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* {{Deconstruction}}: of a very small, but significant, part of Familiar of Zero fanfictions. Most of them simply take the selected "Familiar" away from his home with nary a by-your-leave. This story shows that there are ''consequences'' to that, ranging from the Little Sisters starting to freak out that their "Daddy" isn't there, to the entire city of Rapture on the verge of total anarchy (since the king, who nearly single-handedly ended the war and took control of the place, was taken away at a very delicate portion of the city's reconstruction). Louise's horror at taking away someone from his family, a thing she hadn't even considered, is palpable.
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* {{Deconstruction}}: of Of a very small, but significant, part of Familiar ''Familiar of Zero fanfictions.Zero'' fanfics. Most of them simply take the selected "Familiar" away from his home with nary a by-your-leave. This story shows that there are ''consequences'' to that, ranging from the Little Sisters starting to freak out that their "Daddy" isn't there, to the entire city of Rapture on the verge of total anarchy (since the king, who nearly single-handedly ended the war and took control of the place, was taken away at a very delicate portion of the city's reconstruction). Louise's horror at taking away someone from his family, a thing she hadn't even considered, is palpable.
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** “[[Film/IronMan Make an impossible machine from a box of scraps]]? [[DiscussedTrope Some of us are living and working in caves, Sinclair, we can't work miracles in there!]]"
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** “[[Film/IronMan “[[Film/IronMan1 Make an impossible machine from a box of scraps]]? [[DiscussedTrope Some of us are living and working in caves, Sinclair, we can't work miracles in there!]]"
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''[[http://forums.spacebattles.com/showthread.php?t=179098 Zero's Shock]]'' is a crossover between ''VideoGame/BioShock'' and ''LightNovel/TheFamiliarOfZero'' written by the same author who is giving us ''Fanfic/ToyHammer''. Simply put; Jack becomes the Familiar of Zero. While the fic is still in its infancy it has a promising start, with Jack and Louise both having a lot of character depth for a SilentProtagonist - a trait that is somewhat retained - and being spot on with canon (barring the domestic abuse - Jack doesn't give her a chance for that), which has earned this fic praise from the reviewers on [[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6556173/1/Zeros_Shock fanfiction.net]].
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''[[http://forums.spacebattles.com/showthread.php?t=179098 Zero's Shock]]'' is a crossover between ''VideoGame/BioShock'' and ''LightNovel/TheFamiliarOfZero'' ''Literature/TheFamiliarOfZero'' written by the same author who is giving us ''Fanfic/ToyHammer''. Simply put; Jack becomes the Familiar of Zero. While the fic is still in its infancy it has a promising start, with Jack and Louise both having a lot of character depth for a SilentProtagonist - a trait that is somewhat retained - and being spot on with canon (barring the domestic abuse - Jack doesn't give her a chance for that), which has earned this fic praise from the reviewers on [[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6556173/1/Zeros_Shock fanfiction.net]].
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* DomesticAbuse: Averted. Louise is more logical and subdued than in the original series because unlike [[LightNovel/TheFamiliarOfZero a certain 16-year-old highschool boy/nerd/otaku]], Jack doesn't make cracks about her bust size or otherwise jump up and down on her {{Berserk Button}}s every five minutes.
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* DomesticAbuse: Averted. Louise is more logical and subdued than in the original series because unlike [[LightNovel/TheFamiliarOfZero [[Literature/TheFamiliarOfZero a certain 16-year-old highschool boy/nerd/otaku]], Jack doesn't make cracks about her bust size or otherwise jump up and down on her {{Berserk Button}}s every five minutes.
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* AllThereInTheManual: Musings on what happens if [[MedievalEuropeanFantasy Halkeginians]] took up arms against [[BioPunk Rapture]], fun little omakes of hypothetical situations (such as [[CoolBigSis Cattleya]], ''ahem'', [[NotWhatItLooksLike 'doing the deed']]) a Delta-themed version of [[ShoutOut Modern]] [[Theatre/ThePiratesOfPenzance Major]] [[VideoGame/MassEffect2 General]], limericks dedicated to Jack, [[ConMan Fontaine]], [[OverprotectiveDad Delta]] and [[SheIsAllGrownUp Eleanor]] (The first is trumpeting Jack's badass. The latter three each a SugarWiki/{{Funny Moment|s}} on their own) are all available on the [[http://forums.spacebattles.com/showthread.php?t=179098 Spacebattles threads]].
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* AllThereInTheManual: Musings on what happens if [[MedievalEuropeanFantasy Halkeginians]] took up arms against [[BioPunk Rapture]], fun little omakes of hypothetical situations (such as [[CoolBigSis Cattleya]], ''ahem'', [[NotWhatItLooksLike 'doing the deed']]) a Delta-themed version of [[ShoutOut Modern]] [[Theatre/ThePiratesOfPenzance Major]] [[VideoGame/MassEffect2 General]], limericks dedicated to Jack, [[ConMan Fontaine]], [[OverprotectiveDad Delta]] Delta and [[SheIsAllGrownUp Eleanor]] (The first is trumpeting Jack's badass. The latter three each a SugarWiki/{{Funny Moment|s}} on their own) are all available on the [[http://forums.spacebattles.com/showthread.php?t=179098 Spacebattles threads]].
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* CurbStompBattle: Enjoy the [[spoiler:bees plasmid]], Guiche.
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* NiceToTheWaiter: Jack to Siesta.
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--> '''Colbert''': And what does [having a wrench] make you?
--> '''Jack''': Jack.
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'''Jack''': Jack.
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'''Jack''': Jack.
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* SceneryGorn: Jack's memories of Rapture.
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* AllThereInTheManual: Musings on what happens if [[MedievalEuropeanFantasy Halkeginians]] took up arms against [[BioPunk Rapture]], fun little omakes of hypothetical situations (such as [[CoolBigSis Cattleya]], ''ahem'', [[NotWhatItLooksLike 'doing the deed']]) a Delta-themed version of [[ShoutOut Modern]] [[Theatre/ThePiratesOfPenzance Major]] [[VideoGame/MassEffect2 General]], limericks dedicated to Jack, [[ConMan Fontaine]], [[OverprotectiveDad Delta]] and [[SheIsAllGrownUp Eleanor]] (The first is trumpeting Jack's badass. The latter three each a CrowningMomentOfFunny on their own) are all available on the [[http://forums.spacebattles.com/showthread.php?t=179098 Spacebattles threads]].
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* AllThereInTheManual: Musings on what happens if [[MedievalEuropeanFantasy Halkeginians]] took up arms against [[BioPunk Rapture]], fun little omakes of hypothetical situations (such as [[CoolBigSis Cattleya]], ''ahem'', [[NotWhatItLooksLike 'doing the deed']]) a Delta-themed version of [[ShoutOut Modern]] [[Theatre/ThePiratesOfPenzance Major]] [[VideoGame/MassEffect2 General]], limericks dedicated to Jack, [[ConMan Fontaine]], [[OverprotectiveDad Delta]] and [[SheIsAllGrownUp Eleanor]] (The first is trumpeting Jack's badass. The latter three each a CrowningMomentOfFunny SugarWiki/{{Funny Moment|s}} on their own) are all available on the [[http://forums.spacebattles.com/showthread.php?t=179098 Spacebattles threads]].
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Sadly, the story is now a DeadFic as the last update was April 2013 and the author is doing fanfics.
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Sadly, the story is now a DeadFic as the last update was April 2013 and the author is doing has stopped writing fanfics.
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** Items in the vault include [[spoiler: a [[Franchise/{{Halo}} plasma grenade]] and a [[Franchise/{{Pokemon}} Pokeball]]. That gets used on Foquet.]]
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** Items in the vault include [[spoiler: a [[Franchise/{{Halo}} plasma grenade]] and a [[Franchise/{{Pokemon}} Pokeball]]. That gets used on Foquet.Fouquet.]]
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** It also shows that, contrary to other stories where the Familiar's home is hinted at, but not actually shown, Jack's friends and co-workers are actively shown experimenting so they can copy the teleport he used to get him back home.
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* [[RaisedByWolves Raised In Rapture]]: Jack doesn't understand the concept of "dueling", and attempts to brain Guiche with a wrench as soon as the challenge has been made.
** He also thinks that alcohol is to be drunk by chugging down all of it straight from the bottle. He's puzzled when Siesta tells him that that's not how he's supposed to do it.
*** Which becomes even funnier when you go back a few paragraphs and read about the "[[EroticEating other method]]" that [[CovertPervert she has been thinking of]].
** He also thinks that alcohol is to be drunk by chugging down all of it straight from the bottle. He's puzzled when Siesta tells him that that's not how he's supposed to do it.
*** Which becomes even funnier when you go back a few paragraphs and read about the "[[EroticEating other method]]" that [[CovertPervert she has been thinking of]].
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** Jack doesn't understand the concept of "dueling", and attempts to brain Guiche with a wrench as soon as the challenge has been made.
** He also thinks that alcohol is to be drunk by chugging down all of it straight from the bottle. He's puzzled when Siesta tells him that that's not how he's supposed to doit.
***it. Which becomes even funnier when you go back a few paragraphs and read about the "[[EroticEating other method]]" that [[CovertPervert she has been thinking of]].
** Jack doesn't understand the concept of "dueling", and attempts to brain Guiche with a wrench as soon as the challenge has been made.
** He also thinks that alcohol is to be drunk by chugging down all of it straight from the bottle. He's puzzled when Siesta tells him that that's not how he's supposed to do
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** And then there's the fact that he doesn't make cracks (or talk much) ''period.''
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** Though this could also just be lampshading the general ridiculousness of the concept of a flying continent, and not specifically towards ''VideoGame/BioShockInfinite''.
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** Though this could also just be lampshading the general ridiculousness of the concept of a flying continent, AKA a large landmass suspended in mid-air with no notable means of staying up there, and not specifically towards ''VideoGame/BioShockInfinite''.
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* AllThereInTheManual: Musings on what happens if [[MedievalEuropeanFantasy Halkeginians]] took up arms against [[BioPunk Rapture]], fun little omakes of hypothetical situations (such as [[CoolBigSis Cattleya]], ''ahem'', [[NotWhatItLooksLike 'doing the deed']]) a Delta-themed version of [[ShoutOut Modern]] [[ThePiratesOfPenzance Major]] [[VideoGame/MassEffect2 General]], limericks dedicated to Jack, [[ConMan Fontaine]], [[OverprotectiveDad Delta]] and [[SheIsAllGrownUp Eleanor]] (The first is trumpeting Jack's badass. The latter three each a CrowningMomentOfFunny on their own) are all available on the [[http://forums.spacebattles.com/showthread.php?t=179098 Spacebattles threads]].
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* AllThereInTheManual: Musings on what happens if [[MedievalEuropeanFantasy Halkeginians]] took up arms against [[BioPunk Rapture]], fun little omakes of hypothetical situations (such as [[CoolBigSis Cattleya]], ''ahem'', [[NotWhatItLooksLike 'doing the deed']]) a Delta-themed version of [[ShoutOut Modern]] [[ThePiratesOfPenzance [[Theatre/ThePiratesOfPenzance Major]] [[VideoGame/MassEffect2 General]], limericks dedicated to Jack, [[ConMan Fontaine]], [[OverprotectiveDad Delta]] and [[SheIsAllGrownUp Eleanor]] (The first is trumpeting Jack's badass. The latter three each a CrowningMomentOfFunny on their own) are all available on the [[http://forums.spacebattles.com/showthread.php?t=179098 Spacebattles threads]].
