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** "[[{{Diablo}} The Countess, she who once bathed in the blood of a hundred virgins.]]"
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** "[[{{Diablo}} "[[VideoGame/{{Diablo}} The Countess, she who once bathed in the blood of a hundred virgins.]]"
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** The spoilered character has a personality that's very similar to Lilarcor of {{Baldur's Gate}} II.
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** The spoilered character has a personality that's very similar to Lilarcor of {{Baldur's Gate}} II.[[BaldursGate Baldur's Gate II]].
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** The difference with [[spoiler: Henrietta]] is that her ruthlessness is with people ''[[DeadlyDecadentCourt in the game]]'', while Karin was content enough to let [[CompleteMonster Mott]] act scot free as long it suited her goals. She was not amused by this.
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** The difference with [[spoiler: Henrietta]] is that her ruthlessness is with people ''[[DeadlyDecadentCourt in the game]]'', while Karin was content enough to let [[CompleteMonster Mott]] Mott act scot free as long it suited her goals. She was not amused by this.
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** Another for [[CompleteMonster Mott]]: [[spoiler: [[Literature/NineteenEightyFour Using rats to torture people? Where have we seen that before]]?]]
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** Another for [[CompleteMonster Mott]]: Mott: [[spoiler: [[Literature/NineteenEightyFour Using rats to torture people? Where have we seen that before]]?]]
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* ThrowEmToTheWolves: [[spoiler: Both Inverted and played straight. Louise leaves Mott to the mercy of Alex, intending for her familiar to kill him in a duel... but Alex had been fully intent on killing the [[CompleteMonster guy]] anyway, and might have done so even without prompt. And Louise definitely didn't avoid [[MyGodWhatHaveIDone getting her hands dirty]] in the incident, at least how she sees it.]]
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* ThrowEmToTheWolves: [[spoiler: Both Inverted and played straight. Louise leaves Mott to the mercy of Alex, intending for her familiar to kill him in a duel... but Alex had been fully intent on killing the [[CompleteMonster guy]] guy anyway, and might have done so even without prompt. And Louise definitely didn't avoid [[MyGodWhatHaveIDone getting her hands dirty]] in the incident, at least how she sees it.]]
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* AntiHero: Alex, obviously. He's a less a good guy and more an independent, sapient killing machine that happens to hang out with the good guys, and lacks a firm grasp of that whole 'ethics' thing.
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* AntiHero: Alex, obviously. He's a less a good guy and more an independent, sapient killing machine that happens to hang out with the good guys, and lacks a firm grasp of that whole 'ethics' thing.
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->'''Louise:''' "What makes you think my familiar is something other than a simple human commoner?"
->'''Kirche:''' "When he put his hands on your shoulders, I saw his face change."
->'''Louise:''' "Who wouldn't want to make faces at a shameless woman like you?"
->'''Kirche:''' "This is serious, Vallière. You remember that sound it made? I know you heard it because you looked up. [[spoiler:Your familiar's face changed. It started wearing your face.]]"
->'''Kirche:''' "When he put his hands on your shoulders, I saw his face change."
->'''Louise:''' "Who wouldn't want to make faces at a shameless woman like you?"
->'''Kirche:''' "This is serious, Vallière. You remember that sound it made? I know you heard it because you looked up. [[spoiler:Your familiar's face changed. It started wearing your face.]]"
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->'''Louise:''' "What What makes you think my familiar is something other than a simple human commoner?"
->'''Kirche:''' "Whencommoner?\\
'''Kirche:''' When he put his hands on your shoulders, I saw his face change."
->'''Louise:''' "Who\\
'''Louise:''' Who wouldn't want to make faces at a shameless woman likeyou?"
->'''Kirche:''' "Thisyou?\\
'''Kirche:''' This is serious, Vallière. You remember that sound it made? I know you heard it because you looked up. [[spoiler:Your familiar's face changed. It started wearing your face.]]"
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->'''Kirche:''' "When
'''Kirche:''' When he put his hands on your shoulders, I saw his face change.
->'''Louise:''' "Who
'''Louise:''' Who wouldn't want to make faces at a shameless woman like
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'''Kirche:''' This is serious, Vallière. You remember that sound it made? I know you heard it because you looked up. [[spoiler:Your familiar's face changed. It started wearing your face.
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Started in the wake of Fanfic/TheHillOfSwords on the [=SpaceBattles=] Fanfiction Forum, ''[[http://forums.spacebattles.com/showthread.php?t=197517 Unfamiliar]]'', by Cpl_Facehugger, is a crossover between ''LightNovel/ZeroNoTsukaima'' and ''VideoGame/{{Prototype}}'', where Louise summons Alex. It's actually less unfair than the premise sounds (no [[RocksFallEveryoneDies Mercer Attacks Everyone Dies]], for example).
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Started in the wake of Fanfic/TheHillOfSwords ''Fanfic/TheHillOfSwords'' on the [=SpaceBattles=] Fanfiction Forum, ''[[http://forums.spacebattles.com/showthread.php?t=197517 Unfamiliar]]'', by Cpl_Facehugger, is a crossover between ''LightNovel/ZeroNoTsukaima'' and ''VideoGame/{{Prototype}}'', where Louise summons Alex. It's actually less unfair than the premise sounds (no [[RocksFallEveryoneDies Mercer Attacks Everyone Dies]], for example).
See ''VideoGame/{{Prototype}}'' and ''LightNovel/ZeroNoTsukaima'' for the tropes of those respective universes.
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See ''VideoGame/{{Prototype}}'' and ''LightNovel/ZeroNoTsukaima'' for the tropes of those respective universes.
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!!This fanfic contains
* TwoDSpace:
-->''"One thing to keep in mind," Mother said, even as she dodged once more. "Is that mage battles take place in three dimensions."''
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--> "One thing to keep in mind," Mother said, even as she dodged once more. "Is that mage battles take place in three dimensions."
--> "One thing to keep in mind," Mother said, even as she dodged once more. "Is that mage battles take place in three dimensions."
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* "JustFollowingOrders doesn't cut it." Admitted by the guy who did the following, no less.
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** [[spoiler: The D-Code Super Soldier being called a ''Hunter'' of God.]]
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** [[spoiler: The D-Code Super Soldier being called a ''Hunter'' of God. For those of you joining us from the ''LightNovel/ZeroNoTsukaima'' side, D-Codes were created to kill Hunters.]]
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* OffWithHisHead: [[spoiler:"Alex, be a dear and remove Lord Mott's head from his shoulders."]]
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* OffWithHisHead: [[spoiler:"Alex, [[spoiler: "Alex, be a dear and remove Lord Mott's head from his shoulders."]]"]]
* OhCrap: Siesta's [[spoiler: "You're ZEUS. '''You're ZEUS.'''" after Alex does his face-transformation thing.]]
* OhCrap: Siesta's [[spoiler: "You're ZEUS. '''You're ZEUS.'''" after Alex does his face-transformation thing.]]
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wick cleaning following TRS rename
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* GonnaNeedMoreTrope: In response to [[spoiler: Foquet animating part of a mountain]].
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* GonnaNeedMoreTrope: GonnaNeedMoreX: In response to [[spoiler: Foquet animating part of a mountain]].
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* {{Deadfic}}: While there have been hints to the contrary, the last story update was July 2011.
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* {{Deadfic}}: While there have been hints to the contrary, the last story update was July 2011.August 2011.
** Apparently, the next update is/was supposed to contain a cluster of three chapters, 13-15, which would take a considerable time to write. But a year-plus-long wait is rather discouraging...
** Apparently, the next update is/was supposed to contain a cluster of three chapters, 13-15, which would take a considerable time to write. But a year-plus-long wait is rather discouraging...
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--> '''Alex''': "I survived the heat of a newborn sun! I survived a building collapsing on me! I've survived things you can't even ''imagine''! If that's your best shot, you better start running!"
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* ComedicSociopathy: [[spoiler: Dark Derflinger.]]
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* ComedicSociopathy: [[spoiler: Dark [[spoiler:Dark Derflinger.]]
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** Lord Mott's discussion about [[spoiler:how he makes his slaves wear their collars is right out of Silus' description of the same to Carrie Boyd in ''VideoGame/FalloutNewVegas''.]]
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** Lord Mott's discussion about [[spoiler:how he makes his slaves wear their collars collars]] is right out of Silus' description of the same to Carrie Boyd in ''VideoGame/FalloutNewVegas''.]]
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* [[ABoyAndHisX A Girl and Her Humanoid Killing Machine]]
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* [[ABoyAndHisX A Girl and Her Humanoid Killing Machine]]"JustFollowingOrders doesn't cut it." Admitted by the guy who did the following, no less.
* AntiHero: Alex, obviously. He's a less a good guy and more an independent, sapient killing machine that happens to hang out with the good guys, and lacks a firm grasp of that whole 'ethics' thing.
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* AntiHero: Alex, obviously. He's a less a good guy and more an independent, sapient killing machine that happens to hang out with the good guys, and lacks a firm grasp of that whole 'ethics' thing.
* {{Deadfic}}: While there have been hints to the contrary, the last story update was July 2011.
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* [[ABoyAndHisX A Girl and Her Humanoid Killing Machine]]
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* "JustFollowingOrders doesn't cut it." Admitted by the guy who did the following, no less.
* TheManBehindTheMan: [[spoiler: Henrietta]] is the real power behind the throne.
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* TheManBehindTheMan: [[spoiler: Henrietta]] is the real power behind the throne.
* MoralityPet: [[spoiler:Louise takes Dana's place in this regard. Alex's memories of Dana sometimes keep him honest...ish.]]
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* MoralityPet: [[spoiler:Louise takes Dana's place in this regard. Alex's memories of Dana sometimes keep him honest...ish.]]
* MyFriendsAndZoidberg:
--> "Excellent. A full quad of experienced mages," Osmond had an unsettling twinkle in his eye, "as well as [[GameBreaker Miss Valièrre and her familiar]]."
--> "Excellent. A full quad of experienced mages," Osmond had an unsettling twinkle in his eye, "as well as [[GameBreaker Miss Valièrre and her familiar]]."
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* MyFriendsAndZoidberg:
--> "Excellent. A full quad of experienced mages," Osmond had an unsettling twinkle in his eye, "as well as [[GameBreaker Miss Valièrre and her familiar]]."
--> "Excellent. A full quad of experienced mages," Osmond had an unsettling twinkle in his eye, "as well as [[GameBreaker Miss Valièrre and her familiar]]."
* ObfuscatingStupidity: [[spoiler: Headmaster Osmond]].
* ObliviousGuiltSlinging: Louise to Henrietta.
* OffWithHisHead: [[spoiler:"Alex, be a dear and remove Lord Mott's head from his shoulders."]]
* ObliviousGuiltSlinging: Louise to Henrietta.
* OffWithHisHead: [[spoiler:"Alex, be a dear and remove Lord Mott's head from his shoulders."]]
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* ObliviousGuiltSlinging: Louise to Henrietta.
* ObfuscatingStupidity: [[spoiler: Headmaster Osmond]].
* OffWithHisHead: [[spoiler:"Alex, be a dear and remove Lord Mott's head from his shoulders."]]
* ObfuscatingStupidity: [[spoiler: Headmaster Osmond]].
* OffWithHisHead: [[spoiler:"Alex, be a dear and remove Lord Mott's head from his shoulders."]]
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** "[[{{Warhammer 40000}} Exterminatus?]] We're looking for effects for spells and you just leap to 'kill everything?'"
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** "[[{{Warhammer "[[TabletopGame/{{Warhammer 40000}} Exterminatus?]] We're looking for effects for spells and you just leap to 'kill everything?'"
* {{Squee}}: Alex, [[spoiler: when he finds the Blackwatch armory.]]
* StealthHiBye: Done to Colbert, Kirche, and Karin by Alex.
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* {{Squee}}: Alex, [[spoiler: when he finds the Blackwatch armory.]]
* StealthHiBye: Done to Colbert, Kirche, and Karin by Alex.
* StealthHiBye: Done to Colbert, Kirche, and Karin by Alex.
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* TrainingFromHell: Alluded to.
--> '''Cattleya''': Almost too easy. Except for the dying. That sounds more like Mother's training regimen than any teacher I've had.
--> '''Cattleya''': Almost too easy. Except for the dying. That sounds more like Mother's training regimen than any teacher I've had.
* TrainingFromHell: Alluded to.
--> '''Cattleya''': Almost too easy. Except for the dying. That sounds more like Mother's training regimen than any teacher I've had.
--> '''Cattleya''': Almost too easy. Except for the dying. That sounds more like Mother's training regimen than any teacher I've had.
* VoiceOfTheLegion: Alex does this at least twice. One of those being [[spoiler: reciting Blackwatch's BadassCreed.]]
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* VoiceOfTheLegion: Alex does this at least twice. One of those being [[spoiler: reciting Blackwatch's BadassCreed.]]
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** Lord Mott's discussion about [[spoiler:how he makes his slaves wear their collars is right out of Silus' description of the same to Carrie Boyd in ''FalloutNewVegas''.]]
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** Lord Mott's discussion about [[spoiler:how he makes his slaves wear their collars is right out of Silus' description of the same to Carrie Boyd in ''FalloutNewVegas''.''VideoGame/FalloutNewVegas''.]]
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* KickTheSonOfABitch: Absolutely no one misses [[spoiler:Mott]]. Not his servants, his political allies, NO ONE.
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* PayEvilUntoEvil: No one in Louise's main group thinks Mott's fate was undeserved.
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* PayEvilUntoEvil: Absolutely no one misses [[spoiler:Mott]]. No one in Louise's main group thinks Mott's fate was undeserved.group, of course... but also not his servants, his political allies, NO ONE.
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* UncannyValley: Karin's reaction to Tabitha.
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* UncannyValley: InUniverse, Karin's reaction to Tabitha.
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* KickATheSonOfABitch: Absolutely no one misses [[spoiler:Mott]]. Not his servants, his political allies, NO ONE.
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* LadyAndKnight: Louise and Alex, of course.
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* StuffBlowingUp: Alex likes explosions. He likes them A LOT. He perks up immediately when they are brought up.
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* ItAmusedMe: Alex has ''just'' enough empathy and social skills to know that [[MurderIsTheBestSolution violence doesn't always immediately solve a problem]] so he sometimes goes for this instead.
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* MurderIsTheBestSolution: No, it isn't and Alex at least tries not to immediately start killing people.
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-> ''"I've been called a killer, a terrorist, a monster. I am all these things."''
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->'''Kirche:''' "When he put his hands on your shoulders, I saw his face change."
->'''Louise:''' "Who wouldn't want to make faces at a
->'''Kirche:''' "This is serious, Vallière. You remember that sound it made? I
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Started in the wake of [[Fanfic/TheHillOfSwords The Hill of Swords]] on the [=SpaceBattles=] Fanfiction Forum, ''[[http://forums.spacebattles.com/showthread.php?t=197517 Unfamiliar]]'', by Cpl_Facehugger, is a crossover between ''LightNovel/ZeroNoTsukaima'' and ''VideoGame/{{Prototype}}'', where Louise summons Alex. It's actually less unfair than the premise sounds (no [[RocksFallEveryoneDies Mercer Attacks Everyone Dies]], for example).
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Started in the wake of [[Fanfic/TheHillOfSwords The Hill of Swords]] Fanfic/TheHillOfSwords on the [=SpaceBattles=] Fanfiction Forum, ''[[http://forums.spacebattles.com/showthread.php?t=197517 Unfamiliar]]'', by Cpl_Facehugger, is a crossover between ''LightNovel/ZeroNoTsukaima'' and ''VideoGame/{{Prototype}}'', where Louise summons Alex. It's actually less unfair than the premise sounds (no [[RocksFallEveryoneDies Mercer Attacks Everyone Dies]], for example).
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** Another for [[CompleteMonster Mott]]: [[spoiler: [[NineteenEightyFour Using rats to torture people? Where have we seen that before]]?]]
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---> '''Henrietta''': "Then, I will no longer have to hide in the shadows and sign minor reforms in her name. When that day comes, you will have two options. You can support me and secure the Vallière family's future... Or you can obstruct me, and I will grind you to dust underneath my heel."
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---> '''Henrietta''': "Then, I will no longer have to hide in the shadows and sign minor reforms in her name. When that day comes, you will have two options. You can support me and secure the Vallière family's future... Or you can obstruct me, and I will grind you to dust underneath my heel." "
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** And just like the [[{{Comicbook/Doom}} Doomguy]], [[spoiler: he ditches the Javelin when he stumbles upon a stocked Blackwatch base, complete with helicopter gunship]].
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*** If by a hard time, you mean walking it off in a few seconds and replying that he "survived the heat of a newborn sun", sure.
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* DatingCatwoman: Jean Colbert and [[spoiler: Longueville/Foquet]]. Mainly because Colbert is such an [[SingleWomanSeeksGoodMan unbeliavable nice, cuddling considerate guy]]... [[RetiredBadass who is]] [[EatingTheEyeCandy very well]] packed that [[spoiler: [[BrokenBird Foquet had]] become very possesive of him and [[DevotedToYou him]] [[FlirtingUnderFire of]] [[HeartbrokenBadass her]] ]].
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* DatingCatwoman: Jean Colbert and [[spoiler: Longueville/Foquet]]. Mainly because Colbert is such an [[SingleWomanSeeksGoodMan unbeliavable nice, cuddling considerate guy]]... [[RetiredBadass who is]] [[EatingTheEyeCandy very well]] packed that [[spoiler: [[BrokenBird Foquet had]] become very possesive of him and [[DevotedToYou him]] [[FlirtingUnderFire of]] [[HeartbrokenBadass her]] ]].
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--> '''Osmond''': What you failed to realize is that I'm an intelligent, wise, and experienced dirty old man who can tell when a woman is trying to exploit him for her own ends.
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--> '''Osmond''': What you failed to realize is that I'm an intelligent, wise, and experienced dirty old man who can tell when a woman is trying to exploit him for her own ends.
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--> "Should've brought the chopper," Mercer muttered, barely able to hear his own voice over the wind rushing all around him as he glided towards the enemy. "No, it's too obvious I said. I won't run into anything I can't kill myself I said. I should've known Murphy would screw with me."
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--> "Should've brought the chopper," Mercer muttered, barely able to hear his own voice over the wind rushing all around him as he glided towards the enemy. "No, it's too obvious I said. I won't run into anything I can't kill myself I said. I should've known Murphy would screw with me." "
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* HorribleJudgeOfCharacter: [[spoiler: Alex about Wardes]], not helped by the latter being a smooth operator.
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* IronLady: [[spoiler:Henrietta]]. Karin of the "Heavy Wind" is one of the strongest and most feared warriors in the land, her name told in awed whispers and her mere presence making even [[RetiredBadass Colbert]] sweat in fright. When she confronts [[spoiler:Henrietta]] thinking she was [[BerserkButton using her daughter]] as blackmail material, she not [[FascinatingEyebrow only was]] unamused, but completely derailed her opinion and called [[TheReasonYouSuckSpeech out her nonsense]] while drinking tea.
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* IronLady: [[spoiler:Henrietta]]. Karin of the "Heavy Wind" is one of the strongest and most feared warriors in the land, her name told in awed whispers and her mere presence making even [[RetiredBadass Colbert]] sweat in fright. When she confronts [[spoiler:Henrietta]] thinking she was [[BerserkButton using her daughter]] as blackmail material, she not [[FascinatingEyebrow only was]] unamused, but completely derailed her opinion and called [[TheReasonYouSuckSpeech out her nonsense]] while drinking tea.
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* LackOfEmpathy: Probably the strongest thematic in the story. Just like in the original work, the Lack of Empathy is what can and did create some of the greatest brutalities in the world. And this goes not only for obvious monsters like Mott and the King of Albion, it goes for even the main and secondary characters: Louise and Karin's view of commoners, Siesta's view of nobles, and Mercer's view on humans in general. As stated by Mercer;
-->''You can insult them, hate them, kill them, whatever, but you acknowledge them as "people who can think and feel."''.
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* LackOfEmpathy: Probably the strongest thematic in the story. Just like in the original work, the Lack of Empathy is what can and did create some of the greatest brutalities in the world. And this goes not only for obvious monsters like Mott and the King of Albion, it goes for even the main and secondary characters: Louise and Karin's view of commoners, Siesta's view of nobles, and Mercer's view on humans in general. As stated by Mercer;
Mercer;
-->''You can insult them, hate them, kill them, whatever, but you acknowledge them as "people who can think and feel."''.
-->''You can insult them, hate them, kill them, whatever, but you acknowledge them as "people who can think and feel."''.
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* MamaBear: Deconstructed. Karin loves her daughters very much and wants to protect them above all else... so she ended pushing each one [[TrainingFromHell beyond their breaking point]] and ''refused'' to even smile in pride of their accomplishments to make them strong. This has left Louise with severe emotional problems and [[FriendToAllLivingThings Cattleya's]] openly questioning if she even cares.
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* MamaBear: Deconstructed. Karin loves her daughters very much and wants to protect them above all else... so she ended pushing each one [[TrainingFromHell beyond their breaking point]] and ''refused'' to even smile in pride of their accomplishments to make them strong. This has left Louise with severe emotional problems and [[FriendToAllLivingThings Cattleya's]] openly questioning if she even cares.
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--> Though [[spoiler: Wardes]]'d have to make sure that damn sword never met Karin. Because he just knew it would start teasing him about having a teacher complex, and how Louise was clearly just a stand in for his mentor, despite that being just as foolish as the idea that he somehow liked undeveloped girls.
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--> Though [[spoiler: Wardes]]'d have to make sure that damn sword never met Karin. Because he just knew it would start teasing him about having a teacher complex, and how Louise was clearly just a stand in for his mentor, despite that being just as foolish as the idea that he somehow liked undeveloped girls.
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* MoralityPet: [[spoiler:Louise takes Dana's place in this regard. Alex's memories of Dana sometimes keep him honest...ish.]]
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** Brutally mocked by [[spoiler: Henrietta]] to Karin, stating simply that there is no excuse for ''knowing'' what Lord Mott did and still protect him to advance [[ForGreatJustice her schedule]].
---> ''[[TheReasonYouSuckSpeech Your daughter seems to have the compassion for my people that you yourself lack. She, at least, had the proper horrified reaction to meeting a man like Mott, as opposed to accepting him as a... What did you call it, a “necessary evil?“]]''
---> ''[[TheReasonYouSuckSpeech Your daughter seems to have the compassion for my people that you yourself lack. She, at least, had the proper horrified reaction to meeting a man like Mott, as opposed to accepting him as a... What did you call it, a “necessary evil?“]]''
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** Brutally mocked by [[spoiler: Henrietta]] to Karin, stating simply that there is no excuse for ''knowing'' what Lord Mott did and still protect him to advance [[ForGreatJustice her schedule]].
schedule]].
---> ''[[TheReasonYouSuckSpeech Your daughter seems to have the compassion for my people that you yourself lack. She, at least, had the proper horrified reaction to meeting a man like Mott, as opposed to accepting him as a... What did you call it, a “necessaryevil?“]]'' evil?“]]''
---> ''[[TheReasonYouSuckSpeech Your daughter seems to have the compassion for my people that you yourself lack. She, at least, had the proper horrified reaction to meeting a man like Mott, as opposed to accepting him as a... What did you call it, a “necessary
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** He also doesn't see anything wrong with [[spoiler: reassuring Louise with a hand on the shoulder after she commands him to kill Mott... while the hand was still a claw, covered in gore, and he was feeding on Mott's severed head with his free hand.]] Granted, he doesn't understand human behavior, but what's commonplace to him is often Nightmare Fuel.
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** He also doesn't see anything wrong with [[spoiler: reassuring Louise with a hand on the shoulder after she commands him to kill Mott... while the hand was still a claw, covered in gore, and he was feeding on Mott's severed head with his free hand.]] Granted, he doesn't understand human behavior, but what's commonplace to him is often Nightmare Fuel.
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The shock of that was almost enough to give even Karin pause. The very notion was stunning, like having a battalion of mage-knights wiped out by a farmer's militia.
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The shock of that was almost enough to give even Karin pause. The very notion was stunning, like having a battalion of mage-knights wiped out by a farmer's militia.
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* PrecisionFStrike: Provided by Siesta.
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* PrecisionFStrike: Provided by Siesta.
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* RagnarokProofing: Justified for the [[spoiler:six thousand-year-old Blackwatch base]] by the preservation spells cast on it long ago and [[spoiler:the cult of Blackwatch descendants maintaining the place.]]
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* RagnarokProofing: Justified for the [[spoiler:six thousand-year-old Blackwatch base]] by the preservation spells cast on it long ago and [[spoiler:the cult of Blackwatch descendants maintaining the place.]] ]]
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** "[[FriedrichNietzsche Gaze not too long at the abyss]] [[HeWhoFightsMonsters lest the abyss gaze back at you]]."
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** "[[FriedrichNietzsche "[[Creator/FriedrichNietzsche Gaze not too long at the abyss]] [[HeWhoFightsMonsters lest the abyss gaze back at you]]."
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** [[spoiler: Henrietta]] and Karin's conversation in chapter 9 reminds some people of Wrex and Uvenk's talk in ''{{Mass Effect 2}}''. Most especially ''"I'll drag Tristain into the future whether you like it or not."''
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** [[spoiler: Henrietta]] and Karin's conversation in chapter 9 reminds some people of Wrex and Uvenk's talk in ''{{Mass Effect 2}}''.''MassEffect2''. Most especially ''"I'll drag Tristain into the future whether you like it or not."''
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* StrawMisogynist: Averted. While a lot of villains may look like this (Mott, the King of Albion, and [[spoiler:Wardes]]), it immediately shows that they are horrible people to ''anybody'' [[LackOfEmpathy weaker than them]] and ready to exploit them for their own end and pleasure. What the King did to [[{{Room 101}} his prisoner]] [[NightmareFuel must be read to be believed]].
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* StrawMisogynist: Averted. While a lot of villains may look like this (Mott, the King of Albion, and [[spoiler:Wardes]]), it immediately shows that they are horrible people to ''anybody'' [[LackOfEmpathy weaker than them]] and ready to exploit them for their own end and pleasure. What the King did to [[{{Room 101}} his prisoner]] [[NightmareFuel must be read to be believed]].
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* TrainingFromHell: Alluded to.
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* TrainingFromHell: Alluded to.
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* {{Two-D Space}}:
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* WhenAllYouHaveIsAHammer:
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--> "Wait. Wait. Dispel. That's what that brat and her pet monster were researching. Dispel. But that's a '''void''' spell. Oh that is ''bullshit''."
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--> "Wait. Wait. Dispel. That's what that brat and her pet monster were researching. Dispel. But that's a '''void''' spell. Oh that is ''bullshit''." "
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* Deadfic: While there have been hints to the contrary, the last story update was 10 months ago as of this edit.
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* Deadfic: {{Deadfic}}: While there have been hints to the contrary, the last story update was 10 months ago as of this edit.July 2011.
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* CurbStompBattle: [[spoiler: Guiche, Montmorency, Kirche, and Tabitha all gang up on Mercer. Mercer takes them out less than in a minute.]]
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* CurbStompBattle: [[spoiler: Guiche, Montmorency, Kirche, and Tabitha all gang up on Mercer. Mercer takes them out in less than in a minute.]]
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* CurbStompBattle: [[spoiler: Guiche, Montmorency, Kirche, and Tabatha all gang up on Mercer. Mercer takes them out less than in a minute.]]
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* CurbStompBattle: [[spoiler: Guiche, Montmorency, Kirche, and Tabatha Tabitha all gang up on Mercer. Mercer takes them out less than in a minute.]]
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-> ''“I've been called a killer, a terrorist, a monster. I am all these things.”''
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-> ''“I've ''"I've been called a killer, a terrorist, a monster. I am all these things.”''
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--->''Allow me to promise you this, Karin: If you cross me, I will break you. I will use your family as an example of those who oppose me. There are but two options. You can join the tsunami or you can be crushed underneath it. I'll drag Tristain into the future whether you like it or not.” ''
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--> '''Alex''': I tear your arms off and use them as clubs to beat down the man next to you. By then the arms are getting pretty bruised and tender, so I simply tear the next man's spine out. Now, a spine is a useless weapon, no matter what literature would tell you. So from there, I start gutting your men like fish and feasting upon their delicious flesh. Perhaps I could even skip the gutting and start when you're alive.” Mercer replied. “Either way, I proceed on to the rest of your gang and kill them too.
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--> '''Alex''': I "I tear your arms off and use them as clubs to beat down the man next to you. By then the arms are getting pretty bruised and tender, so I simply tear the next man's spine out. Now, a spine is a useless weapon, no matter what literature would tell you. So from there, I start gutting your men like fish and feasting upon their delicious flesh. Perhaps I could even skip the gutting and start when you're alive.” " Mercer replied. “Either "Either way, I proceed on to the rest of your gang and kill them too."
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--> '''Alex''': I survived the heat of a newborn sun! I survived a building collapsing on me! I've survived things you can't even ''imagine''! If that's your best shot, you better start running!
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--> '''Alex''': I "I survived the heat of a newborn sun! I survived a building collapsing on me! I've survived things you can't even ''imagine''! If that's your best shot, you better start running!running!"
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---> '''Alex''': "Individuals can't win wars where I'm from. The wars are too big for that,” Mercer leaned in, giving her a cold grin. “[[OneManArmy Unless that individual is me.]]”
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---> '''Alex''': "Individuals can't win wars where I'm from. The wars are too big for that,” that," Mercer leaned in, giving her a cold grin. “[[OneManArmy "[[OneManArmy Unless that individual is me.]]”]]"
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---> '''Karin''': “Nobles have always policed themselves. Some abuses are the price we pay for the freedoms we cherish.”
---> '''Henrietta''': “That must change. Justice is the word of law, not the perverse whimsy of men like Lord Mott. And change it will. My mother will not be queen forever.
---> '''Henrietta''': “Then, I will no longer have to hide in the shadows and sign minor reforms in her name. When that day comes, you will have two options. You can support me and secure the Vallière family's future... Or you can obstruct me, and I will grind you to dust underneath my heel.”
---> '''Henrietta''': “That must change. Justice is the word of law, not the perverse whimsy of men like Lord Mott. And change it will. My mother will not be queen forever.
---> '''Henrietta''': “Then, I will no longer have to hide in the shadows and sign minor reforms in her name. When that day comes, you will have two options. You can support me and secure the Vallière family's future... Or you can obstruct me, and I will grind you to dust underneath my heel.”
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---> '''Karin''': “Nobles "Nobles have always policed themselves. Some abuses are the price we pay for the freedoms we cherish.”
"
---> '''Henrietta''':“That "That must change. Justice is the word of law, not the perverse whimsy of men like Lord Mott. And change it will. My mother will not be queen forever.
---> '''Henrietta''':“Then, "Then, I will no longer have to hide in the shadows and sign minor reforms in her name. When that day comes, you will have two options. You can support me and secure the Vallière family's future... Or you can obstruct me, and I will grind you to dust underneath my heel.” "
---> '''Henrietta''':
---> '''Henrietta''':
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* BreadEggsMilkSquick: “No soreness? No nausea? No [[spoiler:urge to infect everything with an unstoppable zombie plague?”]]
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* BreadEggsMilkSquick: “No "No soreness? No nausea? No [[spoiler:urge to infect everything with an unstoppable zombie plague?”]]plague]]?"
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* EvenEvilHasLovedOnes: "But, see, even [[SociopathicSoldier psychotic soldiers]] and [[MadScientist amoral scientists]] have families and people they care about. So I get it from both ends. Seeing them kill or experiment on innocent people, but also seeing that they're a husband, father, or son.”
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* EvenEvilHasLovedOnes: "But, see, even [[SociopathicSoldier psychotic soldiers]] and [[MadScientist amoral scientists]] have families and people they care about. So I get it from both ends. Seeing them kill or experiment on innocent people, but also seeing that they're a husband, father, or son.”"
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--> “Should've brought the chopper,” Mercer muttered, barely able to hear his own voice over the wind rushing all around him as he glided towards the enemy. “No, it's too obvious I said. I won't run into anything I can't kill myself I said. I should've known Murphy would screw with me.”
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--> “Should've "Should've brought the chopper,” chopper," Mercer muttered, barely able to hear his own voice over the wind rushing all around him as he glided towards the enemy. “No, "No, it's too obvious I said. I won't run into anything I can't kill myself I said. I should've known Murphy would screw with me.” "
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--> “I thought you'd be scowling! Why, she looks mature now! I just know how you despise boobies!”\\
“For the last time, [[spoiler: sword,]] I do not like children!”
“For the last time, [[spoiler: sword,]] I do not like children!”
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--> “I "I thought you'd be scowling! Why, she looks mature now! I just know how you despise boobies!”\\
“Forboobies!"\\
"For the last time, [[spoiler:sword,]] sword]], I do not like children!”children!"
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--> “Poor kid. I didn't have the heart to tell her what you have to give up to get to the top.”
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--> “Poor "Poor kid. I didn't have the heart to tell her what you have to give up to get to the top.”"
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-->"Belong to?" Montmorency asked, looking at the servant nearest her as if for the first time. "B-but slavery isn't legal in Tristain."\\
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--> [[spoiler: Derflinger]]: “Then we kill it? Because I'm behind that. I'm so behind that I've warped around to being in front of that. And by in front of that I mean I'll stab the hell out of it. Stabbity stab stab-”
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--> [[spoiler: Derflinger]]: “Then "Then we kill it? Because I'm behind that. I'm so behind that I've warped around to being in front of that. And by in front of that I mean I'll stab the hell out of it. Stabbity stab stab-”stab-"
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--> “Just following orders? That excuse went out of style at Nuremberg,” Mercer muttered.
--> “What does a Germanian township famous for its crab apples have to do with such things?” Cattleya asked, now thoroughly confused.
--> “What does a Germanian township famous for its crab apples have to do with such things?” Cattleya asked, now thoroughly confused.
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--> “Just "Just following orders? That excuse went out of style at Nuremberg,” Nuremberg," Mercer muttered.
-->“What "What does a Germanian township famous for its crab apples have to do with such things?” things?" Cattleya asked, now thoroughly confused.
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--> The words “kill them” were on the tip of his tongue. But Cattleya's words about how Louise felt responsible for his actions bubbled up from the back of his mind. “-Knock them out so we can interrogate them.”
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--> The words “kill them” "kill them" were on the tip of his tongue. But Cattleya's words about how Louise felt responsible for his actions bubbled up from the back of his mind. “-Knock "-Knock them out so we can interrogate them.”"
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** "That's heresy! That's – that's why, that's extra heretical!”"
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** "That's heresy! That's – that's why, that's extra heretical!”"heretical!"
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** [[VideoGame/{{Crysis}} "This isn't a war ordinary humans can win.”]]
** [[Advertising/TheManYourManCouldSmellLike “You have a musket,” Joseph said. “Now look at me,” Wardes did so. “Now back at your musket. It's a machine gun!” ... “Anything is possible when you're not a knife eared girlyman! ... But if you're a real man and not a girlyman, you could use it to kill five hundred and fifty girlymen per minute! Sadly, that's cyclic, not effective.” ]]
** [[Advertising/TheManYourManCouldSmellLike “You have a musket,” Joseph said. “Now look at me,” Wardes did so. “Now back at your musket. It's a machine gun!” ... “Anything is possible when you're not a knife eared girlyman! ... But if you're a real man and not a girlyman, you could use it to kill five hundred and fifty girlymen per minute! Sadly, that's cyclic, not effective.” ]]
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** [[VideoGame/{{Crysis}} "This isn't a war ordinary humans can win.”]]
"]]
** [[Advertising/TheManYourManCouldSmellLike“You "You have a musket,” musket," Joseph said. “Now "Now look at me,” me," Wardes did so. “Now "Now back at your musket. It's a machine gun!” ... “Anything gun!" ... "Anything is possible when you're not a knife eared girlyman! ... But if you're a real man and not a girlyman, you could use it to kill five hundred and fifty girlymen per minute! Sadly, that's cyclic, not effective.” ]]"]]
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** [[spoiler: Moreover, Blackwatch from a few years after VideoGame/{{Prototype}} happened.]]
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** [[spoiler: Moreover, Blackwatch from a few several years after VideoGame/{{Prototype}} happened.]]
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--> “One thing to keep in mind,” Mother said, even as she dodged once more. “Is that mage battles take place in three dimensions.”
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--> '''Alex''': There is no problem that can't be solved with an explosion of the right size, in the right time, and the right place."
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--> '''Alex''': There "There is no problem that can't be solved with an explosion of the right size, in the right time, and the right place."
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-->''Allow me to promise you this Karin: If you cross me, I will break you. I will use your family as an example of those who oppose me. There are but two options. You can join the tsunami or you can be crushed underneath it. I'll drag Tristain into the future whether you like it or not.” ''
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--> '''Alex''': "Individuals can't win wars where I'm from. The wars are too big for that,” Mercer leaned in, giving her a cold grin. “[[OneManArmy Unless that individual is me.]]”
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--> '''Karin''': “Nobles have always policed themselves. Some abuses are the price we pay for the freedoms we cherish.”
--> '''Henrietta''': “That must change. Justice is the word of law, not the perverse whimsy of men like Lord Mott. And change it will. My mother will not be queen forever.
--> '''Henrietta''': “Then, I will no longer have to hide in the shadows and sign minor reforms in her name. When that day comes, you will have two options. You can support me and secure the Vallière family's future... Or you can obstruct me, and I will grind you to dust underneath my heel.”
--> '''Henrietta''': “That must change. Justice is the word of law, not the perverse whimsy of men like Lord Mott. And change it will. My mother will not be queen forever.
--> '''Henrietta''': “Then, I will no longer have to hide in the shadows and sign minor reforms in her name. When that day comes, you will have two options. You can support me and secure the Vallière family's future... Or you can obstruct me, and I will grind you to dust underneath my heel.”
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--> "You don't believe you can do it. That's why it's not working. Magic won't work if you don't believe you can do what you want."
--> "This base is powered on electricity, and that won't change just because you deny it."
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* MamaBear: Deconstructed. Karin loves her daughters very much and wants to protect them above all else... so she ended pushing each one [[TrainingFromHell beyond their breaking point]] and ''refuse'' to even smile in pride of their accomplishments to make them strong. This has left Louise with severe emotional problems and [[FriendToAllLivingThings Cattleya's]] openly question if she even cares.
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* MamaBear: Deconstructed. Karin loves her daughters very much and wants to protect them above all else... so she ended pushing each one [[TrainingFromHell beyond their breaking point]] and ''refuse'' ''refused'' to even smile in pride of their accomplishments to make them strong. This has left Louise with severe emotional problems and [[FriendToAllLivingThings Cattleya's]] openly question questioning if she even cares.
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