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* {{Narm}}: Even by salt fic standards, the very idea of Alya and Lila outright getting their narrative positions ''flipped'' compared to the show (Alya gets heavily demonized even by "salt fic" standards to the point of becoming an unrepentant ManipulativeBastard while Lila has a HeelFaceTurn and is established as not being as horrible as she is in canon otherwise) is a bit of a stretch.
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* {{Narm}}: Even by salt fic standards, the very idea of Alya and Lila outright getting their narrative positions ''flipped'' compared to the show (Alya gets heavily '''heavily''' demonized even by "salt fic" standards to the point of becoming an unrepentant ManipulativeBastard while Lila has a HeelFaceTurn and is established as not being as horrible as she is in canon otherwise) is a bit of a stretch.
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* {{Narm}}: Even by salt fic standards, the very of idea of Alya and Lila outright getting their narrative positions ''flipped'' compared to the show (Alya gets heavily demonized even by "salt fic" standards to the point of becoming an unrepentant ManipulativeBastard while Lila has a HeelFaceTurn and is established as not being as horrible as she is in canon otherwise) is a bit of a stretch.
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* {{Narm}}: Even by salt fic standards, the very of idea of Alya and Lila outright getting their narrative positions ''flipped'' compared to the show (Alya gets heavily demonized even by "salt fic" standards to the point of becoming an unrepentant ManipulativeBastard while Lila has a HeelFaceTurn and is established as not being as horrible as she is in canon otherwise) is a bit of a stretch.
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* {{Narm}}: Even by salt fic standards, Alya calling one of Marinette's new friends lame because they're homeless feels WAY too out of character, and trying too hard to make her ''extra'' unlikable.
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* {{Narm}}: Even by salt fic standards, the very of idea of Alya and Lila outright getting their narrative positions ''flipped'' compared to the show (Alya gets heavily demonized even by "salt fic" standards to the point of becoming an unrepentant ManipulativeBastard while Lila has a HeelFaceTurn and is established as not being as horrible as she is in canon otherwise) is a bit of a stretch.
**A notable example that's WAY out of character has to be (amongst other things) Alya calling one of Marinette's new friends lame becausethey're homeless feels WAY too out one of character, and them is homeless. To say that the fic ''might'' be trying way too hard to make her ''extra'' unlikable.extra unlikable would be quite the understatement.
**A notable example that's WAY out of character has to be (amongst other things) Alya calling one of Marinette's new friends lame because
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Don't get me wrong, I can agree with how Alya and Lila basically swapped places in this fic, but the example felt a tid-bit too biased and came off as a complaining entry, thus feeling more fit for a review.
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There's critiquing, then there's just complaining.
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* SoBadItsGood: A combination of Alya and Lila outright getting their narrative positions flipped compared to the show (Alya gets heavily demonized even by "salt fic" standards to the point of becoming an unrepentant ManipulativeBastard while Lila has a HeelFaceTurn and is established as not being as horrible as she is in canon otherwise) and the heavy focus on the borderline [[SpotlightStealingSquad spotlight-stealing]] OCs make this story hilarious in all the wrong ways.
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* SoBadItsGood: A combination of Marinette's classmates getting heavily demonized even by typical "salt fic" standards to the point that Alya outright resembles canon Lila, Lila herself getting a redemption arc when the other classmates don't, and the heavy focus on the borderline [[SpotlightStealingSquad spotlight-stealing]] OCs make this story hilarious in all the wrong ways.
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* SoBadItsGood: A combination of Marinette's classmates Alya and Lila outright getting their narrative positions flipped compared to the show (Alya gets heavily demonized even by typical "salt fic" standards to the point that Alya outright resembles of becoming an unrepentant ManipulativeBastard while Lila has a HeelFaceTurn and is established as not being as horrible as she is in canon Lila, Lila herself getting a redemption arc when the other classmates don't, otherwise) and the heavy focus on the borderline [[SpotlightStealingSquad spotlight-stealing]] OCs make this story hilarious in all the wrong ways.
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* SoBadItsGood: The way Marinette's classmates are demonized, even by the standards of Salt Fics can be an ironic reading. This is especially true due to the way Alya is portrayed as a FalseFriend who called one of Marinette's new friend "lame" alongside the fact ''Lila'' of all people is shown positively here.
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* SoBadItsGood: The way A combination of Marinette's classmates are demonized, getting heavily demonized even by the typical "salt fic" standards of Salt Fics can be an ironic reading. This is especially true due to the way point that Alya is portrayed as outright resembles canon Lila, Lila herself getting a FalseFriend who called one of Marinette's new friend "lame" alongside redemption arc when the fact ''Lila'' of other classmates don't, and the heavy focus on the borderline [[SpotlightStealingSquad spotlight-stealing]] OCs make this story hilarious in all people is shown positively here.the wrong ways.
