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For the first ten chapters or so, I would agree with you completely. The way JasonTheHuman managed to weave his narrative through the actual episodes, his remarkably fresh characterization of Lyra and Bon-Bon, and the air of mystery surrounding the humans were handled masterfully.
And then we find out Lyra's actually a human, and she goes off to live with other humans.
At that point, the ENTIRE STORY shifts gears from "a pony wants to learn about humans" to "a human who was a pony boffs around aimlessly." The human chapters were, to be frank, dragged out for far too long, and by the time the latest chapter came out (and thankfully made the fic interesting again) I was quite ready to drop the whole story. It wasn't that the human world was too nice like others have complained about, but rather that this didn't feel like a My Little Pony story anymore. You could have erased anything related to ponies and it would have had zero effect on the narrative.
Oh well, it looks like he's building to the climax, so I'll keep my eyes on that. It's just a shame that what looks to be the middle portion of the story really lets the excellent first few chapters down.
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One of the best fanfics in the Equestria universe.
The Equestria universe mostly consists of fanon rather than canon content. Think about characters as Derpy Hooves, Colgate, Dr.Whooves, Carrot Top, Octavia and many others. Those characters do not appear in the show (except as Extra's
), but the bronies have given them a (believeable) character that everybody can enjoy. Lyra Heartstrings and Bonbon are no exception. Lyra is known to the bronies as a cheerish pony who is obsessed about humans and want to become one. Bonbon is her roommate, and in some occassions also her lesbian lover. She is the more serious character. JasonTheHuman has played really well with those two characters.
The story starts with Lyra and Bonbon sharing a small appartment together in Ponyville. Bonbon is a confectioner who wants to work at Sugarcube corner while Lyra is a musician. Lyra though has an interest for mythology and one legendary species in particular: Humanity. She has this crazy obsession already half her life and even turns her hooves into hands from time to time because she enjoys it. This... remarkable behavior is driving her roommate crazy, especially when Lyra is getting paranoid: the government doesn't want that their ponies to know about the warfaring humans and they want to get her...
I won't spoil everything for you, but read it! The character development is really interesting, the plot is solid and the cliffhangers are amazing. You can't predict how the end is going to be. The story has a better quality than My Little Dashie,My Little Alicorn and Through The Eyes Of Another Pony.