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* HowTheyTreatTheHelp: One of the many ways that the antagonist Fraser Barton Colborne establishes himself as antisocial is by verbally abusing a foodservice worker for misspelling his name. Fraser eventually murders her in retaliation.
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* NastyToTheWaitress: One of the many ways that the antagonist Fraser Barton Colborne establishes himself as antisocial is by verbally abusing a foodservice worker for misspelling his name. Fraser eventually murders her in retaliation.
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* BadassLongcoat: Fraser wears a long leather coat during his shooting spree which is possibly a ShoutOut to the infamous [[UsefulNotes/{{Columbine}} Harris and Klebold.]]
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* BadassLongcoat: Fraser wears a long leather coat during his shooting spree which is possibly a ShoutOut probably in order to hide one of the infamous [[UsefulNotes/{{Columbine}} Harris and Klebold.]]many guns he's carrying.
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* BrokenAesop: The script attempts to make a point that Fraser's past doesn't excuse his actions, but his motives appear to have little to do with that anyway, as it's implied that he's just a sociopath who enjoys hurting people for no reason, and Fraser himself states that he doesn't think of it as an excuse.
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* BadassLongcoat: Fraser wears a long leather coat during his shooting spree.
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* BadassLongcoat: Fraser wears a long leather coat during his shooting spree. spree which is possibly a ShoutOut to the infamous [[UsefulNotes/{{Columbine}} Harris and Klebold.]]
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* BadassLongcoat: Fraser wears one during his shooting spree.
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* BadassLongcoat: Fraser wears one a long leather coat during his shooting spree.
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* CardCarryingVillain: Fraser is fully aware of how petty his motive for a mass shooting is, but doesn't care. When called a psychopath, he responds that [psychopathy] is "entirely within the realm of possibility."
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* CardCarryingVillain: Fraser is fully aware of how petty his motive for a mass shooting is, but doesn't care. When called a psychopath, he responds that [psychopathy] is "entirely within the realm of possibility."possibility" for him.
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* CardCarryingVillain: Fraser is fully aware of how petty his motive for a mass shooting is, but doesn't care.
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* CardCarryingVillain: Fraser is fully aware of how petty his motive for a mass shooting is, but doesn't care. When called a psychopath, he responds that [psychopathy] is "entirely within the realm of possibility."
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* BadassLongcoat: Fraser wears one during his shooting spree.
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* BrokenAesop: The script attempts to make a point that Fraser's past doesn't excuse his actions, but his motives appear to have little to do with that anyway, as it's implied that he's just a sociopath who enjoys hurting people for no reason, and Fraser himself states that he doesn't think of it as an excuse.
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-->--'''Jeff''', summing up the story in a nutshell.
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DisproportionateRetribution.
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* KickTheSonOfABitch: Heavily downplayed with Fraser and Madison. On the one hand, Madison flirting with Fraser against his will is wrong, but Fraser himself is a throughly unpleasant human being. On the other hand, Fraser later seduces and kills Madison partly for what she did to him, but Fraser himself became much worse than Madison, planning a mass shooting against innocent people. Fraser also plans to kill unruly customers, and goes far beyond DisproportionateRetribution.
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* CopKiller: A few of of Fraser's killing spree victims were Phoenix Police Officers.
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* CopKiller: A few of of Fraser's killing spree victims were Phoenix Police Officers. Their deaths are viewed as being just as senseless as those of the other civilians.
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* WouldHurtAChild: Fraser has no problem shooting children whatsoever.
* WouldHitAGirl: Fraser does not see women as any less worthy of death than men.
* WouldHitAGirl: Fraser does not see women as any less worthy of death than men.
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* WouldHurtAChild: Fraser has no problem shooting children whatsoever.
* WouldHitAGirl: Fraser does not see women as any less worthy of death than men.whatsoever.
* WouldHitAGirl: Fraser does not see women as any less worthy of death than men.
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* BlasphemousBoast: After being arrested, Fraser declares that nothing anyone else can do or say, not even God himself, will make him regret his actions.
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* BlasphemousBoast: After being arrested, Fraser declares that nothing anyone else can do or say, not "not even God himself, himself", will make him regret his actions.
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''[[https://www.wattpad.com/802554499-extreme-prejudice-2019-extreme-prejudice Extreme Extreme Prejudice]]'' is a story written by [=SkyCat32=] on Wattpad. It's also available at [[https://drive.google.com/file/d/1t89oLgEVvLekmAR-SxEZDVZkZILLGtEx/view?usp=sharing Google Drive]].
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''[[https://www.wattpad.com/802554499-extreme-prejudice-2019-extreme-prejudice Extreme Extreme Prejudice]]'' is a story written by [=SkyCat32=] on Wattpad. It's also available at [[https://drive.google.com/file/d/1t89oLgEVvLekmAR-SxEZDVZkZILLGtEx/view?usp=sharing com/file/d/1HCsV71x-6tAy4-3SX1wio8vY1wLVwNuk/view?usp=sharing Google Drive]].
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* KarmaHoudini: {{Downplayed|Trope}}: While Fraser is executed in the final notes of the story, Fraser nonetheless sees himself as having accomplished his goals, and states that "not even God Himself" will make him regret his actions, making it seem like Fraser might as well have evaded justice.
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* KarmaHoudini: {{Downplayed|Trope}}: While Fraser is executed in the final notes of the story, Fraser nonetheless sees himself as having accomplished his goals, and states that "not even God Himself" will make him regret his actions, making it seem like as if Fraser might as well have evaded justice.justice from a narrative standpoint.
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* KarmaHoudini: {{Downplayed|Trope}}: While Fraser is executed in the final notes of the story, Fraser states that nothing that happens to him will ever make him regret his actions, making it seem like Fraser might as well have evaded justice.
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* KarmaHoudini: {{Downplayed|Trope}}: While Fraser is executed in the final notes of the story, Fraser nonetheless sees himself as having accomplished his goals, and states that nothing that happens to him "not even God Himself" will ever make him regret his actions, making it seem like Fraser might as well have evaded justice.