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* JerkassWoobie: The unnamed mare. In the present, she is a monster in pony skin, who takes over Rarity's life, wrecks her house, and eventually steals some of Rarity's dresses for wake-up juice money. But at one point she was a pony who was so desperate to look beautiful that she was willing to take an illegal and incredibly dangerous potion to looks thinner, and she is what she now is because the potion has destroyed large chunks of her brain and she literally cannot understand that the way she acts is wrong.
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* WeightWoe: Ultimately, the mare's problems stem from a potion which she takes to make herself look thinner. However, the Continuum's reliance on RealityEnsues combines with the near-impossibility of local shapechanging to have that potion work via ''compression'': it makes fatty tissue take up less space. This puts extra pressure on the blood vessels running through it -- and a high percentage of brain matter is composed of such tissue. The mare has been going through mini-strokes since she started on the regimen, and it's cost her the ability to recognize that she should stop.
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* WeightWoe: Ultimately, the mare's problems stem from a potion which she takes to make herself look thinner. However, the Continuum's reliance on RealityEnsues realism combines with the near-impossibility of local shapechanging to have that potion work via ''compression'': it makes fatty tissue take up less space. This puts extra pressure on the blood vessels running through it -- and a high percentage of brain matter is composed of such tissue. The mare has been going through mini-strokes since she started on the regimen, and it's cost her the ability to recognize that she should stop.
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* JerkassWoobie: The unnamed mare. In the present, she is a monster in pony skin, who takes over Rarity's life, wrecks her house, and eventually steals some of Rarity's dresses for wake-up juice money. But at one point she was a pony who was so desperate to look beautiful that she was willing to take an illegal and incredibly dangerous potion to looks thinner, and she is what she now is because the potion has destroyed large chunks of her brain and she literally cannot understand that the way she acts is wrong.
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* [[ThatManIsDead That Mare Is Dead]]: When Rarity finally learns about the unnamed mare's potion-induced brain damage, she quickly realizes that by this point the mare who started taking the potions is effectively dead.
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* WeightWoe: Ultimately, the mare's problems stem from a potion which she takes to make herself look thinner. However, the Continuum's reliance on RealityEnsues combines with the near-impossibility of local shapechanging to have that potion work via ''compression'': it makes fatty tissue take up less space. This puts extra pressure on the blood vessels running through it -- and a high percentage of brain matter is composed of such tissue. The mare has been going through mini-strokes since she started on the regimen, and it's cost her the ability to recognize that she should stop.
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* WeightWoe: Ultimately, the mare's problems stem from a potion which she takes to make herself look thinner. However, the Continuum's reliance on RealityEnsues combines with the near-impossibility of local shapechanging to have that potion work via ''compression'': it makes fatty tissue take up less space. This puts extra pressure on the blood vessels running through it -- and a high percentage of brain matter is composed of such tissue. The mare has been going through mini-strokes since she started on the regimen, and it's cost her the ability to recognize that she should stop.stop.
** Unsurprisingly, this potion is illegal, and any competent doctor would recognize the symptoms. This means that the mare would never have gone in for treatment, even when she started having strokes, for fear of having her secret revealed.
** Unsurprisingly, this potion is illegal, and any competent doctor would recognize the symptoms. This means that the mare would never have gone in for treatment, even when she started having strokes, for fear of having her secret revealed.
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Read it [[ here]].
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Read it [[ [[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/442846/on-the-slow-death-of-crocodiles here]].
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* RealLifeWritesThePlot: Those who have followed Estee's blogs are aware that the antagonist of the novel is based on somebody the author knows in real life.
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* NoDialogueEpisode: Comes close. There's one conversation between Rarity and her mother near the end of the story -- and that's it. For the most part, we're told what's been said, but there's only a single section where the actual words appear.
* NoNameGiven: An imperfect translation hints as to what the mare's name might be, but we're never given the exact term.
* PassingTheTorch: A dark variant. Rarity winds up hosting the mare because her mother is desperate to get that pony out of her own house.
* RealLifeWritesThePlot:
* SkewedPriorities: Rarity's guest spends all her food money on expensive treats (and kicks half of them into the
* TheThingThatWouldNotLeave: Played for drama. Ultimately, two of the story's themes are [[https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Compassion_fatigue compassion fatigue]] and the way Rarity progressively hurts herself because she's convinced that kicking the mare out will render her homeless.
* WeightWoe: Ultimately, the mare's problems stem from a potion which she takes to make herself look thinner. However, the Continuum's reliance on RealityEnsues combines with the near-impossibility of local shapechanging to have that potion work via ''compression'': it makes fatty tissue take up less space. This puts extra pressure on the blood vessels running through it -- and a high percentage of brain matter is composed of such tissue. The mare has been going through mini-strokes since she started on the regimen, and it's cost her the ability to recognize that she should stop.
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You pity her. You see her, you speak with her for a few minutes, learn about the myriad of tragedies in her life (and there's always something new), and you just feel bad for her. You want to ''help''. Really, it's easy for Rarity to let somepony stay with her for a little while, just until that guest truly gets back on their hooves, because the mare needs ''help''.
You pity her. And when the pity runs out... that's where the self-loathing starts to come in.
Read it [[ here]].
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* RealLifeWritesThePlot: Those who have followed Estee's blogs are aware that the antagonist of the novel is based on somebody the author knows in real life.
You pity her. And when the pity runs out... that's where the self-loathing starts to come in.
Read it [[ here]].
!!Tropes Include:
* RealLifeWritesThePlot: Those who have followed Estee's blogs are aware that the antagonist of the novel is based on somebody the author knows in real life.
