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* BittersweetSeventeen: Viewpoint character Kanril Eleya is seventeen when the main narrative begins. In short order she breaks up with her high school boyfriend over him wanting them to go to a religious college together and her intent to enlist in the Bajoran Militia; her father thinks her grown-up, her mother still tells her she's "still just a seventeen-year-old girl" as she boards her flight to boot camp. From there she [[SexAsRiteOfPassage loses her virginity]], earns a medal for valor in combat, and ultimately attends Starfleet Academy and finally becomes captain of a starship.
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* RegionalRedecoration: Eleya narrates that the Cardassians blew the top off Mount Bahatan with a battleship's main disruptors so they could use it as a landing site for ore freighters. In the present, the site is a Bajoran Militia training base.
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* ManOfSteelWomanOfKleenex: A briefly mentioned NoodleIncident where Eleya had sex [[ThreeWaySex with two Klingons]] and woke up "with a cracked rib and several bruises in embarrassing places".
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* AutoErotica: Eleya loses her virginity with a platoon-mate in the back of an infantry fighting vehicle.
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* CallForward: Eleya's Academy boyfriend Jerrod Dalton is a bit of a CanonImmigrant, an NPC from the ''Star Trek Online'' Foundry mission "The Interwarp Experiment". He reappears in ''Fanfic/TwoSidesOfACoin'', a novelization of said mission set several years later.
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* EnlightenedSelfInterest: Eleya's of the opinion that the Federation had a fairly obvious ulterior motive in providing humanitarian aid on demand to Romulan border worlds during their third civil war in as many decades (between Taris and Sela). Sure, they do it because they're the good guys, but if they can sneak a few planets away from the Empire by doing it...?
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* {{Realpolitik}}: Eleya's of the opinion that the Federation had a fairly obvious ulterior motive in providing humanitarian aid on demand to Romulan border worlds during the final round of civil wars in the early 2400s (between Taris and Sela). Sure, they do it because they're the good guys, but if they can sneak a few planets away from the Empire by doing it...?
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* TheImmodestOrgasm: Eleya describes herself as "screaming aloud" the first time she sleeps with Jerrod Dalton.
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* FieldPromotion: Captain Jay Yim makes Eleya a brevet lieutenant commander during the battle at Vega.
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* OrbitalBombardment: There's a mention of the USS ''Khitomer'' demolishing what remains of the Vega colony with a torpedo bombardment after the survivors are rescued. Eleya also says that during the Occupation the Cardassians blew the top off a mountain with a battleship's main disruptor to make an open area for a freighter port. Nowadays the Militia uses the area for boot camp.
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* NoOneGetsLeftBehind: Another ship in the USS ''Kagoshima''[='s=] formation is disabled by a parting shot from a dying Borg cube.
--> '''Acting Captain Kanril Eleya:''' Prophets… T’Shar, drop facing shields and lock onto life signs! Anyone we can bring aboard, get ‘em!\\
'''Petty officer at sensors:''' Captain, I’m picking up an imminent core breach in the cube! We don’t have time!\\
'''[[NumberTwo LTJG. Tess Phohl]]:''' You’re relieved!
--> '''Acting Captain Kanril Eleya:''' Prophets… T’Shar, drop facing shields and lock onto life signs! Anyone we can bring aboard, get ‘em!\\
'''Petty officer at sensors:''' Captain, I’m picking up an imminent core breach in the cube! We don’t have time!\\
'''[[NumberTwo LTJG. Tess Phohl]]:''' You’re relieved!
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* FictionalPoliticalParty: The second interview section mentions a few Bajoran political parties, the Socialists, Nationalists, and the Conservative Association. In 2401 the Socialists and the Conservatives together outvote the Nationalists to shut down the Bajoran Militia [[SpaceNavy Space Arm]] on budgetary grounds, which leads to Eleya transferring to Starfleet because she doesn't want to leave space.
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* StarshipLuxurious: Sergeant Eleya favorably compares vids she's seen of Federation starship interiors to the secondhand Breen-built frigate ''Kira Nerys''. The bridge has twelve people crammed into a 5x4 meter room, and "what passes for Colonel Karryn’s ready room must’ve been a broom closet in a former lifetime."
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* MilitaryBrat:
** Eleya denies that the fact that her father and grandfather fought in the Bajoran Resistance was a factor in her choice to enlist in the Bajoran Militia.
** Eleya's Starfleet Academy roommate, Jasmine Velasquez, apparently has had family in uniform going all the way back to UsefulNotes/{{the Revolutionary War}}.
** It turns out that Commander Tesjha Phohl, Eleya's XO in the present day, is from a family with a long history of service in the Andorian Imperial Guard. [[InterserviceRivalry She decided to be contrary and join Starfleet instead.]]
** Eleya denies that the fact that her father and grandfather fought in the Bajoran Resistance was a factor in her choice to enlist in the Bajoran Militia.
** Eleya's Starfleet Academy roommate, Jasmine Velasquez, apparently has had family in uniform going all the way back to UsefulNotes/{{the Revolutionary War}}.
** It turns out that Commander Tesjha Phohl, Eleya's XO in the present day, is from a family with a long history of service in the Andorian Imperial Guard. [[InterserviceRivalry She decided to be contrary and join Starfleet instead.]]
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* ClosestThingWeGot: Eleya ends up the acting captain of a light cruiser by dint of everybody senior to her being dead or badly wounded. She ends up having to use, among other things, a conn officer who's actually from the Operations department. Apparently [[IKnowMortalKombat he plays a holodeck simulation]] of [[Recap/StarTrekDeepSpaceNineS06E06SacrificeOfAngels Operation Return]] a lot.
--> '''Eleya:''' ''({{facepalm}})'' Fine, we don't have time to be picky. Ahead full.
--> '''Eleya:''' ''({{facepalm}})'' Fine, we don't have time to be picky. Ahead full.
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* AffectionateNickname: The USS ''Kagoshima'' gets nicknamed "''Baby K''" by its crew, "Adult K" being the much larger USS ''Khitomer'' in the same squadron.
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* ContinuityNod: ContinuityNod:
** Militia basic training is held at Camp Li, which is named after Li Nalas from the three-parter that opened ''Series/StarTrekDeepSpaceNine'' seasontwo.two.
** Eleya references taking the ''KobayashiMaru'' test while the ''Kagoshima'' is being repaired after Vega, in reference to "Fanfic/TheUniverseDoesntCheat".
** Militia basic training is held at Camp Li, which is named after Li Nalas from the three-parter that opened ''Series/StarTrekDeepSpaceNine'' season
** Eleya references taking the ''KobayashiMaru'' test while the ''Kagoshima'' is being repaired after Vega, in reference to "Fanfic/TheUniverseDoesntCheat".
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* NoodleIncident: Eleya once woke up "with a hangover next to two passed-out Klingons with a cracked rib and several bruises in embarrassing places".
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* NoodleIncident: Eleya once woke up "with a hangover next to two passed-out Klingons with a cracked rib and several bruises in embarrassing places". [[WordOfGod The author commented that "tequila was involved".]]
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* ThreeWaySex: Eleya states that Jazz once brought home a girl ''and'' a guy (which led Eleya to [[INeedAFreakingDrink Need a Freaking Drink]]), and she refers to a NoodleIncident where she woke up with a hangover next to two Klingons with a cracked rib and "several bruises in embarrassing places".
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* FantasticFightingStyle: Eleya compares the Cardassian-derived "military boxing" she learned in the Militia to the krav maga taught in Starfleet.
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* CrazyEnoughToWork: Eleya takes out a Borg probe by neutralizing its shields with her own and beaming a photon torpedo aboard.
-->'''Captain Jay Yim:''' Lieutenant Kanril, are you ''insane''?!\\
'''Eleya:''' It worked, didn't it?
-->'''Captain Jay Yim:''' Lieutenant Kanril, are you ''insane''?!\\
'''Eleya:''' It worked, didn't it?
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* DontCallMeSir: Tess Phohl mistakenly calls Eleya "sir".
-->'''Eleya:''' I’m not a ‘sir’, Phohl. I’m a former NCO, I work for a living. ‘Captain’ is fine, ‘ma’am’ if you want to be formal, Hell, call me by my first name, even.
-->'''Eleya:''' I’m not a ‘sir’, Phohl. I’m a former NCO, I work for a living. ‘Captain’ is fine, ‘ma’am’ if you want to be formal, Hell, call me by my first name, even.
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* ImADoctorNotAPlaceholder: A noncom informs Eleya that she is a transporter operator, not a soldier. Eleya informs the noncom [[DeadpanSnarker that the Borg probably won't care one way or the other]].
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* HumansAreInsane:
--> I scoop up my glass and start to tell the barman to open a tab before I remember that Earth doesn’t use money. Humans, what can I say? They’re weird.
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* NoBiochemicalBarriers: Eleya mentions taking a side trip to medical upon arriving on Earth to get some immunotherapy against Earth pollen.
* NoodleIncident: Eleya once woke up "with a hangover next to two passed-out Klingons with a cracked rib and several bruises in embarrassing places".
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* ArmsAndArmorThemeNaming: The two ''Excalibur''-class starships featured are the ''[[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ulfberht Ulfberht]]'' and the ''[[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Szczerbiec Szczerbiec]]''.
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** Eleya borrows a line from the ''Series/BabylonFive'' episode [[Recap/BabylonFiveS02E10GROPOS "GROPOS"]], saying that her drill sergeant used to say, "Soldier goes into combat and he ain't scared, he's either dead or stupid."
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* GoingDownWithTheShip: The captain of the USS ''Mosul''.
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* InsignificantLittleBluePlanet: A reminder, Eleya isn't human. As far as she's concerned the only functional difference between Earth and any other Class M rock is that she has to pay taxes to it.
* MacrossMissileMassacre: After the fleet brings down the shields of a Borg cube with massed phaser fire the killshot comes in the form of "half a hundred torpedoes".
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* NameOrderConfusion: Dalton mistakenly calls Eleya "Sergeant Eleya", and she corrects him that Eleya is her given name, not her surname.
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* {{Realpolitik}}: Eleya's of the opinion that the Federation had a fairly obvious ulterior motive in providing humanitarian aid on demand to Romulan border worlds during the final round of civil wars in the early 2400s (between Taris and Sela). Sure, they do it because they're the good guys, but if they can sneak a few planets away from the Empire by doing it...?
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* ThisIsForEmphasisBitch[=/=]VerbThis: Eleya throws an overloaded phaser into a group of Borg drones and traps them with a blast door. Kaboom.
-->'''Eleya:''' Adapt to ''that'', you son of a whore.
-->'''Eleya:''' Adapt to ''that'', you son of a whore.
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* ShoutOut: The account of how Eleya lost her virginity is based on the same thing happening to Ziva David from ''Series/{{NCIS}}''.
--> '''Author's Note:''' Bajorans are basically post-Holocaust {{space Jews}} in a lot of ways and Eleya’s a {{badass}} {{action girl}}, so what the hey?
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** The account of how Eleya lost her virginity is based on the same thing happening to Ziva David from ''Series/{{NCIS}}''.
--> ---> '''Author's Note:''' Bajorans are basically post-Holocaust {{space Jews}} in a lot of ways and Eleya’s a {{badass}} {{action girl}}, so what the hey?hey?
** Eleya's comment on the usual Borg "resistance is futile" spiel is [[Literature/CiaphasCain "I'm getting really sick of hearing that."]]
** The account of how Eleya lost her virginity is based on the same thing happening to Ziva David from ''Series/{{NCIS}}''.
** Eleya's comment on the usual Borg "resistance is futile" spiel is [[Literature/CiaphasCain "I'm getting really sick of hearing that."]]
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* PercussiveMaintenance: Colonel Karryn Retta, CO of the ''Kira Nerys'', smacking a light panel to get it to stop flickering.
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* ContinuityNod: Militia base camp is held at Camp Li, which is named after Li Nalas from the three-parter that opened ''Series/StarTrekDeepSpaceNine'' season two.
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* HoldYourHippogriffs: Eleya refers to her reasons for joining Starfleet as "nothing really [[labelnote:Bajor-shaking]]earth-shaking[[/labelnote]]".
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* AlternateCalendar: Dates on the Bajoran calendar go something like "Satar 4, Seventh Era 943, Year of the Unseen Harp." The date by Earth reckoning is given afterward.
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''[[http://sto-forum.perfectworld.com/showthread.php?p=18341381#post18341381 From Bajor to the Black]]'' is a ''VideoGame/StarTrekOnline'' fanfic by Tropers/StarSword, written for Literary Challenge 66 on the ''STO'' forums.
The prompt for the fic asks what made your character join Starfleet, and so the fic fills out some of Captain Kanril Eleya's {{backstory}}. It alternates between vignettes set in Eleya's past with short segments of her answering unheard interview questions from Jake Sisko (a writer and journalist in the ''STO'' timeline, used for a LiteraryAgentHypothesis in ''The Path to 2409'' and ''Literature/StarTrekOnlineTheNeedsOfTheMany'').
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!!This work provides examples of the following tropes:
* AlternateCalendar: Dates on the Bajoran calendar go something like "Satar 4, Seventh Era 943, Year of the Unseen Harp." The date by Earth reckoning is given afterward.
* {{Epigraph}}: The first four lines of [[http://youtu.be/VcjzHMhBtf0 "Don't Stop Believin'"]] by Music/{{Journey}}.
-->''Just a small town girl\\
Livin' in a lonely world\\
She took the midnight train\\
Goin' anywhere''
* FourthWallPsych: The fic starts out with what seems to be Eleya directly addressing the reader. But the second time she jumps out of the {{backstory}} narrative, it turns out she's actually talking to Jake Sisko.
* FramingDevice: Jake Sisko interviewing Eleya.
* MakingLoveInAllTheWrongPlaces: During boot camp Eleya loses her virginity in the cargo compartment of an infantry fighting vehicle.
* ScarsAreForever: After the first TimeSkip Eleya's mother wants her to have the veterans hospital remove the scars left over from the boarding action against the ''Kira''. She keeps them around as a reminder that she isn't immortal.
--> I may have popped my cherry in the back of an armored vehicle, but I didn’t lose my innocence then. That’s what the scars mark: The first time I killed, and the first time I nearly died. The first time I looked Death in the eye. The first time he blinked.\\
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Someday he won’t.
* SemperFi: The Bajoran Militia uses US Marine Corps lingo and ranks (e.g. "gunny" for gunnery sergeants, "ship over" for reenlisting), which the author said was an artistic decision to draw a contrast with the less-militaristic Starfleet (something like a TranslationConvention).
* ShoutOut: The account of how Eleya lost her virginity is based on the same thing happening to Ziva David from ''Series/{{NCIS}}''.
--> '''Author's Note:''' Bajorans are basically post-Holocaust {{space Jews}} in a lot of ways and Eleya’s a {{badass}} {{action girl}}, so what the hey?
* SmallTownBoredom: Eleya joins the Militia because she wants to get out of Priyat (she feels the town is dying) and have an adventure before she settles down. The fact that she'll get a full ride to college afterwards doesn't hurt.
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The prompt for the fic asks what made your character join Starfleet, and so the fic fills out some of Captain Kanril Eleya's {{backstory}}. It alternates between vignettes set in Eleya's past with short segments of her answering unheard interview questions from Jake Sisko (a writer and journalist in the ''STO'' timeline, used for a LiteraryAgentHypothesis in ''The Path to 2409'' and ''Literature/StarTrekOnlineTheNeedsOfTheMany'').
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!!This work provides examples of the following tropes:
* AlternateCalendar: Dates on the Bajoran calendar go something like "Satar 4, Seventh Era 943, Year of the Unseen Harp." The date by Earth reckoning is given afterward.
* {{Epigraph}}: The first four lines of [[http://youtu.be/VcjzHMhBtf0 "Don't Stop Believin'"]] by Music/{{Journey}}.
-->''Just a small town girl\\
Livin' in a lonely world\\
She took the midnight train\\
Goin' anywhere''
* FourthWallPsych: The fic starts out with what seems to be Eleya directly addressing the reader. But the second time she jumps out of the {{backstory}} narrative, it turns out she's actually talking to Jake Sisko.
* FramingDevice: Jake Sisko interviewing Eleya.
* MakingLoveInAllTheWrongPlaces: During boot camp Eleya loses her virginity in the cargo compartment of an infantry fighting vehicle.
* ScarsAreForever: After the first TimeSkip Eleya's mother wants her to have the veterans hospital remove the scars left over from the boarding action against the ''Kira''. She keeps them around as a reminder that she isn't immortal.
--> I may have popped my cherry in the back of an armored vehicle, but I didn’t lose my innocence then. That’s what the scars mark: The first time I killed, and the first time I nearly died. The first time I looked Death in the eye. The first time he blinked.\\
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Someday he won’t.
* SemperFi: The Bajoran Militia uses US Marine Corps lingo and ranks (e.g. "gunny" for gunnery sergeants, "ship over" for reenlisting), which the author said was an artistic decision to draw a contrast with the less-militaristic Starfleet (something like a TranslationConvention).
* ShoutOut: The account of how Eleya lost her virginity is based on the same thing happening to Ziva David from ''Series/{{NCIS}}''.
--> '''Author's Note:''' Bajorans are basically post-Holocaust {{space Jews}} in a lot of ways and Eleya’s a {{badass}} {{action girl}}, so what the hey?
* SmallTownBoredom: Eleya joins the Militia because she wants to get out of Priyat (she feels the town is dying) and have an adventure before she settles down. The fact that she'll get a full ride to college afterwards doesn't hurt.
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