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* TheBigBoard: In the sequel, Princess-Queen Lulamoon has a war room in Ponyland Castle, with a "bg screen" in it.
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** When Rainbow Dash, the "lesbian" pony, is in the [[RougeAnglesOfSatin Evarfre]] forest, she gets grabbed by a "gay snake" who squeezes her so hard that it ''threatens to turn her gay.'' Apparently being gay means you stop being a lesbian.
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*** It should be noted that, on the real show, Trixie was female.
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* RougeAnglesofSatin: Taken UpToEleven from the last story. Which is [[BeyondTheImpossible impressive]].
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* RougeAnglesofSatin: Taken UpToEleven from the last story. Which is [[BeyondTheImpossible impressive]].
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* Sting: Combined with Egregious use of the Beat on the part of Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca during TheReveal of [[spoiler: Doctor Whookes as her second commander.]]
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* Sting: Combined with Egregious {{Egregious}} use of the Beat {{Beat}} on the part of Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca during TheReveal of [[spoiler: Doctor Whookes as her second commander.]]]]
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* AntiHero: Admiral Awesome is this at first, before he devolves into a NominalHero.
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* AntiHero: Admiral ADMIRAL Awesome is this at first, before he devolves into a NominalHero.
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* BatDeduction: Admiral Awesome figures out the details of what's going on the moment he arrives in Equestria.
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* BatDeduction: Admiral ADMIRAL Awesome figures out the details of what's going on the moment he arrives in Equestria.
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* BreakingTheFourthWall: Admiral Awesome starts out his naming plan for the New Awesome Lulamoon Empire by saying he read the name New Lulamoon Republic in a fanfic.
* BringMyBrownPants: Happens to Celesia when she hears Admiral Awesome Yonasomun Armageddon's name.
* BringMyBrownPants: Happens to Celesia when she hears Admiral Awesome Yonasomun Armageddon's name.
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* BreakingTheFourthWall: Admiral ADMIRAL Awesome starts out his naming plan for the New Awesome Lulamoon Empire by saying he read the name New Lulamoon Republic in a fanfic.
* BringMyBrownPants: Happens to Celesia when she hearsAdmiral ADMIRAL Awesome Yonasomun Armageddon's name.
* BringMyBrownPants: Happens to Celesia when she hears
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** [[spoiler: Enemy Boss Leader]] reveals that the way to kill Admiral Awesome is to shoot him in the head. [[spoiler: Subverted when it turn out not to actually work though.]]
** [[spoiler: Enemy Boss Leader]] reveals that the way to kill Admiral Awesome is to shoot him in the head. [[spoiler: Subverted when it turn out not to actually work though.]]
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** [[spoiler: Becomes a NinjaProp when Admiral ADMIRAL Awesome pretends to be dying in a fashion so similar to previous, meaningless appearances of CaptainObvious that it can easily fool the readers too.]]
** [[spoiler: Enemy Boss Leader]] reveals that the way to killAdmiral ADMIRAL Awesome is to shoot him in the head. [[spoiler: Subverted when it turn out not to actually work though.]]
** [[spoiler: Enemy Boss Leader]] reveals that the way to kill
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* DeusExMachina: Admiral Awesome's appearance in Chapter 3.
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* ExtraEyes: The logical conclusion that can be drawn from [[NamesToRunAwayFromReallyFast Commander Killemall]] being described as having [[RedEyesTakeWarning red eyes]] and black eyes in the same sentence.
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* ExtraEyes: The logical conclusion that can be drawn from [[NamesToRunAwayFromReallyFast Commander Killemall]] being described as having [[RedEyesTakeWarning red eyes]] and [[BlackEyesOfEvil black eyes eyes]] in the same sentence.
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* FourthWallObserver: Pinkie Pie. She spends a lot of time complaining about the quality of the writing and making [[SuspiciouslySpecificDenial Suspiciously Specific Denials]] about Admiral Awesome's status as an AuthorAvatar MarySue.
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* FourthWallObserver: Pinkie Pie. She spends a lot of time complaining about the quality of the writing and making [[SuspiciouslySpecificDenial Suspiciously Specific Denials]] about Admiral ADMIRAL Awesome's status as an AuthorAvatar MarySue.
* FullNameBasis: Somewhat invoked. ADMIRAL Awesome Yonasomun Armageddon is either referred to by his full name, or at bare minimum, as ADMIRAL Awesome.
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* LongList: The list of ponies below Admiral Awesome just before he founds the New Awesome Lulamoon Empire
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* LongList: The list of ponies below Admiral ADMIRAL Awesome just before he founds the New Awesome Lulamoon Empire
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* MamaBear: Fluttershy demonstrates this when Admiral Awesome tries to send the Cutie Mark Crusaders to explore the Evarfre Forest, further reinforcing her state as "only in-character character".
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* MamaBear: Fluttershy demonstrates this when Admiral ADMIRAL Awesome tries to send the Cutie Mark Crusaders to explore the Evarfre Forest, further reinforcing her state as "only in-character character".
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* NonSpecificallyForeign: One of Admiral Awesome's enemies is identified as speaking in "a funny foreign accent".
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* NonSpecificallyForeign: One of Admiral ADMIRAL Awesome's enemies is identified as speaking in "a funny foreign accent".
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* [[OnlySaneMan Only Sane Mare]]: Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie, in two very different ways. Fluttershy is the only character whose personality isn't completely warped and who doesn't worship the metaphorical ground Admiral Awesome treads on, as well as being the one most likely to come up with good plans (which are then ignored because the author doesn't like her). Pinkie Pie, meanwhile, is a FourthWallObserver in the story and therefore is the only one who realizes that the whole thing is just a terribly-written fanfic.
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* [[OnlySaneMan Only Sane Mare]]: Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie, in two very different ways. Fluttershy is the only character whose personality isn't completely warped and who doesn't worship the metaphorical ground Admiral ADMIRAL Awesome treads on, as well as being the one most likely to come up with good plans (which are then ignored because the author doesn't like her). Pinkie Pie, meanwhile, is a FourthWallObserver in the story and therefore is the only one who realizes that the whole thing is just a terribly-written fanfic.
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--> '''Admiral Awesome:''' No you are a main character. It’s better to send in a unimportant background pony.
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--> '''Admiral '''ADMIRAL Awesome:''' No you are a main character. It’s better to send in a unimportant background pony.
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** The LongList of ponies Admiral Awesome makes a speech to includes [[Fanfic/PastSins Nyx]] and [[Fanfic/FalloutEquestria Littlepip]].
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** The LongList of ponies Admiral ADMIRAL Awesome makes a speech to includes [[Fanfic/PastSins Nyx]] and [[Fanfic/FalloutEquestria Littlepip]].
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* TalkAboutTheWeather: This is Admiral Awesome's reaction to finding the President of Amarican in his tent.
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* TalkAboutTheWeather: This is Admiral ADMIRAL Awesome's reaction to finding the President of Amarican in his tent.
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* TitleDrop: [[LampshadeHanging Lampshaded]] in Chapter 3 when Admiral Awesome makes his first appearance as a DeusExMachina.
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* TitleDrop: [[LampshadeHanging Lampshaded]] in Chapter 3 when Admiral ADMIRAL Awesome makes his first appearance as a DeusExMachina.
* FullNameBasis: Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca is typically referred to as such. Except when RougeAnglesOfSatin is involved.
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* RougeAnglesofSatin: Obviously, considering the previous story.
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* RougeAnglesofSatin: Obviously, considering Taken UpToEleven from the previous story.last story. Which is [[BeyondTheImpossible impressive]].
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* Sting: Combined with Egregious use of the Beat on the part of Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca during TheReveal of [[spoiler: Doctor Whookes as her second commander.]]]]
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* RoaringRampageOfRevenge: [[spoiler: ADMIRAL Awesome returns to Ponyland "to [[SetTheWorldOnFire set Ponyland on fire]] and [[DisproportionateRetribution make them all pay for not liking me]]"
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* RoaringRampageOfRevenge: [[spoiler: ADMIRAL Awesome returns to Ponyland "to [[SetTheWorldOnFire set Ponyland on fire]] and [[DisproportionateRetribution make them all pay for not liking me]]"me]]"]]
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* Sting: Combined with Egregious use of the Beat on the part of Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca during TheReveal of [[spoiler: Doctor Whookes as her second commander.]]]]
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*** The sequel once again reverts this, as it [[spoiler: eventually]] opens with Twillight and Trixie's wedding.
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** [[spoiler: MeaningfulRename: "Now he calls himself the Darkshadowdeath_113 because he’s the most evil guy I know since he killed me three times in my favorite online-shooter."]]
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** [[spoiler: MeaningfulRename: MeaningfulRename]]
--> [[spoiler: "Now he calls himself the Darkshadowdeath_113 because he’s the most evil guy I know since he killed me three times in my favorite online-shooter."]] "]]
* Beat: Constantly used (or over-used} to draw out a big reveal. Amusingly enough, often used AFTER TheReveal as well.
--> [[spoiler: "Now he calls himself the Darkshadowdeath_113 because he’s the most evil guy I know since he killed me three times in my favorite online-shooter.
* Beat: Constantly used (or over-used} to draw out a big reveal. Amusingly enough, often used AFTER TheReveal as well.
* GlassShatteringSound: Twillight's scream of rage has this effect on the windows, and, disconcertingly enough, the ''birthday cake''.
* {{Retcon}}: Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca is now credited with killing Twillight's brother. [[FourthWallObserver Pinkie Pie]] naturally [[LampshadeHanging points this out]].
* RoaringRampageOfRevenge: [[spoiler: ADMIRAL Awesome returns to Ponyland "to [[SetTheWorldOnFire set Ponyland on fire]] and [[DisproportionateRetribution make them all pay for not liking me]]"
* RoaringRampageOfRevenge: [[spoiler: ADMIRAL Awesome returns to Ponyland "to [[SetTheWorldOnFire set Ponyland on fire]] and [[DisproportionateRetribution make them all pay for not liking me]]"
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** Trixie is referred to as the "blue [[WizardsOfTheCoast wizard of the coasts]]" during the wedding.
** Pinkie begins [[StarfishLanguage speaking in]] ''[[CthulhuMythos awfully familiar]]'' [[StarfishLanguage tongues]].
* Sting: Combined with Egregious use of the Beat on the part of Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca during TheReveal of [[spoiler: Doctor Whookes as her second commander.]]]]
** Pinkie begins [[StarfishLanguage speaking in]] ''[[CthulhuMythos awfully familiar]]'' [[StarfishLanguage tongues]].
* Sting: Combined with Egregious use of the Beat on the part of Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca during TheReveal of [[spoiler: Doctor Whookes as her second commander.
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** [[spoiler: MeaningfulRename: "Now he calls himself the Darkshadowdeath_113 because he’s the most evil guy I know since he killed me three times in my favorite online-shooter."
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** [[spoiler: MeaningfulRename: "Now he calls himself the Darkshadowdeath_113 because he’s the most evil guy I know since he killed me three times in my favorite online-shooter." "]]
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* Sting: Combined with several [[Beat Beats]] on the part of Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca during TheReveal of [[spoiler: Doctor Whookes as her second commander.]]
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* Sting: Combined with several [[Beat Beats]] Egregious use of the Beat on the part of Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca during TheReveal of [[spoiler: Doctor Whookes as her second commander.]]]]
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* RedAndBlackAndEvilAllOver: Commander Killemall is an "[[ObviouslyEvil evil looking stallion]] with a black coat, [[RedEyesTakeWarning red eyes]], a red mane and [[BlackEyesOfEvil black eyes]]" and a "cracking skull with bleeding eyes" for a Cutie Mark. Guess which side he's on.
* BlackEyesOfEvil: Combined with ElectronicEyes in the case of Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca.
** [[spoiler: Commander Killemall.]]
* FaceHeelTurn: [[spoiler: ADMIRAL Awesome is out for revenge. Complete with EvilCostumeSwitch!]]
** [[spoiler: Commander Killemall.]]
* FaceHeelTurn: [[spoiler: ADMIRAL Awesome is out for revenge. Complete with EvilCostumeSwitch!]]
* PaintItBlack: Used and Lampshaded as [[spoiler: ADMIRAL Awesome makes his transition from AntiHero to... cool ANTI-Hero.]]
* PlanetEater: Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca.
* PlanetEater: Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca.
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** ADMIRAL Awesome first appears in "That prison from [[SplinterCell Spliner Cell 3]]
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* Sting: Combined with several [[Beat Beats]] on the part of Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca during TheReveal of [[spoiler: Doctor Whookes as her second commander.]]
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** It's entirely likely that this is a throwaway reference to [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS2E7MayTheBestPetWin Tank the Tortoise]], as yet another ShoutOut by the author.
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** [[spoiler: FaceHeelTurn: As Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca's second commander.]]
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** [[spoiler: FaceHeelTurn: As Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca's second commander.]] ]]
** [[spoiler: MeaningfulRename: "Now he calls himself the Darkshadowdeath_113 because he’s the most evil guy I know since he killed me three times in my favorite online-shooter."
** [[spoiler: MeaningfulRename: "Now he calls himself the Darkshadowdeath_113 because he’s the most evil guy I know since he killed me three times in my favorite online-shooter."
* NoodleIncident: The author is disappointed that Fluttershy was not killed by "the black zombies in the last episode".
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** As well as making the evil Cadenca something of a Galactus figure
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** As well as making the evil Cadenca something of a Galactus figurefigure
** ADMIRAL Awesome first appears in "That prison from [[SplinterCell Spliner Cell 3]]
** ADMIRAL Awesome first appears in "That prison from [[SplinterCell Spliner Cell 3]]
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** Also Doctor [[RougeAnglesOfSatin Wwhhoves]]. Twice.
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** Also Doctor [[RougeAnglesOfSatin Wwhhoves]]. Twice. [[spoiler: Three times now as of the sequel.]]
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!! The sequel contains examples of:
* BackFromTheDead: [[spoiler: Doctor Whookes. For the third time.]]
** [[spoiler: FaceHeelTurn: As Princess Mama Mia Morte Cadenca's second commander.]]
* NamesToRunAwayFromReallyFast: PRINCESS MAMA MIA MORTE CADENCA! Also, her ship, the Bloodstreamofdeath
** As well as the return of [[spoiler: Commander Killemall]]
* RougeAnglesofSatin: Obviously, considering the previous story.
* ShoutOut: The entire opening is one to StarWars.
** As well as making the evil Cadenca something of a Galactus figure
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* TheDitz: The author...is not the brightest bulb in the box.
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* RalphWiggum: The author...is not the brightest bulb in the box.
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* RalphWiggum: The author...is not the brightest bulb in the box.
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** At one point [[TheSlendermanMythos Slenderman]] comes to [[spoiler: [[DeusExMachina Save Rainbow dash from the gay snake]]]].
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** At one point [[TheSlendermanMythos Slenderman]] Slender Man]] comes to [[spoiler: [[DeusExMachina Save Rainbow dash from the gay snake]]]].
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* AwesomeMccoolname: ADMIRAL Awesome [[AuthorAvatar Yonasomun]] Armageddon.
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* AwesomeMccoolname: AwesomeMcCoolname: ADMIRAL Awesome [[AuthorAvatar Yonasomun]] Armageddon.
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* ShootTheHostage: ADMIRAL Awesome does this to signify the beginning of his journey from [[SlidingScaleOfAntiHeroes Type III]] AntiHero to NominalHero.
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* ShootTheHostage: ADMIRAL Awesome does this to signify the beginning of his journey from [[SlidingScaleOfAntiHeroes Type III]] AntiHero to NominalHero.
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* ExtraEyes: The logical conclusion that can be drawn from [[NamesToRunAwayFromReallyFast Commander Killemall]] being described as having [[RedEyesTakeWarning red eyes]] and BlackEyes in the same sentence.
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* ExtraEyes: The logical conclusion that can be drawn from [[NamesToRunAwayFromReallyFast Commander Killemall]] being described as having [[RedEyesTakeWarning red eyes]] and BlackEyes black eyes in the same sentence.
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* AndYourLittleDogToo: Luna killed Twilight's pet in magic kindergarden. And blamed Twilight's brother so she would hate him until Luna killed him.
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* AndYourLittleDogToo: Luna killed Twilight's Twillight's pet in magic kindergarden. And blamed Twilight's Twillight's brother so she would hate him until Luna killed him.
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* BigNo: Twilight's reaction to Doctor Whooves dying.
* BigWhat: Celesia drops one after being told that her guards failed to kill Twilight's friends and that they killed lots of [[DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment elite elite guards]].
* BigWhat: Celesia drops one after being told that her guards failed to kill Twilight's friends and that they killed lots of [[DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment elite elite guards]].
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* BigNo: Twilight's Twillight's reaction to Doctor Whooves dying.
* BigWhat: Celesia drops one after being told that her guards failed to killTwilight's Twillight's friends and that they killed lots of [[DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment elite elite guards]].
* BigWhat: Celesia drops one after being told that her guards failed to kill
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** Twilight notices a hatch in the ground with a ladder in it ''inside a broom closet'' which helps her avoid a [[SpaceIsAnOcean space shark.]]
** Twilight notices a hatch in the ground with a ladder in it ''inside a broom closet'' which helps her avoid a [[SpaceIsAnOcean space shark.]]
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** The [[MemeticMutation arrow to the knee]] that the new lead guard takes before he can shoot Twilight.
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**Twilight Twillight notices a hatch in the ground with a ladder in it ''inside a broom closet'' which helps her avoid a [[SpaceIsAnOcean space shark.]]
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* FailedASpotCheck: Twilight didn't notice that Celesia was evil until it was pointed out to her, despite its extreme obviousness based on the description immediately following said pointing-out.
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* FailedASpotCheck: Twilight Twillight didn't notice that Celesia was evil until it was pointed out to her, despite its extreme obviousness based on the description immediately following said pointing-out.
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* LukeIAmYourFather: [[spoiler: Inverted. We go through the whole story thinking Celesia is Twilight's mother, but then at the very end her brother's ghost tells her that it's not actually true, and in fact she killed Twilight's real parents.]]
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* LukeIAmYourFather: [[spoiler: Inverted. We go through the whole story thinking Celesia is Twilight's Twillight's mother, but then at the very end her brother's ghost tells her that it's not actually true, and in fact she killed Twilight's Twillight's real parents.]]
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* MeaningfulRename: Twilight Sparkle changes her name to Twilight Sparklier after becoming an alicorn.
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* MeaningfulRename: Twilight Twillight Sparkle changes her name to Twilight Twillight Sparklier after becoming an alicorn.
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* [[PreviouslyOn Previously Stuff That Happened Before]]: Parodied at the beginning of the Last Part, which quotes a large collection of earlier bits from the story which are all completely meaningless out of context. In addition, it actually has one scene which actually ''wasn't'' in the story before: [[spoiler: Luna killing Twilight's brother.]]
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* [[PreviouslyOn Previously Stuff That Happened Before]]: Parodied at the beginning of the Last Part, which quotes a large collection of earlier bits from the story which are all completely meaningless out of context. In addition, it actually has one scene which actually ''wasn't'' in the story before: [[spoiler: Luna killing Twilight's Twillight's brother.]]
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--> '''[[FourthWallObserver Pinkie Pie]]:''' Duh! We’re in a [[RougeAnglesOfSatin poorly written story full of grammatical errors]] with a bland MarySue [[AuthorAvatar of the author]] as main character. Twilight is married to Trixie who is a colt, Princess Celestia is a [[CardCarryingVillain super-evil meanie]] who [[ShootTheMessenger kills people because they bring her bad news]] and Rainbow Dash [[CrackPairing was shipped with]] [[TheSlendermanMythos the Slenderman]]. Of course, this is a [[ContrivedCoincidence strange coincidence]]! But at least it means that this story will be over very soon. Or do you want to read any more pages about Meanie Sue betting up guards?
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--> '''[[FourthWallObserver Pinkie Pie]]:''' Duh! We’re in a [[RougeAnglesOfSatin poorly written story full of grammatical errors]] with a bland MarySue [[AuthorAvatar of the author]] as main character. Twilight Twillight is married to Trixie who is a colt, Princess Celestia is a [[CardCarryingVillain super-evil meanie]] who [[ShootTheMessenger kills people because they bring her bad news]] and Rainbow Dash [[CrackPairing was shipped with]] [[TheSlendermanMythos the Slenderman]]. Of course, this is a [[ContrivedCoincidence strange coincidence]]! But at least it means that this story will be over very soon. Or do you want to read any more pages about Meanie Sue betting up guards?
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** Trixie is identified as Twilight's boyfriend at first, but in Chapter 5 he's referred to as Twilight's husband.
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** Trixie is identified as Twilight's Twillight's boyfriend at first, but in Chapter 5 he's referred to as Twilight's Twillight's husband.
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** A later speech by Twilight Sparklier thanks another bunch of ponies, including [[Fanfic/OnACrossAndArrow Dusk Shine]].
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** A later speech by Twilight Twillight Sparklier thanks another bunch of ponies, including [[Fanfic/OnACrossAndArrow Dusk Shine]].
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* [[TheChosenOne The Chosen Mare]]: Twilight.
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* WordSaladPhilosophy: The "philosophical banter" between Twilight and Luna.
--> '''Twilight:''' You think you can change fate?
--> '''Twilight:''' You think you can change fate?
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* WordSaladPhilosophy: The "philosophical banter" between Twilight Twillight and Luna.
-->'''Twilight:''' '''Twillight:''' You think you can change fate?
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--> '''Twilight:''' Money don’t makes you happy.
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--> '''Twilight:''' '''Twillight:''' Money don’t makes you happy.
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--> '''Twilight:''' If a tree falls down and no one is around does it still makes a sound?
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--> '''Twilight:''' '''Twillight:''' If a tree falls down and no one is around does it still makes a sound?
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--> '''Twilight:''' There’s no try. Do it or not.
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--> '''Twilight:''' '''Twillight:''' There’s no try. Do it or not.
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** There are limits though, as demonstrated when she manages to resist the urge to do this to Commander Killemall [[PragmaticVillainy because he's her best man so she needs him to kill Twilight]].
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** There are limits though, as demonstrated when she manages to resist the urge to do this to Commander Killemall [[PragmaticVillainy because he's her best man so she needs him to kill Twilight]].Twillight]].
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[[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/7983/ Twilight Sparkle's awesome adventure]] is a WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic fanfic by Yonasomun.
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[[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/7983/ Twilight Twillight Sparkle's awesome adventure]] is a WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic fanfic by Yonasomun.
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* DidNotDoTheResearch: The author admits to not knowing the name of Applejack's farm.
** He thinks that bunnies make "who" sounds all the time, although that may be because Angel was [[{{Retcon}} Retconned]] in place of Owlowiscious.
** He thinks that [[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic the show]] is made by [[Creator/MarvelComics Marvel]].
** He thinks that bunnies make "who" sounds all the time, although that may be because Angel was [[{{Retcon}} Retconned]] in place of Owlowiscious.
** He thinks that [[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic the show]] is made by [[Creator/MarvelComics Marvel]].
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--> a Pegasusususu filly who was a big fan of Dash and wanted to be such a great lesbian as her idol (but couldn’t because she hadn’t the right hair color)
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* YouKeepUsingThatWord: It seems like, while the author knows the author knows the definition of "lesbian", he managed to keep adding to it in his head until it became pretty different from the actual meaning. He doesn't think lesbians are capable of crying, for instance.
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* YouKeepUsingThatWord: It seems like, while the author knows the author knows the definition of "lesbian", he managed to keep adding to it in his head until it became pretty different from the actual meaning. He doesn't think lesbians are capable of crying, for instance.
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* YouKeepUsingThatWord: It seems like, while he the author knows the author knows the definition of "lesbian", he managed to keep adding to it in his head until it became pretty different from the actual meaning. He doesn't think lesbians are capable of crying, for instance.
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* Crossover: Celesia has a Tyrant from the VideoGame/ResidentEvil series.
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* Crossover: {{Crossover}}: Celesia has a Tyrant from the VideoGame/ResidentEvil series.
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--> '''[[FourthWallObserver Pinkie Pie]]:''' Duh! We’re in a [[RougeAnglesOfSatin poorly written story full of grammatical errors]] with a bland MarySue of the author as main character. Twilight is married to Trixie who is a colt, Princess Celestia is a super-evil meanie who [[ShootTheMessenger kills people because they bring her bad news]] and Rainbow Dash was shipped with [[TheSlendermanMythos the Slenderman]]. Of course, this is a [[ContrivedCoincidence strange coincidence]]! But at least it means that this story will be over very soon. Or do you want to read any more pages about Meanie Sue betting up guards?
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--> '''[[FourthWallObserver Pinkie Pie]]:''' Duh! We’re in a [[RougeAnglesOfSatin poorly written story full of grammatical errors]] with a bland MarySue [[AuthorAvatar of the author author]] as main character. Twilight is married to Trixie who is a colt, Princess Celestia is a [[CardCarryingVillain super-evil meanie meanie]] who [[ShootTheMessenger kills people because they bring her bad news]] and Rainbow Dash [[CrackPairing was shipped with with]] [[TheSlendermanMythos the Slenderman]]. Of course, this is a [[ContrivedCoincidence strange coincidence]]! But at least it means that this story will be over very soon. Or do you want to read any more pages about Meanie Sue betting up guards?
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** There are limits though, as demonstrated when she manages to resist the urge to do this to Commander Killemall because [[PragmaticVillainy he's her best man so she needs him to kill Twilight]].
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** There are limits though, as demonstrated when she manages to resist the urge to do this to Commander Killemall because [[PragmaticVillainy because he's her best man so she needs him to kill Twilight]].
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* CharlesAtlasSuperpower: Admiral Awesome manages to beat '''a tank''' into a small metal cube with his bare hands.
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* Retcon: An amazingly [[MindScrew Mind Screwy]] case. Angel is there instead of Owlowiscious [[RougeAnglesOfSatin "because he's death and retconed"]]. Despite this, the story continues to mention him, and all of the characters are aware of the fact that he was retconned.
** Trixie is identified as Twilight's boyfriend at first, but in Chapter 5 she's referred to as Twilight's husband.
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* Retcon: {{Retcon}}: An amazingly [[MindScrew Mind Screwy]] case. Angel is there instead of Owlowiscious [[RougeAnglesOfSatin "because he's death and retconed"]]. Despite this, the story continues to mention him, and all of the characters are aware of the fact that he was retconned.
** Trixie is identified as Twilight's boyfriend at first, but in Chapter 5she's he's referred to as Twilight's husband.
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** [[NominalHero ADMIRAL Awesome]] announces his plans to kill Enemy Boss Leader's family and all his friends, [[ButForMeItWasTuesday forgetting that he already killed them years ago]], which was in fact Enemy Boss Leader's reason [[NiceJobBreakingItHero for joining the Enemies in the first place]].
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[[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/7983/ Twilight Sparkle's awesome adventure]] is a WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic fanfic by Yonasomun.
The story is designed as a parody of various forms of bad fanfiction, and to assist in that goal most of the story is filled with [[LemonyNarrator Lemony Narration]]. Because of this, "the author" as referred to on this page does not refer to Yonasomun, but rather to the fictional persona of his which narrates the story. Said persona has a great hate for Fluttershy, and writes in a style which could be described as "BeigeProse [[XMeetsY meets]] CaptainObvious".
The main thing differentiating the story from a more traditional TrollFic is that lampshades are hung over everything, including having a FourthWallObserver pointing out the flaws in the story constantly.
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!! This fanfic contains examples of:
* AndYourLittleDogToo: Luna killed Twilight's pet in magic kindergarden. And blamed Twilight's brother so she would hate him until Luna killed him.
** [[NominalHero ADMIRAL Awesome]] announces his plans to kill Enemy Boss Leader's family and all his friends, [[ButForMeItWasTuesday forgetting that he already killed them years ago]], which was in fact Enemy Boss Leader's reason [[NiceJobBreakingItHero for joining the Enemies in the first place]].
* AntiHero: Admiral Awesome is this at first, before he devolves into a NominalHero.
* ArsonMurderAndJaywalking: "And there’s n evil entrances living in the forest who does evil dances and worships Satan and play bad videogames."
** Fluttershy's list of offenses in her introductory paragraph.
* AwesomeMcCoolName: ADMIRAL Awesome [[AuthorAvatar Yonasomun]] Armageddon.
* BackFromTheDead: [[spoiler: Enemy Boss Leader.]]
** Also Doctor [[RougeAnglesOfSatin Wwhhoves]]. Twice.
** [[spoiler: ADMIRAL Awesome Yonasomun Armageddon.]]
*** This one is notable as the only one which has any [[HandWave explanation]] at all.
* BadIsGoodAndGoodIsBad: The author managed to get the rating system backwards, so he's convinced that having a 2-star rating on his story compared to how even the most popular stories get 5-star ratings means that his story is way better.
* BadNewsInAGoodWay: PlayedForLaughs. A guard comes in, remembers Celesia's tendency to ShootTheMessenger, and then tells her exactly the same thing he would have otherwise except that he prefaces it by saying that it's good news instead of bad news.
** This seems to be the standard correct fashion to tell bad news to Celesia. King Gilda does it too at one point, with similarly successful results.
* BatDeduction: Admiral Awesome figures out the details of what's going on the moment he arrives in Equestria.
--> He opened his eyes and looked around. “Oh I’m in a land fully of magical talking ponies and those ponies in tree over their fighting against the evil ponies of their evil queen.” he immediately realized [[LampshadeHanging and thus skipped the boring introduction part so that we are right back into the action.]]
* BeigeProse: Most of the story is written in this, to [[SoBadItsGood hilarious]] effect.
* BestServedCold: Enemy Boss Leader's original motive behind joining the Enemies.
* BigNo: Twilight's reaction to Doctor Whooves dying.
* BigWhat: Celesia drops one after being told that her guards failed to kill Twilight's friends and that they killed lots of [[DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment elite elite guards]].
* BlofeldPloy: Celesia kills a random griphon in the room after a guard brings her [[BadNewsInAGoodWay "good news"]], because the news still makes her want to kill someone but the guard had specifically said that it was good news, so he couldn't be killed for it.
* BoundAndGagged: When Rainbow Dash is brought to Celesia, there are large chains all over her body and a towel in her mouth.
* BreakingTheFourthWall: Admiral Awesome starts out his naming plan for the New Awesome Lulamoon Empire by saying he read the name New Lulamoon Republic in a fanfic.
* BringMyBrownPants: Happens to Celesia when she hears Admiral Awesome Yonasomun Armageddon's name.
* BuffySpeak: Characters tend to lapse into it whenever the author doesn't know the actual term for whatever he's describing.
* ButchLesbian: Rainbow Dash is explained to be this [[LampshadeHanging because of her hair]].
--> '''Rainbow Dash:''' I’m a lesbian and my name is Rainbow Dash.
--> '''[[RougeAnglesOfSatin Doctor Whuoves]]:''' Ok that explains the hair.
* ButForMeItWasTuesday: ADMIRAL Awesome had managed to completely forget about having killed Enemy Boss Leader's family and friends by the time we learn about it.
* ButNotTooEvil: Don't worry, the skull Celesia is drinking blood out of isn't a pony skull, [[SarcasmMode so it's all fine]]. Even funnier since she's a CardCarryingVillain most of the time.
* CaptainObvious: Characters' reactions to developments are frequently this, sometimes mixed with DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment.
** [[spoiler: Becomes a NinjaProp when Admiral Awesome pretends to be dying in a fashion so similar to previous, meaningless appearances of CaptainObvious that it can easily fool the readers too.]]
** [[spoiler: Enemy Boss Leader]] reveals that the way to kill Admiral Awesome is to shoot him in the head. [[spoiler: Subverted when it turn out not to actually work though.]]
* CardCarryingVillain: Queen Celesia definitely qualifies.
* CharacterDevelopment: Rainbow Dash wants some after realizing that everyone else is treating her as a FlatCharacter.
* CharlesAtlasSuperpower: Admiral Awesome manages to beat '''a tank''' into a small metal cube with his bare hands.
* ChewBubblegum: Said by Applejack just before their fight with the guards.
* ConspiracyTheorist: ADMIRAL Awesome would rather believe that the President of Amarican is controlled by evil Martian deepsea fishes than that he would, of his own free will, refuse to give him any money or medals.
* ContrivedCoincidence: Pinkie Pie finding a hidden elevator leading to Celesia's throne room. Thoroughly [[LampshadeHanging lampshaded]].
* ComicallyMissingThePoint: ADMIRAL Awesome's response to learning that he failed to save the world was to be horrified... that he wasn't getting any money or medals.
* Crossover: Celesia has a Tyrant from the VideoGame/ResidentEvil series.
** At one point [[TheSlendermanMythos Slenderman]] comes to [[spoiler: [[DeusExMachina Save Rainbow dash from the gay snake]]]].
** During the storming of Ponyland Castle Rainbow Dash uses a Fat Man from {{VideoGame/Fallout}}.
* {{Demonization}}: Fluttershy receives a lot of it. Exemplified in her introductory paragraph:
--> And finally there’s Fluttershy, who nobody likes. [[WriterOnBoard Especially not the author of this story!]] She’s a coward, cries very often, has a silly voice, always apologizes for everything, has an ugly haircut, is afraid of everything, don’t understand sarcasm, don’t do anything useful, says too much, is a pegasus but can’t fly, [[{{Fanfic/Pattycakes}} turned Rainbow Dash into a baby]], became an evil demon-monster-alien-thingy, drugged Dash so that she could have sex with her, [[Fanfic/SilentPonyvilleChronicles dragged Dash and Pinkie into a deadly nightmares that almost killed all of them]] [[ArsonMurderAndJaywalking and has a silly name]]. God I hate Fluttershy! Why couldn’t they use Firefly instead or that earth pony that looks like her but is better?
* DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment: Extremely regularly, and frequently combined with CaptainObvious.
--> She was about to die and then suddenly the explosions stopped. \\
“The explosions stopped.” said Twillight and turned around.
** The elite elite guards.
** "everything exploded in a big explosion."
** After being grabbed by the gay snake, Rainbow Dash is terrified at its assertion that it was going to make her gay, despite the story having already hammered in that she was lesbian.
** "That would be self-suicide."
* DeusExMachina: Admiral Awesome's appearance in Chapter 3.
** The [[MemeticMutation arrow to the knee]] that the new lead guard takes before he can shoot Twilight.
** Twilight notices a hatch in the ground with a ladder in it ''inside a broom closet'' which helps her avoid a [[SpaceIsAnOcean space shark.]]
** [[spoiler: Slenderman's appearance to save Rainbow Dash from the gay snake.]]
** [[spoiler: ADMIRAL Awesome's appearance at the end of the Last Part.]]
* DidNotDoTheResearch: The author admits to not knowing the name of Applejack's farm.
** He thinks that bunnies make "who" sounds all the time, although that may be because Angel was [[{{Retcon}} Retconned]] in place of Owlowiscious.
** He thinks that [[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic the show]] is made by [[Creator/MarvelComics Marvel]].
* DiesWideOpen: [[LampshadeHanging Lampshaded]] in Chapter 3.
--> He was now dead because his eyes were open.
* {{Dissimile}}: "The Mane Six – minus Twillight Sparkle who was with Doctor Whoowes and Rainbow Dash who was in a prison and Fluttershy who is useless – still fought against the guards."
* DontExplainTheJoke: The author tends to do this any time he has the opportunity to.
--> Queen Meanie! Got it? That’s what Pinkie Pie said as the black fog pony appeared in that one episode it’s a nod to that episode. That makes it funny, even if this is a sad, sad story.
--> Got it? P. Resident = President. Just remove the dot and put the P before the R of the name. It’s funny.
--> [[{{Fanfic/Cupcakes}} Cupcakes! Get it?]]
* ElectricTorture: This seems to be the main reason Celesia keeps Lulamoon around.
* EveryoneCallsHimBarkeep: Enemy Boss Leader.
* EvilLaugh: Queen Celesia has one.
* ExplainingYourPowersToTheEnemy: Applejack yells that they're running out of ammo loud enough that the enemies can hear it too.
* ExtraEyes: The logical conclusion that can be drawn from [[NamesToRunAwayFromReallyFast Commander Killemall]] being described as having [[RedEyesTakeWarning red eyes]] and BlackEyes in the same sentence.
* FailedASpotCheck: Twilight didn't notice that Celesia was evil until it was pointed out to her, despite its extreme obviousness based on the description immediately following said pointing-out.
* FlatCharacter: Rainbow Dash eventually starts to get highly annoyed that every other character is treating her as this by acting as if her only defining trait is being a lesbian.
* FourthWallObserver: Pinkie Pie. She spends a lot of time complaining about the quality of the writing and making [[SuspiciouslySpecificDenial Suspiciously Specific Denials]] about Admiral Awesome's status as an AuthorAvatar MarySue.
** At one point she comments on the inaccuracy of the title of the current chapter of the story.
* FunetikAksent: Applejack uses it. Once.
--> “Nowa whera isa Twillighta? Sha was neva lad befoa.” said Applejack in her accent I’m not using again because it sounds silly.
** All griphons also have them, and unlike Applejack's accent they're actually constantly applied throughout the story.
** Luna also has one which is consistently used: YeOldeButcheredeEnglishe UpToEleven with NoIndoorVoice.
* GodSaveUsFromTheQueen: Queen Celesia is a CardCarryingVillain of the highest order.
* GratuitousGerman: Griphons randomly slip into it.
* [[HappilyEverAfter Happily Even After]]: The guard who delivers BadNewsInAGoodWay is stated to live happily [[RougeAnglesOfSatin even]] after at the end of his scene.
* InformedAttribute: The Evil Enchantress's rhyming.
** And Fluttershy's uselessness.
* KickTheDog: ADMIRAL Awesome's response to Fluttershy's attempted reconciliation is to accept her gift and then punch her again for no reason.
* LaResistance: The New Awesome Lulamoon Empire, despite [[TheEmpire the name]], is this.
* LongList: The list of ponies below Admiral Awesome just before he founds the New Awesome Lulamoon Empire
* LukeIAmYourFather: [[spoiler: Inverted. We go through the whole story thinking Celesia is Twilight's mother, but then at the very end her brother's ghost tells her that it's not actually true, and in fact she killed Twilight's real parents.]]
* MamaBear: Fluttershy demonstrates this when Admiral Awesome tries to send the Cutie Mark Crusaders to explore the Evarfre Forest, further reinforcing her state as "only in-character character".
* MeaningfulRename: Twilight Sparkle changes her name to Twilight Sparklier after becoming an alicorn.
* MindScrew: Anything involving the {{Retcon}} of Owlowiscious.
** Large portions of the Evarfre Forest plot arc too.
** "There were so many Alicorns in the sky that the sky was dark light at night without moon or stars."
* NamesToRunAwayFromReallyFast: Commander Killemall.
* NinjaPirateZombieRobot: ADMIRAL Awesome Yonasomun Armageddon is a vampire saijin admiral [[spoiler: Jedi knight]].
* NonSpecificallyForeign: One of Admiral Awesome's enemies is identified as speaking in "a funny foreign accent".
* NoIndoorVoice: Luna.
* NominalHero. ADMIRAL Awesome becomes this [[spoiler: after he comes back from the dead]].
* NonIndicativeName: The Final Chapter is, in fact, the 2nd-last chapter. The Final Chapter 2 is the last chapter.
* NoodleIncident: While the gay snake was turning Rainbow Dash gay, one bit of description was "But this time no turtle could save her".
* OffscreenMomentOfAwesome: Rainbow Dash's escape from Ponyland Castle.
* [[OnlySaneMan Only Sane Mare]]: Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie, in two very different ways. Fluttershy is the only character whose personality isn't completely warped and who doesn't worship the metaphorical ground Admiral Awesome treads on, as well as being the one most likely to come up with good plans (which are then ignored because the author doesn't like her). Pinkie Pie, meanwhile, is a FourthWallObserver in the story and therefore is the only one who realizes that the whole thing is just a terribly-written fanfic.
* [[PreviouslyOn Previously Stuff That Happened Before]]: Parodied at the beginning of the Last Part, which quotes a large collection of earlier bits from the story which are all completely meaningless out of context. In addition, it actually has one scene which actually ''wasn't'' in the story before: [[spoiler: Luna killing Twilight's brother.]]
* RageAgainstTheAuthor: Pinkie Pie's final summation has definite shades of this.
--> '''[[FourthWallObserver Pinkie Pie]]:''' Duh! We’re in a [[RougeAnglesOfSatin poorly written story full of grammatical errors]] with a bland MarySue of the author as main character. Twilight is married to Trixie who is a colt, Princess Celestia is a super-evil meanie who [[ShootTheMessenger kills people because they bring her bad news]] and Rainbow Dash was shipped with [[TheSlendermanMythos the Slenderman]]. Of course, this is a [[ContrivedCoincidence strange coincidence]]! But at least it means that this story will be over very soon. Or do you want to read any more pages about Meanie Sue betting up guards?
* RedShirt: Background ponies, lacking NominalImportance, are not only this, but are also treated as this by the good guys, who send them out on any task which seems too dangerous to risk someone ''important'' on.
--> '''Admiral Awesome:''' No you are a main character. It’s better to send in a unimportant background pony.
* Retcon: An amazingly [[MindScrew Mind Screwy]] case. Angel is there instead of Owlowiscious [[RougeAnglesOfSatin "because he's death and retconed"]]. Despite this, the story continues to mention him, and all of the characters are aware of the fact that he was retconned.
** Trixie is identified as Twilight's boyfriend at first, but in Chapter 5 she's referred to as Twilight's husband.
* RevengeFic: Fluttershy's [[InformedAttribute uselessness]] gets extremely heavy emphasis in the story.
* RougeAnglesOfSatin: Pretty frequently.
* ShapedLikeItself:
--> “I’m Admiral Awesome Yonasomun Armageddon, leader of the U. S. Army Saijin Brigade.” said Awesome Yonasomun Armageddon, leader of the U. S. Army Saijin Brigade.
* ShockAndAwe: Celesia can shoot [[RougeAnglesOfSatin lightings]] out her eyes.
* ShootTheHostage: ADMIRAL Awesome does this to signify the beginning of his journey from [[SlidingScaleOfAntiHeroes Type III]] AntiHero to NominalHero.
* ShootTheMessenger: One of Celesia's favorite activities, although she normally confines it to [[BearerOfBadNews bearers of bad news]].
** At one point she even shoots a bearer of ''good'' news, just because the news involves Fluttershy.
* ShootTheShaggyDog: [[spoiler: Happens when the author [[DroppedABridgeOnHim drops a spaceship]] on the Tyrant.]]
* ShoutOut: One of the DontExplainTheJoke moments references {{Fanfic/Cupcakes}}.
** The LongList of ponies Admiral Awesome makes a speech to includes [[Fanfic/PastSins Nyx]] and [[Fanfic/FalloutEquestria Littlepip]].
** A later speech by Twilight Sparklier thanks another bunch of ponies, including [[Fanfic/OnACrossAndArrow Dusk Shine]].
* SkewedPriorities: Rarity tends to not care about the circumstances surrounding ugliness, only its presence.
--> '''Rarity:''' Darling that blood totally doesn’t match with your mustache.
** At one point she tries to get the heroes to surrender to a bunch of guards working for [[ForTheEvulz Queen Celesia]] [[TooDumbToLive so that she can make her appointment to the hairdresser.]]
* SpaceIsAnOcean: Complete with [[ThreateningShark space sharks]].
* StevenUlyssesPerhero: President P. Resident.
* StupidEvil: Celesia's alignment. Exemplified when she [[spoiler: impales King Gilda]] for no reason beyond "[[ForTheEvulz Because… I’M EVIL]] [[EvilLaugh BWHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!]]"
* SuicidalOverconfidence: [[LampshadeHanging Lampshaded]] in Chapter 4 during the fight with the space sharks.
--> Like everyone in this story the sharks attacked anyway because they didn’t know better.
* SymbolSwearing: Rainbow Dash engages in some when she's brought to Celesia
* TakeThatCritics: The VillainTeamUp at the end includes "all the people who down-rated this story".
* TalkAboutTheWeather: This is Admiral Awesome's reaction to finding the President of Amarican in his tent.
* TalksLikeASimile: The narrator veers into this territory pretty regularly. His choices of analogies tend to be pretty hilarious.
* ThatMakesMeFeelAngry: This occurs as part of the general BeigeProse [[XMeetsY Meets]] CaptainObvious aesthetic of the story.
* [[TheChosenOne The Chosen Mare]]: Twilight.
* TheEmpire: Celesia Evil Loser.
* TheLoad: Fluttershy, [[InformedAttribute according to the author]].
* TheMenInBlack: Except that the author doesn't know the proper term for them, so they're always referred to in BuffySpeak.
--> one of those guys with black suits, black pants, black sunglasses, black shoes and the funny things the ear who looks like those guys from Matrix and always standing next to the president.
** They prove their {{Badass}} nature by [[spoiler: being the only characters who ADMIRAL Awesome can't beat in a fight]].
* TitleDrop: [[LampshadeHanging Lampshaded]] in Chapter 3 when Admiral Awesome makes his first appearance as a DeusExMachina.
** There's another one, similarly lampshaded, in the Last Chapter.
* VaguenessIsComing: President P. Resident does this while describing Enemy Boss Leader's plan.
--> '''P. Resident:''' And he has an evil weapon that will do bad things to people if you don’t stop him.
* VillainTeamUp: Every villain the author could think of ended up being behind the final door in Celesia's castle, which implies that they're all working together.
* WalkingWasteland: Anyone who sees the Tyrant immediately falls unconscious or has a heart attack.
* WhatHappenedToTheMouse: Celesia's nuclear weapon arsenal in the Evarfre Forest is brought up once and then ignored for the rest of the story.
** The same thing happens with the weapon that only [[TheChosenOne The Chosen Mare]] can wield. It's the MacGuffin for the first half of the story, and then completely ignored in the second half.
* WithCatlikeTread: Queen Celesia and her allies still didn't know where the heroes were despite their having just blown up all the towers of the castle Celesia was in.
* WordSaladPhilosophy: The "philosophical banter" between Twilight and Luna.
--> '''Twilight:''' You think you can change fate?
--> '''Luna:''' WE CHOEST OUR OWNEST DESTNY!
--> '''Twilight:''' Money don’t makes you happy.
--> '''Luna:''' BUT EVERTHING ENDEST.
--> '''Twilight:''' If a tree falls down and no one is around does it still makes a sound?
--> '''Luna:''' WHATEST WALKS ON THY FOUR LEGEST IN THOU MORING, ON TWO AT DINNER AND WITH THREE AT NIGHEST?
--> '''Twilight:''' There’s no try. Do it or not.
--> '''Luna:''' BUT THERE’S ALSO NOTEST SPOONEST.
* WouldNotShootACivilian: ADMIRAL Awesome is pretty annoyed when a PunchClockVillain guard makes a HeelFaceTurn and promises to become a civilian, because it means that Awesome wasted a perfectly good PreMortemOneLiner.
* WritersCannotDoMath: Either that or Commander Killemall can't do it.
--> Sure it was very dangerous and there was a 100% chance that he could [[RougeAnglesOfSatin dye]] but the reward was totally worth it.
* YeOldeButcheredeEnglishe: Luna's preferred mode of conversation. She tends to put an emphasis on the "Butcherede" part.
--> '''Luna:''' HAIL KING GILDA OF THE GRYPON. THY HEART THOT TOU NEEDOST MY HELPTH?
* YouHaveFailedMe: Celesia's modus operandi.
** There are limits though, as demonstrated when she manages to resist the urge to do this to Commander Killemall because [[PragmaticVillainy he's her best man so she needs him to kill Twilight]].
* YouKeepUsingThatWord: It seems like, while he knows the author knows the definition of "lesbian", he managed to keep adding to it in his head until it became pretty different from the actual meaning. He doesn't think lesbians are capable of crying, for instance.
** Further supported by the description of Scotaalo:
--> a Pegasusususu filly who was a big fan of Dash and wanted to be such a great lesbian as her idol (but couldn’t because she hadn’t the right hair color)
The story is designed as a parody of various forms of bad fanfiction, and to assist in that goal most of the story is filled with [[LemonyNarrator Lemony Narration]]. Because of this, "the author" as referred to on this page does not refer to Yonasomun, but rather to the fictional persona of his which narrates the story. Said persona has a great hate for Fluttershy, and writes in a style which could be described as "BeigeProse [[XMeetsY meets]] CaptainObvious".
The main thing differentiating the story from a more traditional TrollFic is that lampshades are hung over everything, including having a FourthWallObserver pointing out the flaws in the story constantly.
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!! This fanfic contains examples of:
* AndYourLittleDogToo: Luna killed Twilight's pet in magic kindergarden. And blamed Twilight's brother so she would hate him until Luna killed him.
** [[NominalHero ADMIRAL Awesome]] announces his plans to kill Enemy Boss Leader's family and all his friends, [[ButForMeItWasTuesday forgetting that he already killed them years ago]], which was in fact Enemy Boss Leader's reason [[NiceJobBreakingItHero for joining the Enemies in the first place]].
* AntiHero: Admiral Awesome is this at first, before he devolves into a NominalHero.
* ArsonMurderAndJaywalking: "And there’s n evil entrances living in the forest who does evil dances and worships Satan and play bad videogames."
** Fluttershy's list of offenses in her introductory paragraph.
* AwesomeMcCoolName: ADMIRAL Awesome [[AuthorAvatar Yonasomun]] Armageddon.
* BackFromTheDead: [[spoiler: Enemy Boss Leader.]]
** Also Doctor [[RougeAnglesOfSatin Wwhhoves]]. Twice.
** [[spoiler: ADMIRAL Awesome Yonasomun Armageddon.]]
*** This one is notable as the only one which has any [[HandWave explanation]] at all.
* BadIsGoodAndGoodIsBad: The author managed to get the rating system backwards, so he's convinced that having a 2-star rating on his story compared to how even the most popular stories get 5-star ratings means that his story is way better.
* BadNewsInAGoodWay: PlayedForLaughs. A guard comes in, remembers Celesia's tendency to ShootTheMessenger, and then tells her exactly the same thing he would have otherwise except that he prefaces it by saying that it's good news instead of bad news.
** This seems to be the standard correct fashion to tell bad news to Celesia. King Gilda does it too at one point, with similarly successful results.
* BatDeduction: Admiral Awesome figures out the details of what's going on the moment he arrives in Equestria.
--> He opened his eyes and looked around. “Oh I’m in a land fully of magical talking ponies and those ponies in tree over their fighting against the evil ponies of their evil queen.” he immediately realized [[LampshadeHanging and thus skipped the boring introduction part so that we are right back into the action.]]
* BeigeProse: Most of the story is written in this, to [[SoBadItsGood hilarious]] effect.
* BestServedCold: Enemy Boss Leader's original motive behind joining the Enemies.
* BigNo: Twilight's reaction to Doctor Whooves dying.
* BigWhat: Celesia drops one after being told that her guards failed to kill Twilight's friends and that they killed lots of [[DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment elite elite guards]].
* BlofeldPloy: Celesia kills a random griphon in the room after a guard brings her [[BadNewsInAGoodWay "good news"]], because the news still makes her want to kill someone but the guard had specifically said that it was good news, so he couldn't be killed for it.
* BoundAndGagged: When Rainbow Dash is brought to Celesia, there are large chains all over her body and a towel in her mouth.
* BreakingTheFourthWall: Admiral Awesome starts out his naming plan for the New Awesome Lulamoon Empire by saying he read the name New Lulamoon Republic in a fanfic.
* BringMyBrownPants: Happens to Celesia when she hears Admiral Awesome Yonasomun Armageddon's name.
* BuffySpeak: Characters tend to lapse into it whenever the author doesn't know the actual term for whatever he's describing.
* ButchLesbian: Rainbow Dash is explained to be this [[LampshadeHanging because of her hair]].
--> '''Rainbow Dash:''' I’m a lesbian and my name is Rainbow Dash.
--> '''[[RougeAnglesOfSatin Doctor Whuoves]]:''' Ok that explains the hair.
* ButForMeItWasTuesday: ADMIRAL Awesome had managed to completely forget about having killed Enemy Boss Leader's family and friends by the time we learn about it.
* ButNotTooEvil: Don't worry, the skull Celesia is drinking blood out of isn't a pony skull, [[SarcasmMode so it's all fine]]. Even funnier since she's a CardCarryingVillain most of the time.
* CaptainObvious: Characters' reactions to developments are frequently this, sometimes mixed with DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment.
** [[spoiler: Becomes a NinjaProp when Admiral Awesome pretends to be dying in a fashion so similar to previous, meaningless appearances of CaptainObvious that it can easily fool the readers too.]]
** [[spoiler: Enemy Boss Leader]] reveals that the way to kill Admiral Awesome is to shoot him in the head. [[spoiler: Subverted when it turn out not to actually work though.]]
* CardCarryingVillain: Queen Celesia definitely qualifies.
* CharacterDevelopment: Rainbow Dash wants some after realizing that everyone else is treating her as a FlatCharacter.
* CharlesAtlasSuperpower: Admiral Awesome manages to beat '''a tank''' into a small metal cube with his bare hands.
* ChewBubblegum: Said by Applejack just before their fight with the guards.
* ConspiracyTheorist: ADMIRAL Awesome would rather believe that the President of Amarican is controlled by evil Martian deepsea fishes than that he would, of his own free will, refuse to give him any money or medals.
* ContrivedCoincidence: Pinkie Pie finding a hidden elevator leading to Celesia's throne room. Thoroughly [[LampshadeHanging lampshaded]].
* ComicallyMissingThePoint: ADMIRAL Awesome's response to learning that he failed to save the world was to be horrified... that he wasn't getting any money or medals.
* Crossover: Celesia has a Tyrant from the VideoGame/ResidentEvil series.
** At one point [[TheSlendermanMythos Slenderman]] comes to [[spoiler: [[DeusExMachina Save Rainbow dash from the gay snake]]]].
** During the storming of Ponyland Castle Rainbow Dash uses a Fat Man from {{VideoGame/Fallout}}.
* {{Demonization}}: Fluttershy receives a lot of it. Exemplified in her introductory paragraph:
--> And finally there’s Fluttershy, who nobody likes. [[WriterOnBoard Especially not the author of this story!]] She’s a coward, cries very often, has a silly voice, always apologizes for everything, has an ugly haircut, is afraid of everything, don’t understand sarcasm, don’t do anything useful, says too much, is a pegasus but can’t fly, [[{{Fanfic/Pattycakes}} turned Rainbow Dash into a baby]], became an evil demon-monster-alien-thingy, drugged Dash so that she could have sex with her, [[Fanfic/SilentPonyvilleChronicles dragged Dash and Pinkie into a deadly nightmares that almost killed all of them]] [[ArsonMurderAndJaywalking and has a silly name]]. God I hate Fluttershy! Why couldn’t they use Firefly instead or that earth pony that looks like her but is better?
* DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment: Extremely regularly, and frequently combined with CaptainObvious.
--> She was about to die and then suddenly the explosions stopped. \\
“The explosions stopped.” said Twillight and turned around.
** The elite elite guards.
** "everything exploded in a big explosion."
** After being grabbed by the gay snake, Rainbow Dash is terrified at its assertion that it was going to make her gay, despite the story having already hammered in that she was lesbian.
** "That would be self-suicide."
* DeusExMachina: Admiral Awesome's appearance in Chapter 3.
** The [[MemeticMutation arrow to the knee]] that the new lead guard takes before he can shoot Twilight.
** Twilight notices a hatch in the ground with a ladder in it ''inside a broom closet'' which helps her avoid a [[SpaceIsAnOcean space shark.]]
** [[spoiler: Slenderman's appearance to save Rainbow Dash from the gay snake.]]
** [[spoiler: ADMIRAL Awesome's appearance at the end of the Last Part.]]
* DidNotDoTheResearch: The author admits to not knowing the name of Applejack's farm.
** He thinks that bunnies make "who" sounds all the time, although that may be because Angel was [[{{Retcon}} Retconned]] in place of Owlowiscious.
** He thinks that [[WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic the show]] is made by [[Creator/MarvelComics Marvel]].
* DiesWideOpen: [[LampshadeHanging Lampshaded]] in Chapter 3.
--> He was now dead because his eyes were open.
* {{Dissimile}}: "The Mane Six – minus Twillight Sparkle who was with Doctor Whoowes and Rainbow Dash who was in a prison and Fluttershy who is useless – still fought against the guards."
* DontExplainTheJoke: The author tends to do this any time he has the opportunity to.
--> Queen Meanie! Got it? That’s what Pinkie Pie said as the black fog pony appeared in that one episode it’s a nod to that episode. That makes it funny, even if this is a sad, sad story.
--> Got it? P. Resident = President. Just remove the dot and put the P before the R of the name. It’s funny.
--> [[{{Fanfic/Cupcakes}} Cupcakes! Get it?]]
* ElectricTorture: This seems to be the main reason Celesia keeps Lulamoon around.
* EveryoneCallsHimBarkeep: Enemy Boss Leader.
* EvilLaugh: Queen Celesia has one.
* ExplainingYourPowersToTheEnemy: Applejack yells that they're running out of ammo loud enough that the enemies can hear it too.
* ExtraEyes: The logical conclusion that can be drawn from [[NamesToRunAwayFromReallyFast Commander Killemall]] being described as having [[RedEyesTakeWarning red eyes]] and BlackEyes in the same sentence.
* FailedASpotCheck: Twilight didn't notice that Celesia was evil until it was pointed out to her, despite its extreme obviousness based on the description immediately following said pointing-out.
* FlatCharacter: Rainbow Dash eventually starts to get highly annoyed that every other character is treating her as this by acting as if her only defining trait is being a lesbian.
* FourthWallObserver: Pinkie Pie. She spends a lot of time complaining about the quality of the writing and making [[SuspiciouslySpecificDenial Suspiciously Specific Denials]] about Admiral Awesome's status as an AuthorAvatar MarySue.
** At one point she comments on the inaccuracy of the title of the current chapter of the story.
* FunetikAksent: Applejack uses it. Once.
--> “Nowa whera isa Twillighta? Sha was neva lad befoa.” said Applejack in her accent I’m not using again because it sounds silly.
** All griphons also have them, and unlike Applejack's accent they're actually constantly applied throughout the story.
** Luna also has one which is consistently used: YeOldeButcheredeEnglishe UpToEleven with NoIndoorVoice.
* GodSaveUsFromTheQueen: Queen Celesia is a CardCarryingVillain of the highest order.
* GratuitousGerman: Griphons randomly slip into it.
* [[HappilyEverAfter Happily Even After]]: The guard who delivers BadNewsInAGoodWay is stated to live happily [[RougeAnglesOfSatin even]] after at the end of his scene.
* InformedAttribute: The Evil Enchantress's rhyming.
** And Fluttershy's uselessness.
* KickTheDog: ADMIRAL Awesome's response to Fluttershy's attempted reconciliation is to accept her gift and then punch her again for no reason.
* LaResistance: The New Awesome Lulamoon Empire, despite [[TheEmpire the name]], is this.
* LongList: The list of ponies below Admiral Awesome just before he founds the New Awesome Lulamoon Empire
* LukeIAmYourFather: [[spoiler: Inverted. We go through the whole story thinking Celesia is Twilight's mother, but then at the very end her brother's ghost tells her that it's not actually true, and in fact she killed Twilight's real parents.]]
* MamaBear: Fluttershy demonstrates this when Admiral Awesome tries to send the Cutie Mark Crusaders to explore the Evarfre Forest, further reinforcing her state as "only in-character character".
* MeaningfulRename: Twilight Sparkle changes her name to Twilight Sparklier after becoming an alicorn.
* MindScrew: Anything involving the {{Retcon}} of Owlowiscious.
** Large portions of the Evarfre Forest plot arc too.
** "There were so many Alicorns in the sky that the sky was dark light at night without moon or stars."
* NamesToRunAwayFromReallyFast: Commander Killemall.
* NinjaPirateZombieRobot: ADMIRAL Awesome Yonasomun Armageddon is a vampire saijin admiral [[spoiler: Jedi knight]].
* NonSpecificallyForeign: One of Admiral Awesome's enemies is identified as speaking in "a funny foreign accent".
* NoIndoorVoice: Luna.
* NominalHero. ADMIRAL Awesome becomes this [[spoiler: after he comes back from the dead]].
* NonIndicativeName: The Final Chapter is, in fact, the 2nd-last chapter. The Final Chapter 2 is the last chapter.
* NoodleIncident: While the gay snake was turning Rainbow Dash gay, one bit of description was "But this time no turtle could save her".
* OffscreenMomentOfAwesome: Rainbow Dash's escape from Ponyland Castle.
* [[OnlySaneMan Only Sane Mare]]: Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie, in two very different ways. Fluttershy is the only character whose personality isn't completely warped and who doesn't worship the metaphorical ground Admiral Awesome treads on, as well as being the one most likely to come up with good plans (which are then ignored because the author doesn't like her). Pinkie Pie, meanwhile, is a FourthWallObserver in the story and therefore is the only one who realizes that the whole thing is just a terribly-written fanfic.
* [[PreviouslyOn Previously Stuff That Happened Before]]: Parodied at the beginning of the Last Part, which quotes a large collection of earlier bits from the story which are all completely meaningless out of context. In addition, it actually has one scene which actually ''wasn't'' in the story before: [[spoiler: Luna killing Twilight's brother.]]
* RageAgainstTheAuthor: Pinkie Pie's final summation has definite shades of this.
--> '''[[FourthWallObserver Pinkie Pie]]:''' Duh! We’re in a [[RougeAnglesOfSatin poorly written story full of grammatical errors]] with a bland MarySue of the author as main character. Twilight is married to Trixie who is a colt, Princess Celestia is a super-evil meanie who [[ShootTheMessenger kills people because they bring her bad news]] and Rainbow Dash was shipped with [[TheSlendermanMythos the Slenderman]]. Of course, this is a [[ContrivedCoincidence strange coincidence]]! But at least it means that this story will be over very soon. Or do you want to read any more pages about Meanie Sue betting up guards?
* RedShirt: Background ponies, lacking NominalImportance, are not only this, but are also treated as this by the good guys, who send them out on any task which seems too dangerous to risk someone ''important'' on.
--> '''Admiral Awesome:''' No you are a main character. It’s better to send in a unimportant background pony.
* Retcon: An amazingly [[MindScrew Mind Screwy]] case. Angel is there instead of Owlowiscious [[RougeAnglesOfSatin "because he's death and retconed"]]. Despite this, the story continues to mention him, and all of the characters are aware of the fact that he was retconned.
** Trixie is identified as Twilight's boyfriend at first, but in Chapter 5 she's referred to as Twilight's husband.
* RevengeFic: Fluttershy's [[InformedAttribute uselessness]] gets extremely heavy emphasis in the story.
* RougeAnglesOfSatin: Pretty frequently.
* ShapedLikeItself:
--> “I’m Admiral Awesome Yonasomun Armageddon, leader of the U. S. Army Saijin Brigade.” said Awesome Yonasomun Armageddon, leader of the U. S. Army Saijin Brigade.
* ShockAndAwe: Celesia can shoot [[RougeAnglesOfSatin lightings]] out her eyes.
* ShootTheHostage: ADMIRAL Awesome does this to signify the beginning of his journey from [[SlidingScaleOfAntiHeroes Type III]] AntiHero to NominalHero.
* ShootTheMessenger: One of Celesia's favorite activities, although she normally confines it to [[BearerOfBadNews bearers of bad news]].
** At one point she even shoots a bearer of ''good'' news, just because the news involves Fluttershy.
* ShootTheShaggyDog: [[spoiler: Happens when the author [[DroppedABridgeOnHim drops a spaceship]] on the Tyrant.]]
* ShoutOut: One of the DontExplainTheJoke moments references {{Fanfic/Cupcakes}}.
** The LongList of ponies Admiral Awesome makes a speech to includes [[Fanfic/PastSins Nyx]] and [[Fanfic/FalloutEquestria Littlepip]].
** A later speech by Twilight Sparklier thanks another bunch of ponies, including [[Fanfic/OnACrossAndArrow Dusk Shine]].
* SkewedPriorities: Rarity tends to not care about the circumstances surrounding ugliness, only its presence.
--> '''Rarity:''' Darling that blood totally doesn’t match with your mustache.
** At one point she tries to get the heroes to surrender to a bunch of guards working for [[ForTheEvulz Queen Celesia]] [[TooDumbToLive so that she can make her appointment to the hairdresser.]]
* SpaceIsAnOcean: Complete with [[ThreateningShark space sharks]].
* StevenUlyssesPerhero: President P. Resident.
* StupidEvil: Celesia's alignment. Exemplified when she [[spoiler: impales King Gilda]] for no reason beyond "[[ForTheEvulz Because… I’M EVIL]] [[EvilLaugh BWHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!]]"
* SuicidalOverconfidence: [[LampshadeHanging Lampshaded]] in Chapter 4 during the fight with the space sharks.
--> Like everyone in this story the sharks attacked anyway because they didn’t know better.
* SymbolSwearing: Rainbow Dash engages in some when she's brought to Celesia
* TakeThatCritics: The VillainTeamUp at the end includes "all the people who down-rated this story".
* TalkAboutTheWeather: This is Admiral Awesome's reaction to finding the President of Amarican in his tent.
* TalksLikeASimile: The narrator veers into this territory pretty regularly. His choices of analogies tend to be pretty hilarious.
* ThatMakesMeFeelAngry: This occurs as part of the general BeigeProse [[XMeetsY Meets]] CaptainObvious aesthetic of the story.
* [[TheChosenOne The Chosen Mare]]: Twilight.
* TheEmpire: Celesia Evil Loser.
* TheLoad: Fluttershy, [[InformedAttribute according to the author]].
* TheMenInBlack: Except that the author doesn't know the proper term for them, so they're always referred to in BuffySpeak.
--> one of those guys with black suits, black pants, black sunglasses, black shoes and the funny things the ear who looks like those guys from Matrix and always standing next to the president.
** They prove their {{Badass}} nature by [[spoiler: being the only characters who ADMIRAL Awesome can't beat in a fight]].
* TitleDrop: [[LampshadeHanging Lampshaded]] in Chapter 3 when Admiral Awesome makes his first appearance as a DeusExMachina.
** There's another one, similarly lampshaded, in the Last Chapter.
* VaguenessIsComing: President P. Resident does this while describing Enemy Boss Leader's plan.
--> '''P. Resident:''' And he has an evil weapon that will do bad things to people if you don’t stop him.
* VillainTeamUp: Every villain the author could think of ended up being behind the final door in Celesia's castle, which implies that they're all working together.
* WalkingWasteland: Anyone who sees the Tyrant immediately falls unconscious or has a heart attack.
* WhatHappenedToTheMouse: Celesia's nuclear weapon arsenal in the Evarfre Forest is brought up once and then ignored for the rest of the story.
** The same thing happens with the weapon that only [[TheChosenOne The Chosen Mare]] can wield. It's the MacGuffin for the first half of the story, and then completely ignored in the second half.
* WithCatlikeTread: Queen Celesia and her allies still didn't know where the heroes were despite their having just blown up all the towers of the castle Celesia was in.
* WordSaladPhilosophy: The "philosophical banter" between Twilight and Luna.
--> '''Twilight:''' You think you can change fate?
--> '''Luna:''' WE CHOEST OUR OWNEST DESTNY!
--> '''Twilight:''' Money don’t makes you happy.
--> '''Luna:''' BUT EVERTHING ENDEST.
--> '''Twilight:''' If a tree falls down and no one is around does it still makes a sound?
--> '''Luna:''' WHATEST WALKS ON THY FOUR LEGEST IN THOU MORING, ON TWO AT DINNER AND WITH THREE AT NIGHEST?
--> '''Twilight:''' There’s no try. Do it or not.
--> '''Luna:''' BUT THERE’S ALSO NOTEST SPOONEST.
* WouldNotShootACivilian: ADMIRAL Awesome is pretty annoyed when a PunchClockVillain guard makes a HeelFaceTurn and promises to become a civilian, because it means that Awesome wasted a perfectly good PreMortemOneLiner.
* WritersCannotDoMath: Either that or Commander Killemall can't do it.
--> Sure it was very dangerous and there was a 100% chance that he could [[RougeAnglesOfSatin dye]] but the reward was totally worth it.
* YeOldeButcheredeEnglishe: Luna's preferred mode of conversation. She tends to put an emphasis on the "Butcherede" part.
--> '''Luna:''' HAIL KING GILDA OF THE GRYPON. THY HEART THOT TOU NEEDOST MY HELPTH?
* YouHaveFailedMe: Celesia's modus operandi.
** There are limits though, as demonstrated when she manages to resist the urge to do this to Commander Killemall because [[PragmaticVillainy he's her best man so she needs him to kill Twilight]].
* YouKeepUsingThatWord: It seems like, while he knows the author knows the definition of "lesbian", he managed to keep adding to it in his head until it became pretty different from the actual meaning. He doesn't think lesbians are capable of crying, for instance.
** Further supported by the description of Scotaalo:
--> a Pegasusususu filly who was a big fan of Dash and wanted to be such a great lesbian as her idol (but couldn’t because she hadn’t the right hair color)
