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** In the same chapter filly!Fluttershy [[spoiler: touches Discord's amulet.]] amulet. In his statue Discord cannot see what happens to her: he only hears a cry and an explosion. He genuinely fears that she might be dead until he hears her breathing. It's only when more people enter the cave some time later that Fluttershy speaks and tries to get up, which is long enough for there to have been several search parties out looking for her. If Fluttershy really was hurt, it would have been hours before anyone found her.
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* Applejack’s goal being to [[spoiler: murder Longhorn]] Longhorn is fairly chilling. She’s determined to go through with even though it means [[spoiler: she’ll cease to be Dementer’s Vassal]].Vassal.
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* Discord just tossing ponies who aren't Fluttershy over his shoulder carelessly.
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* The first chapter (the prologue) has a child unknowingly stumbling upon and awakening [[RealityWarper MadGod [[RealityWarperMadGod Discord]]. It's lucky for Fluttershy that Discord takes a liking to her. Worse, Discord implies that he ''has'' has hurt children in the past.
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, but the filly!Fluttershy touches Discord's amulet. Discord in his statue cannot see what happens to her; he only hears a cry and an explosion, and fears that she might be dead until he hears her breathing, and notes that it is a long time later that she
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These alternate adventures of Power Ponies can adventous heartwarming, and tearjerking, but they definitely can be nightmarish.
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*The Fluttershy's rampage in the city when she became angry.
!!The Main-Raising Joke
!!The Shadow King
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!!Don't Cry After Sunset
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*[[spoiler: The scene in which Sunset forcefully kissed Twilight, while she was still chained and her magic locked. Sunset afterwards seemed horrified with herself when Twilight called her out on this.]]
