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* IKnewIt: Upon the upload of ''In a Rich 'Mon's World'', one reviewer guessed that [[spoiler:Aurorus is Tyrunt's father, citing their shared egg groups and Team Guile being the only other team of importance besides Team Everlasting]]. This was proven true in ''Answers, Please?''.
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* ValuesDissonance: In many real-life cultures, it would be considered unusual for a boy to berate a girl for being "cowardly" the way Riolu does to Alesia. This example could be justified in that Alesia is part of a team intended to brave dangerous lands and save others.
* WhatDoYouMeanItWasntMadeOnDrugs: Few other stories would contain a parody of ''Willy Wonka'' right out of nowhere.
* WhatDoYouMeanItWasntMadeOnDrugs: Few other stories would contain a parody of ''Willy Wonka'' right out of nowhere.
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* ValuesDissonance: In many real-life cultures, it would be considered unusual for a boy to berate a girl for being "cowardly" the way Riolu does to Alesia. This example could be justified in that Alesia is part of a team intended to brave dangerous lands and save others.
* WhatDoYouMeanItWasntMadeOnDrugs: Few other stories would contain a parody of ''Willy Wonka'' right out of nowhere.others.
* WhatDoYouMeanItWasntMadeOnDrugs: Few other stories would contain a parody of ''Willy Wonka'' right out of nowhere.
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* AuthorsSavingThrow: ''A Mutual Cause'' received a significant overhaul in response to an in-depth review, fixing a majority of the issues pointed out.
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* WhatAnIdiot:
** Really, Riolu's reaction to Team Guile beating Team Everlasting to a certain job is this.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' He'd simply eat the loss and instead focus on future work.\\
'''Instead:''' He personally travels to Kaia Town (where their base is) and eavesdrops on them to find out what job they intend to complete next, so he can beat them to it.\\
'''As A Result:''' He gets knocked out by a Boldore, and has to be saved by the none-the-wiser Steenee.
** Really, Riolu's reaction to Team Guile beating Team Everlasting to a certain job is this.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' He'd simply eat the loss and instead focus on future work.\\
'''Instead:''' He personally travels to Kaia Town (where their base is) and eavesdrops on them to find out what job they intend to complete next, so he can beat them to it.\\
'''As A Result:''' He gets knocked out by a Boldore, and has to be saved by the none-the-wiser Steenee.
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* CrazyAwesome: How does Popplio deal with the ringleader of the Klefki bandits? He whacks her with a branch, sending her flying away. Braviary shows up holding her to reveal she is unconscious.
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--> "Let’s see…" Aerodactyl pulled out his notebook. "Illegal possession of explosives... illegal detonation of explosives..." he murmured. "Gross property damage…" He glanced at the site of the explosion, before he jotted down the first three crimes for which there was an overwhelming amount of evidence.
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--> It was a little ridiculous, but your story's had a pretty lighthearted tone so far, so it fits right in with that.
--> With that out of the way though, I can’t be mad at a story this lighthearted. Even if the trio form a team *way* too quickly to be believed, it’s just… fun. The courtroom scene was least serious courtroom scene I’ve read in recent memory, and an interesting choice for your first bit of set-dressing. Its lack of proper procedure made it hard to take seriously, but, I think that’s a big part of the appeal. It’s like a cartoon in written form.
--> With that out of the way though, I can’t be mad at a story this lighthearted. Even if the trio form a team *way* too quickly to be believed, it’s just… fun. The courtroom scene was least serious courtroom scene I’ve read in recent memory, and an interesting choice for your first bit of set-dressing. Its lack of proper procedure made it hard to take seriously, but, I think that’s a big part of the appeal. It’s like a cartoon in written form.
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With that out of the way though, I can’t be mad at a story this lighthearted. Even if the trio form a team *way* too quickly to be believed, it’s just… fun. The courtroom scene was least serious courtroom scene I’ve read in recent memory, and an interesting choice for your first bit of set-dressing. Its lack of proper procedure made it hard to take seriously, but, I think that’s a big part of the appeal. It’s like a cartoon in written form.
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* FamilyUnfriendlyAesop: Your family, even your parents, don't necessarily love or care for you just because they're family, and it's okay to sever all ties with them in such an event.
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* SignatureLine: "'Sup, baby?" from Riolu is criticized for its perceived lack of compatibility with his character.
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** In a WholePlotReference to ''Film/WillyWonkaAndTheChocolateFactory'', Steenee is put in danger of being chopped up and made into chocolate-covered Perfect Apples. In a ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic'' [[RevengeFic fanfiction]] by [[FanWorkOnlyFans the same author]] (itself a Whole Plot Reference to ''[[Recap/TheSimpsonsS7E2122ShortFilmsAboutSpringfield The Simpsons]]''), the character Trixie receives her comeuppance from Pinkie Pie [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS3E5MagicDuel (for]] [[WipeThatSmileOffYourFace deleting her mouth)]] by [[CruelAndUnusualDeath being ground into hamburger meat]].
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* AlternativeCharacterInterpretation:
** Consider that Riolu and Popplio are two teenage boys traveling with only each other for company to start with. [[HormoneAddledTeenager They seem awfully eager to invite a lone female they find to join them and live together with them...]]
** Is Riolu wholly doing something nice for Alesia when he [[spoiler:resolves to treat her better? Or is it because as of late, the universe seems to punish him whenever he picks on her?]]
** One suggested by a reviewer: [[spoiler:Did the shiny Braviary twin intentionally botch Alesia's court session because of a personal grudge against the Eevee species?]]
* AuthorsSavingThrow: ''A Mutual Cause'' received a significant overhaul in response to an in-depth review, fixing a majority of the issues pointed out.
* BigLippedAlligatorMoment:
** Team Everlasting somehow ending up on Braviary's courthouse roof in ''Unexpected Approval''.
** [[spoiler: (Shiny)]] Braviary eating a donut is perhaps the most detailed and [[PurpleProse eloquently-written]] paragraph in the story so far.
** Riolu stepping on a Chestnut Trap and being buried under a pile of chestnuts in ''Climbing The Ranks''.
** Popplio's dream at the end of ''Riolu in the Tyrunt's Den'' where he travels on a golden star and ends up in Franchise/{{Kirby}}'s world, and tells a Rowlet and a Litten via a sign that they are not to talk.
* BizarroEpisode: ''[[BlatantLies A Chapter that is Very Legitimate]]'', a non-canon chapter posted for April Fool's Day 2019, a CompressedAdaptation of ''Film/WillyWonkaAndTheChocolateFactory'' (it starts on the day of the tour, the Fizzy Lifting Drinks incident and the Slugworth subplot are omitted, and scenes are drastically shortened) featuring the cast of ''VideoGame/PokemonMysteryDungeonExplorers''. Wigglytuff (named Wiggly Wonka) replaces Wonka, while Steenee, Alesia, Tyrunt, Riolu, and Popplio replace the five Golden Ticket (simply Gold Ticket in this version) winners (in order of elimination), the Guild members replace the Oompa-Loompas, the children's parents are omitted, and Chatot, while not replacing anybody, is thrown in to be the subject of AmusingInjuries. At the end, it is revealed to be a production filmed by the author's AuthorAvatar (a Totodile), and that the same applies to the main story.
* CatharsisFactor: Those who get sick of Riolu picking on Alesia should enjoy ''Climbing the Ranks'' where she manages to get payback.
* CrazyAwesome: How does Popplio deal with the ringleader of the Klefki bandits? He whacks her with a branch, sending her flying away. Braviary shows up holding her to reveal she is unconscious.
* CrossesTheLineTwice:
** An Elekid charging at Alesia with its horns aimed right at her? Frightening. Alesia getting stuck between the two horns? Hilarious.
** The [[DissonantSerenity formal-sounding]] descriptions of the damage caused by the Klefki bandits dip into this.
--> "Let’s see…" Aerodactyl pulled out his notebook. "Illegal possession of explosives... illegal detonation of explosives..." he murmured. "Gross property damage…" He glanced at the site of the explosion, before he jotted down the first three crimes for which there was an overwhelming amount of evidence.
** If there's an opportunity for [[TheScrappy Chatot]] to be caused physical pain in ''A Chapter that is Very Legitimate'', it ''will'' be taken.
** As with Veruca Salt in the original movie, [[AssholeVictim Tyrunt]] is dropped down the garbage chute. At the end when Popplio asks if the other four are going to be okay, Wigglytuff says it's a [[UncertainDoom "maybe"]] in Tyrunt's case.
* FamilyUnfriendlyAesop: Your family, even your parents, don't necessarily love or care for you just because they're family, and it's okay to sever all ties with them in such an event.
* GeniusBonus: A Feraligatr was chosen by the author to run/own a pizza delivery service. The term "pizza" was first recorded in the 10th century in a Latin manuscript from the Southern Italian town of Gaeta (Gator/Gatr) in Lazio.
* HarsherInHindsight: [[spoiler:Riolu's parents' concern for his safety if he were to be on a R.E.E.D. team is this, considering he almost has his throat cut then gets knocked unconscious in Cutthroat Maze.]]
* HeartwarmingInHindsight: [[spoiler:Turns out Popplio didn't get to have loving, supportive parents as he grew up. In ''A Chapter That is Very Legitimate'', it's nice to see him play the role of Charlie Bucket since Wonka can be seen as a father figure to him.]]
* HilariousInHindsight:
** Before the April Fool's chapter where the team go on a tour of a candy factory, they venture into an abandoned facility and Riolu turns out to have a sweet tooth for Mega Donuts.
** The main team call themselves Team Everlasting. A later chapter is a parody of a movie with something called Everlasting Gobstoppers (although they are absent from this chapter).
** Team Everlasting finding a Fire Stone in Marble Cavern and asking Alesia if she wants to use it to evolve is this, considering the second trailer for ''[[Film/PokemonDetectivePikachu Detective Pikachu]]'' shows an Eevee evolving into Flareon.
** In a WholePlotReference to ''Film/WillyWonkaAndTheChocolateFactory'', Steenee is put in danger of being chopped up and made into chocolate-covered Perfect Apples. In a ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic'' [[RevengeFic fanfiction]] by [[FanWorkOnlyFans the same author]] (itself a Whole Plot Reference to ''[[Recap/TheSimpsonsS7E2122ShortFilmsAboutSpringfield The Simpsons]]''), the character Trixie receives her comeuppance from Pinkie Pie [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS3E5MagicDuel (for]] [[WipeThatSmileOffYourFace deleting her mouth)]] by [[CruelAndUnusualDeath being ground into hamburger meat]].
** The fourth comment from the bottom in the comments section of [[http://pmd-rad.smackjeeves.com/comics/1981269/testing-day-page-24/ this comic]].
** The name of [[https://youtube.com/channel/UCeRgTLEV2-q57K2z_jQO22w this channel]] on [=YouTube=].
* HoYay:
** [[HeterosexualLifePartners Riolu and Popplio]] have a very close relationship and care for each other very much.
** Popplio gets a [[IKissYourHand kiss on the fin]] from Green Kecleon and appreciates it.
* JerkassWoobie: Riolu is a bit short-tempered, but he did have to grow up with parents who discouraged him from following his dreams. Not to mention the knowledge that his best friend had emotionally-abusive parents.
* MisaimedFandom: Riolu is written as a jerk to Alesia and is deemed to have deserved the torment he receives in ''Climbing the Ranks'', but he gets some love in the review section for refusing to believe Alesia's claims of formerly being human without evidence and advising her not to get herself in trouble by telling others about it.
* {{Narm}}: Though it was intended to showcase him being a self-absorbed braggart, some felt that Riolu putting on an Insomniscope and saying, "'Sup, baby?" didn't fit with his character.
* NarmCharm: Reviewers' thoughts on the early plot device of Alesia going to court:
--> It was a little ridiculous, but your story's had a pretty lighthearted tone so far, so it fits right in with that.
--> With that out of the way though, I can’t be mad at a story this lighthearted. Even if the trio form a team *way* too quickly to be believed, it’s just… fun. The courtroom scene was least serious courtroom scene I’ve read in recent memory, and an interesting choice for your first bit of set-dressing. Its lack of proper procedure made it hard to take seriously, but, I think that’s a big part of the appeal. It’s like a cartoon in written form.
* OneTrueThreesome: Who else but Team Everlasting?
* SignatureScene: Alesia's court session. How out of nowhere it is and its lack of proper procedure is what people point to when talking about the story's lighthearted tone.
* TakeThatScrappy: Wigglytuff's assistant Chatot oh so much in ''A Chapter that is Very Legitimate'' where he takes the role of the ButtMonkey and gets his wing pinched by Corphish, has one of his feathers plucked out by Wigglytuff, is trampled by everyone escaping the Monster House in the chocolate factory, is forced to eat Exploding Candy, is whacked by a spinning giant chocolate bar, and is hit with Wigglytuff's cane for not singing along at the end.
* ValuesDissonance: In many real-life cultures, it would be considered unusual for a boy to berate a girl for being "cowardly" the way Riolu does to Alesia. This example could be justified in that Alesia is part of a team intended to brave dangerous lands and save others.
* WhatAnIdiot:
** Really, Riolu's reaction to Team Guile beating Team Everlasting to a certain job is this.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' He'd simply eat the loss and instead focus on future work.\\
'''Instead:''' He personally travels to Kaia Town (where their base is) and eavesdrops on them to find out what job they intend to complete next, so he can beat them to it.\\
'''As A Result:''' He gets knocked out by a Boldore, and has to be saved by the none-the-wiser Steenee.
* WhatDoYouMeanItWasntMadeOnDrugs: Few other stories would contain a parody of ''Willy Wonka'' right out of nowhere.
** Consider that Riolu and Popplio are two teenage boys traveling with only each other for company to start with. [[HormoneAddledTeenager They seem awfully eager to invite a lone female they find to join them and live together with them...]]
** Is Riolu wholly doing something nice for Alesia when he [[spoiler:resolves to treat her better? Or is it because as of late, the universe seems to punish him whenever he picks on her?]]
** One suggested by a reviewer: [[spoiler:Did the shiny Braviary twin intentionally botch Alesia's court session because of a personal grudge against the Eevee species?]]
* AuthorsSavingThrow: ''A Mutual Cause'' received a significant overhaul in response to an in-depth review, fixing a majority of the issues pointed out.
* BigLippedAlligatorMoment:
** Team Everlasting somehow ending up on Braviary's courthouse roof in ''Unexpected Approval''.
** [[spoiler: (Shiny)]] Braviary eating a donut is perhaps the most detailed and [[PurpleProse eloquently-written]] paragraph in the story so far.
** Riolu stepping on a Chestnut Trap and being buried under a pile of chestnuts in ''Climbing The Ranks''.
** Popplio's dream at the end of ''Riolu in the Tyrunt's Den'' where he travels on a golden star and ends up in Franchise/{{Kirby}}'s world, and tells a Rowlet and a Litten via a sign that they are not to talk.
* BizarroEpisode: ''[[BlatantLies A Chapter that is Very Legitimate]]'', a non-canon chapter posted for April Fool's Day 2019, a CompressedAdaptation of ''Film/WillyWonkaAndTheChocolateFactory'' (it starts on the day of the tour, the Fizzy Lifting Drinks incident and the Slugworth subplot are omitted, and scenes are drastically shortened) featuring the cast of ''VideoGame/PokemonMysteryDungeonExplorers''. Wigglytuff (named Wiggly Wonka) replaces Wonka, while Steenee, Alesia, Tyrunt, Riolu, and Popplio replace the five Golden Ticket (simply Gold Ticket in this version) winners (in order of elimination), the Guild members replace the Oompa-Loompas, the children's parents are omitted, and Chatot, while not replacing anybody, is thrown in to be the subject of AmusingInjuries. At the end, it is revealed to be a production filmed by the author's AuthorAvatar (a Totodile), and that the same applies to the main story.
* CatharsisFactor: Those who get sick of Riolu picking on Alesia should enjoy ''Climbing the Ranks'' where she manages to get payback.
* CrazyAwesome: How does Popplio deal with the ringleader of the Klefki bandits? He whacks her with a branch, sending her flying away. Braviary shows up holding her to reveal she is unconscious.
* CrossesTheLineTwice:
** An Elekid charging at Alesia with its horns aimed right at her? Frightening. Alesia getting stuck between the two horns? Hilarious.
** The [[DissonantSerenity formal-sounding]] descriptions of the damage caused by the Klefki bandits dip into this.
--> "Let’s see…" Aerodactyl pulled out his notebook. "Illegal possession of explosives... illegal detonation of explosives..." he murmured. "Gross property damage…" He glanced at the site of the explosion, before he jotted down the first three crimes for which there was an overwhelming amount of evidence.
** If there's an opportunity for [[TheScrappy Chatot]] to be caused physical pain in ''A Chapter that is Very Legitimate'', it ''will'' be taken.
** As with Veruca Salt in the original movie, [[AssholeVictim Tyrunt]] is dropped down the garbage chute. At the end when Popplio asks if the other four are going to be okay, Wigglytuff says it's a [[UncertainDoom "maybe"]] in Tyrunt's case.
* FamilyUnfriendlyAesop: Your family, even your parents, don't necessarily love or care for you just because they're family, and it's okay to sever all ties with them in such an event.
* GeniusBonus: A Feraligatr was chosen by the author to run/own a pizza delivery service. The term "pizza" was first recorded in the 10th century in a Latin manuscript from the Southern Italian town of Gaeta (Gator/Gatr) in Lazio.
* HarsherInHindsight: [[spoiler:Riolu's parents' concern for his safety if he were to be on a R.E.E.D. team is this, considering he almost has his throat cut then gets knocked unconscious in Cutthroat Maze.]]
* HeartwarmingInHindsight: [[spoiler:Turns out Popplio didn't get to have loving, supportive parents as he grew up. In ''A Chapter That is Very Legitimate'', it's nice to see him play the role of Charlie Bucket since Wonka can be seen as a father figure to him.]]
* HilariousInHindsight:
** Before the April Fool's chapter where the team go on a tour of a candy factory, they venture into an abandoned facility and Riolu turns out to have a sweet tooth for Mega Donuts.
** The main team call themselves Team Everlasting. A later chapter is a parody of a movie with something called Everlasting Gobstoppers (although they are absent from this chapter).
** Team Everlasting finding a Fire Stone in Marble Cavern and asking Alesia if she wants to use it to evolve is this, considering the second trailer for ''[[Film/PokemonDetectivePikachu Detective Pikachu]]'' shows an Eevee evolving into Flareon.
** In a WholePlotReference to ''Film/WillyWonkaAndTheChocolateFactory'', Steenee is put in danger of being chopped up and made into chocolate-covered Perfect Apples. In a ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic'' [[RevengeFic fanfiction]] by [[FanWorkOnlyFans the same author]] (itself a Whole Plot Reference to ''[[Recap/TheSimpsonsS7E2122ShortFilmsAboutSpringfield The Simpsons]]''), the character Trixie receives her comeuppance from Pinkie Pie [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS3E5MagicDuel (for]] [[WipeThatSmileOffYourFace deleting her mouth)]] by [[CruelAndUnusualDeath being ground into hamburger meat]].
** The fourth comment from the bottom in the comments section of [[http://pmd-rad.smackjeeves.com/comics/1981269/testing-day-page-24/ this comic]].
** The name of [[https://youtube.com/channel/UCeRgTLEV2-q57K2z_jQO22w this channel]] on [=YouTube=].
* HoYay:
** [[HeterosexualLifePartners Riolu and Popplio]] have a very close relationship and care for each other very much.
** Popplio gets a [[IKissYourHand kiss on the fin]] from Green Kecleon and appreciates it.
* JerkassWoobie: Riolu is a bit short-tempered, but he did have to grow up with parents who discouraged him from following his dreams. Not to mention the knowledge that his best friend had emotionally-abusive parents.
* MisaimedFandom: Riolu is written as a jerk to Alesia and is deemed to have deserved the torment he receives in ''Climbing the Ranks'', but he gets some love in the review section for refusing to believe Alesia's claims of formerly being human without evidence and advising her not to get herself in trouble by telling others about it.
* {{Narm}}: Though it was intended to showcase him being a self-absorbed braggart, some felt that Riolu putting on an Insomniscope and saying, "'Sup, baby?" didn't fit with his character.
* NarmCharm: Reviewers' thoughts on the early plot device of Alesia going to court:
--> It was a little ridiculous, but your story's had a pretty lighthearted tone so far, so it fits right in with that.
--> With that out of the way though, I can’t be mad at a story this lighthearted. Even if the trio form a team *way* too quickly to be believed, it’s just… fun. The courtroom scene was least serious courtroom scene I’ve read in recent memory, and an interesting choice for your first bit of set-dressing. Its lack of proper procedure made it hard to take seriously, but, I think that’s a big part of the appeal. It’s like a cartoon in written form.
* OneTrueThreesome: Who else but Team Everlasting?
* SignatureScene: Alesia's court session. How out of nowhere it is and its lack of proper procedure is what people point to when talking about the story's lighthearted tone.
* TakeThatScrappy: Wigglytuff's assistant Chatot oh so much in ''A Chapter that is Very Legitimate'' where he takes the role of the ButtMonkey and gets his wing pinched by Corphish, has one of his feathers plucked out by Wigglytuff, is trampled by everyone escaping the Monster House in the chocolate factory, is forced to eat Exploding Candy, is whacked by a spinning giant chocolate bar, and is hit with Wigglytuff's cane for not singing along at the end.
* ValuesDissonance: In many real-life cultures, it would be considered unusual for a boy to berate a girl for being "cowardly" the way Riolu does to Alesia. This example could be justified in that Alesia is part of a team intended to brave dangerous lands and save others.
* WhatAnIdiot:
** Really, Riolu's reaction to Team Guile beating Team Everlasting to a certain job is this.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' He'd simply eat the loss and instead focus on future work.\\
'''Instead:''' He personally travels to Kaia Town (where their base is) and eavesdrops on them to find out what job they intend to complete next, so he can beat them to it.\\
'''As A Result:''' He gets knocked out by a Boldore, and has to be saved by the none-the-wiser Steenee.
* WhatDoYouMeanItWasntMadeOnDrugs: Few other stories would contain a parody of ''Willy Wonka'' right out of nowhere.
