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--> '''Grey:''' I didn't. [[BlatantLies I knew exactly what was going on all the time.time]].\\
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* A little bit of {{black humor}} in [[{{TooSoon}} chapter 25]]:
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!!'''''Knights Of The Borrowed Dark'''''
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* And later: “You did something. Destroyed it. And you didn't even use your sword. Also, you have a ''sword''.”
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--> '''Denizen:''' Oh. Yes. No problem. Good.
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--> '''Denizen:''' Oh. Yes. No problem. Good.Good.
!!'''''The Forever Court'''''
* “We talked. We didn't ''talk'' talk. We never ''talk'' talk. [[{{BlatantLies}} We don't have anything to]] ''[[{{BlatantLies}} talk]]'' [[{{BlatantLies}} talk about.]]”
** “They had once had an extremely long conversation about the appropriate amount of grout for retiling the bathroom.”
* Most of the Neophytes’ conversations have several funny lines.
* “Afterwards, Denizen and Simon got chips. It was a little anticlimactic.”
** Simon trolling Denizen about his crush on Mercy.
* Denizen has developed a frown for Vivian's antics.
* Edifice Greaves’s [[{{IncomingHam}} introduction.]] Guild of Esoteric Librarians, anyone?
* “She’d just… ''Vivianed''.”
* Simon and Abigail discuss what exact kind of political animal Greaves is.
--> '''Abigail:''' Political animal. What--like a walrus in a tie?\\
'''Simon:''' Thank you for that image, Abigail. No. Greaves is a--hang on. Why a walrus?\\
'''Abigail:''' Dunno.\\
'''Simon:''' Are walruses more political than other animals?\\
'''Abigail:''' Well, bees are a monarchy.\\
'''Simon:''' True. A parliament of walruses. Nope, doesn't sound right.
* Abigail [[{{IncrediblyLamePun}} sandwiching]] real talk about Greaves between [[{{TheSnackIsMoreInteresting}} talking about food.]]
* This trope Discussion and Subversion:
--> '''Malebranche:''' And this is the boy.\\
'''Greaves:''' Let me guess, [[{{ExpectingSomeoneTaller}} you thought he’d be taller.]]\\
'''Malebranche:''' You all look the same to me.
* [[{{SociallyAwkwardHero}} Denizen,]] as always, being a [[{{SarcasmMode}} complete ladykiller.]]
--> “Hi,” Denizen said. ''Right, that’s all I’m planning to say, is it?'' He took a deep breath. “[[{{CaptainObvious}} You broke my window.]]” ''Nailed it.''
* This.
--> '''Greaves:''' How are we all getting on?\\
'''Simon:''' Fantastic. I think my concussions have bruises.\\
'''Abigail:''' I gave him those concussions. [{{Beat}}] Should we have told someone about that?\\
'''Simon:''' About… what…?\\
'''Abigail:''' ''Simon.'' That’s not funny.
* Denizen asking Vivian for money to buy a shirt, oblivious to the fact that she's pulling his leg.
** Denizen trying to fix his hair, which takes so long that Abigail and Simon start speculating as to what could have happened to him ''in the bathroom.''
* Denizen’s excursion into Dublin with Mercy.
* The FunnyBackgroundEvent of Darcie having apparently stolen a robe from the Goshawk.
* A bit from Denizen’s conversation with Jack…
--> '''Jack:''' You're probably feeling a little stupid.\\
'''Denizen:''' I am.\\
'''Jack:''' Like a bit of an idiot.\\
'''Denizen:''' Yep.\\
'''Jack:''' [[{{OverlyLongGag}} A complete--]]\\
'''Denizen:''' ''Yes.'' I get it. Thank you.
* The word “handcapitate” being used.
* Frown No. 5--Don't Patronize Me, ''Adult''… aka I See What You're Doing, or I Know What You're Up To, or [[spoiler:Don't Lie To Me And Pretend You're About To Trigger An Interdimensional War Just To See What I'll Do, You Smarmbucket.]] Yes, that’s a spoiler tag over a ''frown''.
* Vivian gets shot again. In chapter 24. Her response? “At least Grey knew where to shoot.” Pfft.
* Despite it featuring Denizen being [[spoiler:drugged and kidnapped]], chapter 26 manages to be absolutely hilarious. From his head pun to deliriously asking how much of his blood would be used as crusade paint, Denizen's [[spoiler:drugged-up]] antics are ''really funny''.
--> Unfortunately, due to all the hair and glue, the words came out as a sort of strangled ‘''auk''’--like someone strangling an auk. The hands did not reply. Perhaps ''they'' were missing their head. Perhaps the disappearance of body parts was going around, like a specific and gruesome winter cold.
* This:
--> '''Uriel:''' When did ''you'' read a book?\\
'''Ambrel:''' Over your shoulder at some point, probably.
!!'''''The Forever Court'''''
* “We talked. We didn't ''talk'' talk. We never ''talk'' talk. [[{{BlatantLies}} We don't have anything to]] ''[[{{BlatantLies}} talk]]'' [[{{BlatantLies}} talk about.]]”
** “They had once had an extremely long conversation about the appropriate amount of grout for retiling the bathroom.”
* Most of the Neophytes’ conversations have several funny lines.
* “Afterwards, Denizen and Simon got chips. It was a little anticlimactic.”
** Simon trolling Denizen about his crush on Mercy.
* Denizen has developed a frown for Vivian's antics.
* Edifice Greaves’s [[{{IncomingHam}} introduction.]] Guild of Esoteric Librarians, anyone?
* “She’d just… ''Vivianed''.”
* Simon and Abigail discuss what exact kind of political animal Greaves is.
--> '''Abigail:''' Political animal. What--like a walrus in a tie?\\
'''Simon:''' Thank you for that image, Abigail. No. Greaves is a--hang on. Why a walrus?\\
'''Abigail:''' Dunno.\\
'''Simon:''' Are walruses more political than other animals?\\
'''Abigail:''' Well, bees are a monarchy.\\
'''Simon:''' True. A parliament of walruses. Nope, doesn't sound right.
* Abigail [[{{IncrediblyLamePun}} sandwiching]] real talk about Greaves between [[{{TheSnackIsMoreInteresting}} talking about food.]]
* This trope Discussion and Subversion:
--> '''Malebranche:''' And this is the boy.\\
'''Greaves:''' Let me guess, [[{{ExpectingSomeoneTaller}} you thought he’d be taller.]]\\
'''Malebranche:''' You all look the same to me.
* [[{{SociallyAwkwardHero}} Denizen,]] as always, being a [[{{SarcasmMode}} complete ladykiller.]]
--> “Hi,” Denizen said. ''Right, that’s all I’m planning to say, is it?'' He took a deep breath. “[[{{CaptainObvious}} You broke my window.]]” ''Nailed it.''
* This.
--> '''Greaves:''' How are we all getting on?\\
'''Simon:''' Fantastic. I think my concussions have bruises.\\
'''Abigail:''' I gave him those concussions. [{{Beat}}] Should we have told someone about that?\\
'''Simon:''' About… what…?\\
'''Abigail:''' ''Simon.'' That’s not funny.
* Denizen asking Vivian for money to buy a shirt, oblivious to the fact that she's pulling his leg.
** Denizen trying to fix his hair, which takes so long that Abigail and Simon start speculating as to what could have happened to him ''in the bathroom.''
* Denizen’s excursion into Dublin with Mercy.
* The FunnyBackgroundEvent of Darcie having apparently stolen a robe from the Goshawk.
* A bit from Denizen’s conversation with Jack…
--> '''Jack:''' You're probably feeling a little stupid.\\
'''Denizen:''' I am.\\
'''Jack:''' Like a bit of an idiot.\\
'''Denizen:''' Yep.\\
'''Jack:''' [[{{OverlyLongGag}} A complete--]]\\
'''Denizen:''' ''Yes.'' I get it. Thank you.
* The word “handcapitate” being used.
* Frown No. 5--Don't Patronize Me, ''Adult''… aka I See What You're Doing, or I Know What You're Up To, or [[spoiler:Don't Lie To Me And Pretend You're About To Trigger An Interdimensional War Just To See What I'll Do, You Smarmbucket.]] Yes, that’s a spoiler tag over a ''frown''.
* Vivian gets shot again. In chapter 24. Her response? “At least Grey knew where to shoot.” Pfft.
* Despite it featuring Denizen being [[spoiler:drugged and kidnapped]], chapter 26 manages to be absolutely hilarious. From his head pun to deliriously asking how much of his blood would be used as crusade paint, Denizen's [[spoiler:drugged-up]] antics are ''really funny''.
--> Unfortunately, due to all the hair and glue, the words came out as a sort of strangled ‘''auk''’--like someone strangling an auk. The hands did not reply. Perhaps ''they'' were missing their head. Perhaps the disappearance of body parts was going around, like a specific and gruesome winter cold.
* This:
--> '''Uriel:''' When did ''you'' read a book?\\
'''Ambrel:''' Over your shoulder at some point, probably.
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** “Couldn't say. Maybe. Who knows? I certainly don't.”
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** “Couldn't say. Maybe. Who knows? [[{{BlatantLies}} I certainly don't.”]]”
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* "Together, physics, awkwardness, and unexpected heads in gardens conspired to give Denizen's landing [[{{EpicFail}} all the grace of a wheelbarrow full of rocks]]."
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** Like, he really, ''really'' doesn't want to talk to her.
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** Like, he He really, ''really'' doesn't want to talk to her.
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* The road trip to Os Reges Point is a fun little break from the growing intensity of the story. The narration reads with the wit of a RomCom in some places.
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* The road trip to Os Reges Point is a fun little break from the growing intensity of the story. The And the narration reads with the wit of a RomCom in some places.gets hilariously witty.
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'''Abigail:''' God, no. Are you insane?
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'''Abigail:''' God, no. Are you insane?insane?
* Probably the best use of "elaborated" as a dialogue tag ''ever'':
--> "Ummm...," Denizen began, and then she was gone, falling apart into a brocade of mist. Very gently, he bumped to the ground.\\
"Uhhh...," he elaborated, and then just lay there, staring at the ceiling in silence.
* [[{{NoSocialSkills}} Denizen,]] once again breaking new ground in the field of wit and charm.
--> '''Denizen:''' Oh. Yes. No problem. Good.
* Probably the best use of "elaborated" as a dialogue tag ''ever'':
--> "Ummm...," Denizen began, and then she was gone, falling apart into a brocade of mist. Very gently, he bumped to the ground.\\
"Uhhh...," he elaborated, and then just lay there, staring at the ceiling in silence.
* [[{{NoSocialSkills}} Denizen,]] once again breaking new ground in the field of wit and charm.
--> '''Denizen:''' Oh. Yes. No problem. Good.
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* A little bit of {{black humor}} in [[{{TooSoon}} chapter 25]]:
-->He didn't dare look back at Crosscaper, and not just because he was running down a steep hillside road and one slip would do what [[spoiler:Grey]] had planned but with a lot less noise.
-->He didn't dare look back at Crosscaper, and not just because he was running down a steep hillside road and one slip would do what [[spoiler:Grey]] had planned but with a lot less noise.
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* Simon suggesting that Denizen's aunt might be a [[{{NinjaPirateZombieRobot}} spy-chocolatier.]]
--> Less skepticism. More weaponized hazelnut creams.
* This gem:
--> All Grey needed was a sword, Denizen thought dumbly, and the image would be complete.\\
Grey drew a sword from the bag at his feet.
* And later: “You did something. Destroyed it. And you didn't even use your sword. Also, you have a ''sword''.”
* Grey has a lot of hilarious lines.
** "It was a thing. I killed the thing. I don't know what else to tell you."
** “Couldn't say. Maybe. Who knows? I certainly don't.”
** “I'm not even here and you get me in trouble.”
** Him sassing Vivian Hardwick and vice versa:
--> '''Grey:''' I didn't. I knew exactly what was going on all the time.\\
'''Vivian:''' [[{{DeadpanSnarker}} And that makes you a unique and special person.]]
* A ''this-is-stupid'' frown is Denizen's default expression.
* “If he so much as [[{{DisproportionateRetribution}} catches a cold]], the Malleus will [[{{BlackHumor}} melt you both down and use you as scrap]].”
* ''Abigail Falx.''
--> '''Abigail:''' Australia's amazing. Have you been?\\
'''Denizen:''' Em... no.\\
'''Abigail:''' Denizen, do you throw?\\
'''Denizen:''' Em... no.
** Denizen seriously considers lighting Abigail on fire.
** Like, he really, ''really'' doesn't want to talk to her.
--> Why couldn't this have been a dinner party? Nothing major—the entire Order, perhaps. A nice fortress of plates between him and Abigail.
** Abigail nailing Denizen in the face with a bag of chocolate.
--> “Thank you,” he said, and buried his sore nose in a book.
* Grey casually telling Denizen not to do the dishes with a [[{{DangerousForbiddenTechnique}} Higher Cant.]]
* The road trip to Os Reges Point is a fun little break from the growing intensity of the story. The narration reads with the wit of a RomCom in some places.
--> The only person sitting near them was D'Aubigny, and she was wearing headphones so large that they deserved their own bus ticket.
** The “mortal sins” Abigail has committed.
** [[{{TheEndOfTheWorldAsWeKnowIt}} The end of the world]] is [[{{SkewedPriorities}} no excuse]] for missing your best friend's birthday.
** Denizen's lack of knowledge on boats.
--> There was even a little cabin toward the... front bit.\\
''The prow. I think.''
* “Who would have thought being a [[{{GrammarNazi}} grammar nut]] would come in handy?”
* This:
--> '''Abigail:''' And besides, [[{{SarcasmMode}} to die in the service of the Order is the greatest of all honors]].\\
'''Denizen:''' Seriously?\\
'''Abigail:''' God, no. Are you insane?
--> Less skepticism. More weaponized hazelnut creams.
* This gem:
--> All Grey needed was a sword, Denizen thought dumbly, and the image would be complete.\\
Grey drew a sword from the bag at his feet.
* And later: “You did something. Destroyed it. And you didn't even use your sword. Also, you have a ''sword''.”
* Grey has a lot of hilarious lines.
** "It was a thing. I killed the thing. I don't know what else to tell you."
** “Couldn't say. Maybe. Who knows? I certainly don't.”
** “I'm not even here and you get me in trouble.”
** Him sassing Vivian Hardwick and vice versa:
--> '''Grey:''' I didn't. I knew exactly what was going on all the time.\\
'''Vivian:''' [[{{DeadpanSnarker}} And that makes you a unique and special person.]]
* A ''this-is-stupid'' frown is Denizen's default expression.
* “If he so much as [[{{DisproportionateRetribution}} catches a cold]], the Malleus will [[{{BlackHumor}} melt you both down and use you as scrap]].”
* ''Abigail Falx.''
--> '''Abigail:''' Australia's amazing. Have you been?\\
'''Denizen:''' Em... no.\\
'''Abigail:''' Denizen, do you throw?\\
'''Denizen:''' Em... no.
** Denizen seriously considers lighting Abigail on fire.
** Like, he really, ''really'' doesn't want to talk to her.
--> Why couldn't this have been a dinner party? Nothing major—the entire Order, perhaps. A nice fortress of plates between him and Abigail.
** Abigail nailing Denizen in the face with a bag of chocolate.
--> “Thank you,” he said, and buried his sore nose in a book.
* Grey casually telling Denizen not to do the dishes with a [[{{DangerousForbiddenTechnique}} Higher Cant.]]
* The road trip to Os Reges Point is a fun little break from the growing intensity of the story. The narration reads with the wit of a RomCom in some places.
--> The only person sitting near them was D'Aubigny, and she was wearing headphones so large that they deserved their own bus ticket.
** The “mortal sins” Abigail has committed.
** [[{{TheEndOfTheWorldAsWeKnowIt}} The end of the world]] is [[{{SkewedPriorities}} no excuse]] for missing your best friend's birthday.
** Denizen's lack of knowledge on boats.
--> There was even a little cabin toward the... front bit.\\
''The prow. I think.''
* “Who would have thought being a [[{{GrammarNazi}} grammar nut]] would come in handy?”
* This:
--> '''Abigail:''' And besides, [[{{SarcasmMode}} to die in the service of the Order is the greatest of all honors]].\\
'''Denizen:''' Seriously?\\
'''Abigail:''' God, no. Are you insane?
