It's readable, it mostly makes sense, and that's about it. Quite a few things about it tick me off.
Seems to be too dark for the sake of being dark and no other reason. Like the headache thing, and horrible things happening without much need.
The comic style chapter annoyed me a bit. It's not bad in itself, but I find the sudden medium shift a bit irksome, because I read fiction for a reason: text is easy and comfortable to read in the underground, and doesn't worsen my slight case of RSI. That's a bit too personal of a reason, but I can resume it as: a medium shift forces a reader who was fine with the original medium suddenly re-adapt in the middle. I can't read the comic chapter in a train, I need to make a specific exception from my routine and read it at home.
Too much rape and done badly. This is a touchy subject that needs to be approached very carefully. The second instance IMO was rather tactless in how it's almost instantly forgotten, and how the suicide attempt was somehow needed to get over it. Ew.
On that note I also strongly dislike the disordered chapter, it's just not enjoyable to read. I get what it tries to do, but I just don't enjoy it.
The "The Magic Goes Away" trope: strongly dislike in general, but especially in this case. The Queen was created by a priestess, meaning magic was present before her and has no reason to disappear when she dies. I see the Queen as just the first Yamiko and not being particularly special except in being more powerful than the others, maybe. They didn't lose their powers when Kamen died, so why would they lose them when the Queen did?
Poor Dusty really gets screwed over: neglected by his owner, then beaten, then has his intelligence taken away so that he can't even properly enjoy the good times.
Not too bad, not too good either.
It's readable, it mostly makes sense, and that's about it. Quite a few things about it tick me off.
Seems to be too dark for the sake of being dark and no other reason. Like the headache thing, and horrible things happening without much need.
The comic style chapter annoyed me a bit. It's not bad in itself, but I find the sudden medium shift a bit irksome, because I read fiction for a reason: text is easy and comfortable to read in the underground, and doesn't worsen my slight case of RSI. That's a bit too personal of a reason, but I can resume it as: a medium shift forces a reader who was fine with the original medium suddenly re-adapt in the middle. I can't read the comic chapter in a train, I need to make a specific exception from my routine and read it at home.
Too much rape and done badly. This is a touchy subject that needs to be approached very carefully. The second instance IMO was rather tactless in how it's almost instantly forgotten, and how the suicide attempt was somehow needed to get over it. Ew.
On that note I also strongly dislike the disordered chapter, it's just not enjoyable to read. I get what it tries to do, but I just don't enjoy it.
The "The Magic Goes Away" trope: strongly dislike in general, but especially in this case. The Queen was created by a priestess, meaning magic was present before her and has no reason to disappear when she dies. I see the Queen as just the first Yamiko and not being particularly special except in being more powerful than the others, maybe. They didn't lose their powers when Kamen died, so why would they lose them when the Queen did?
Poor Dusty really gets screwed over: neglected by his owner, then beaten, then has his intelligence taken away so that he can't even properly enjoy the good times.