Unless you like reading badfic this story is not for you. The main character is very likely the self-insert of a fourteen year old fanfic writer. The prose reads more like an account of an RPG session rather then an actual story. The writer focuses way to much on his original characters rather then actual canon characters, canon places and things that identify this as being a Bleach fanfic. Many of the O Cs have English names despite the fact there shouldn't be characters with English names, so chances are high that the writer is using his name as well as the names of his friends.
The fourteenth squad is thrown in there so that his self-insert can have the position of fukutaicho despite the fact this self-insert is a relative unknown. If there had once been a fourteenth squad fifteen years before the Hollowfication it would have been noted. Not to mention Tite Kubo has recently mentioned the "original thirteen" in the Manga, indicating the Gotei Thirteen was formed around thirteen individuals from the past. Messing with this important of a canon fact isn't a trivial matter and shouldn't be taken lightly by a writer if they want to be taken seriously.
Nothing happens in the story either and it just rambles on and on. There are forty-two chapters and over eighty-thousand words to this piece, and the fact the writer puts entire chapters into bold font will not help people. The problems with the story are numerous.
Don't Waste Your Time
Unless you like reading badfic this story is not for you. The main character is very likely the self-insert of a fourteen year old fanfic writer. The prose reads more like an account of an RPG session rather then an actual story. The writer focuses way to much on his original characters rather then actual canon characters, canon places and things that identify this as being a Bleach fanfic. Many of the O Cs have English names despite the fact there shouldn't be characters with English names, so chances are high that the writer is using his name as well as the names of his friends.
The fourteenth squad is thrown in there so that his self-insert can have the position of fukutaicho despite the fact this self-insert is a relative unknown. If there had once been a fourteenth squad fifteen years before the Hollowfication it would have been noted. Not to mention Tite Kubo has recently mentioned the "original thirteen" in the Manga, indicating the Gotei Thirteen was formed around thirteen individuals from the past. Messing with this important of a canon fact isn't a trivial matter and shouldn't be taken lightly by a writer if they want to be taken seriously.
Nothing happens in the story either and it just rambles on and on. There are forty-two chapters and over eighty-thousand words to this piece, and the fact the writer puts entire chapters into bold font will not help people. The problems with the story are numerous.