Discussion DethroningMoment / FanWorks

Not sure if anyone will actually see this, but are we allowed to ad two entries for different fanfics based off the same work?

I would like to challenge this one, since it's bashing an entire work:

• King Clark: While I was reading throughout the NGE Fanfic Recs, I came across one title that sounded interesting: Arsenal. It starts off as a Peggy Sue fic, but quickly turns into a rollercoaster of insanity. Throughout the story, Shinji goes around doing ridiculously awesome, yet unquestionally corrupt things as a Necessarily Evil Sociopathic Hero, all in the name of preventing the Third Impact. Shinji starts the story off by doing things that are worse than what Gendo did for most of the series, but nothing too evil. There are signs that the story might be shaky in the way that Shinji causes his new underlings to change their ways quickly, but it isn't anything that isn't unforgivable. Unfortunately, the conclusion of the Black Bunnies arc completely ruins the viewer's ability to like the Shinji in one fell swoop. The three Black Bunnies are all established as extremely immoral and evil, and Shinji decides how he'll deal with them: he plans to use nanomachines to destroy their nervous systems entirely, in order to place them each into a Fate Worse than Death that is borderline And I Must Scream material. No one has any objections against his decision beforehand (not even Misato, who even helps set up what Shinji has planned for them). As for the punishments themselves, they are as follows (spoilertagged for high amounts of Squick): Kaede, the first Bunny, is subject to 48 hours of Cold-Blooded Torture, and is then forced to become a bodyguard who is coerced into pain if she so much as thinks about her past. This is easily the least harsh of the punishments. Satsuki, the second Bunny, has her brain permanently damaged and reduced to acting as what can best be described as a human dog. To add insult to injury, Shinji decides to give her a collar, make her sleep in a basket and eat out of a bowl, while the only desires that run through her mind are to recieve affection from her "master". He decides then to keep her as a sex slave for no other reason that she would have done the same to him, but mainly because he can. It gets worse, though: Aoi, the third Bunny, has her abilities to smell, taste and touch numbed forever, and is left tied up in shackles in a chamber. The population of Tokyo-3 then covers her with graffitti (this isn't even Refuge in Audacity anymore; it's just grotesque and utterly ridiculous). Finally, a man decides to use her as a toilet, all while she can only beg for death. Shinji then gloats about what he's done to his father, and tells him what he's done all while sounding extremely pleased. Afterward, Gendo is visibly disgusted with his son's treatment of the Black Bunnies in spite of the fact that he approved of the use of these nanomachines in the first place. So, does Shinji have a shred of guilt for what he's done? Absolutely not. The only thing that comes close to that is his remembrance of what Asuka said to him in the canon, but that hardly counts. Remember when I said that Shinji's actions were all in the name of stopping the Third Impact? This has absolutely nothing to do with it, so the author just turned an interesting character into a sick freak without a good reason. What's even worse is that the author has claimed that he considers these things to be proportionate punishments to them. No one, not even the worst of villains, should experience fates as disturbing as these. The protagonist has practically become a prime example of a Designated Hero with this action, and has been warped beyond recognition from his canonical counterpart. I'm too disgusted with this story to read through it any further, and I'd rather not see whatever the author turns Asuka into (assuming he's still churning out this filth). It's a shame that They Wasted a Perfectly Good Plot, too; from the premise and some pieces of the plot, this story is a prime example of What Could Have Been a good, interesting read. ^note Phew. That sure took a while, didn't it?