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* ActuallyPrettyFunny: Pashka smiles at the idea of people named Bug and Cockroach having a serious discussion. River quickly shuts him up, saying that whoever thought it funny is already dead.
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* FalloutShelterFail: It is revealed that the planetary civilization collapsed because one MadScientist believed people cannot achieve happiness because they cannot let go of the past, so he decided to flood the planet with memory-wiping field, wait in a shelter until it subsided, and then emerge to teach the people good. Due to the trope, only the first stage was successful.
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* ScarpiaUltimatum: At one point, Veri-Meri threatens Squirrel to get all her friends killed if she doesn't marry him (he mostly has eyes for her title and riches, but some of his phrases imply lust is involved as well); luckily for her, he is at least unaware of her budding romance with Brook. [[spoiler:She is saved by Alice and Iria before she can give up, and later manages to escape the city altogether]].
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* BatOutOfHell: A dangerous predator which causes some serious problem. Mentioned to be from off-planet.
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* BatOutOfHell: A Giant bats (or bat-like creatures) are a dangerous predator which causes some serious problem. Mentioned to be species. It’s mentioned they are descended from off-planet.alien fauna.
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* EscapedAnimalRampage: A variant. Some of the Krinian flora is alien animals which escaped from their Cosmozoo analogue.
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* EscapedAnimalRampage: A variant. Some of the Krinian flora is alien The Krinians used to have animals which escaped from other planets in their Cosmozoo analogue.zoos. After the memory wipe, many of these have escaped, and their descendants are often very dangerous.
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** PlayedForLaughs with the Krinians explorers from Atlantis as well. They took names from Greek mythology as it became clear they were stranded on Earth, but these names don't necessarily match their characters (except for maybe Hera, the BigBad from ''The End of Atlantis''). In particular, Aphrodite is anything but beautiful and flirtatious.
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** PlayedForLaughs with the Krinians Krinian explorers from Atlantis as well. They took names from Greek mythology as it became clear they were stranded on Earth, but these names don't necessarily match their characters (except for maybe Hera, the BigBad from ''The End of Atlantis''). In particular, Aphrodite is anything but beautiful and flirtatious.
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* InventingTheWheel: Allegedly, the first rememberer did this after seeing an ancient clock. That's one (re)discovery that must have spread, since wheels are common even outside the Shelter..
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* InventingTheWheel: Allegedly, the first rememberer did this after seeing an ancient clock. That's one (re)discovery that must have spread, since wheels are common even outside the Shelter..Shelter.
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* InventingTheWheel: Allegedly, the first rememberer did this after seeing an ancient clock. That's one (re)discovery that must have spread, since wheels are common even outside the shelter..
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* InventingTheWheel: Allegedly, the first rememberer did this after seeing an ancient clock. That's one (re)discovery that must have spread, since wheels are common even outside the shelter..Shelter..
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* BatOutOfHell: A dangerous predator which causes some serious problem. Mentioned to be from off-planet.
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* InventingTheWheel: Allegedly, the first rememberer did this after seeing an ancient clock. That's one (re)discovery that must have spread, since wheels are common even outside the shelter..
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* NoodleIncident: One day, River encountered a skinchanger in the forest and barely managed to escape. She refuses to tell more of that.
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* NoodleIncident: One day, River encountered a skinchanger in the forest and barely managed to escape. She refuses to tell say more of that.
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* NoodleIncident: One day, River encountered a skinchanger in the forest and barely managed to escape. She refuses to tell more of that.
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* SpannerInTheWorks: The appearance of Alice, Pashka, Iria and Gai-do led to a huge change of plans for the villains (who, for once, are really clever, they just didn't expect random aliens popping up after centuries of Krina's isolation), not to mention a significant GenreShift.
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* OutOfGenreExperience: It starts as a proper ''Alice'' book, with light-hearted soft sci-fi. Then, from Iria, Pashka and Alice leaving the ''Dnieper'' to [[spoiler:Pashka and Dr. Crack refueling Gai-do]] (around twenty-one chapters and 230 pages), it's practically LowFantasy medieval drama not unlike ''Literature/ASongOfIceAndFire''.
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* FogOfDoom: The remnants of the memory-wipe field on the surface of the planet are visible as a sort of white fog.
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* MadScientist: The initial memory wipe was orchestrated by a scientist who came to believe knowledge was evil.
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* MadScientist: The initial memory wipe was orchestrated by a scientist who came to believe knowledge was evil.people aren't happy because they cannot let go of the past. He decided to make them.
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* AntiClimax: The [[spoiler:war of the poklons and the rememberers]] is a grand event, with LargeHam poklons shown parading towards the city in the first chapters, [[spoiler:the rememberers growing increasingly anxious]], and secret messages being passed [[spoiler:on both sides]]... and then [[spoiler:Gai-do appears and scatters the entire army of Radiculitis]] in the course of a minute.
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* ThinkOfTheChildren: The main accusation against the rememberers is that they kidnap and eat children. It's a HalfTruth, too – they do kidnap them. Of course, it's enough for the AngryMob of the city to hate the rememberers with a passion and [[spoiler:support the poklons' campaign against the Shelter]]. [[spoiler:But that excuse is just for the mob, as Radiculitis is aware of the bigger picture...]]
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* WrongGenreSavvy: Pashka is prone to that. First he keeps making spectacularly wrong guesses about Krina's fate (he says outright that he picks ideas from sci-fi novels), and then, after the landing, he fancies himself an invincible superhero who can proudly walk in the jungle. He promptly stumbles.
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* WrongGenreSavvy: Pashka is prone to that. First he keeps making spectacularly wrong guesses about Krina's fate (he says outright that he picks ideas from sci-fi novels), and then, after the landing, he fancies himself an invincible superhero who can proudly walk in the jungle. He promptly stumbles.stumbles.
* YouAreWhatYouHate: At least two of the really clever and dangerous people [[spoiler:can read and write, which doesn't stop them from being the rememberers' bitter enemies]]. And it makes one wonder how many more of them there are.
* YouAreWhatYouHate: At least two of the really clever and dangerous people [[spoiler:can read and write, which doesn't stop them from being the rememberers' bitter enemies]]. And it makes one wonder how many more of them there are.
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* MadScientist: The initial memory wipe was orchestrated by a scientist who came to believe knowledge was evil.
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The (relatively) civilized country is ruled by Lord Radiculitis, poklons ("poklon" meaning "a deep bow" in Russian), his vassal lords who are constantly at odds with each other, and vkushetses ("vkushets" being a play on words in the original, originating from "zhrets", the word meaning a pagan priest), the Priests of Oblivion. Knowledge and education are forbidden and punishable by memory loss. Only the wisemen can know some things (and even they get regular memory wipes so that they wouldn’t know too much).
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The (relatively) civilized country is ruled by Lord Radiculitis, poklons ("poklon" meaning "a deep bow" in Russian), his vassal lords who are constantly at odds with each other, and vkushetses ("vkushets" being a play on words in the original, originating from "zhrets", the word meaning a pagan priest), priest. A rough English analogy would be using the word "strongar" because a "vicar" is weak), the Priests of Oblivion. Knowledge and education are forbidden and punishable by memory loss. Only the wisemen can know some things (and even they get regular memory wipes so that they wouldn’t know too much).
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* ScavengerWorld: Like with Radiculitis' personal guard using chamber pots for helmet.
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* ScavengerWorld: Like with Radiculitis' personal guard using chamber pots for helmet.helmets.
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* SpySpeak: The rememberers send each other messages in the form of braided grass.* ThemeNaming: The siblings Brook and River.
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* SpySpeak: The rememberers send each other messages in the form of braided grass.grass.
* ThemeNaming: The siblings Brook and River.
* ThemeNaming: The siblings Brook and River.
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* OurDragonsAreDifferent: The way an Earth wizard can throw away a tail, they can lose a head.
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* OurDragonsAreDifferent: The way an a lizard on Earth wizard can throw away a tail, they can lose a head.
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* HamsterWheelPower: Krinians use slave driven ones for ship propulsion.
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* HamsterWheelPower: Rich Krinians use slave driven slave-driven ones for ship propulsion.
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* GodGuise: Gai-Do, once refueled, passes easily enough for a mighty GiantSpaceFleaOutOfNowhere - enough to [[spoiler:scatter a couple of armies]]
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* GodGuise: Gai-Do, Gai-do, once refueled, passes easily enough for a mighty GiantSpaceFleaOutOfNowhere - – enough to [[spoiler:scatter a couple of armies]]armies]].
** When the atani pygmies mistake Iria for their goddess come alive, she quickly makes use of it and demand they free her and her friends and return their things. However, it’s not for long as the pygmies are attacked by Left Mole.
** When the atani pygmies mistake Iria for their goddess come alive, she quickly makes use of it and demand they free her and her friends and return their things. However, it’s not for long as the pygmies are attacked by Left Mole.
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* AmazingTechnicolorPopulation: The Krinians have light-blue skin. At least, they did in the previous book; this one gives no indication of an Earthman (or a Vesterian) looking any different from a local.
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* AmazingTechnicolorPopulation: The Krinians have light-blue skin. At least, they did in the previous book; this one gives no indication of an Earthman (or a Vesterian) looking any different from a local.
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* AmazingTechnicolorPopulation: The Krinians have light-blue skin.
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* AmazingTechnicolorPopulation: The Krinians have light-blue skin. At least, they did in the previous book; this one gives no indication of an Earthman (or a Vesterian) looking any different from a local.
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** Aphrodite still loves to play with dolls.
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** Aphrodite still loves to play with dolls.dolls and hates making an effort for any reason.
* GodGuise: Gai-Do, once refueled, passes easily enough for a mighty GiantSpaceFleaOutOfNowhere - enough to [[spoiler:scatter a couple of armies]]
* HamsterWheelPower: Krinians use slave driven ones for ship propulsion.
* OurDragonsAreDifferent: The way an Earth wizard can throw away a tail, they can lose a head.
* PostPeakOil: Pashka states it must be the reason for Krina's apparent state at first. Iria reminds him altenative fuel sources were plentiful on Krina.
* PostPeakOil: Pashka states it must be the reason for Krina's apparent state at first. Iria reminds him altenative fuel sources were plentiful on Krina.
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* RealityEnsues: Iria is an expert on martial arts, but even that doesn’t help her much if she’s vastly outnumbered by armed men.
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* RealityEnsues: Iria is an expert on martial arts, but even that doesn’t help her much if she’s vastly outnumbered by armed men.men with ranged weapons.
* ScavengerWorld: Like with Radiculitis' personal guard using chamber pots for helmet.
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* ThemeNaming: The siblings Brook and River.
* TokenGoodTeammate: Lady Centipede and her daughter Squirrel are the nicer ones of the Mole family.
* TranslationConvention: Most of the dialogue actually goes on in Krinian. Whenever Alice, Iria and Pashka switch to Russian for the sake of secrecy, it's stated in the narration. The Atani language is also used in some episodes, but the main characters don't know it, and most of it is conveyed via interpreters.
* TokenGoodTeammate: Lady Centipede and her daughter Squirrel are the nicer ones of the Mole family.
* TranslationConvention: Most of the dialogue actually goes on in Krinian. Whenever Alice, Iria and Pashka switch to Russian for the sake of secrecy, it's stated in the narration. The Atani language is also used in some episodes, but the main characters don't know it, and most of it is conveyed via interpreters.
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* SpySpeak: The rememberers send each other messages in the form of braided grass.* ThemeNaming: The siblings Brook and River.
* TokenGoodTeammate: Lady Centipede and her daughter Squirrel are the nicer ones of the Mole family.
* TranslationConvention: Most of the dialogue actually goes on in Krinian. Whenever Alice, Iria and Pashka switch to Russian for the sake of secrecy, it's stated in the narration. The Atani language is also used in some episodes, but the main characters don't know it, and most of it is conveyed via interpreters.
* TokenGoodTeammate: Lady Centipede and her daughter Squirrel are the nicer ones of the Mole family.
* TranslationConvention: Most of the dialogue actually goes on in Krinian. Whenever Alice, Iria and Pashka switch to Russian for the sake of secrecy, it's stated in the narration. The Atani language is also used in some episodes, but the main characters don't know it, and most of it is conveyed via interpreters.
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* ActuallyPrettyFunny: Pashka smiles at the idea of people named Bug and Cockroach having a serious discussion. River quickly shuts him up, saying that whoever thought it funny is already dead.
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The ''Dnipr'', a spaceship commanded by Alice’s old friend Captain Poloskov, is going to a planet called Krina. It used to be a great civilization, but for some reason the contact with it broke off completely two hundred and fifty years ago, leaving Krinian explorers stranded on Earth. The last descendants of the explorers’ group are now due to return home on the ''Dnipr''.
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The ''Dnipr'', ''Dnieper'', a spaceship commanded by Alice’s old friend Captain Poloskov, is going to a planet called Krina. It used to be a great civilization, but for some reason the contact with it broke off completely two hundred and fifty years ago, leaving Krinian explorers stranded on Earth. The last descendants of the explorers’ group are now due to return home on the ''Dnipr''.''Dnieper''.
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* AmazingTechnicolorPopulations: The Krinians have light-blue skin.
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* CultureClash: As Krina had been a highly civilized planet for ''thousands'' of years, at first Alice, Pashka and Iria (even with the children's experience with other medieval worlds) have trouble figuring out what is really going on. It doesn't help that River, the first helpful person they meet, intelligent as she is, can't grasp it that they don't know the most obvious things. Why, ''everyone'' knows how to recognize a rememberer!
