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* Starting with the title, it's taken from the Gang of Youths song "Achilles Come Down", about a man being talked down from suicide. The song itself is filled with tearjerker, but equally tearjerking is how it applies to both Pyrrha, who is committing practical suicide by going to fight May, and May, who is committing figurative suicide by making the worst mistake of her life.
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* Starting with the title, it's taken from the Gang of Youths Music/GangOfYouths song "Achilles Come Down", about a man being talked down from suicide. The song itself is filled with tearjerker, but equally tearjerking is how it applies to both Pyrrha, who is committing practical suicide by going to fight May, and May, who is committing figurative suicide by making the worst mistake of her life.
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** Afterward, in her cell in Argus, May is left reflecting on the betrayal and starts to wonder if Emerald was right, that everything she has done was wrong and that everyone who has opposed her, ''even Cinder'', may have been right all along. The fact that she's right about this makes it all the more heartwrenching.
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!!!Chapter 20: Look Who's Talking
* May wakes up in a prison cell and, while she quickly assures herself that she's not in Cerberus, she is still clearly on the verge of panicking, especially when she tries to contact Salem and gets no response, and probably ''can't'' for weeks.
-->She felt like she was going to vomit.\\
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No one was coming to help her.\\
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She was on her own.
* Emerald's betrayal. Clever readers may have seen it coming given the metric buttload of setup, it does not make it hurt any less to see how ''devastated'' May is. For a good while she struggles to even process that Emerald, her closest friend for ''years'', a girl who is like a sister to her, would stab her in the back. Once it fully hits her, she's torn between fury that ''another'' friend has betrayed her like everyone else, and hurt over losing someone who's been with her for so long.
-->'''Emerald:''' I’m… I’m sorry, May.
** Emerald for her part clearly doesn't want to do this and begs May to see reason, that what they are doing causes nothing but misery, and that what Salem is doing is wrong. May is too furious and hurt to listen.
* Yang accuses May of letting innocent people die for a revolution they didn't even know about, but May tells her that she has nothing to say about revolution since she grew up in peace and prosperity. Yang fires back that May ''killed her uncle'', so she has very good reason to get involved.
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* Winter finally tells the Happy Huntresses that May is a trans woman and came out to her all the way back in their first Vytal tournament together, complete with an account of how May and Winter left the ball early because May was too miserable in her suit and wanted to spent at least part of the night in a dress. Marrow feels guilty that his dance with Malen made May more miserable than ever. Everyone else is quiet with regrets. Robyn thinks about everything she could have done different to help May earlier, that she could have told her in no uncertain terms that they wanted her with them when they left Atlas, that her team could've hung out at the landing platform the night May was blackbagged.
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* Winter finally tells the Happy Huntresses that May is a trans woman and came out to her all the way back in their first Vytal tournament together, complete with an account of how May and Winter left the ball early because May was too miserable in her suit and wanted to spent spend at least part of the night in a dress. Marrow feels guilty that his dance with Malen made May more miserable than ever. Everyone else is quiet with regrets. Robyn thinks about everything she could have done different to help May earlier, that she could have told her in no uncertain terms that they wanted her with them when they left Atlas, that her team could've hung out at the landing platform the night May was blackbagged.
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** Pyrrha refuses to reforge her shield, Akoúo̱, feeling that since May used a broken piece of it to murder Qrow Branwen, it's corrupted forever and can never be used as a tool of protection again.
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** Cinder claims that she tried to protect May in Atlas, and would have supported her if she came out as trans. How true that is up for debate, but it's clear that Cinder truly wanted to do her best as team leader, but her determination to be the best, along with Atlas' military brainwashing made her act in ways that only alienated her from her team. May for her part wants none of Cinder's protection or support, arguing that Janus would have gone the exact same even if Atlas did everything to support her transitioning. While these two could probably never have been ''good'' friends, it's undeniable that their current hatred for each other is a product of the horrid system they knew each other in.
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** Cinder claims that she tried to protect May in Atlas, and would have supported her if she came out as trans. How true that is is up for debate, but it's clear that Cinder truly wanted to do her best as team leader, but her determination to be the best, along with Atlas' military brainwashing made her act in ways that only alienated her from her team. May for her part wants none of Cinder's protection or support, arguing that Janus would have gone the exact same even if Atlas did everything to support her transitioning. While these two could probably never have been ''good'' friends, it's undeniable that their current hatred for each other is a product of the horrid system they knew each other in.
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* Pyrrha's aformentioned situation is not helped when it turned out that she is soul-bonded with May, a situation that may eventually destroy her identity entirely. And the only times when Ozpin can help her train to resist it is when she's already exhaused and missing her aura.
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* Pyrrha is, as usual, not doing great. Her sense of obligation, plus the guilt over Qrow dying for her, has caused her to deny herself any chance at happiness or joy, even pushing Jaune away out of fear that associating with her will get him killed. Her new outfit even includes Qrow's cape as a literal weight on her shoulders. There is also the matter of how she picked her new outfit; Alone and in silence, just like May all those years ago.
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* Cinder and May were never close, and were mostly at each others' throats throughout their time in Atlas. Still, they ''did'' consider each other friends. Now that they finally reunite, the years and their own actions have turned that spark of friendship into nothing but hatred.
** Cinder claims that she tried to protect May in Atlas, and would have supported her if she came out as trans. How true that is up for debate, but it's clear that Cinder truly wanted to do her best as team leader, but her determination to be the best, along with Atlas' military brainwashing made her act in ways that only alienated her from her team. May for her part wants none of Cinder's protection or support, arguing that Janus would have gone the exact same even if Atlas did everything to support her transitioning. While these two could probably never have been ''good'' friends, it's undeniable that their current hatred for each other is a product of the horrid system they knew each other in.
** When May starts to draw on her grimm infusions out of desperation, Cinder stops her attack in shock and can do nothing but ask what ''happened'' to her old teammate. Her tone of voice reminds May of the "almost-concern" Cinder used to show in Atlas, which does nothing but infuriate her further.
** The partially transformed May's attack is so violent and savage that Cinder, the proud Atlesian specialist who dedicated herself to being the best her entire life, is left stumbling backwards in terror.
** Cinder claims that she tried to protect May in Atlas, and would have supported her if she came out as trans. How true that is up for debate, but it's clear that Cinder truly wanted to do her best as team leader, but her determination to be the best, along with Atlas' military brainwashing made her act in ways that only alienated her from her team. May for her part wants none of Cinder's protection or support, arguing that Janus would have gone the exact same even if Atlas did everything to support her transitioning. While these two could probably never have been ''good'' friends, it's undeniable that their current hatred for each other is a product of the horrid system they knew each other in.
** When May starts to draw on her grimm infusions out of desperation, Cinder stops her attack in shock and can do nothing but ask what ''happened'' to her old teammate. Her tone of voice reminds May of the "almost-concern" Cinder used to show in Atlas, which does nothing but infuriate her further.
** The partially transformed May's attack is so violent and savage that Cinder, the proud Atlesian specialist who dedicated herself to being the best her entire life, is left stumbling backwards in terror.
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!!!Chapter 18: Countered
* When Lil' Miss Malachite jokes that May is paying for her services with "daddy's money", May bitterly gestures to herself and says that her father wouldn't give her allowance when she looks like this. She is still not, and likely will never be, over her parents neglect and transphobia.
* When Lil' Miss Malachite jokes that May is paying for her services with "daddy's money", May bitterly gestures to herself and says that her father wouldn't give her allowance when she looks like this. She is still not, and likely will never be, over her parents neglect and transphobia.
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Of course a fic inspired by ''WebAnimation/{{RWBY}}'' has its fair share of tragedy, though ''Fanfic/HoldingTheWorldOnTheirShoulders'' and ''Fanfic/{{Reignfall}}'' might actually take it even further than the source material.
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Of course a fic inspired by ''WebAnimation/{{RWBY}}'' has its fair share of tragedy, though ''Fanfic/HoldingTheWorldOnTheirShoulders'' ''Fanfic/HoldingTheWorldOnTheirShoulders'', ''Fanfic/LostInTheStorm'', and ''Fanfic/{{Reignfall}}'' might actually take it even further than the source material.
