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** The fic couldn't seem to decide what its stance was exactly on real people visiting a fairytale world. Sometimes it threw around heavy talk about how stories have to evolve and people are owed the freedom to choose their own future. Other times it had the knights enjoying being there over the real world, because life is simpler and people are nicer with a lot less drama than the world they come from, while seeming to forget how it's '''also''' trying to say this system is '''not''' perfect and how unjust it is people like Raven Queen are forced into futures that will make their lives hell.
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* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: The fic opens as if the heroes being people from the real world who know all the stories will be a big element. It never does that much with the idea, except sometimes to justify some questionable decisions (Like the people of the fairytale kingdom are too weak-minded to protect themselves kaijin. Only teenagers familiar with violent media are fit to be Kamen Riders). While also not striking a solid balance between that idea, and how it uses fairytale tropes in its own narrative (ThePowerOfLove is what unlocks the Kamen Riders' SuperMode).
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* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: The fic opens as if the heroes being people from the real world who know all the stories will be a big element. It never does that much with the idea, except sometimes to justify some questionable decisions (Like the people of the fairytale kingdom are too weak-minded to protect themselves against kaijin. Only teenagers familiar with violent media are fit to be Kamen Riders). While also not striking a solid balance between that idea, and how it uses fairytale tropes in its own narrative (ThePowerOfLove is what unlocks the Kamen Riders' SuperMode).
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* CaptainObviousReveal: In the first few arcs the fic tries to say the Kamen Riders aren't ''really'' related to the Knights of the Round Table. That's just a trick Merlin came up with to get them admitted to the school. Except over the Thronecoming arc it's a big reveal that yeah, they actually were descended from the original Knights of the Round Table the whole time. It's ruined by a couple things, including that the first thing that happens in the story proper is finding out that yes, the main protagonist actually is a modern teenager named "Arthur Pendragon", asking you to think that's just a funny coincidence in a story about the Knights of the Round Table, which is compounded by some of the others having dead giveaway names too like Lance, Max le Fay and, honest to god, Gawain. Not to mention how the story happens in the setting of ''Toys/EverAfterHigh'', where the premise is literally '''everyone's''' related to a character from a legend.
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* CaptainObviousReveal: In the first few arcs the fic tries to say the Kamen Riders aren't ''really'' related to the Knights of the Round Table. That's just a trick Merlin came up with to get them admitted to the school. Except over the Thronecoming arc it's a big reveal that that, yeah, they actually were descended from the original Knights of the Round Table the whole time. It's ruined by a couple things, including that the first thing that happens in the story proper is like finding out that yes, the main protagonist actually is a modern teenager named "Arthur Pendragon", and asking you to think that's just a funny coincidence in a story about the Knights of the Round Table, which is compounded by along with some of the others having dead giveaway names too like Lance, Max le Fay and, honest to god, Gawain. Not to mention how the story happens in the setting of ''Toys/EverAfterHigh'', where the premise is literally '''everyone's''' related to a character from a legend.
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* StrangledByTheRedString: The knights all get matched up with their respective princesses very quickly. [[TropesAreTools That's not necessarily a bad thing]], but in the Legacy Day chapter, the characters are basically trying to act like having one chapter of focus on each OC's relationship means they already have an amazing, timeless love. One that proves the princesses should forget about their old stories and live their lives with the knight they're paired off with instead, and a love so deep it's used to explain how Arthur and Lance unlock their Survive forms at the end. ''By the ninth chapter''.
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* StrangledByTheRedString: The knights all get matched up with their respective princesses very quickly. [[TropesAreTools That's not necessarily a bad thing]], but in the Legacy Day chapter, the characters are basically trying to act like having one chapter of focus on each OC's relationship means they already have an amazing, timeless love. One that proves that's used to say the princesses should forget about their old stories and live their lives with the knight they're paired off with instead, and a love so deep it's used to explain how Arthur and Lance unlock their Survive forms at the end.instead. ''By the ninth chapter''.
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** A really good example is when the Rogue Knights stage attacks on all the heroes at the same time. Blade Knight's deck is destroyed and he's devoured by his own monster partner, which traumatizes most of the other knights and seems to signal a turning point in the fic's tone. The very next chapter, though Rex uses his Time Vent card to go back and change history so Blade Knight doesn't die, as if the author changed his mind about going that dark. He goes on to have a string of extremely light chapters, a bunch of them adapting plots straight from ''Ever After High''.
** Similar to that, there are some heroes who are supposed to have darker compulsions, mainly Max and Kyle. But because of the uncertain tone, the writer didn't seem to know how to write that while still ultimately making them likable and accepted by the rest of the group. Max is supposed to be studying to be a villain, but his antics consist mainly of low-key stuff like pranking Daring Charming (who's portrayed as a JerkJock who deserves it), or stealing the answers for an upcoming test (which is framed positively because he generously shares it with his friends). He always comes to help when he's needed, and late in the fic gets mad at another knight for stereotyping him as a villain. Kyle's snide, arrogant, dates multiple girls at the same time, and is fine with murdering their enemies, or even suggesting he kill classmates giving them problems. Yet in the end we're clearly supposed to want to see him win, and for his relationship to succeed, even though he never changes.
* UnintentionallySympathetic: Scout and Rebellious. The story goes out of its way so many times to rub it in how pathetic they are for their first few chapters at least, it just starts seeming mean for the narration and heroes to fixate so hard on what posers they are compared to the "real" Kamen Riders.
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: The fic opens as if the heroes being people from the real world who know all the stories will be a big element. It never does that much with the idea, except sometimes to justify some questionable decisions (Like the people of the fairytale kingdom are too weak and weak-minded to protect themselves from kaijin. Only teenagers familiar with violent media are fit to be Kamen Riders). While also not striking a solid balance between that idea, and how it uses fairytale tropes in its own narrative (ThePowerOfLove is what unlocks the Kamen Riders' SuperMode).
** Similar to that, there are some heroes who are supposed to have darker compulsions, mainly Max and Kyle. But because of the uncertain tone, the writer didn't seem to know how to write that while still ultimately making them likable and accepted by the rest of the group. Max is supposed to be studying to be a villain, but his antics consist mainly of low-key stuff like pranking Daring Charming (who's portrayed as a JerkJock who deserves it), or stealing the answers for an upcoming test (which is framed positively because he generously shares it with his friends). He always comes to help when he's needed, and late in the fic gets mad at another knight for stereotyping him as a villain. Kyle's snide, arrogant, dates multiple girls at the same time, and is fine with murdering their enemies, or even suggesting he kill classmates giving them problems. Yet in the end we're clearly supposed to want to see him win, and for his relationship to succeed, even though he never changes.
* UnintentionallySympathetic: Scout and Rebellious. The story goes out of its way so many times to rub it in how pathetic they are for their first few chapters at least, it just starts seeming mean for the narration and heroes to fixate so hard on what posers they are compared to the "real" Kamen Riders.
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: The fic opens as if the heroes being people from the real world who know all the stories will be a big element. It never does that much with the idea, except sometimes to justify some questionable decisions (Like the people of the fairytale kingdom are too weak and weak-minded to protect themselves from kaijin. Only teenagers familiar with violent media are fit to be Kamen Riders). While also not striking a solid balance between that idea, and how it uses fairytale tropes in its own narrative (ThePowerOfLove is what unlocks the Kamen Riders' SuperMode).
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** A really good example is when the Rogue Knights stage attacks on all the heroes at the same time. Blade Knight's deck is destroyed and he's devoured by his own monster partner, which traumatizes most of the other knights and seems to signal a turning point in the fic's tone. The very next chapter, though though, Rex uses his Time Vent card to go back and change history so Blade Knight doesn't die, as if the author changed his mind about going that dark. He goes on to have a string of extremely light chapters, a bunch of them adapting plots straight from ''Ever After High''.
** Similar to that, there are some heroes who are supposed to have darker compulsions, mainly Max and Kyle. But because of the uncertain tone, the writer didn't seem to know how to write that while still ultimately making them likable and accepted by the rest of the group. Max is supposed to be studying to be a villain, but his antics consist mainly of low-key stuff like pranking Daring Charming (who's portrayed as a JerkJock who deserves it), or stealing the answers for an upcoming test (which is framed positively because he generously shares it with his friends). He always comes to help when he's needed, and late in the fic gets mad at another knight for stereotyping him as a villain. Meanwhile, Kyle's snide, arrogant, dates multiple girls at the same time, and is fine with murdering their enemies, or even suggesting he kill classmates giving them problems. Yet in the end we're clearly supposed to want to see him win, and for his relationship to succeed, even though he never changes.
* UnintentionallySympathetic: Scout and Rebellious. The story goes out of its way so many times to rubit in how pathetic they are for their first few chapters at least, it just starts seeming mean for the narration and heroes to fixate so hard on what posers egotistical losers they are compared to the "real" Kamen Riders.
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: The fic opens as if the heroes being people from the real world who know all the stories will be a big element. It never does that much with the idea, except sometimes to justify some questionable decisions (Like the people of the fairytale kingdom are tooweak and weak-minded to protect themselves from kaijin. Only teenagers familiar with violent media are fit to be Kamen Riders). While also not striking a solid balance between that idea, and how it uses fairytale tropes in its own narrative (ThePowerOfLove is what unlocks the Kamen Riders' SuperMode).
** Similar to that, there are some heroes who are supposed to have darker compulsions, mainly Max and Kyle. But because of the uncertain tone, the writer didn't seem to know how to write that while still ultimately making them likable and accepted by the rest of the group. Max is supposed to be studying to be a villain, but his antics consist mainly of low-key stuff like pranking Daring Charming (who's portrayed as a JerkJock who deserves it), or stealing the answers for an upcoming test (which is framed positively because he generously shares it with his friends). He always comes to help when he's needed, and late in the fic gets mad at another knight for stereotyping him as a villain. Meanwhile, Kyle's snide, arrogant, dates multiple girls at the same time, and is fine with murdering their enemies, or even suggesting he kill classmates giving them problems. Yet in the end we're clearly supposed to want to see him win, and for his relationship to succeed, even though he never changes.
* UnintentionallySympathetic: Scout and Rebellious. The story goes out of its way so many times to rub
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: The fic opens as if the heroes being people from the real world who know all the stories will be a big element. It never does that much with the idea, except sometimes to justify some questionable decisions (Like the people of the fairytale kingdom are too
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** Similar to that, there are some heroes who are supposed to have darker compulsions, mainly Max and Kyle. But because of the uncertain tone, the writer didn't seem to know how to write that while still ultimately making them likable and accepted by the rest of the group. Max is supposed to be studying to be a villain, but his antics consist mainly of low-key stuff like pranking Daring Charming (who's portrayed as a JerkJock who deserves it), or stealing the answers for an upcoming test (which is framed positively because he generously shares it with his friends). Kyle is snide, arrogant, dates multiple girls at the same time, and is fine with murdering their enemies, or even suggesting he kill classmates giving them problems. Yet in the end we're clearly supposed to want to see him win, and for his relationship to succeed, even though he never changes.
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** Similar to that, there are some heroes who are supposed to have darker compulsions, mainly Max and Kyle. But because of the uncertain tone, the writer didn't seem to know how to write that while still ultimately making them likable and accepted by the rest of the group. Max is supposed to be studying to be a villain, but his antics consist mainly of low-key stuff like pranking Daring Charming (who's portrayed as a JerkJock who deserves it), or stealing the answers for an upcoming test (which is framed positively because he generously shares it with his friends). Kyle is He always comes to help when he's needed, and late in the fic gets mad at another knight for stereotyping him as a villain. Kyle's snide, arrogant, dates multiple girls at the same time, and is fine with murdering their enemies, or even suggesting he kill classmates giving them problems. Yet in the end we're clearly supposed to want to see him win, and for his relationship to succeed, even though he never changes.
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* CaptainObviousReveal: In the first few arcs the fic tries to say the Kamen Riders aren't ''really'' related to the Knights of the Round Table. That's just a trick Merlin came up with to get them admitted to the school. Except over the Thronecoming arc it's a big reveal that yeah, they actually were descended from the original Knights of the Round Table the whole time. It's ruined by a couple things, including that the first thing that happens in the story proper is finding out that yes, the main protagonist actually is a modern teenager named "Arthur Pendragon", asking you to think that's just a funny coincidence in a story about the Knights of the Round Table. Then it's compounded by some of the others having dead giveaway names too like Lance, Gwen, Max le Fay and, honest to god, Gawain. Not to mention how the story happens in the setting of ''Toys/EverAfterHigh'', where the premise is literally '''everyone's''' related to a character from a legend.
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* CaptainObviousReveal: In the first few arcs the fic tries to say the Kamen Riders aren't ''really'' related to the Knights of the Round Table. That's just a trick Merlin came up with to get them admitted to the school. Except over the Thronecoming arc it's a big reveal that yeah, they actually were descended from the original Knights of the Round Table the whole time. It's ruined by a couple things, including that the first thing that happens in the story proper is finding out that yes, the main protagonist actually is a modern teenager named "Arthur Pendragon", asking you to think that's just a funny coincidence in a story about the Knights of the Round Table. Then it's Table, which is compounded by some of the others having dead giveaway names too like Lance, Gwen, Max le Fay and, honest to god, Gawain. Not to mention how the story happens in the setting of ''Toys/EverAfterHigh'', where the premise is literally '''everyone's''' related to a character from a legend.
