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* AmbiguouslyBrown[=/=]MultiEthnicName: Eleya's first-semester roommate Jasmine "Jazz" Velasquez has brown skin, black hair, and almond-shaped eyes. Based just on that we can infer Latina and either Arabic or Persian ancestry, but then we get to the part where she's had ancestors in uniform going back to UsefulNotes/{{the American Revolution}} (meaning she most likely has Caucasian ancestors as well).
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* AmbiguouslyBrown[=/=]MultiEthnicName: AmbiguouslyBrown: Eleya's first-semester roommate Jasmine "Jazz" Velasquez has brown skin, black hair, and almond-shaped eyes. Based just on that we can infer Latina and either Arabic or Persian ancestry, but then we get to the part where she's had ancestors in uniform going back to UsefulNotes/{{the American Revolution}} (meaning she most likely has Caucasian ancestors as well).
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* MultiEthnicName: An admiral named Daisuke Hussein is mentioned pinning Eleya's ensign insignia on her uniform at graduation from Starfleet Academy.
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* RecruitersAlwaysLie: Kanril Eleya is asked by Jake Sisko why she joined Starfleet and dishes on the ads' truthfulness.
-->The lifestyle? Oh, Hell no! Let's face it, it sucks a lot of the time. The "strange new worlds" they show you in the recruitment vids are the good days; the rest of them are "woohoo, another average star with a bunch of dead rocks orbiting it".
-->The lifestyle? Oh, Hell no! Let's face it, it sucks a lot of the time. The "strange new worlds" they show you in the recruitment vids are the good days; the rest of them are "woohoo, another average star with a bunch of dead rocks orbiting it".
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* BittersweetSeventeen: Viewpoint character Kanril Eleya is seventeen when the main narrative begins. In short order she breaks up with her high school boyfriend over him wanting them to go to a religious college together and her intent to enlist in the Bajoran Militia; her father thinks her grown-up, her mother still tells her she's "still just a seventeen-year-old girl" as she boards her flight to boot camp. From there she [[SexAsRiteOfPassage loses her virginity]], earns a medal for valor in combat, and ultimately attends Starfleet Academy and finally becomes captain of a starship.
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* BittersweetSeventeen: Bittersweet17: Viewpoint character Kanril Eleya is seventeen when the main narrative begins. In short order she breaks up with her high school boyfriend over him wanting them to go to a religious college together and her intent to enlist in the Bajoran Militia; her father thinks her grown-up, her mother still tells her she's "still just a seventeen-year-old girl" as she boards her flight to boot camp. From there she [[SexAsRiteOfPassage loses her virginity]], earns a medal for valor in combat, and ultimately attends Starfleet Academy and finally becomes captain of a starship.
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* {{Epigraph}}: The first four lines of [[http://youtu.be/VcjzHMhBtf0 "Don't Stop Believin'"]] by Music/{{Journey}}.
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* {{Epigraph}}: The first four lines of [[http://youtu.be/VcjzHMhBtf0 "Don't Stop Believin'"]] by Music/{{Journey}}.Music/{{Journey|Band}}.
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* MultiEthnicName: An admiral named Daisuke Hussein is mentioned pinning Eleya's ensign insignia on her uniform at graduation from Starfleet Academy.
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* {{Sexiled}}: Eleya comments that she got driven from her dorm room at Starfleet Academy due to her ExtremeOmnisexual roommate Jasmine Velasquez at least once a week. Usually she spends such evenings studying in the library, but one night she decides she [[INeedAFreakingDrink Needs a Freaking Drink]] when Jazz brings home [[AThreesomeIsHot both a girl and a guy]]--and ends up going home with a new boyfriend herself.
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The prompt for the fic asks what made your character join Starfleet, and so the fic fills out some of Captain Kanril Eleya's {{backstory}}. It alternates between vignettes set in Eleya's past with short segments of her answering unheard interview questions from Jake Sisko (a writer and journalist in the ''STO'' timeline, used for a LiteraryAgentHypothesis in ''The Path to 2409'' and ''Literature/StarTrekOnlineTheNeedsOfTheMany'').
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The prompt for the fic asks what made your character join Starfleet, and so the fic fills out some of Captain Kanril Eleya's {{backstory}}. It alternates between vignettes set in Eleya's past with short segments of her answering unheard interview questions from Jake Sisko (a writer and journalist in the ''STO'' timeline, used for a LiteraryAgentHypothesis ATrueStoryInMyUniverse in ''The Path to 2409'' and ''Literature/StarTrekOnlineTheNeedsOfTheMany'').
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* CrazyEnoughToWork: Eleya takes out a Borg probe by neutralizing its shields with her own and beaming a photon torpedo aboard.
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* CrazyEnoughToWork: Eleya takes out a Borg probe by [[DeadlyForceField neutralizing its shields with her own own]] and beaming a photon torpedo aboard.
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* DeadlyForceField: Eleya orders her chief engineer to adjust USS ''Kagoshima'''s DeflectorShield waveform until it is precisely 180 degrees out-of-phase with the shields of a Borg probe, which lets her ram their shields together so they cancel each other out and open a hole she can beam a photon torpedo through.
