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** Spandam is most assuredly dead and gone after Aokiji brings [=CP9=] back into the fold.
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** Spandam is most assuredly implicitly dead and gone for his greed and incompetence after Aokiji brings [=CP9=] back into the fold.
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''The Serpent Empress'' is a ''Manga/OnePiece'' ForWantOfANail fanfiction by [[https://archiveofourown.org/users/TheSinful/pseuds/TheSinful TheSinful]], writer of ''Fanfic/VowOfTheKing'', on Website/ArchiveOfOurOwn and Website/FanfictionDotNet. The links to their respective sites can be accessed [[https://archiveofourown.org/works/35798242/chapters/89265760 here]] and [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/14007277/1/The-Serpent-Empress there]].
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''The Serpent Empress'' is a ''Manga/OnePiece'' ForWantOfANail WhatIf fanfiction by [[https://archiveofourown.org/users/TheSinful/pseuds/TheSinful TheSinful]], writer of ''Fanfic/VowOfTheKing'', on Website/ArchiveOfOurOwn and Website/FanfictionDotNet. The links to their respective sites can be accessed [[https://archiveofourown.org/works/35798242/chapters/89265760 here]] and [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/14007277/1/The-Serpent-Empress there]].
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* ForWantOfANail:
** Thanks to Hancock personally rescuing her sisters from slavery under the World Nobles, her antipathy towards the World Government is ''far'' stronger than it already was in canon.
** The Boa sisters never have to hide their slave marks since Hancock was around to hear about Fisher Tiger's plan to convert them into the insignia of the Sun Pirates, allowing them to move on from their trauma a lot faster than before.
** Blackbeard and his crew do not survive against Magellan since Shiryu is never released from his cell.
** Aokiji is immediately promoted to Fleet Admiral after Sengoku's retirement due to Akainu's death leaving no competing candidate to be nominated by the Five Elder Stars.
** One of Aokiji's first acts as Fleet Admiral is explicitly not keeping Spandam around as a Government agent, with the implication that he died during the attempt to officially bring [=CP9=] back.
** Because Luffy isn't snuck into Impel Down, the breakout doesn't occur and as a result figures like Crocodile, Mr. 3, and Buggy are not freed.
** Since Ace is still alive, he gets to be promoted as the new captain of the Whitebeard Pirates after Whitebeard dies of his sickness.
** Thanks to Hancock personally rescuing her sisters from slavery under the World Nobles, her antipathy towards the World Government is ''far'' stronger than it already was in canon.
** The Boa sisters never have to hide their slave marks since Hancock was around to hear about Fisher Tiger's plan to convert them into the insignia of the Sun Pirates, allowing them to move on from their trauma a lot faster than before.
** Blackbeard and his crew do not survive against Magellan since Shiryu is never released from his cell.
** Aokiji is immediately promoted to Fleet Admiral after Sengoku's retirement due to Akainu's death leaving no competing candidate to be nominated by the Five Elder Stars.
** One of Aokiji's first acts as Fleet Admiral is explicitly not keeping Spandam around as a Government agent, with the implication that he died during the attempt to officially bring [=CP9=] back.
** Because Luffy isn't snuck into Impel Down, the breakout doesn't occur and as a result figures like Crocodile, Mr. 3, and Buggy are not freed.
** Since Ace is still alive, he gets to be promoted as the new captain of the Whitebeard Pirates after Whitebeard dies of his sickness.
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** Thanks to Hancock personally rescuing her sisters from slavery under the World Nobles, her antipathy towards the World Government is ''far'' stronger than it already was in canon.
** The Boa sisters never have to hide their slave marks since Hancock was around to hear about Fisher Tiger's plan to convert them into the insignia of the Sun Pirates, allowing them to move on from their trauma a lot faster than before.
** Blackbeard and his crew do not survive against Magellan since Shiryu is never released from his cell.
** Aokiji is immediately promoted to Fleet Admiral after Sengoku's retirement due to Akainu's death leaving no competing candidate to be nominated by the Five Elder Stars.
** One of Aokiji's first acts as Fleet Admiral is explicitly not keeping Spandam around as a Government agent, with the implication that he died during the attempt to officially bring [=CP9=] back.
** Because Luffy isn't snuck into Impel Down, the breakout doesn't occur and as a result figures like Crocodile, Mr. 3, and Buggy are not freed.
** Since Ace is still alive, he gets to be promoted as the new captain of the Whitebeard Pirates after Whitebeard dies of his sickness.
** Thanks to Hancock personally rescuing her sisters from slavery under the World Nobles, her antipathy towards the World Government is ''far'' stronger than it already was in canon.
** The Boa sisters never have to hide their slave marks since Hancock was around to hear about Fisher Tiger's plan to convert them into the insignia of the Sun Pirates, allowing them to move on from their trauma a lot faster than before.
** Blackbeard and his crew do not survive against Magellan since Shiryu is never released from his cell.
** Aokiji is immediately promoted to Fleet Admiral after Sengoku's retirement due to Akainu's death leaving no competing candidate to be nominated by the Five Elder Stars.
** One of Aokiji's first acts as Fleet Admiral is explicitly not keeping Spandam around as a Government agent, with the implication that he died during the attempt to officially bring [=CP9=] back.
** Because Luffy isn't snuck into Impel Down, the breakout doesn't occur and as a result figures like Crocodile, Mr. 3, and Buggy are not freed.
** Since Ace is still alive, he gets to be promoted as the new captain of the Whitebeard Pirates after Whitebeard dies of his sickness.
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''The Serpent Empress'' is a ''One Piece'' ForWantOfANail fanfiction by [[https://archiveofourown.org/users/TheSinful/pseuds/TheSinful TheSinful]], writer of ''Fanfic/VowOfTheKing'', on Website/ArchiveOfOurOwn and Website/FanfictionDotNet. The links to their respective sites can be accessed [[https://archiveofourown.org/works/35798242/chapters/89265760 here]] and [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/14007277/1/The-Serpent-Empress there]].
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''The Serpent Empress'' is a ''One Piece'' ''Manga/OnePiece'' ForWantOfANail fanfiction by [[https://archiveofourown.org/users/TheSinful/pseuds/TheSinful TheSinful]], writer of ''Fanfic/VowOfTheKing'', on Website/ArchiveOfOurOwn and Website/FanfictionDotNet. The links to their respective sites can be accessed [[https://archiveofourown.org/works/35798242/chapters/89265760 here]] and [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/14007277/1/The-Serpent-Empress there]].
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* Uta is an active member of Red Hair Pirates as ''The Siren'' with Tot Musica as her Sing-Sing Fruit's Awakening than a separate entity.
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* SparedByTheAdaptation: Ace and Whitebeard survive Marineford thanks to Boa Hancock's intervention.
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* SparedByTheAdaptation: Ace and Whitebeard survive survives Marineford thanks to Boa Hancock's intervention.
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* YouHaveFailedMe: Defied by Aokiji with regards to [=CP9=] and their defeat at Enies Lobby, with him noting that he's not going to let their potential go to waste just because of their defeat at the hands of the Straw Hats.
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* YouHaveFailedMe: Defied by Aokiji with regards to [=CP9=] and their defeat at Enies Lobby, with him the newly-promoted fleet admiral noting that he's not going to let their potential go to waste just because of their defeat at the hands of the Straw Hats.Hats defeated the [=WG's=] premier spy-ops group.
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* AdaptationDeviation: Uta is a member of the Red-Haired Pirates here as the crew's musician.
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* AmbiguousSituation: What happened to Sengoku after the Paramount War isn't clear in the initial release. While Kuzan is promoted in his place, it is not clear if Sengoku was killed, fired, or stepped down. The absence of his canon reason for stepping down, an Impel Down mass breakout partially being covered up by the Five Elder Stars to a point of public menace, is not a part of this continuity due to Luffy not causing said breakout, making this unclear. The second chapter, released a while later, would confirm he stepped down.
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* AlmightyJanitor: After his demotion, Sengoku's official authority only extends to the recruits he trains. Unofficially, he holds just as much authority as the admirals.
* AmbiguousSituation: What happened to Sengoku after the Paramount War isn't clear in the initial release. While Kuzan is promoted in his place, it is not clear if Sengoku was killed, fired, or stepped down. The absence of his canon reason for stepping down, an Impel Down mass breakout partially being covered up by the Five Elder Stars to a point of public menace, is not a part of this continuity due to Luffy not causing said breakout, making this unclear. The second chapter, released a while later, would confirm he steppeddown.down out of shame for what a disaster the Paramount War was.
* AmbiguousSituation: What happened to Sengoku after the Paramount War isn't clear in the initial release. While Kuzan is promoted in his place, it is not clear if Sengoku was killed, fired, or stepped down. The absence of his canon reason for stepping down, an Impel Down mass breakout partially being covered up by the Five Elder Stars to a point of public menace, is not a part of this continuity due to Luffy not causing said breakout, making this unclear. The second chapter, released a while later, would confirm he stepped
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* AmbiguousSituation: What happened to Sengoku after the Paramount War isn't clear.clear in the initial release. While Kuzan is promoted in his place, it is not clear if Sengoku was killed, fired, or stepped down. The absence of his canon reason for stepping down, an Impel Down mass breakout partially being covered up by the Five Elder Stars to a point of public menace, is not a part of this continuity due to Luffy not causing said breakout, making this unclear. The second chapter, released a while later, would confirm he stepped down.
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* MassiveNumberedSiblings: How many kids does Luffy have after the time skip? He can't count that high. As Luffy is an IdiotHero, this doesn't really clarify how many beyond 'a lot', though the omake would imply at least several dozen.
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* MassiveNumberedSiblings: How many kids does Luffy have after the time skip? He can't count that high. As Luffy is an IdiotHero, this doesn't really clarify how many beyond 'a lot', though the omake would imply at least several dozen. The second chapter would give the number as ''71'', with twenty-six born and fourty-five yet to be born.
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** Ace becomes the new captain of the Whitebeard Pirates, implying that he also made time to strengthen himself after Marineford.
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** Thanks to Hancock personally rescuing her sisters from slavery under the World Nobles, her antipathy towards the World Government is ''far'' stronger than it was in canon.
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** Thanks to Hancock personally rescuing her sisters from slavery under the World Nobles, her antipathy towards the World Government is ''far'' stronger than it already was in canon.
** Since Ace is still alive, he gets to be promoted as the new captain of the Whitebeard Pirates after Whitebeard dies of his sickness.
** Whitebeard still dies even after Hancock indirectly saved him at Marineford since the sickness he has, combined with his advanced age, means that he still doesn't have much longer to live.
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* RankUp: RankUp:
** Due to Sakazuki's death during the Summit War, Aokiji is able to succeed Sengoku as Fleet Admiral with no contest, thus averting his resignation. Gion is also promoted to Admiral by Aokiji as Akainu'sreplacement.replacement.
** Ace succeeds Whitebeard as captain of the Whitebeard Pirates after the Emperor's death.
** Due to Sakazuki's death during the Summit War, Aokiji is able to succeed Sengoku as Fleet Admiral with no contest, thus averting his resignation. Gion is also promoted to Admiral by Aokiji as Akainu's
** Ace succeeds Whitebeard as captain of the Whitebeard Pirates after the Emperor's death.
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* AmbiguousSituation: What happened to Sengoku after the Paramount War isn't clear. While Kuzan is promoted in his place, it is not clear if Sengoku was killed, fired, or stepped down. The absence of his canon reason for stepping down, an Impel Down mass breakout partially being covered up by the Five Elder Stars to a point of public menace, is not in a part of this universe continuity due to Luffy not causing said breakout, making this issue muddled.unclear.
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* AmbiguousSituation: What happened to Sengoku after the Paramount War isn't clear. While Kuzan is promoted in his place, it is not clear if Sengoku was killed, fired, or stepped down. The absence of his canon reason for stepping down, an Impel Down mass breakout partially being covered up by the Five Elder Stars to a point of public menace, is not in this universe due to Luffy not causing said breakout, making this issue muddled.
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* AssholeVictim: Spandam does not return after Aokiji brings [=CP9=] back into the fold and no one mourns his death.
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* AssholeVictim: Spandam does not return is noticeably absent after Aokiji brings [=CP9=] back into the fold and fold. Given that no one mourns has anything good to say about Spandam, he most likely got a fate that he completely deserved for his death.massive douchebaggery.
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* ThePiratesWhoDontDoAnything: Also called the Red-haired Pirates, also called Kuzan's favorite type of Pirate. He prefers Shanks and his crews being too busy partying to things like the schemes of Big Mom and Kaido's crews, or the baby boom on Amazon Lily slowing down their activities.
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* ThePiratesWhoDontDoAnything: Also called the Red-haired Red-Haired Pirates, also called Kuzan's favorite type of Pirate. pirate. He prefers Shanks and his crews being too busy partying to things like the schemes of Big Mom and Kaido's crews, crews or the baby boom on Amazon Lily slowing down their activities.
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* RankUp: Due to Sakazuki dying during the Summit War, resulting in Aokiji's resignation being averted and him taking over as Sengoku's replacement with no notable contest, Gion is promoted to Admiral by him.
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* RankUp: Due to Sakazuki dying Sakazuki's death during the Summit War, resulting in Aokiji's resignation being averted and him taking over Aokiji is able to succeed Sengoku as Sengoku's replacement Fleet Admiral with no notable contest, thus averting his resignation. Gion is also promoted to Admiral by him.Aokiji as Akainu's replacement.
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* UncertainDoom: What happened to Sengoku after the Paramount War isn't clear. While Kuzan is promoted in his place, it is not clear if Sengoku was killed, fired, or stepped down. The absence of his canon reason for stepping down, an Impel Down mass breakout partially being covered up by the Five Elder Stars to a point of public menace, is not in this universe due to Luffy not causing said breakout, making this issue muddled.
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* AdaptationalNiceGuy: Hancock is less of a misandrist than canon thanks to her experiences.
* AdaptationRelationshipOverhaul: In canon, Hancock had a one-sided crush on Luffy that he did not pick up on. Here, Luffy is husband to Hancock, Sandersonia, and Marigold and have a lot of kids from their union.
* AdaptationRelationshipOverhaul: In canon, Hancock had a one-sided crush on Luffy that he did not pick up on. Here, Luffy is husband to Hancock, Sandersonia, and Marigold and have a lot of kids from their union.
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* AdaptationalNiceGuy: Hancock is less of a misandrist than her canon self thanks to Fisher Tiger helping her experiences.
liberate her sisters from the World Nobles.
* AdaptationRelationshipOverhaul: In canon, Hancock had a one-sided crush on Luffy that hedid not pick never picked up on. Here, Luffy is husband to Hancock, Sandersonia, and Marigold and have a lot of kids many children from their union.
* AdaptationRelationshipOverhaul: In canon, Hancock had a one-sided crush on Luffy that he
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** Akainu is killed by Sandersonia at Marineford.
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** The Fake Straw Hats still attempt their fraud in spite of how even more suicidally stupid it is compared to canon.
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* TooDumbToLive: Demalo Black apparently thought that claiming to be the husband of one of the Emperors is a good idea, but Sentomaru sees it as suicide with extra steps.
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* EnlightenedSelfInterest: The Serpent Sisters are all too happy to help Luffy save his brother Ace, but not for free. Luffy has to agree to Hancock's marriage proposal first before they go save Ace.
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* PragmaticVillainy: One of the Five Elders argued against letting Sandersonia and Marigold simply be used for the World Nobles entertainment, not because he was ideologically opposed to it, but because the girls were Lunarians and would have been more useful as Vegapunk's test subjects.
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* StupidEvil: The World Nobles force feed their slaves Devil Fruits for their personal entertainment, uncaring that the Fruits would be a lot more useful in the hands of the Marines or Cipher Pols. At least one of the Five Elders is disgusted by the wastefulness and stupidity, and is vindicated in his opinion when this habit backfires hard when Sandersonia and Marigold escape with the power of two Mythical Zoans.
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** Honey Queen is strong enough to be a Warlord, whereas in the movie she was defeated by East Blue era ''Nami''.
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** Gion eats the Dark-Dark Fruit after Blackbeard'sdeathdeath.
** Enishida has eaten the Lick-Lick Fruit.
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* CanonImmigrant: Honey Queen from the second ''One Piece'' movie shows up at Marineford as Hancock's replacement among the Warlords
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This comes across as a misuse. Gion's case is that of Rank Up, but CP9 is something I am not too sure tbh.
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** Gion is promoted to Admiral by Aokiji rather than relegated to Vice Admiral.
** [=CP9=] is brought back into the fold by Aokiji rather than left for dead.
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