Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Changed line(s) 799 (click to see context) from:
'''Bolin:'' I mean... ''[looks away awkwardly, scratching his head]'' Technically...
to:
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Added example(s)
Added DiffLines:
* Azula became a member of the Fire Ferrets after [[NoodleIncident doing something]] that caused all the other applicants to run away.
--> '''Bolin:''' We don't usually decide who gets on the team by ''Agni Kai''.\\
'''Azula:''' We didn't decide who got to be on the team by Agni Kai ''this'' time.\\
'''Bolin:'' I mean... ''[looks away awkwardly, scratching his head]'' Technically...
--> '''Bolin:''' We don't usually decide who gets on the team by ''Agni Kai''.\\
'''Azula:''' We didn't decide who got to be on the team by Agni Kai ''this'' time.\\
'''Bolin:'' I mean... ''[looks away awkwardly, scratching his head]'' Technically...
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Added example(s)
Added DiffLines:
* After Future OL brings up the possibility of Korra giving non-benders the ability to bend using energybending, she tells Mako and Bolin (and Azula, who's accompanying them), and she's put off at how [[FantasticallyIndifferent indifferent they are about it]].
* Future OL decides to show Korra that there is always more for her to learn by bending the four elements right in front of her, to her [[BigWhat complete shock]].
--> "How did-!?" She gesticulates, apparently at random. "What-?! What?!"\\
I relax my pose. "So anchored in your preconceptions of what is and isn't possible, Avatar Korra. You already know enough to work out ''what'' and ''how''. Try and work it out over breakfast."
* Future OL decides to show Korra that there is always more for her to learn by bending the four elements right in front of her, to her [[BigWhat complete shock]].
--> "How did-!?" She gesticulates, apparently at random. "What-?! What?!"\\
I relax my pose. "So anchored in your preconceptions of what is and isn't possible, Avatar Korra. You already know enough to work out ''what'' and ''how''. Try and work it out over breakfast."
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Added example(s)
Added DiffLines:
* Future OL decides to {{troll}} Tenzin by making it appear as though he can airbend, when in actuality, he just used a mundane trick. He tells Korra that it's a lesson in making assumptions.
--> "It it always wise to consider one's own assumptions. Master Tenzin has assumed something about me; he saw me making air bending gestures and the air changed, '''therefore''' the change must have been from bending. That is not so."
--> "It it always wise to consider one's own assumptions. Master Tenzin has assumed something about me; he saw me making air bending gestures and the air changed, '''therefore''' the change must have been from bending. That is not so."
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Added example(s)
Added DiffLines:
* When Future OL accompanies Azula during the latter's visit to her homeworld, one of the locals mistakes her for Future OL's girlfriend, much to the former's amusement and the latter's annoyance.
--> Azula has similar attitudes towards personal decay that ''I'' do, her eighty-five year old body looking perhaps a third of that. She only started allowing her hair to grey in places when people assuming that she was a lot younger than her true age began to irritate her. I on the other hand have far more experience with looking like the old man I have allowed myself to become; a slightly more withered version of the face I wore when I first met her.
--> Azula has similar attitudes towards personal decay that ''I'' do, her eighty-five year old body looking perhaps a third of that. She only started allowing her hair to grey in places when people assuming that she was a lot younger than her true age began to irritate her. I on the other hand have far more experience with looking like the old man I have allowed myself to become; a slightly more withered version of the face I wore when I first met her.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Added example(s)
Changed line(s) 781 (click to see context) from:
* The Renegade telling his new allies what his plans are for Earth is interrupted by Luna dropping by for a visit to see how he's doing in [[Franchise/DCExtendedUniverse that universe]].
to:
* The Future Renegade telling his new allies what his plans are for Earth is interrupted by Luna dropping by for a visit to see how he's doing in [[Franchise/DCExtendedUniverse that universe]].
Added DiffLines:
* When Future Renegade admits that he actually planned on losing to Earth, some of the people he admits this to are dumbfounded.
--> '''Renegade:''' I was expecting Physician and A-. Atom to be conflicted at first, and then betray me once they got over the shock of what was happening. I planned on losing to provide the impetus to encourage Earth's superheroes to get their arses in gear.\\
'''Aquaman:''' You planned on ''losing''?\\
'''Renegade:''' I planned to win using a strategy that I expected to cause me to lose. Only I didn't fully appreciate how filled with scum most of the Earth's governments were, so now I've got to actually do it. Luna finds this all hilarious, of course.\\
'''Lois:''' Of... Course. I'm sorry, I'm just having trouble getting my head around the idea that-.
--> '''Renegade:''' I was expecting Physician and A-. Atom to be conflicted at first, and then betray me once they got over the shock of what was happening. I planned on losing to provide the impetus to encourage Earth's superheroes to get their arses in gear.\\
'''Aquaman:''' You planned on ''losing''?\\
'''Renegade:''' I planned to win using a strategy that I expected to cause me to lose. Only I didn't fully appreciate how filled with scum most of the Earth's governments were, so now I've got to actually do it. Luna finds this all hilarious, of course.\\
'''Lois:''' Of... Course. I'm sorry, I'm just having trouble getting my head around the idea that-.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Added example(s)
Added DiffLines:
* The Renegade telling his new allies what his plans are for Earth is interrupted by Luna dropping by for a visit to see how he's doing in [[Franchise/DCExtendedUniverse that universe]].
--> '''Luna:''' We thought that We would bare witness to your latest-\\
'''Renegade:''' A-''hah''!\\
'''Luna:''' -bout of foolishness. ''[turns to Nathaniel Adam]'' Doth your silver knight have some comment that he wishes to share?\\
'''Nathaniel Adam:''' You married a ''talking horse''?\\
'''Renegade:''' ''[frowns at Nathaniel Adam]'' Not every intelligent species in the universe is bipedal, Captain Adam. And '''no'''. I married a '''pony'''.
--> '''Luna:''' We thought that We would bare witness to your latest-\\
'''Renegade:''' A-''hah''!\\
'''Luna:''' -bout of foolishness. ''[turns to Nathaniel Adam]'' Doth your silver knight have some comment that he wishes to share?\\
'''Nathaniel Adam:''' You married a ''talking horse''?\\
'''Renegade:''' ''[frowns at Nathaniel Adam]'' Not every intelligent species in the universe is bipedal, Captain Adam. And '''no'''. I married a '''pony'''.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
General clarification on work content
Changed line(s) 479 (click to see context) from:
* Zatana ends up under the effects of mind-altering gas in ''Hoard''. Paul's reaction to her argument with the Star Sapphire is worth a chuckle or two.
to:
* Zatana ends up under the effects of mind-altering gas in Episode 81: ''Hoard''. Paul's reaction to her argument with the Star Sapphire is worth a chuckle or two.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Added example(s)
Added DiffLines:
* Before Firebrand eats a slice of Kid Flash's birthday cake, she reveals that as part of Paulphidian improving her body, she now has a sense of taste. The [[EroticEating way she tastes it]] causes Kid Flash's [[JawDrop jaw to drop]].
--> She dips her right index finger into the icing and then pulls it away, a small white blob remaining on the tip. She looks at it for a moment, head slightly tilted to the side. Then she puckers her lips and slowly slides her finger into her mouth. There's a very quiet sucking sound and then she slides the saliva-slicked finger out again, her tongue following it a short way out and giving the tip a farewell lick.
--> She dips her right index finger into the icing and then pulls it away, a small white blob remaining on the tip. She looks at it for a moment, head slightly tilted to the side. Then she puckers her lips and slowly slides her finger into her mouth. There's a very quiet sucking sound and then she slides the saliva-slicked finger out again, her tongue following it a short way out and giving the tip a farewell lick.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Added example(s)
Added DiffLines:
* The juxtaposition of Paul's usual pragmatism and the goofiness of ''Franchise/PowerRangers'' setting is worth a few laughs.
** When he first appears, Rita's minions ask him whether he's evil, and Paul goes on a tangent regarding what actually defines "evil". Then they tell him they need his help to conquer Earth, and Paul asks for some proof they're actually capable of ruling it properly first, including asking for their ''Curriculum Vitae''.
** After seeing the ranger's base of operations, Paul wonders why their enemies never discovered something so obvious. Then he remembers what kind of idiotic minions usually work for Rita and immediately withdraws the question.
** Paul asks the rangers why they never attacked Rita's base directly. After getting a reasonable explanation (if they did, they would be stuck in enemy territory, surrounded by monsters and all kinds of traps and defenses), Paul suggests using ''nukes''.
** Paul's reaction when he first realizes that he's dealing with ''Power Rangers'', of all things, is a very eloquent "The... ''Fuck''...?"
** When he first appears, Rita's minions ask him whether he's evil, and Paul goes on a tangent regarding what actually defines "evil". Then they tell him they need his help to conquer Earth, and Paul asks for some proof they're actually capable of ruling it properly first, including asking for their ''Curriculum Vitae''.
** After seeing the ranger's base of operations, Paul wonders why their enemies never discovered something so obvious. Then he remembers what kind of idiotic minions usually work for Rita and immediately withdraws the question.
** Paul asks the rangers why they never attacked Rita's base directly. After getting a reasonable explanation (if they did, they would be stuck in enemy territory, surrounded by monsters and all kinds of traps and defenses), Paul suggests using ''nukes''.
** Paul's reaction when he first realizes that he's dealing with ''Power Rangers'', of all things, is a very eloquent "The... ''Fuck''...?"
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 631 (click to see context) from:
* On the ''Fallout'' Earth, Krono has to deal with a dating sim AI who leads a robot army finding out that he's single. She has her robot followers kidnap various women to compete in a gameshow to be his girlfriend. Even worse, she has it televised.
to:
* On the ''Fallout'' Earth, Krono has to deal with an AI (originally designed for a dating sim AI and matchmaking contests, left running since the Great War) who leads a robot army finding out that he's single. She has her robot followers kidnap various women to compete in a gameshow to be his girlfriend. Even worse, she has it televised.
Added DiffLines:
** The winner ends up being Tears-In-Rain, who has to explain to her father, Chief Balm-Upon-Wounds (he and most of the tribals of Utah are nominally Mormons) that she is not married, Krono didn't so much as touch her, and ARGOS had no matchmaking authority at all. How did her tribe even know about it? New Canaan still had some old television sets (still working after 200 years) that picked up the broadcast.
** Balm-Upon-Wounds quickly picks up on the fact that, while his daughter might not be married to Krono, she very much ''wants'' to be.
* Paul and Superman are forced to deal with the first real consequences of Themiscyra rejoining the rest of the world - Medina, an Amazon who's been part of a lesbian polycule for literal milennia, went to New York and hooked up with a man so she could carry a child, but didn't think to ''tell the guy about it'', as she was still doing things the way they did things back on Old Themiscyra when they still had men, and didn't think this guy might want to do more than pump and dumb. He thought they were dating, and didn't realize he was a glorified sperm donor.
** Tryphene, one of Medina's lovers, is rather captivated by Superman, and asks if she can pick him when it's "her turn", impressed by his ability to fly.
** Balm-Upon-Wounds quickly picks up on the fact that, while his daughter might not be married to Krono, she very much ''wants'' to be.
* Paul and Superman are forced to deal with the first real consequences of Themiscyra rejoining the rest of the world - Medina, an Amazon who's been part of a lesbian polycule for literal milennia, went to New York and hooked up with a man so she could carry a child, but didn't think to ''tell the guy about it'', as she was still doing things the way they did things back on Old Themiscyra when they still had men, and didn't think this guy might want to do more than pump and dumb. He thought they were dating, and didn't realize he was a glorified sperm donor.
** Tryphene, one of Medina's lovers, is rather captivated by Superman, and asks if she can pick him when it's "her turn", impressed by his ability to fly.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Text Formatting Rules under Quotes Formatting.
Changed line(s) 128,129 (click to see context) from:
---> '''Paul:''' (''internally'') Ring, I'm awake, right?\\
'''Ring:''' (''internally'') Confirmed.
'''Ring:''' (''internally'') Confirmed.
to:
---> '''Paul:''' (''internally'') ''[internally]'' Ring, I'm awake, right?\\
'''Ring:'''(''internally'') ''[internally]'' Confirmed.
'''Ring:'''
Changed line(s) 327 (click to see context) from:
--> '''OL:''' (''internally'') Batman… Getting married… I realize that's a thing people who aren't contractually obliged to be miserable do, it's just… A little weird.
to:
--> '''OL:''' (''internally'') ''[internally]'' Batman… Getting married… I realize that's a thing people who aren't contractually obliged to be miserable do, it's just… A little weird.
Changed line(s) 334 (click to see context) from:
'''Paul:''' (''internally'') She's totally Batwoman! She's got the voice and the glare off pat!
to:
'''Paul:''' (''internally'') ''[internally]'' She's totally Batwoman! She's got the voice and the glare off pat!
Changed line(s) 358 (click to see context) from:
--> '''Clio:''' (''about taking the role Tsaritsa had'') I think not. I cannot think of a way to give myself tentacles in place of my legs.\\
to:
--> '''Clio:''' (''about ''[about taking the role Tsaritsa had'') had]'' I think not. I cannot think of a way to give myself tentacles in place of my legs.\\
Changed line(s) 394 (click to see context) from:
'''Paul:''' (''out loud'') No. (''internally'') Smirk has evolved into Grin. And learned Beam.
to:
'''Paul:''' (''out loud'') ''[out loud]'' No. (''internally'') ''[internally]'' Smirk has evolved into Grin. And learned Beam.
Changed line(s) 409 (click to see context) from:
--> '''Jade:''' ''[kneels and looks down on Paul from a couch]'' (''about Doctor Blight'') And the beautiful supervillainess you rehabilitated? What happened to her?\\
to:
--> '''Jade:''' ''[kneels and looks down on Paul from a couch]'' (''about ''[about Doctor Blight'') Blight]'' And the beautiful supervillainess you rehabilitated? What happened to her?\\
Changed line(s) 413 (click to see context) from:
'''Paul:''' (''internally'') Dang.
to:
'''Paul:''' (''internally'') ''[internally]'' Dang.
Changed line(s) 420 (click to see context) from:
--> '''OL:''' (''internally'') [=ThE nAzIs ReSuRrEcTeD hItLeR aNd He'S nOt A nAzI!=]
to:
--> '''OL:''' (''internally'') ''[internally]'' [=ThE nAzIs ReSuRrEcTeD hItLeR aNd He'S nOt A nAzI!=]
Changed line(s) 478,479 (click to see context) from:
--> '''Zatana:''' (''to the Star Sapphire'') No, I'm not going to freeze him in a giant block of crystal! How can he marry me if he can't speak to the priest?\\
'''Paul:''' (''internally'') Oh no, she's gone full Silver Age. Ring, armour.
'''Paul:''' (''internally'') Oh no, she's gone full Silver Age. Ring, armour.
to:
--> '''Zatana:''' (''to ''[to the Star Sapphire'') Sapphire]'' No, I'm not going to freeze him in a giant block of crystal! How can he marry me if he can't speak to the priest?\\
'''Paul:'''(''internally'') ''[internally]'' Oh no, she's gone full Silver Age. Ring, armour.
'''Paul:'''
Changed line(s) 488 (click to see context) from:
--> '''Renegade:''' (''internally'') His face remains calm, but I can ''feel'' how uncomfortable he is telling me that. Big tough '''male''' supervillain making a sexual harassment complaint. But, if she's making him uncomfortable…
to:
--> '''Renegade:''' (''internally'') ''[internally]'' His face remains calm, but I can ''feel'' how uncomfortable he is telling me that. Big tough '''male''' supervillain making a sexual harassment complaint. But, if she's making him uncomfortable…
Changed line(s) 607 (click to see context) from:
--> '''Paul:''' (''internally'') I think I need to get out of here before they start holding hands or something.
to:
--> '''Paul:''' (''internally'') ''[internally]'' I think I need to get out of here before they start holding hands or something.
Changed line(s) 617 (click to see context) from:
--> (''in response to Melinoë saying that her goals aren't his goals'') "I'm '''not''' assuming that, but I '''am''' assuming that your reduced strength in the material universe means that I could -for example- stick you in the corner of the room with a construct ''gag'' on."
to:
--> (''in ''[in response to Melinoë saying that her goals aren't his goals'') goals]'' "I'm '''not''' assuming that, but I '''am''' assuming that your reduced strength in the material universe means that I could -for example- stick you in the corner of the room with a construct ''gag'' on."
Changed line(s) 632 (click to see context) from:
--> '''Krono:''' (''via telepathy to the unwilling contestants'') I promise that this wasn't my idea.
to:
--> '''Krono:''' (''via ''[via telepathy to the unwilling contestants'') contestants]'' I promise that this wasn't my idea.
Changed line(s) 713 (click to see context) from:
'''Robin:''' (''internally'') No. ''No.''\\
to:
'''Robin:''' (''internally'') ''[internally]'' No. ''No.''\\
Changed line(s) 715 (click to see context) from:
'''Robin:''' (''internally'') '''Double'''-no. (''outloud'') Whenever you're planning on having that talk?\\
to:
'''Robin:''' (''internally'') ''[internally]'' '''Double'''-no. (''outloud'') ''[outloud]'' Whenever you're planning on having that talk?\\
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Spelling/grammar fix(es) Making edits based on Text Formatting Rules.
Changed line(s) 15 (click to see context) from:
--> '''Paul:''' (''about Conner not being able to send images via telepathy'') I was wondering because it didn't happen when we practised earlier.\\
to:
--> '''Paul:''' (''about ''[about Conner not being able to send images via telepathy'') telepathy]'' I was wondering because it didn't happen when we practised earlier.\\
Changed line(s) 17 (click to see context) from:
'''Paul:''' (''internally'') What?\\
to:
'''Paul:''' (''internally'') ''[internally]'' What?\\
Changed line(s) 52 (click to see context) from:
'''Paul:''' (''internally'') What?\\
to:
'''Paul:''' (''internally'') ''[internally]'' What?\\
Changed line(s) 105 (click to see context) from:
--> '''Wally:''' (''about Paul abbreviating Firebrand's name'') Y'know, for Oh El that's like second base.\\
to:
--> '''Wally:''' (''about ''[about Paul abbreviating Firebrand's name'') name]'' Y'know, for Oh El that's like second base.\\
Changed line(s) 343 (click to see context) from:
--> '''Melinoë:''' (''after Paul picks her up with his filaments'') Hey! I thought you were going to.. [[BridalCarry pick me up]].\\
to:
--> '''Melinoë:''' (''after ''[after Paul picks her up with his filaments'') filaments]'' Hey! I thought you were going to.. [[BridalCarry pick me up]].\\
Changed line(s) 345 (click to see context) from:
'''Melinoë:''' ''[looks away]'' No. That's fine. ''[proceeds to shimmer and float on her own]'''
to:
'''Melinoë:''' ''[looks away]'' No. That's fine. ''[proceeds to shimmer and float on her own]'''own]''
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 42 (click to see context) from:
* Whenever Orange Lantern [[MushroomSamba zonks out]]. The first time, he's been drugged and he decides to give Cheshire a 'present' of 'pretty feathers' (arrow constructs). The second time is in ''Bereft'', and he thinks he's dreaming. Long story short, Bialya now has a giant indestructible statue of a naked orange Lantern in their desert. By Episode 15, this has become a RunningGag of sorts, with the readers [[https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/with-this-ring-young-justice-si-thread-six.292893/post-13937958 taking a great deal of fun at the SI]], and author's, expense.
to:
* Whenever Orange Lantern [[MushroomSamba zonks out]]. The first time, he's been drugged and he decides to give Cheshire a 'present' of 'pretty feathers' (arrow constructs). The second time is in ''Bereft'', Episode 9: ''Clueless'', and he thinks he's dreaming. Long story short, Bialya now has a giant indestructible statue of a naked orange Lantern in their desert. By Episode 15, 15: ''Inhumanity'', this has become a RunningGag of sorts, with the readers [[https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/with-this-ring-young-justice-si-thread-six.292893/post-13937958 taking a great deal of fun at the SI]], and author's, expense.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Added example(s)
Added DiffLines:
* Zagreus reveals that he believes Paul seduced his sister.
--> '''Paul:''' I haven't seduced Melinoë. Last time I saw her I nearly got her killed.\\
'''Zagreus:''' She talks about you as a person. You have brought her domain to the masses, who for some reason are grateful-.\\
'''Paul:''' They were pretty unusual people anyway.\\
'''Zagreus:''' And she speaks of you as a maiden interested in courting a man speaks of one who has her interest.
--> '''Paul:''' I haven't seduced Melinoë. Last time I saw her I nearly got her killed.\\
'''Zagreus:''' She talks about you as a person. You have brought her domain to the masses, who for some reason are grateful-.\\
'''Paul:''' They were pretty unusual people anyway.\\
'''Zagreus:''' And she speaks of you as a maiden interested in courting a man speaks of one who has her interest.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Added example(s)
Added DiffLines:
** Mister Atom then reveals that after taking over, he planned on making a golden throne that he could sit on.
---> '''Green Arrow:''' Seriously? 'Sit on a golden throne'? That was it?\\
'''Mister Atom:''' Since the job 'ruler of the world' does not have a description, my conception of it was… Limited.\\
'''Green Arrow:''' Now I see what Paul meant about you being ''young''.
---> '''Green Arrow:''' Seriously? 'Sit on a golden throne'? That was it?\\
'''Mister Atom:''' Since the job 'ruler of the world' does not have a description, my conception of it was… Limited.\\
'''Green Arrow:''' Now I see what Paul meant about you being ''young''.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Added example(s)
Added DiffLines:
* Mister Atom joins the Justice League in an attempt to perfect his understanding of human social dynamics in his bid to TakeOverTheWorld. However, after Paul points out that he's basically already achieved his goal by simply joining the Justice League, Mister Atom needs a moment to process the fact.
--> '''Mister Atom:''' Have I..? Taken over the world by accident? Was it always this simple?
--> '''Mister Atom:''' Have I..? Taken over the world by accident? Was it always this simple?
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Fixing indentation
Changed line(s) 757 (click to see context) from:
---> '''Richard:''' I wasn't sure I'd like having another man do it, but-.\\
to:
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* The Renegade questions Richard Simpson while [[TooKinkyToTorture the latter is strapped to a table and the former is in the process of breaking the latter's bones]].
---> '''Richard:''' I wasn't sure I'd like having another man do it, but-.\\
'''Renegade:''' Don't… Make this weirder than it is already.
---> '''Richard:''' I wasn't sure I'd like having another man do it, but-.\\
'''Renegade:''' Don't… Make this weirder than it is already.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* Tangseid reveals to Artemis that M'gann copied her human like appearance from a pornographic film loosely inspired by Martian Manhunter's older cases.
--> '''Tangseid:''' 'Innocent barely legal schoolgirl' requires a different body type.\\
'''Artemis:''' ''Ew.'' Based on ''Martian Manhunter's'' cases?\\
'''Tangseid:''' Very, very loosely. She kept the shape but expanded her costume to actually cover her body.
--> '''Tangseid:''' 'Innocent barely legal schoolgirl' requires a different body type.\\
'''Artemis:''' ''Ew.'' Based on ''Martian Manhunter's'' cases?\\
'''Tangseid:''' Very, very loosely. She kept the shape but expanded her costume to actually cover her body.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* The Renegade makes Sunset uncomfortable when he starts talking about the possibility of some of the species on Equestria being the result of InterspeciesRomance.
