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there's no mention or sound of a gun cock. also, Sinkhole — merely brandishing a gun =/= Dramatic Gun Cock
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* AnachronismStew: The rigid theocracy, fantastical airships, and colorful costumery painting the world are meshed with cable television, flashlights, snowmobiles, and most notably [[spoiler:a distinctively modern [[DramaticGunCock semi-automatic handgun]].]]
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* AnachronismStew: The rigid theocracy, fantastical airships, and colorful costumery painting the world are meshed with cable television, flashlights, snowmobiles, and most notably [[spoiler:a distinctively modern [[DramaticGunCock semi-automatic handgun]].handgun.]]
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* TheMaker: [[ExactlyWhatItSaysOnTheTin The Builder]] is the Mosaïc's resident creator deity and the figure worshipped by the CorruptChurch.
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* TheMaker: [[ExactlyWhatItSaysOnTheTin The Builder]] is the Mosaïc's Mosaic's resident creator deity and the figure worshipped by the CorruptChurch.
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* IdenticalStranger: The {{Stinger}} of the prologue involves [[spoiler: a shadowed figure praying desperately to the Builder in [[{{Bookends}} the same church seen at the beginning of the prologue]]. In response, a stranger who bears a striking resemblance to Ysmé, laid against the altar, opens their eyes]].
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* ReligionIsMagic: Subverted. Flower reading is a magic bestowed upon humanity by Fayim, the god of language, but faith in them is less necessary for its practice than a full understanding of the concepts they've imbued into flowers, which can be [[AllAccessibleMagic studied]]. The [[MagicalIncantation poetic passages]] Loïc reads aloud when he casts with certain flowers seem to be tools to get a caster in the correct frame of mind to harness their specific magic rather than a direct declaration of faith. Played straight later when the Voice of the Sovereignty informs Ysmé that [[spoiler: she will be able to [[GodsNeedPrayerBadly claw back some of her divine power using the faith of her devotees]].]]
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adding context to explain the "flower" remark
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** [[spoiler:When Ysmé makes it clear to Loïc that she is pursuing the Sovereignty not to save another as he'd assumed, but for herself alone, she mockingly adds, "But you're free to keep thinking of the Sovereignty as my dead wife flower if that makes you feel better."]]
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** Loïc tells Ysmé he is searching for a legendary flower to cure someone, though he won't say who. [[spoiler:When Ysmé is revealed to be faking her illness and pursuing the Sovereignty, she compares her true motive to Loïc's. When she later makes it clear to Loïc that she her pursuit is pursuing the Sovereignty not to save another as he'd assumed, another, but for herself alone, she mockingly adds, "But you're free to keep thinking of the Sovereignty as my dead wife flower if that makes you feel better."]]
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** [[spoiler:When Ysmé makes it clear Loïc that she is pursuing the Sovereignty not to save another as he'd assumed, but for herself alone, she mockingly adds, "But you're free to keep thinking of the Sovereignty as my dead wife flower if that makes you feel better."]]
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** [[spoiler:When Ysmé makes it clear to Loïc that she is pursuing the Sovereignty not to save another as he'd assumed, but for herself alone, she mockingly adds, "But you're free to keep thinking of the Sovereignty as my dead wife flower if that makes you feel better."]]
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* CantKillYouStillNeedYou: Twice in the prelude. [[spoiler: When Ysmé discovers the new {{Geas}} she has over Loïc, she briefly contemplates how funny it would be to force him to attack Langlais before realizing this would almost definitely get her new servant arrested or [[SuicideByCop worse]]. Later, when Ysmé ascends to godhood, she considers whether she wants to kill Langlais and his troops before deciding he'd serve her better by [[SpareAMessenger warning the Church of her coming reign]].]]
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* CantKillYouStillNeedYou: Twice in the prelude. [[spoiler: When Ysmé discovers the new {{Geas}} she has over Loïc, she briefly contemplates how funny it would be to force him to attack Langlais [[PragmaticVillainy before realizing realizing]] this would almost definitely get her new servant arrested or [[SuicideByCop worse]]. Later, when Ysmé ascends to godhood, she considers whether she wants to kill Langlais and his troops before deciding he'd serve her better by [[SpareAMessenger warning the Church of her coming reign]].]]
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* LivingStatue: Inside the Sovereign Hall in the Hollow Temple lies the Voice of the Sovereignty, a living statue guarding an altar and the power of Sovereignity itself.
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* LivingStatue: Inside the Sovereign Hall in the Hollow Temple lies the Voice of the Sovereignty, a living statue guarding an altar and the power of Sovereignity itself.Sovereignty itself.
* TheLostLenore: {{Discussed|Trope}} during the prelude:
** [[spoiler:When Ysmé makes it clear Loïc that she is pursuing the Sovereignty not to save another as he'd assumed, but for herself alone, she mockingly adds, "But you're free to keep thinking of the Sovereignty as my dead wife flower if that makes you feel better."]]
** After Ysmé learns that Loïc is motivated by his daughter's illness, she remarks:
--->'''Ysmé:''' You know, all this time, I thought you were a dead wife guy. Turns out it was a sick kid... Though I guess it could still be both.
* TheLostLenore: {{Discussed|Trope}} during the prelude:
** [[spoiler:When Ysmé makes it clear Loïc that she is pursuing the Sovereignty not to save another as he'd assumed, but for herself alone, she mockingly adds, "But you're free to keep thinking of the Sovereignty as my dead wife flower if that makes you feel better."]]
** After Ysmé learns that Loïc is motivated by his daughter's illness, she remarks:
--->'''Ysmé:''' You know, all this time, I thought you were a dead wife guy. Turns out it was a sick kid... Though I guess it could still be both.
* PunctuatedForEmphasis: Short pauses are sometimes inserted in between words to convey diction. For example, in the prelude, Ysmé exclaims, "Oh my ''god''," the text briefly pausing between each word.
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* SuddenSoundtrackStop: In the Hollow Temple, when [[spoiler:Ysmé says, "like the magic ''you've'' been nice enough to demonstrate for me,"]] the background music stops.
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* SuddenSoundtrackStop: In the Hollow Temple, The background music stops at some key points, such as when [[spoiler:Ysmé says, "like the magic ''you've'' been nice enough to demonstrate for me,"]] me"]], when [[spoiler:Ysmé manifests a gun]], when [[spoiler:the Voice of the background music stops.Sovereign prepares to stab Ysmé]], when Loïc falls unconscious, and when Langlais [[spoiler:pulls out Ysmé's gun]].
* UnreadablyFastText: In the prelude, Ysmé's words about [[spoiler:wanting to see Loïc strangle Langlais]] barely stay on screen long enough to be read before the screen snaps to the next line.
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** Ysmé [[spoiler:getting [[https://static.tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pub/images/ysmedead.png stabbed and ''dying'']] in the middle of the ritual to gain the power of the Sovereignity.]]
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** Ysmé [[spoiler:getting [[https://static.tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pub/images/ysmedead.png stabbed and ''dying'']] in the middle of the ritual to gain the power of the Sovereignity.Sovereignty.]]
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* SuddenSoundtrackStop: In the Hollow Temple, when [[spoiler:Ysmé says, "like the magic ''you've'' been nice enough to demonstrate for me,"]] the background music stops.
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* WhamLine: In the prelude, [[spoiler:Ysmé reveals that she has had some scheme specifically involving Loïc the whole time.]]
-->[[spoiler:'''Ysmé:''' I didn't put on the sick girl act for whatever random treasure hunter happened to feel sorry for me.\\
I came here ''[[[ScaryFlashlightFace turns the flashlight on under her face]], grinning wickedly]'' for you.]]
-->[[spoiler:'''Ysmé:''' I didn't put on the sick girl act for whatever random treasure hunter happened to feel sorry for me.\\
I came here ''[[[ScaryFlashlightFace turns the flashlight on under her face]], grinning wickedly]'' for you.]]
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** When Loïc and Ysmé enter the Hollow Temple, the scene opens with a passage of prayer and some narration from Loïc, which are in a more lyrical style, before being followed up by an informal, crude remark from Ysmé.
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** When Loïc and Ysmé enter the Hollow Temple, the scene opens with a passage of prayer and some narration from Loïc, which are in a more lyrical style, before being followed following them up by with an informal, crude remark from Ysmé.
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Icy Blue Eyes isn't just about color, it's about coolness/coldness of personality
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** When Loïc and Ysmé are beset by monsters in the prelude, Ysmé yells "Shit!!", her first instance of cursing and a contrast with her frail demeanor.
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** When Loïc and Ysmé are beset by monsters in the prelude, Ysmé yells yells, "Shit!!", her first instance of cursing and a contrast with her frail demeanor.
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* TheStinger: The prelude ends with [[spoiler: a shadowed figure praying to the Builder at the altar Ysmé stole from at the beginning of the story. A figure upon the altar who [[IdenticalStranger heavily resembles Ysmé]] slowly opens up their [[IcyBlueEyes eyes]] in response to the plea.]]
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* TheStinger: The prelude ends with [[spoiler: a shadowed figure praying to the Builder at the altar Ysmé stole from at the beginning of the story. A figure upon the altar who [[IdenticalStranger heavily resembles Ysmé]] slowly opens up their [[IcyBlueEyes eyes]] eyes in response to the plea.]]
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* {{Beat}}: The text frequently pauses momentarily to add timing to its delivery.
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* PrecisionFStrike: {{Downplayed|Trope}} in the comic [[https://pallisia.tumblr.com/post/708559593884844032/flower-language "flower language"]]. Ysmé teasingly asks Loïc which flower means "ass". Loïc takes the question into serious consideration and ends up repeating the word himself as part of discussing it. This surprises Ysmé, as it seems incongruent with his gentlemanly image.
-->'''Loïc:''' It's a bit hard to imagine [the god] reaching down from the heavens to say "ass."\\
-->'''Loïc:''' It's a bit hard to imagine [the god] reaching down from the heavens to say "ass."\\
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* PrecisionFStrike: PrecisionFStrike:
** When Loïc and Ysmé are beset by monsters in the prelude, Ysmé yells "Shit!!", her first instance of cursing and a contrast with her frail demeanor.
** {{Downplayed|Trope}} in the comic [[https://pallisia.tumblr.com/post/708559593884844032/flower-language "flower language"]]. Ysmé teasingly asks Loïc which flower means "ass". Loïc takes the question into serious consideration and ends up repeating the word himself as part of discussing it. This surprises Ysmé, as it seems incongruent with his gentlemanly image.
-->'''Loïc:''' --->'''Loïc:''' It's a bit hard to imagine [the god] reaching down from the heavens to say "ass."\\
** When Loïc and Ysmé are beset by monsters in the prelude, Ysmé yells "Shit!!", her first instance of cursing and a contrast with her frail demeanor.
** {{Downplayed|Trope}} in the comic [[https://pallisia.tumblr.com/post/708559593884844032/flower-language "flower language"]]. Ysmé teasingly asks Loïc which flower means "ass". Loïc takes the question into serious consideration and ends up repeating the word himself as part of discussing it. This surprises Ysmé, as it seems incongruent with his gentlemanly image.
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* SophisticatedAsHell:
** When Loïc and Ysmé enter the Hollow Temple, the scene opens with a passage of prayer and some narration from Loïc, which are in a more lyrical style, before being followed up by an informal, crude remark from Ysmé.
--->Almighty God of Language,\\
Lend us your eyes, and we will see truth.\\
Lend us your hands, and we will guard life.\\
Lend us your tongue, and we will speak power...\\\
''The temple is quiet and barren. In other words, more or less what I expected. Yet stepping through the door sends a chill through me all the same.\\
More than anything, though...''\\\
'''Ysmé:''' I can't see shit.
** Ysmé's second profile, "The Runaway", ends in a more informal tone than is used in the rest of its text:
--->Perhaps she's not truly [[spoiler:suffering from a mysterious affliction]] after all...but a shadow still seems to loom over her heart. At least she can say "shit" now.
** When Loïc and Ysmé enter the Hollow Temple, the scene opens with a passage of prayer and some narration from Loïc, which are in a more lyrical style, before being followed up by an informal, crude remark from Ysmé.
--->Almighty God of Language,\\
Lend us your eyes, and we will see truth.\\
Lend us your hands, and we will guard life.\\
Lend us your tongue, and we will speak power...\\\
''The temple is quiet and barren. In other words, more or less what I expected. Yet stepping through the door sends a chill through me all the same.\\
More than anything, though...''\\\
'''Ysmé:''' I can't see shit.
** Ysmé's second profile, "The Runaway", ends in a more informal tone than is used in the rest of its text:
--->Perhaps she's not truly [[spoiler:suffering from a mysterious affliction]] after all...but a shadow still seems to loom over her heart. At least she can say "shit" now.
