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** The comm chatter during the battle in chapter three borrows lines from ''Film/ANewHope'', ''Film/{{Transformers}}'', and ''Film/TopGun''.
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** The comm chatter during the battle in chapter three borrows lines from ''Film/ANewHope'', ''Film/{{Transformers}}'', ''Film/{{Transformers|2007}}'', and ''Film/TopGun''.
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* MultiEthnicName: An unseen Terran admiral named Dzhabrail Mahadeo (Chechen given name, Hindi surname).
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-->'''Eleya and Teri:''' ''Mother!''
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* NeverLiveItDown: InUniverse. After Brokosh becomes the third person in the fic to refer back to Eleya cussing out Tuvok's conference in "Surface Tension", Eleya wonders aloud if she's ever going to live it down. Brokosh says probably not, but he actually agreed with her feelings on J'mpok.
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* OnceDoneNeverForgotten: After Brokosh becomes the third person in the fic to refer back to Eleya cussing out Tuvok's conference in "Surface Tension", Eleya wonders aloud if she's ever going to live it down. Brokosh says probably not, but he actually agreed with her feelings on J'mpok.
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* LikesOlderMen: * {{Implied}}. The work opens with viewpoint character Kanril Eleya's younger sister Teri marrying a vedek[[labelnote:*]]the Bajoran equivalent of a cardinal[[/labelnote]] named Armen Aldos. Eleya mentions offhand that her new brother-in-law was a teacher's aide for her when she was in school (and Teri is four years younger than 29-year-old Eleya, which puts Aldos in his late thirties, minimum).
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--> '''K'lak:''' I have sworn my honor to the service of the Federation. I would suggest you do not make an issue of it, ''qarDaSngan''.[[labelnote:*]]Cardassian[[/labelnote]] ''({{beat}})'' And if you call my ''parmaqqay''[[labelnote:*]]girlfriend[[/labelnote]] "scum" again, I will have your ''moQDu’''[[labelnote:*]]literally "spheres", {{fanon}} guess for "testicles"[[/labelnote]] as a trophy for my quarters.
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--> '''K'lak:''' I have sworn my honor to the service of the Federation. I would suggest you do not make an issue of it, ''qarDaSngan''.[[labelnote:*]]Cardassian[[/labelnote]] ''({{beat}})'' And if you call my ''parmaqqay''[[labelnote:*]]girlfriend[[/labelnote]] "scum" again, I will have your ''moQDu’''[[labelnote:*]]literally "spheres", "spherical body parts", {{fanon}} guess for "testicles"[[/labelnote]] as a trophy for my quarters.
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*** The latter doubles as an ActorAllusion, as Eleya is "played by" Creator/JenniferHale, the voice of FemShep.
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*** The latter doubles as an ActorAllusion, as Eleya is "played by" Creator/JenniferHale, the voice of FemShep.[=FemShep=].
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*** The latter doubles as an ActorAllusion, as Eleya is "played by" Creator/JenniferHale, the voice of FemShep.
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--> '''Tess:''' [[Recap/StarTrekS2E4MirrorMirror Terrans managed it with Kirk.]]\\
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--> '''Tess:''' [[Recap/StarTrekS2E4MirrorMirror Terrans managed it with Kirk.]]\\]][[note]]Actually, they didn't; Mirror Kirk was found out almost immediately.[[/note]]\\
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* MeetTheInLaws: The first chapter has Eleya introduce her operations officer-slash-boyfriend Gaarra to her family while attending her sister's wedding. Her parents are mildly annoyed that Eleya ''isn't'' planning to marry Gaarra anytime soon (it's because they're already in violation of fraternization rules as a [[TheCaptain commanding officer]] loving one of her senior staff).
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* GoodIsNotNice: Eleya forcibly stops the Klingon-Cardassian Alliance from summarily executing Terran prisoners of war and gives them political asylum... except for the one that really ''was'' guilty of war crimes.
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* GoodIsNotNice: GoodIsNotSoft: Eleya forcibly stops the Klingon-Cardassian Alliance from summarily executing Terran prisoners of war and gives them political asylum... except for the one that really ''was'' guilty of war crimes.
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* GoodIsNotNice: Eleya forcibly stops the Klingon-Cardassian Alliance from summarily executing Terran prisoners of war and gives them political asylum... except for the one that really ''was'' guilty of war crimes.
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* KillAndReplace: {{Defied}}. In chapter 5 the possibility of Dal Kanril replacing Eleya is brought up and immediately discarded. Eleya has old scars that her counterpart doesn't, is a centimeter taller, and her counterpart was raised mostly Cardassian and her thought patterns are different enough to be a giveaway to Chief Corpsman Watkins, an empath.
* KillingYourAlternateSelf {{Defied}}. See the example for KillAndReplace, above. Just as well, all things considered.
* KillingYourAlternateSelf {{Defied}}. See the example for KillAndReplace, above. Just as well, all things considered.
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* KillAndReplace: {{Defied}}. In chapter 5 the possibility of Dal Kanril replacing Eleya is brought up and immediately discarded. Eleya has old scars that her counterpart doesn't, is a centimeter taller, and her counterpart was raised mostly Cardassian and her thought patterns are different enough to be a giveaway to Chief Corpsman Watkins, an a part-Betazoid empath.
*KillingYourAlternateSelf KillingYourAlternateSelf: {{Defied}}. See the example for KillAndReplace, above. Just as well, all things considered.
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* KillingYourAlternateSelf {{Defied}}. See the example for KillAndReplace, above. Just as well, all things considered.
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* AlienNonInterferenceClause: Eleya brings up the Prime Directive, along with an executive order from President Okeg, as a reason why she can't give cloaking tech to the Klingon-Cardassian Alliance. But she then cites precedents for breaking the PD to fix past breaches and in cases of humanitarian crises (something she's called out the Federation for ''not'' doing in the past), and instead gives the Alliance some tricks to ''defeat'' cloaking devices and even the odds.
** Gul Morag's CDS ''Koranak'' appears to be the mirror universe counterpart to a ship that took part in the Obsidian Order/Tal Shiar attack on the Founder homeworld in "[[Recap/StarTrekDeepSpaceNineS03E21TheDieIsCast The Die Is Cast]]".
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* DropPod: The Cardassians launch a drop pod assault on the Terran surface base after the Terrans erect transporter scramblers.
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* DropPod: The Cardassians launch a drop pod assault on the Terran surface base after the Terrans erect transporter scramblers.scramblers, and not without casualties. Several pods are shot down, the dalin who joins them, the XO of CDS ''Tavracet'', crashes and dies, and the commander of Eleya's MACO unit breaks a leg.
* InsertGrenadeHere: Eleya does this to a Terran tank because they don't have any AntiArmor weapons with them.
-->'''SCPO. Athezra Darrod:''' Showoff!
-->'''SCPO. Athezra Darrod:''' Showoff!
* QuieterThanSilence: {{Discussed}} in chapter seven. Eleya explains that on a starship, even when everything else is quiet you can still hear the background hum from the life-support systems, but a drop pod is completely silent except for the soldier's own breathing until it hits the atmosphere.
* RankUp: Gul Morag is apparently set to be promoted to jagul and replace Mekor Dukat as head of the Seventh Order.
* RankUp: Gul Morag is apparently set to be promoted to jagul and replace Mekor Dukat as head of the Seventh Order.
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* SpaceMines: The Terrans lay a minefield ahead of the oncoming Klingon/Cardassian fleet. Master Chief Wiggin spots it and the ''Bajor'' is able to stop in time, but a quarter of the fleet ends up inside it and General K'Bor dies with his carrier.
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* SpaceMines: The Terrans lay a minefield ahead of the oncoming Klingon/Cardassian fleet. Master Chief Wiggin spots it and the ''Bajor'' is able to stop in time, but a quarter of the fleet ends up inside it and General K'Bor dies with his carrier.carrier, and the ''Koranak'' takes serious damage.
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** Eleya voices her suspicions regarding how the Cardassians might turn on her to Gaarra.
--->'''Gaarra:''' Come on, El. The Alliance has as much to gain as we do. [[EnemyMine Enemy of my enemy]]--\\
'''Eleya:''' --[[Webcomic/SchlockMercenary is my enemy's enemy. No more, no less.]]
--->'''Gaarra:''' Come on, El. The Alliance has as much to gain as we do. [[EnemyMine Enemy of my enemy]]--\\
'''Eleya:''' --[[Webcomic/SchlockMercenary is my enemy's enemy. No more, no less.]]
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** One of the ships assigned to guard the ''Bajor'' in the Terran prime universe base attack is the USS ''Laporin'', after a classmate of Ben Sisko's who was said to have been killed by the Klingons in Series/DS9: "[[Recap/StarTrekDeepSpaceNineS05E01ApocalypseRising Apocalypse Rising]]". Meanwhile the USS ''Jadzia Dax'', previously mentioned in ''Fanfic/{{Bait and Switch|STO}}'' takes part in the battle in chapter three.
** Gul Ekoor, commanding the Cardassian Second Order forces taking part in the battle, was one of the Cardassian soldiers who joined Damar, Garak, and Kira for the attack on the Dominion military headquarters in Series/DS9: "[[Recap/StarTrekDeepSpaceNineS07E25E26WhatYouLeaveBehind What You Leave Behind]]".
** Gul Ekoor, commanding the Cardassian Second Order forces taking part in the battle, was one of the Cardassian soldiers who joined Damar, Garak, and Kira for the attack on the Dominion military headquarters in Series/DS9: "[[Recap/StarTrekDeepSpaceNineS07E25E26WhatYouLeaveBehind What You Leave Behind]]".
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** One of the ships assigned to guard the ''Bajor'' in the Terran prime universe base attack is the USS ''Laporin'', after a classmate of Ben Sisko's who was said to have been killed by the Klingons in Series/DS9: [=DS9=]: "[[Recap/StarTrekDeepSpaceNineS05E01ApocalypseRising Apocalypse Rising]]". Meanwhile the USS ''Jadzia Dax'', previously mentioned in ''Fanfic/{{Bait and Switch|STO}}'' takes part in the battle in chapter three.
** Gul Ekoor, commanding the Cardassian Second Order forces taking part in the battle, was one of the Cardassian soldiers who joined Damar, Garak, and Kira for the attack on the Dominion military headquarters inSeries/DS9: [=DS9=]: "[[Recap/StarTrekDeepSpaceNineS07E25E26WhatYouLeaveBehind What You Leave Behind]]".
** Gul Ekoor, commanding the Cardassian Second Order forces taking part in the battle, was one of the Cardassian soldiers who joined Damar, Garak, and Kira for the attack on the Dominion military headquarters in
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** Gul Macet from Series/{{TNG}}: "[[Recap/StarTrekTheNextGenerationS4E12TheWounded The Wounded]]", now promoted to jagul (roughly the Cardassian equivalent of a rear admiral in the ''Literature/TerokNor'' series), is placed in charge of the Cardassian forces taking part in the attack on the Terran base.
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** Gul Macet from Series/{{TNG}}: Series/StarTrekTheNextGeneration: "[[Recap/StarTrekTheNextGenerationS4E12TheWounded The Wounded]]", now promoted to jagul (roughly the Cardassian equivalent of a rear admiral in the ''Literature/TerokNor'' series), is placed in charge of the Cardassian forces taking part in the attack on the Terran base.
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* TankTopTomboy: Captain Kanril Eleya, a {{Ladette}}, wears one for a time during shore leave.
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** One of the ships assigned to guard the ''Bajor'' in the Terran prime universe base attack is the USS ''Laporin'', after a classmate of Ben Sisko's who was said to have been killed by the Klingons in Series/DS9: "[[Recap/StarTrekDeepSpaceNineS05E01ApocalypseRising Apocalypse Rising]]". Meanwhile the USS ''Jadzia Dax'' Dax'', previously mentioned in ''Fanfic/{{Bait and Switch|STO}}'' takes part in the battle in chapter three.
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* TheStoic: T'Var, Eleya's Vulcan former ops officer (made a brief appearance in chapter two of ''Fanfic/{{Bait and Switch|STO}}'', reappears after the fleet her USS ''Olokun'' was assigned to took 92% casualties[[labelnote:*]]counting ships that were damaged and repairable, not just those destroyed[[/labelnote]] trying to keep the Undine away from Earth during "Surface Tension". In the typical Vulcan manner, she shrugs off the losses and says that they gave as good as they got and that she is "satisfied with our performance."
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* StealthInSpace: In exchange for their help, Eleya teaches the Klingon-Cardassian Alliance every trick for defeating cloaking devices in the Federation arsenal.
* TheStoic: T'Var, Eleya's Vulcan former ops officer (made a brief appearance in chapter two of ''Fanfic/{{Bait and Switch|STO}}'', reappears after the fleet her USS ''Olokun'' was assigned to took 92% casualties[[labelnote:*]]counting ships that were damaged and repairable, not just those destroyed[[/labelnote]] trying to keep the Undine away from Earth during "Surface Tension". In the typical Vulcan manner, she shrugs off the losses and says that they gave as good as they got and that she is "satisfied with our performance."" [[spoiler:She's [[FaceDeathWithDignity equally calm]] when she makes her HeroicSacrifice.]]
* TheStoic: T'Var, Eleya's Vulcan former ops officer (made a brief appearance in chapter two of ''Fanfic/{{Bait and Switch|STO}}'', reappears after the fleet her USS ''Olokun'' was assigned to took 92% casualties[[labelnote:*]]counting ships that were damaged and repairable, not just those destroyed[[/labelnote]] trying to keep the Undine away from Earth during "Surface Tension". In the typical Vulcan manner, she shrugs off the losses and says that they gave as good as they got and that she is "satisfied with our performance.
