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** Koume finds it rather odd that Anzu, Momo and Yuzu's parents all named them after fruit(apricot, peach and citrus, respectively). Koume's name means "little plum" in Japanese, and she never acknowledges that her own parents also named her after a fruit. [[https://culturetour.net/japanese-names/fruit-themed-baby-names As listed here]], it's [[RealityIsUnrealistic actually pretty common]] in Japan for girls to have some sort of a fruit-themed name, just like the Student Council members and Koume do.
** Koume notices that Maho is a rather AloofBigSister to Miho, by virtue of the fact that she doesn't hug, kiss or talk softly to Miho in public. Her conclusion isn't entirely baseless, but the Japanese refrain from public displays of affection, so it wouldn't be too unusual for Maho to avoid being openly affectionate to Miho, at least where other people could see her. In fact, that was the very reason why Anime!Miho was shocked/startled when Kay went up and hugged her after the Saunders match. Hugging someone is not something expected in Japanese social interaction.
** The fic has Koume recall a time in her and Miho's second year of middle school, "when they were about eleven." The second year of Japanese middle school is eighth grade, so Miho and Koume would be 13 or 14.
** Koume finds it rather odd that Anzu, Momo and Yuzu's parents all named them after fruit(apricot, peach and citrus, respectively). Koume's name means "little plum" in Japanese, and she never acknowledges that her own parents also named her after a fruit. [[https://culturetour.net/japanese-names/fruit-themed-baby-names As listed here]], it's [[RealityIsUnrealistic actually pretty common]] in Japan for girls to have some sort of a fruit-themed name, just like the Student Council members and Koume do.
** Koume notices that Maho is a rather AloofBigSister to Miho, by virtue of the fact that she doesn't hug, kiss or talk softly to Miho in public. Her conclusion isn't entirely baseless, but the Japanese refrain from public displays of affection, so it wouldn't be too unusual for Maho to avoid being openly affectionate to Miho, at least where other people could see her. In fact, that was the very reason why Anime!Miho was shocked/startled when Kay went up and hugged her after the Saunders match. Hugging someone is not something expected in Japanese social interaction.
** The fic has Koume recall a time in her and Miho's second year of middle school, "when they were about eleven." The second year of Japanese middle school is eighth grade, so Miho and Koume would be 13 or 14.
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* AdaptationPersonalityChange: In canon, Koume is a NiceGirl who isn't shown having anything bad to say about anyone and appears to have no problem continuing to serve on Kuromorimine's team after Miho's departure. In this fic, she's bitter toward the student council for forcing Miho to take tankery, resents Maho for being an AloofBigSister to Miho, and is rather cynical about Oarai's chances of winning.
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* AdaptationPersonalityChange: In canon, Koume is a NiceGirl who isn't shown having anything bad to say about anyone and appears to have no problem continuing to serve on Kuromorimine's team after Miho's departure. In this fic, she's bitter toward the student council for forcing Miho to take tankery, resents Maho for being an AloofBigSister to Miho, and is rather cynical about Oarai's chances of winning.
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** The student council. In canon, their threat to expel Miho from Oarai if she refused to take tankery was portrayed as partly a bluff and partly a case of ExactWords- it's not a very nice thing to do, but it's understandable given the circumstances. In this fic, the threat is played seriously, and Miho joins out of fear of being expelled, rather than because she wants to do tankery along with her new friends. The fic also has the student council shoot down many of Miho and Koume's proposals, despite the fact that the two of them obviously know much more abou tankery than the student council does.
* AdaptationPersonalityChange: In canon, Koume is a NiceGirl who isn't shown having anything bad to say about anyone. In this fic, she's bitter toward the student council for forcing Miho to take tankery, resents Maho for being an AloofBigSister to Miho, and is rather cynical about Oarai's chances of winning.
* AdaptationPersonalityChange: In canon, Koume is a NiceGirl who isn't shown having anything bad to say about anyone. In this fic, she's bitter toward the student council for forcing Miho to take tankery, resents Maho for being an AloofBigSister to Miho, and is rather cynical about Oarai's chances of winning.
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** The student council. In canon, their threat to expel Miho from Oarai if she refused to take tankery was portrayed as partly a bluff and partly a case of ExactWords- it's not a very nice thing to do, but it's understandable given the circumstances. In this fic, the threat is played seriously, and Miho joins out of fear of being expelled, rather than because she wants to do tankery along with her new friends. The fic also has the student council shoot down many of Miho and Koume's proposals, despite the fact that the two of them obviously know much more abou about tankery than the student council does.
* AdaptationPersonalityChange: In canon, Koume is a NiceGirl who isn't shown having anything bad to say aboutanyone.anyone and appears to have no problem continuing to serve on Kuromorimine's team after Miho's departure. In this fic, she's bitter toward the student council for forcing Miho to take tankery, resents Maho for being an AloofBigSister to Miho, and is rather cynical about Oarai's chances of winning.
* AdaptationPersonalityChange: In canon, Koume is a NiceGirl who isn't shown having anything bad to say about
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* DeconstructionFic: The fic goes into more detail about the expenses related to tankery, such as the fuel and ammo used in matches, as well as the need for a professional repair crew to get the tanks up and running again.
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* SurprisinglyRealisticOutcome: The fic goes into more detail about the expenses related to tankery, such as the fuel and ammo used in matches, as well as the need for a professional repair crew to get the tanks up and running again.
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* WhoNamesTheirKidDude: Koume is flabbergasted that Anzu, Momo and Yuzu's parents named them after fruits- name, apricot, peach and citrus, respectively. The fact that Koume's name means "little plum" would make this a case of HypocriticalHumor, but the story never acknowledges this.
** RealityIsUnrealistic: On top of that it's fairly common in Japan for girls to have some sort of a fruit-themed name, just like those four girls mentioned above do...
** RealityIsUnrealistic: On top of that it's fairly common in Japan for girls to have some sort of a fruit-themed name, just like those four girls mentioned above do...
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* WhoNamesTheirKidDude: Koume is flabbergasted that Anzu, Momo and Yuzu's parents named them after fruits- name, apricot, peach and citrus, respectively. The fact that Koume's name means "little plum" would make this a case of HypocriticalHumor, but the story never acknowledges this.
** RealityIsUnrealistic: On top of that it'sthis. [[RealityIsUnrealistic It's actually fairly common in Japan for girls to have some sort of a fruit-themed name, just like those four girls mentioned above do...]]
** RealityIsUnrealistic: On top of that it's
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** The student council. In canon, their threat to expel Miho from Oarai if she refused to take tankery was portrayed as partly a bluff and partly a case of ExactWords- it's not a very nice thing to do, but it's understandable given the circumstances. In this fic, the threat is played seriously, and Miho joins out of fear of being expelled, rather than because she wants to do tankery along with her new friends. The fic also has the student council shoot down many of Miho and Koume's proposals, despite the fact that the two of them obviously know much more abou tankery than the student council does.
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* DidntThinkThisThrough: Like in canon, the student council revives Oarai's tankery team on a whim, but this fic shows that they neglected to consider the preparations required to get the team up and running.
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* AbsurdlyPowerfulStudentCouncil: As per canon. It's noted that the students on the council are free to treat the teachers as subordinates, to the point at which they don't bother to address the teachers as "sensei."
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* AbsurdlyPowerfulStudentCouncil: As per canon. It's noted that the students on the council are free to treat the teachers as subordinates, to the point at which they don't bother to address the teachers as "sensei."
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* AbsurdlyPowerfulStudentCouncil: As per canon. It's noted that the students on the council are free to treat the teachers as subordinates, to the point at which they don't bother to address the teachers as "sensei."
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** Koume is significantly more snarky and resentful of others in this fic, even if she doesn't openly say it.
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** Koume is significantly snarkier and more snarky and resentful of others in this fic, even if she doesn't openly say it.
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** When Darjeeling meets Miho, she immediately inquires about the circumstances in which the latter departed Kuromorimine, despite the fact that anyone can tell this is a sensitive subject for Miho.
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I know I mentioned this in YMMV already but I think this factoid deserves a mention in the main page as well...
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* WhoNamesTheirKidDude: Koume is flabbergasted that Anzu, Momo and Yuzu's parents named them after fruits- name, apricot, peach and citrus, respectively. The fact that Koume's name means "little plum" would make this a case of HypocriticalHumor, but the story never acknowledges this.
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* WhoNamesTheirKidDude: Koume is flabbergasted that Anzu, Momo and Yuzu's parents named them after fruits- name, apricot, peach and citrus, respectively. The fact that Koume's name means "little plum" would make this a case of HypocriticalHumor, but the story never acknowledges this.this.
** RealityIsUnrealistic: On top of that it's fairly common in Japan for girls to have some sort of a fruit-themed name, just like those four girls mentioned above do...
** RealityIsUnrealistic: On top of that it's fairly common in Japan for girls to have some sort of a fruit-themed name, just like those four girls mentioned above do...
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* FirstPersonSmartass: Since Koume's the primary POV character, the narration often shows her thoughts. She has a number of snarky mental notes, many directed at the student counci.
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* AdaptationalJerkass:
** Koume is significantly more snarky and resentful of others in this fic, even if she doesn't openly say it.
** Downplayed with Maho, but her AloofBigSister status is played up in the fic thus far.
** Koume is significantly more snarky and resentful of others in this fic, even if she doesn't openly say it.
** Downplayed with Maho, but her AloofBigSister status is played up in the fic thus far.
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* TheLoad: The student council. Not only do they perform as poorly in battle as they did in the early series, but they're also unwilling to listen to Momo or Koume.
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* AdaptationalDumbass: The student council. The author goes into more detail about the effort needed to set up a tankery team, so the student council, which decided to restart their tankery team on a whim to save their school, comes off as more incompetent than in canon. To make matters worse, they're also unwilling to listen to Miho or Koume.
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* AdaptationalDumbass: The student council. The author goes into more detail about the effort needed to set up a tankery team, team(e.g. keeping tanks supplied with fuel and ammo, and doing the maintenance on them to get them running), so the student council, which decided to restart their tankery team on a whim to save their school, comes off as more incompetent than in canon. To make matters worse, they're also unwilling to listen to Miho or Koume.
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* SurprisinglyRealisticOutcome: The fic goes into more detail about the expenses related to tankery, such as the fuel and ammo used in matches, as well as the need for a professional repair crew to get the tanks up and running again.
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* OCStandin: Most of Koume's personality, save for her gratitude and loyalty toward Miho, is made from whole cloth for this fanfic, since she has barely any personality in the fic.
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* OCStandin: Most of Koume's personality, save for her gratitude and loyalty toward Miho, is made from whole cloth for this fanfic, since she only has barely any personality one appearance in the fic.canon.
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''Turtles'' is an ''Anime/GirlsUndPanzer'' fic by [[https://www.fanfiction.net/u/10817557/ThatRabidPotato ThatRabitPotato]].
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''Turtles'' is an ''Anime/GirlsUndPanzer'' fic by [[https://www.fanfiction.net/u/10817557/ThatRabidPotato ThatRabitPotato]].
ThatRabidPotato]].
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''Turtles'' is an ''Anime/GirlsUndPanzer'' fic by [[https://www.fanfiction.net/u/10817557/ThatRabidPotato ThatRabitPotato]].
Miho Nishizumi left her old school, Kuromorimine Women's Colleague, on bad terms with most of her former teammates after sacrificing a tournament victory to save her teammates from drowning. But one girl, Koume Akaboshi, not only sympathized with Miho, but chose to follow her to Oarai. Now, both girls are once again caught up in tankery, not knowing that they are fighting to keep their new school open.
The fic can be found [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13788333/1/Turtles here]] and is in progress.
!The fic contains examples of:
*AdaptationExpansion:
** The fic begins shortly before the start of the first episode and shows some events from when Miho and Koume came to Oarai.
** The fic greatly expands on the period in which the team is getting started and shows the process in more detail.
* AbsurdlyPowerfulStudentCouncil: As per canon. It's noted that the students on the council are free to treat the teachers as subordinates, to the point at which they don't bother to address the teachers as "sensei."
*AdaptationalDumbass: The student council. The author goes into more detail about the effort needed to set up a tankery team, so the student council, which decided to restart their tankery team on a whim to save their school, comes off as more incompetent than in canon. To make matters worse, they're also unwilling to listen to Miho or Koume.
*AdaptationPersonalityChange: In canon, Koume is a NiceGirl who isn't shown having anything bad to say about anyone. In this fic, she's bitter toward the student council for forcing Miho to take tankery, resents Maho for being an AloofBigSister to Miho, and is rather cynical about Oarai's chances of winning.
*DisproportionateRetribution: According to Miho, St. Gloriana sees Oarai as their inferiors in tankery, and expects Oarai to treat them with respect, such as using "-dono" on the St. Gloriana top brass. If they feel slighted, they will field the Tortoise during the practice match and crush Oarai.
*ForWantOfANail: What if Koume came to Oarai with Miho?
*IgnoredExpert: To Koume's frustration, the student council is unwilling to listen to her or Miho, the two students with tankery experience.
*UsefulNotes/JapaneseHonorifics
** Anzu manages to get away with addressing a teacher as -san rather than "sensei" by virtue of her membership in the AbsurdlyPowerfulStudentCouncil.-
** Koume briefly drops the "-san" from Hana's name to make a point while texting her.
*TheNicknamer: Koume dubs Momo "Peachy."
*OCStandin: Most of Koume's personality, save for her gratitude and loyalty toward Miho, is made from whole cloth for this fanfic, since she has barely any personality in the fic.
*TheStationsOfTheCanon: The fic goes through the basic plot points of the show- Miho joining tankery, the team finding the tanks, the intra-team practice match and the exhibition match with St. Gloriana.
*TeethClenchedTeamwork: Koume dislikes the student council for pressganging Miho into the tankery team, but not only ends up on the same crew as them, but in the same tank.
*TheyCallMeMisterTibbs: In a flashback from ''Phase Erika'', Maho insists that Miho call her by her title.
*UndyingLoyalty: Since Miho saved Koume's life, Koume follows Miho to Oarai, and does not think well of people who disrespect her.
*WhoNamesTheirKidDude: Koume is flabbergasted that Anzu, Momo and Yuzu's parents named them after fruits- name, apricot, peach and citrus, respectively. The fact that Koume's name means "little plum" would make this a case of HypocriticalHumor, but the story never acknowledges this.
Miho Nishizumi left her old school, Kuromorimine Women's Colleague, on bad terms with most of her former teammates after sacrificing a tournament victory to save her teammates from drowning. But one girl, Koume Akaboshi, not only sympathized with Miho, but chose to follow her to Oarai. Now, both girls are once again caught up in tankery, not knowing that they are fighting to keep their new school open.
The fic can be found [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13788333/1/Turtles here]] and is in progress.
!The fic contains examples of:
*AdaptationExpansion:
** The fic begins shortly before the start of the first episode and shows some events from when Miho and Koume came to Oarai.
** The fic greatly expands on the period in which the team is getting started and shows the process in more detail.
* AbsurdlyPowerfulStudentCouncil: As per canon. It's noted that the students on the council are free to treat the teachers as subordinates, to the point at which they don't bother to address the teachers as "sensei."
*AdaptationalDumbass: The student council. The author goes into more detail about the effort needed to set up a tankery team, so the student council, which decided to restart their tankery team on a whim to save their school, comes off as more incompetent than in canon. To make matters worse, they're also unwilling to listen to Miho or Koume.
*AdaptationPersonalityChange: In canon, Koume is a NiceGirl who isn't shown having anything bad to say about anyone. In this fic, she's bitter toward the student council for forcing Miho to take tankery, resents Maho for being an AloofBigSister to Miho, and is rather cynical about Oarai's chances of winning.
*DisproportionateRetribution: According to Miho, St. Gloriana sees Oarai as their inferiors in tankery, and expects Oarai to treat them with respect, such as using "-dono" on the St. Gloriana top brass. If they feel slighted, they will field the Tortoise during the practice match and crush Oarai.
*ForWantOfANail: What if Koume came to Oarai with Miho?
*IgnoredExpert: To Koume's frustration, the student council is unwilling to listen to her or Miho, the two students with tankery experience.
*UsefulNotes/JapaneseHonorifics
** Anzu manages to get away with addressing a teacher as -san rather than "sensei" by virtue of her membership in the AbsurdlyPowerfulStudentCouncil.-
** Koume briefly drops the "-san" from Hana's name to make a point while texting her.
*TheNicknamer: Koume dubs Momo "Peachy."
*OCStandin: Most of Koume's personality, save for her gratitude and loyalty toward Miho, is made from whole cloth for this fanfic, since she has barely any personality in the fic.
*TheStationsOfTheCanon: The fic goes through the basic plot points of the show- Miho joining tankery, the team finding the tanks, the intra-team practice match and the exhibition match with St. Gloriana.
*TeethClenchedTeamwork: Koume dislikes the student council for pressganging Miho into the tankery team, but not only ends up on the same crew as them, but in the same tank.
*TheyCallMeMisterTibbs: In a flashback from ''Phase Erika'', Maho insists that Miho call her by her title.
*UndyingLoyalty: Since Miho saved Koume's life, Koume follows Miho to Oarai, and does not think well of people who disrespect her.
*WhoNamesTheirKidDude: Koume is flabbergasted that Anzu, Momo and Yuzu's parents named them after fruits- name, apricot, peach and citrus, respectively. The fact that Koume's name means "little plum" would make this a case of HypocriticalHumor, but the story never acknowledges this.
