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* AssPull: [[spoiler:The Vale Secret Service being Yang's mysterious providers of plot-critical intel and resources. Before Oobleck's reveal, there isn't any indication that the story had a crossover element with ''In The Kingdom's Service''. The only small hints are that Yang's contact is named Vincent Saint-Sinclair, or VSS, and that her "friends" are ''too good'' at ferreting out secret crimes in progress and sneaking into places.]]
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* AssPull: [[spoiler:The Vale Secret Service being Yang's mysterious providers of plot-critical intel and resources. Before Oobleck's reveal, there isn't any indication that the story had a crossover element with ''In The Kingdom's Service''.''Fanfic/InTheKingdomsService''. The only small hints are that Yang's contact is named Vincent Saint-Sinclair, or VSS, and that her "friends" are ''too good'' at ferreting out secret crimes in progress and sneaking into places.]]
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** UnintentionallyUnsympathetic: At her worst, she comes off like this with the way she acts out and auto-assumes the worst in her team, something that she gets regularly called out for by anyone who sees her do this.
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* AssPull: [[spoiler:The Vale Secret Service being Yang's mysterious providers. Before Oobleck's reveal, there wasn't any indication that the story had a crossover element. The one small hint was that Yang's contact is named Vincent Saint-Sinclair, or VSS.]]
* JerkassWoobie: Yang. She spends the whole story fighting an uphill battle against unbearable odds to accomplish her dream and overcome a crippling handicap. In addition, most of her emotional support is lost as her team hides things from her and makes decisions over her head for what they claim is her own good. They also oppose her in her new job every step of the way and unwittingly sabotage her efforts for the first half of the story. On the other hand, she spends a lot of the story lashing out at everyone and it takes until halfway before she can go a conversation with her old team without practically screaming "BETRAYAL!" at them.
** UnintentionallyUnsympathetic: At her worst, she comes off like this with the way she acts out and auto-assumes the worst in her team.
* JerkassWoobie: Yang. She spends the whole story fighting an uphill battle against unbearable odds to accomplish her dream and overcome a crippling handicap. In addition, most of her emotional support is lost as her team hides things from her and makes decisions over her head for what they claim is her own good. They also oppose her in her new job every step of the way and unwittingly sabotage her efforts for the first half of the story. On the other hand, she spends a lot of the story lashing out at everyone and it takes until halfway before she can go a conversation with her old team without practically screaming "BETRAYAL!" at them.
** UnintentionallyUnsympathetic: At her worst, she comes off like this with the way she acts out and auto-assumes the worst in her team.
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* AssPull: [[spoiler:The Vale Secret Service being Yang's mysterious providers. providers of plot-critical intel and resources. Before Oobleck's reveal, there wasn't isn't any indication that the story had a crossover element. element with ''In The one Kingdom's Service''. The only small hint was hints are that Yang's contact is named Vincent Saint-Sinclair, or VSS.VSS, and that her "friends" are ''too good'' at ferreting out secret crimes in progress and sneaking into places.]]
* JerkassWoobie: Yang. She spends the whole story fighting an uphill battle against unbearable odds to accomplish her dream and overcome a crippling handicap. In addition, most of her emotional support is lost as her team hides things from her and makes decisions over her head for what they claim is her own good. They also oppose her in her new job every step of the way and unwittingly sabotage her efforts for the first half of the story. On the other hand, she spends a lot of the story lashing out at everyone in response to this and it takes until halfway before she can go a conversation with her old team without practically screaming "BETRAYAL!" at them.
** UnintentionallyUnsympathetic: At her worst, she comes off like this with the way she acts out and auto-assumes the worst in herteam.team, something that she gets regularly called out for by anyone who sees her do this.
* JerkassWoobie: Yang. She spends the whole story fighting an uphill battle against unbearable odds to accomplish her dream and overcome a crippling handicap. In addition, most of her emotional support is lost as her team hides things from her and makes decisions over her head for what they claim is her own good. They also oppose her in her new job every step of the way and unwittingly sabotage her efforts for the first half of the story. On the other hand, she spends a lot of the story lashing out at everyone in response to this and it takes until halfway before she can go a conversation with her old team without practically screaming "BETRAYAL!" at them.
** UnintentionallyUnsympathetic: At her worst, she comes off like this with the way she acts out and auto-assumes the worst in her
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* {{Squick}}: [[spoiler:We get a ''lovely'' description of Cinder's rotting corpse when Mercury confronts Emerald. It's as disgusting as a rotting corpse of several months would be.]]
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* {{Squick}}: [[spoiler:We get a ''lovely'' description of Cinder's rotting corpse when Mercury confronts Emerald. It's as disgusting as a rotting corpse of several months would be.be, made worse by how Emerald has been treating it like Cinder is still alive in spite of this.]]
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* AssPull: [[spoiler:The Vale Secret Service being Yang's mysterious providers. Before Oobleck's reveal, there wasn't any indication that the story had a crossover element. The one small hint was that Yang's contact is named Vincent Saint-Sinclair, or VSS]]VSS.]]
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* AssPull: [[spoiler:The Vale Secret Service being Yang's mysterious providers. Before Oobleck's reveal, there wasn't any indication that the story had a crossover element.]]
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* AssPull: [[spoiler:The Vale Secret Service being Yang's mysterious providers. Before Oobleck's reveal, there wasn't any indication that the story had a crossover element.]] The one small hint was that Yang's contact is named Vincent Saint-Sinclair, or VSS]]
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* JerkassWoobie: Yang. She spends the whole story fighting an uphill battle against unbearable odds to accomplish her dream and overcome a crippling handicap. In addition, most of her emotional support is lost as her team hides things from her and makes decisions over her head for what they claim is her own good. They also oppose her in her new job every step of the way for the first half of the story. On the other hand, she spends a lot of the story lashing out at everyone and it takes until halfway before she can go a conversation with her old team without practically screaming "BETRAYAL!" at them.
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* JerkassWoobie: Yang. She spends the whole story fighting an uphill battle against unbearable odds to accomplish her dream and overcome a crippling handicap. In addition, most of her emotional support is lost as her team hides things from her and makes decisions over her head for what they claim is her own good. They also oppose her in her new job every step of the way and unwittingly sabotage her efforts for the first half of the story. On the other hand, she spends a lot of the story lashing out at everyone and it takes until halfway before she can go a conversation with her old team without practically screaming "BETRAYAL!" at them.
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* JerkassWoobie: Yang. She spends the whole story fighting an uphill battle against unbearable odds to accomplish her dream and overcome a crippling handicap. On the other hand, she spends a lot of the story lashing out at everyone and it takes until halfway before she can go a conversation with her old team without practically screaming "BETRAYAL!" at them. In her defense, they were pretty shitty to her.
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* JerkassWoobie: Yang. She spends the whole story fighting an uphill battle against unbearable odds to accomplish her dream and overcome a crippling handicap. In addition, most of her emotional support is lost as her team hides things from her and makes decisions over her head for what they claim is her own good. They also oppose her in her new job every step of the way for the first half of the story. On the other hand, she spends a lot of the story lashing out at everyone and it takes until halfway before she can go a conversation with her old team without practically screaming "BETRAYAL!" at them. In her defense, they were pretty shitty to her.them.
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* Hilarious inHindsight: [[spoiler: Mercury jokes in an early chapter that the White Fang are planning a zombie apocalypse. Guess what the climax is.]]
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* Hilarious inHindsight: HilariousInHindsight: [[spoiler: Mercury jokes in an early chapter that the White Fang are planning a zombie apocalypse. Guess what the climax is.]]
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* HilariousinHindsight: [[spoiler: Mercury jokes in an early chapter that the White Fang are planning a zombie apocalypse. Guess what the climax is.]]
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* HilariousinHindsight: Hilarious inHindsight: [[spoiler: Mercury jokes in an early chapter that the White Fang are planning a zombie apocalypse. Guess what the climax is.]]
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* JerkassWoobie: Yang. She spends the whole story fighting an uphill battle against unbearable odds to accomplish her dream and overcome a crippling handicap. On the other hand, she spends a lot of the story lashing out at everyone and it takes until halfway before she can go a conversation with her old team without practically screaming "BETRAYAL!" at them.
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* JerkassWoobie: Yang. She spends the whole story fighting an uphill battle against unbearable odds to accomplish her dream and overcome a crippling handicap. On the other hand, she spends a lot of the story lashing out at everyone and it takes until halfway before she can go a conversation with her old team without practically screaming "BETRAYAL!" at them. In her defense, they were pretty shitty to her.
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* HilariousinHindsight: [[spoiler: Mercury jokes in an early chapter that the White Fang are planning a zombie apocalypse. Guess what the climax is.]]
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* AssPull: [[spoiler:The Vale Secret Service being Yang's mysterious providers. Before Oobleck's reveal, there wasn't any indication that the story had a crossover element.]]
* JerkassWoobie: Yang. She spends the whole story fighting an uphill battle against unbearable odds to accomplish her dream and overcome a crippling handicap. On the other hand, she spends a lot of the story lashing out at everyone and it takes until halfway before she can go a conversation with her old team without practically screaming "BETRAYAL!" at them.
** UnintentionallyUnsympathetic: At her worst, she comes off like this with the way she acts out and auto-assumes the worst in her team.
* {{Squick}}: [[spoiler:We get a ''lovely'' description of Cinder's rotting corpse when Mercury confronts Emerald. It's as disgusting as a rotting corpse of several months would be.]]
* JerkassWoobie: Yang. She spends the whole story fighting an uphill battle against unbearable odds to accomplish her dream and overcome a crippling handicap. On the other hand, she spends a lot of the story lashing out at everyone and it takes until halfway before she can go a conversation with her old team without practically screaming "BETRAYAL!" at them.
** UnintentionallyUnsympathetic: At her worst, she comes off like this with the way she acts out and auto-assumes the worst in her team.
* {{Squick}}: [[spoiler:We get a ''lovely'' description of Cinder's rotting corpse when Mercury confronts Emerald. It's as disgusting as a rotting corpse of several months would be.]]
