This was an interesting premise. I wanted to like it. However the constant grammar errors got on my nerves after a while. The author badly needed a beta to recover all the words that would randomly go missing or be wrong.
As for the story itself, the Hermione bashing went a little overboard at times, especially when she slipped Harry love potion so he would stop hanging around Ginny so much and then got addicted to dark magic so she could murder Ginny and "win back" Harry. Though she acknowledges that she messed up badly and showed real remorse for it, she was the only person who had anything resembling character development rather than wish fulfillment (after some serious character derailment). Ron the Death Eater shows up in spades, as he only ever appeared in the story to complain about Harry getting everything handed to him, even when Harry has been working hard to get his desired results. The author's attempt at lampshade hanging by having someone complain (rightly so) that he's acting just like Draco Malfoy regarding Harry only served to underline how little he added to the story after he broke ties with Harry and never got over it.
Harry himself seems to be a bit unbelievable. Super!Harry fics can be done well but Harry seems to go from idealistic, if naive hero to manipulative bastard that has everyone from Fudge to Dumbledore playing right into his hands damn near overnight. All because - of course - Ron and Hermione were holding him back. Add to this his laundry list of impossible achievements, from resurrecting someone perfectly with the Resurrection Stone (not a shade, but an actual flesh and blood person) to having defacto control over Hogwarts as the High Inquisitor to conquering Gringots overnight - all while everyone marvels that someone who isn't even of age has accomplished so much - and it got to be too much. It stopped being a story of how Harry had to set aside his morals to come out on top and started reading more and more like wish fulfillment.
In short, the further I got into this story, the harder it was to keep going. I enjoyed it for a little while, but in retrospect it needs serious work.
Entertaining enough but has serious problems.
This was an interesting premise. I wanted to like it. However the constant grammar errors got on my nerves after a while. The author badly needed a beta to recover all the words that would randomly go missing or be wrong.
As for the story itself, the Hermione bashing went a little overboard at times, especially when she slipped Harry love potion so he would stop hanging around Ginny so much and then got addicted to dark magic so she could murder Ginny and "win back" Harry. Though she acknowledges that she messed up badly and showed real remorse for it, she was the only person who had anything resembling character development rather than wish fulfillment (after some serious character derailment). Ron the Death Eater shows up in spades, as he only ever appeared in the story to complain about Harry getting everything handed to him, even when Harry has been working hard to get his desired results. The author's attempt at lampshade hanging by having someone complain (rightly so) that he's acting just like Draco Malfoy regarding Harry only served to underline how little he added to the story after he broke ties with Harry and never got over it.
Harry himself seems to be a bit unbelievable. Super!Harry fics can be done well but Harry seems to go from idealistic, if naive hero to manipulative bastard that has everyone from Fudge to Dumbledore playing right into his hands damn near overnight. All because - of course - Ron and Hermione were holding him back. Add to this his laundry list of impossible achievements, from resurrecting someone perfectly with the Resurrection Stone (not a shade, but an actual flesh and blood person) to having defacto control over Hogwarts as the High Inquisitor to conquering Gringots overnight - all while everyone marvels that someone who isn't even of age has accomplished so much - and it got to be too much. It stopped being a story of how Harry had to set aside his morals to come out on top and started reading more and more like wish fulfillment.
In short, the further I got into this story, the harder it was to keep going. I enjoyed it for a little while, but in retrospect it needs serious work.