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* {{Narm}}: [=BrayStation=]. The idea that a UsefulNotes/PlayStation {{Expy}} exists in a post-apocalyptic world like this can be a little difficult to swallow.
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* {{Narm}}: [=BrayStation=]. The idea that a UsefulNotes/PlayStation Platform/PlayStation {{Expy}} exists in a post-apocalyptic world like this can be a little difficult to swallow.
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Not YMMV and can only be crossed once.
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* {{Gorn}}: Despite it being in written text, it managed to outdo ComicBook/OldmanLogan in the violence and brutal deaths department, with King Sombra's death standing out the most.
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* MoralEventHorizon: If King Sombra didn't cross it by making Luna kill her sister, Star-Swirl, and the Mane Six, he crossed it by forcing Sunburst to fight a mind-controlled Starlight in his arena.
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* MoralEventHorizon: If King Sombra didn't cross crossed it by making Luna kill her sister, Star-Swirl, and the Mane Six, he crossed it by forcing Sunburst to fight a mind-controlled Starlight in his arena.Six.
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If the lighter moments are criticized, than being too dark isn't an issue. Must explain why those dark things are off-putting as opposed to True Art Is Angsty.
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* AngstAversion: While the story does have a few light-hearted moments here and there (even though tonal inconsistency is cited as one of its flaws), it's still a post-apocalyptic story where AnyoneCanDie.
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"Idiot Plot" is now Flame Bait.
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* IdiotPlot: Due to the reveal that Discord faked losing his powers, the whole plot could have been avoided if he had simply whipped up some bits here and there when he visited Luna.
** Tirek keeping Luna alive doesn't make much sense either, especially since he could have absorbed her magic any time he wanted. Even more so knowing the other villains might not even be aware that Luna is alive.
** Tirek keeping Luna alive doesn't make much sense either, especially since he could have absorbed her magic any time he wanted. Even more so knowing the other villains might not even be aware that Luna is alive.
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Looked both tropes up and Angst Aversion was more fitting.
* AngstAversion: While the story does have a few light-hearted moments here and there (even though tonal inconsistency is cited as one of its flaws), it's still a post-apocalyptic story where AnyoneCanDie.
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* TooBleakStoppedCaring: While the story does have a few lighthearted moments here and there (even though tonal inconsistency is cited as one of its flaws), it's still a post-apocalyptic story where AnyoneCanDie.
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* DarknessInducedAudienceApathy: While the story does have a few lighthearted moments here and there (even though tonal inconsistency is cited as one of its flaws), it's still a post-apocalyptic story where AnyoneCanDie.
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* {{Padding}}: This story had something ComicBook/OldManLogan didn't have. An actual resistance that saves the good guys from being executed. However, that resulted in the story dragging on longer than it needed to be.
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* {{Padding}}: This story had something ComicBook/OldManLogan didn't have. An actual resistance that saves the good guys from being executed. However, that resulted in the story dragging on longer than it needed to be.be.
* TooBleakStoppedCaring: While the story does have a few lighthearted moments here and there (even though tonal inconsistency is cited as one of its flaws), it's still a post-apocalyptic story where AnyoneCanDie.
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* TooBleakStoppedCaring: While the story does have a few lighthearted moments here and there (even though tonal inconsistency is cited as one of its flaws), it's still a post-apocalyptic story where AnyoneCanDie.
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* CompleteMonster: [[EvilOverlord King Sombra]] starts his conquest of Equestria by tricking Luna into killing her sister and the Mane Six before moving onto the Crystal Empire and brutally murdering all who stand in his way, including Princess Cadence and Shining Armor. Deciding to test out an arena he intends to use to celebrate his conquest of Equestria, he [[InvoluntaryBattleToTheDeath forces Sunburst to fight]] a [[BrainwashedAndCrazy mind-controlled]] Starlight Glimmer and, when Starlight snaps out of his control, he [[ImpaledWithExtremePrejudice impales Sunburst]] and [[MindRape painfully forces]] Starlight back under his control before siccing her and the rest of his mind-controlled forces on Sunburst.
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* CompleteMonster: [[EvilOverlord [[Characters/FriendshipIsMagicKingSombra King Sombra]] starts his conquest of Equestria by tricking Luna into killing her sister and the Mane Six before moving onto the Crystal Empire and brutally murdering all who stand in his way, including Princess Cadence and Shining Armor. Deciding to test out an arena he intends to use to celebrate his conquest of Equestria, he [[InvoluntaryBattleToTheDeath forces Sunburst to fight]] a [[BrainwashedAndCrazy mind-controlled]] Starlight Glimmer and, when Starlight snaps out of his control, he [[ImpaledWithExtremePrejudice impales Sunburst]] and [[MindRape painfully forces]] Starlight back under his control before siccing her and the rest of his mind-controlled forces on Sunburst.
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* CompleteMonster: [[EvilOverlord King Sombra]] starts his conquest of Equestria by tricking Luna into killing her sister and the Mane Six before moving onto the Crystal Empire and brutally murdering all who stand in his way, including Princess Cadence and Shining Armor. Deciding to test out an arena he intends to use to celebrate his conquest of Equestria, he [[InvoluntaryBattleToTheDeath forces Sunburst to fight]] a [[BrainwashedAndCrazy mind-controlled]] Starlight Glimmer and, when Starlight snaps out of his control, he [[ImpaledWithExtremePrejudice impales Sunburst]] and [[MindRape painfully forces]] Starlight back under his control before siccing her and the rest of his mind-controlled forces on Sunburst.
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* CriticalDissonance: By the author's own request, he had the story reviewed. While the review as abysmal, the story itself has more likes than dislikes and over 1000 views.
* CrossesTheLineTwice: [[spoiler: Nightmare Moon's]] quip about "it's a girl" after [[spoiler: bursting out of Tirek's chest and killing him]].
* DarknessInducedAudienceApathy: While the story does have a few lighthearted moments here and there (even though tonal inconsistency is cited as one of its flaws), it's still a post-apocalyptic story where AnyoneCanDie.
* {{Gorn}}: Despite it being in written text, it managed to outdo ComicBook/OldmanLogan in the violence and brutal deaths department, with King Sombra's death standing out the most.
* IdiotPlot: Due to the reveal that Discord faked losing his powers, the whole plot could have been avoided if he had simply whipped up some bits here and there when he visited Luna.
** Tirek keeping Luna alive doesn't make much sense either, especially since he could have absorbed her magic any time he wanted. Even more so knowing the other villains might not even be aware that Luna is alive.
* ItWasHisSled: Due to the familiar beats between this and ComicBook/OldManLogan, some twists can be seen a mile away.
* MoralEventHorizon: If King Sombra didn't cross it by making Luna kill her sister, Star-Swirl, and the Mane Six, he crossed it by forcing Sunburst to fight a mind-controlled Starlight in his arena.
* {{Narm}}: [=BrayStation=]. The idea that a UsefulNotes/PlayStation {{Expy}} exists in a post-apocalyptic world like this can be a little difficult to swallow.
* {{Padding}}: This story had something ComicBook/OldManLogan didn't have. An actual resistance that saves the good guys from being executed. However, that resulted in the story dragging on longer than it needed to be.
* CrossesTheLineTwice: [[spoiler: Nightmare Moon's]] quip about "it's a girl" after [[spoiler: bursting out of Tirek's chest and killing him]].
* DarknessInducedAudienceApathy: While the story does have a few lighthearted moments here and there (even though tonal inconsistency is cited as one of its flaws), it's still a post-apocalyptic story where AnyoneCanDie.
* {{Gorn}}: Despite it being in written text, it managed to outdo ComicBook/OldmanLogan in the violence and brutal deaths department, with King Sombra's death standing out the most.
* IdiotPlot: Due to the reveal that Discord faked losing his powers, the whole plot could have been avoided if he had simply whipped up some bits here and there when he visited Luna.
** Tirek keeping Luna alive doesn't make much sense either, especially since he could have absorbed her magic any time he wanted. Even more so knowing the other villains might not even be aware that Luna is alive.
* ItWasHisSled: Due to the familiar beats between this and ComicBook/OldManLogan, some twists can be seen a mile away.
* MoralEventHorizon: If King Sombra didn't cross it by making Luna kill her sister, Star-Swirl, and the Mane Six, he crossed it by forcing Sunburst to fight a mind-controlled Starlight in his arena.
* {{Narm}}: [=BrayStation=]. The idea that a UsefulNotes/PlayStation {{Expy}} exists in a post-apocalyptic world like this can be a little difficult to swallow.
* {{Padding}}: This story had something ComicBook/OldManLogan didn't have. An actual resistance that saves the good guys from being executed. However, that resulted in the story dragging on longer than it needed to be.
