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* Prior to the final confrontation is a very brief shot, shown only in the special edition, of Coffee coming down from the standoff between his team and the Deep Core workers over the nuclear warhead by taking a moment to just stare out the bubble viewport of their module. He is very clearly in distress and just barely holding himself together as the camera pans out and down to look into the seemingly bottomless depths of the ocean right in front of him. It's at this moment that viewers are probably reminded that this is a ''human being'' doing his best to keep going under circumstances that no human was ever intended by nature to deal with.
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* Prior to the final confrontation is a very brief shot, shown only in the special edition, of Coffee Coffey coming down from the standoff between his team and the Deep Core workers over the nuclear warhead by taking a moment to just stare out the bubble viewport of their module. He is very clearly in distress and just barely holding himself together as the camera pans out and down to look into the seemingly bottomless depths of the ocean right in front of him. It's at this moment that viewers are probably reminded that this is a ''human being'' doing his best to keep going under circumstances that no human was ever intended by nature to deal with.
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--->"A moment of lucidity. A moment of outrage at the fact that they had ordered ''him'' to do this. Why should I die for this? Why shouldn't I, just once do, what ''I'' want? No orders, no assignment, just what Hiram Coffeey wants to do... What I want is to rise up out of the water, to breathe clean air under the open sky, to see other people and not have to decide whether they're my enemies, decide whether to kill them or use them."
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--->"A moment of lucidity. A moment of outrage at the fact that they had ordered ''him'' to do this. Why should I die for this? Why shouldn't I, just once do, what ''I'' want? No orders, no assignment, just what Hiram Coffeey Coffey wants to do... What I want is to rise up out of the water, to breathe clean air under the open sky, to see other people and not have to decide whether they're my enemies, decide whether to kill them or use them."
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* Prior to the final confrontation is a very brief shot, shown only in the special edition, of Coffee coming down from the standoff between his team and the Deep Core workers over the nuclear warhead by taking a moment to just stare out the bubble viewport of their module. He is very clearly in distress and just barely holding himself together as the camera pans out and down to look into the seemingly bottomless depths of the ocean right in front of him. It's at this moment that viewers are probably reminded that this is a ''human being'' doing his best to keep going under circumstances that no human was ever intended by nature to deal with.
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* [[AC:Don't cry baby. Knew this was one way ticket but you know I had to come.]]\\
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* [[AC:Don't Bud's seeming final message after disarming the warhead, and finding out he doesn't have enough oxygen to survive the return trip, resigning himself to stay at the bottom of the ocean.
-->[[AC:Don't cry baby. Knew this was one way ticket but you know I had to come.]]\\
-->[[AC:Don't cry baby. Knew this was one way ticket but you know I had to come.]]\\
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** Everyone around the scene begins to break down as it's becoming apparent this is [[spoiler:seemingly]] not going to work. First, and most especially, One Night, who had a very nasty attitude toward Lindsey's mere presence on Deep Core. When Lindsey does revive, she's openly sobbing in relief and shame.
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** Everyone around the scene begins to break down as it's becoming apparent this is [[spoiler:seemingly]] seemingly not going to work. First, and most especially, One Night, who had a very nasty attitude toward Lindsey's mere presence on Deep Core. When Lindsey does revive, she's openly sobbing in relief and shame.
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* Lindsey drowning herself. Especially as the water goes up to her chin, she screams out "remind me why I thought this was a good idea". The scene from that moment until she revives is a pure mix of AdultFear, NightmareFuel, and TearJerker. Especially the moment she loses consciousness, when Bud lets out his anguished BigNo.
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* Lindsey drowning herself. Especially as the water goes up to her chin, she screams out "remind me why I thought this was a good idea". The scene from that moment until she revives is a pure mix of AdultFear, NightmareFuel, and TearJerker. Especially the moment she loses consciousness, when Bud lets out his anguished BigNo.
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* The look on Coffey's face before [[spoiler: his sub-pod drops into the abyss, dooming him to being crushed by the pressure of deep water]] really reminds you that while he wasn't a nice guy to begin with, he was under the influence of a serious condition that severely clouded his judgement. Even Lindsey and Bud, who he tried to murder only moments earlier, are horrified by this as they watch.
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* The look on Coffey's face before [[spoiler: his sub-pod drops into the abyss, dooming him to being crushed by the pressure of deep water]] water really reminds you that while he wasn't a nice guy to begin with, he was under the influence of a serious condition that severely clouded his judgement. Even Lindsey and Bud, who he tried to murder only moments earlier, are horrified by this as they watch.
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** Everyone around the scene begins to break down as it's becoming apparent this is not going to work. First, and most especially, One Night, who had a very nasty attitude toward Lindsey's mere presence on Deep Core. When Lindsey does revive, she's openly sobbing in relief and shame.
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** Everyone around the scene begins to break down as it's becoming apparent this is [[spoiler:seemingly]] not going to work. First, and most especially, One Night, who had a very nasty attitude toward Lindsey's mere presence on Deep Core. When Lindsey does revive, she's openly sobbing in relief and shame.
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** Really, the entirety of her monologue to Bud after One Night's insistence that she "''talk'' to him".
** Also her reaction when Bud begins the pre-breathing with the breathing fluid, and initially appearing to drown.
** Also her reaction when Bud begins the pre-breathing with the breathing fluid, and initially appearing to drown.
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* Lindsey's line "It's not easy being a cast iron bitch. It takes discipline and years of training" is sad in a different sort of way.
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* Lindsey's line "It's During Bud's dive to neutralize the nuclear warheads, One Night tells Lindsey to actually ''talk'' to him, not merely give him information on the dive. She proceeds to bare her soul, and parts of it are very cathartic as she explains things that might have contributed to their estrangement.
-->'''Lindsey:''' It's not easy being [[IronicEcho a cast ironbitch. bitch]]. It takes discipline and years of training" is sad in a different sort training. A lot of way.people don't appreciate that.
-->'''Lindsey:''' It's not easy being [[IronicEcho a cast iron
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-->"A moment of lucidity. A moment of outrage at the fact that they had ordered ''him'' to do this. Why should I die for this? Why shouldn't I, just once do, what ''I'' want? No orders, no assignment, just what Hiram Coffeey wants to do... What I want is to rise up out of the water, to breathe clean air under the open sky, to see other people and not have to decide whether they're my enemies, decide whether to kill them or use them."
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* The look on Coffey's face before [[spoiler: his sub-pod drops into the abyss, dooming him to being crushed by the pressure of deep water]] really reminds you that while he wasn't a nice guy to begin with, he was under the influence of a serious condition that severely clouded his judgement.
** Even Lindsey and Bud, who he tried to murder only moments earlier, are horrified by this as they watch.
** Even Lindsey and Bud, who he tried to murder only moments earlier, are horrified by this as they watch.
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* The look on Coffey's face before [[spoiler: his sub-pod drops into the abyss, dooming him to being crushed by the pressure of deep water]] really reminds you that while he wasn't a nice guy to begin with, he was under the influence of a serious condition that severely clouded his judgement.
**judgement. Even Lindsey and Bud, who he tried to murder only moments earlier, are horrified by this as they watch.watch.
** The novel makes it even sadder: it reveals that Coffey had a hard life growing up, and only found true happiness and purpose in the military. Throughout the story, he's followed his orders without question, but at the very end, when he realizes that he's going to die, he has a a realization:
-->"A moment of lucidity. A moment of outrage at the fact that they had ordered ''him'' to do this. Why should I die for this? Why shouldn't I, just once do, what ''I'' want? No orders, no assignment, just what Hiram Coffeey wants to do... What I want is to rise up out of the water, to breathe clean air under the open sky, to see other people and not have to decide whether they're my enemies, decide whether to kill them or use them."
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** The novel makes it even sadder: it reveals that Coffey had a hard life growing up, and only found true happiness and purpose in the military. Throughout the story, he's followed his orders without question, but at the very end, when he realizes that he's going to die, he has a a realization:
-->"A moment of lucidity. A moment of outrage at the fact that they had ordered ''him'' to do this. Why should I die for this? Why shouldn't I, just once do, what ''I'' want? No orders, no assignment, just what Hiram Coffeey wants to do... What I want is to rise up out of the water, to breathe clean air under the open sky, to see other people and not have to decide whether they're my enemies, decide whether to kill them or use them."
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[[AC:Love you wife.]]\\
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[[AC:Love you wife.]]\\]]
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* " '' love you wife '' "
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* " '' love [[AC:Don't cry baby. Knew this was one way ticket but you wife '' "know I had to come.]]\\
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[[AC:Love you wife.]]\\
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[[AC:Love you wife.]]\\
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* Lindsey drowning herself. Especially as the water goes up to her chin, she screams out "remind me why I thought this was a good idea". The scene from that moment until she revives is a pure mix of AdultFear, HighOctaneNightmareFuel, and TearJerker. Especially the moment she loses consciousness, when Bud lets out his anguished BigNo.
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* Lindsey drowning herself. Especially as the water goes up to her chin, she screams out "remind me why I thought this was a good idea". The scene from that moment until she revives is a pure mix of AdultFear, HighOctaneNightmareFuel, NightmareFuel, and TearJerker. Especially the moment she loses consciousness, when Bud lets out his anguished BigNo.
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** The fact that she's obviously terrified the whole time kicks it into NightmareFuel territory.
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* Lindsey drowning herself. Especially as the water goes up to her chin, she screams out "remind me why I thought this was a good idea"
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* Lindsey drowning herself. Especially as the water goes up to her chin, she screams out "remind me why I thought this was a good idea"idea". The scene from that moment until she revives is a pure mix of AdultFear, HighOctaneNightmareFuel, and TearJerker. Especially the moment she loses consciousness, when Bud lets out his anguished BigNo.
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** Everyone around the scene begins to break down as it's clear this is not going to work. First, and most especially, One Night, who had a very nasty attitude toward Lindsey's mere presence on Deep Core. When Lindsey does revive, she's openly sobbing in relief and shame.
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** Everyone around the scene begins to break down as it's clear becoming apparent this is not going to work. First, and most especially, One Night, who had a very nasty attitude toward Lindsey's mere presence on Deep Core. When Lindsey does revive, she's openly sobbing in relief and shame.
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* Lindsey's line "It's not easy being a cast iron bitch. You have to work hard for it" is sad in a different sort of way.
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* Lindsey's line "It's not easy being a cast iron bitch. You have to work hard for it" It takes discipline and years of training" is sad in a different sort of way.
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** Everyone around the scene begins to break down as it's clear this is not going to work. First, and most especially, One Night, who had some very nasty reactions to Lindsey's mere presence on Deep Core. When Lindsey does revive, she's openly sobbing in relief and shame.
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** Everyone around the scene begins to break down as it's clear this is not going to work. First, and most especially, One Night, who had some a very nasty reactions to attitude toward Lindsey's mere presence on Deep Core. When Lindsey does revive, she's openly sobbing in relief and shame.
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** Everyone around the scene begins to break down as it's clear this is not going to work. First, and most especially, One Night, who had some very nasty reactions to Lindsey's mere presence on Deep Core. When Lindsey does revive, she's openly sobbing in relief and shame.
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** Also her reaction to Bud apparently drowning too.
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** Also her reaction to when Bud apparently drowning too.begins the pre-breathing with the breathing fluid, and initially appearing to drown.
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* " ' ' love you wife ' ' "
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* " ' ' '' love you wife ' ' '' "
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* "love you wife"
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* "love " ' ' love you wife"wife ' ' "
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** Even Lindsey and Bud, who he tried to murder only moments earlier, are horrified by this as they watch.
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** Even Lindsey and Bud, who he tried to murder only moments earlier, are horrified by this as they watch.watch.
* "love you wife"
* "love you wife"
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* The look on Coffey's face before [[spoiler: his sub-pod drops into the abyss, dooming him to being crushed by the pressure of deep water]] really reminds you that while he wasn't a nice guy to begin with, he was under the influence of a serious condition that severely clouded his judgement.
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* The look on Coffey's face before [[spoiler: his sub-pod drops into the abyss, dooming him to being crushed by the pressure of deep water]] really reminds you that while he wasn't a nice guy to begin with, he was under the influence of a serious condition that severely clouded his judgement.judgement.
** Even Lindsey and Bud, who he tried to murder only moments earlier, are horrified by this as they watch.
** Even Lindsey and Bud, who he tried to murder only moments earlier, are horrified by this as they watch.
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** The fact that she's obviously terrified the whole time kicks it into NightmareFuel territory.
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* The look on Coffey's face before [[his sub-pod drops into the abyss, dooming him to being crushed by the pressure of deep water]] really reminds you that while he wasn't a nice guy to begin with, he was under the influence of a serious condition that severely clouded his judgement.
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* The look on Coffey's face before [[his [[spoiler: his sub-pod drops into the abyss, dooming him to being crushed by the pressure of deep water]] really reminds you that while he wasn't a nice guy to begin with, he was under the influence of a serious condition that severely clouded his judgement.
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** Also her reaction to Bud apparently drowning too.
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** Also her reaction to Bud apparently drowning too.too.
* The look on Coffey's face before [[his sub-pod drops into the abyss, dooming him to being crushed by the pressure of deep water]] really reminds you that while he wasn't a nice guy to begin with, he was under the influence of a serious condition that severely clouded his judgement.
* The look on Coffey's face before [[his sub-pod drops into the abyss, dooming him to being crushed by the pressure of deep water]] really reminds you that while he wasn't a nice guy to begin with, he was under the influence of a serious condition that severely clouded his judgement.
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* Her line "It's not easy being a cast iron bitch. You have to work hard for it" is sad in a different sort of way.
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* Her Lindsey's line "It's not easy being a cast iron bitch. You have to work hard for it" is sad in a different sort of way.
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** Really, the entirety of her monologue to Bud after One Night's insistence that she "''talk'' to him.
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** Really, the entirety of her monologue to Bud after One Night's insistence that she "''talk'' to him.him".
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* Lindsey drowning herself. Especially as the water goes up to her chin, she screams out "remind me why I thought this was a good idea"
** Bud's increasingly frantic efforts to resuscitate her afterwards.
* Her line "It's not easy being a cast iron bitch. You have to work hard for it" is sad in a different sort of way.
** Really, the entirety of her monologue to Bud after One Night's insistence that she "''talk'' to him.
** Also her reaction to Bud apparently drowning too.
** Bud's increasingly frantic efforts to resuscitate her afterwards.
* Her line "It's not easy being a cast iron bitch. You have to work hard for it" is sad in a different sort of way.
** Really, the entirety of her monologue to Bud after One Night's insistence that she "''talk'' to him.
** Also her reaction to Bud apparently drowning too.