incredibly obvious that English is not his first language, much less one he dominates as should be expected of someone writing this story (I suspect he may have written the story in German and then translated it as best as he could), which makes the story full of grammar mistakes, halting sentences and awkward paragraph construction. Also, there are several points where the author writes a lot about things that do not matter much, yet important ideas are glossed over.
In summary: the story is good, but it could have been much, much better. The author would do well in taking the story and rewrite it from the beginning, enlisting a beta reader to take out the thousands of kinks that have been placed in the story.