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-> ''Touch a button. Things happen. A scientist becomes a beast.
-->--'''The Narrator''', ''Film/TheBeastOfYuccaFlats''
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->A lot of this may be due to the writing style. (…) Apart from mentions of drawing paper screen doors aside, I have NO idea what Mount Fuji, home of mystical fantastical godlike beings, looks like. This is incredibly disappointing, particularly since one of the big draws of the fantasy genre is absorbing yourself in something completely different. This lack of description means I just [watched] generic notions of what houses and stuff looked like, which kind of defeats the object of setting something in a different culture.
-->-- Reviewer '''[[https://www.goodreads.com/review/show/1738719654?book_show_action=false Chocolategoddess]]''', describing a flawed example of the trope
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-> ''"Poor Faulkner. Does he really think big emotions come from big words?"''
-->-- '''Creator/ErnestHemingway''', in response to the above quote.
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->''"If I started to write elaborately, or like someone introducing or presenting something, I found that I could cut that scrollwork or ornament out and throw it away and start with the first true simple declarative sentence I had written."''
-->-- '''Creator/ErnestHemingway''', "Moveable Feast"
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-->--Creator/JohnKricfalusi, in his [[Blog/JohnKStuff blog post]] [[http://johnkstuff.blogspot.com/2007/03/writing-for-cartoons-6-spelling-grammar.html Writing for Cartoons 6]]
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