History Fanfic / PastSinsMST

* IdiotBall: Brought up frequently.

* MoodWhiplash: The riffers tend to be sarcastic and funny, but occasionally they'll get more serious [[BerserkButton for]] [[WhatTheHellHero whatever]] [[TearJerker reason]].

* RememberTheNewGuy: Some riffers don't start making comments until later chapters, but nobody brings up their sudden arrival. Justified, as sometimes riffers don't show up until some of the earlier chapters have been closed from more comments, so they have to start at later chapters. For example, Wild Trotter showed up to riff on chapters 9 through 13, thinking that the [[SlowPacedBeginning first eight chapters were boring]].

'''[=Crazy56U=]:''' (''takes glasses'') [[DefiedTrope NO!]] [[DiscreditedMeme We're not doing that CSI meme!]] [[TakeThat This is a CLASSY riffing!]] (''throws them away'')\\

--->'''Wild Trotter:''' [[TearJerker This is gonna hurt, isn't it?]]\\

* GettingCrapPastTheRadar: ''Nyx has ticks, Nyx has ticks, Nyx has ticks.''
-->'''Disco:''' There are worse rhymes they could have used.

* TheBadGuyWins: In a sense: once Nexus knock-outs Twilight and calls the guards on her, [=Crazy56U=] states that by doing this, [[Franchise/SuperMarioBrothers Bowser]] [[LetsPlay/ElectricalBeast has]] [[ItMakesSenseInContext won]].

* PaperThinDisguise: Nyx's glasses and vest, which also double for a [[ScoobyDoo Velma]] cosplay costume.

* IneffectualSympatheticVillain: [[EpicFail Spell Nexus]]

* PlotSensitiveSnoopingSkills: Celestia and her security forces can't figure out what the cultists were doing...despite [[EpicFail Spell Nexus]] having told Twilight ''exactly'' what they're planning.

* TooDumbToLive: [[EpicFailure Spell Nexus]] attempts to take on [[PhysicalGod Princess Celestia]] after the botched resurrection.

'''Anon13:''' She couldn't wait to just harrow all over the place.\\

* PlotSensitiveSnoopingSkills: Celestia and her security forces can't figure out what the cultists were doing...despite [[EpicFailure Spell Nexus]] having told Twilight ''exactly'' what they're planning.

** Spell Nexus's real name is EpicFailure.

* IneffectualSympatheticVillain: [[EpicFailure Spell Nexus]]

* FourOneNineScam: When Nyx's black coat is first described.

* EvilIsCool: [[{{In-universe}} The explanation]] [=Crazy56U=] gives for why Nyx[[note]]playing Nightmare Moon[[/note]] got more applause than Diamond Tiara[[note]]playing Princess Celestia[[/note]] at the end of the school play.

** Don't forget {{programming|Language}}.

** Anytime there's a ''FLASH'', the riffers start singing lyrics from Music/{{Queen}}'s ''Film/FlashGordon'' theme.

* TheyJustDidntCare[[invoked]]: Pen Stroke reveals this piece of information in regards to Twilight sensing Nyx after the outbust of magic in Chapter 3:
--> '''[=Pen Stroke=]''': I was going to have this uncanny knowledge mean something at some point, and then... ''plah''.

* RememberTheNewGuy: Some riffers don't start making comments until later chapters, but nobody brings up their sudden arrival. Justified, as sometimes riffers don't show up until some of the earlier chapters have been closed from more comments, so they have to start at later chapters. For example, Wild Trotter showed up to riff on chapters 9 through 13, thinking that the [[ItGetsBetter first eight chapters were boring]].

* EvilMinions: Night Wind, Gray Gale, and [[AmericanCivilWar Stonewall.]]

-->'''[=Crazy56U=]:''' So... she's about to give... birth to breath babies?\\

* MyFriendsAndZoidberg: The Cutie Mark Crusaders. And Nyx.
* NoEnding: Near the end of the riffing, [=Crazy56U=] points out that since they are only riffing the original draft of "Past Sins" (which ends at chapter 13), they will not see the resolution of the story.

* SpaceWhaleAseop: "Remember kids, always get your rest. You may never know when you have to fight a resurrected evil in a death battle!"

-->'''[=Crazy56U=]''' [[spoiler:...that’s the last time I buy a Magic 8-Ball from Website/EBay.]]

-->'''[[spoiler:[=Crazy56U=]]]:''' [[spoiler: ...that’s the last time I buy a Magic 8-Ball from Website/EBay.]]
* MarySueTropes: Nyx's characterization is lampshaded ''repeatedly.''

''Fanfic/PastSins'' is one of the most popular fanfics in the ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic'' fanbase. Months after completing the story, its author Pen Stroke decided to give various writers from the /fic/ board on Website/{{Ponychan}} a chance to riff the original, previously unseen and unrevised version of the story. Readers from the Equestria Daily fansite were also recruited to add riffs of their own. The result is an {{MST}}, which can be found [[https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uJ8FqW1zBIzsYZoe4M1ILS9H8wgk2zjEEGQqmgNsfIg/edit?hl=en_US here.]]

!! This ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic'' {{MST}} provides examples of:

* AffectionateParody: Despite all the jokes, at least some of the riffers are fans of [[FanFic/PastSins Past Sins]]. Pen Stroke [[SelfDeprecation even joins in]] [[WhoWritesThisCrap to point out obvious flaws.]]

* AscendedExtra: Proper Etiquette.

* BerserkButton: For Alcoremortis, the word turquoise.

--> '''Pen Stroke''': Flimsy Excuses! Get your Flimsy Excuses here!
* [[BlackmailIsSuchAnUglyWord Blackmail Is Such An Ugly Word]]:
-->'''Ezn''': “Surprise sex, that is. Rape is such a negative word.”
--> '''Nuke.Equestria''': Prisoner is such a harsh word. I prefer mandatory guest.

-->'''Ezn''': “And also, like, 20% co-” *is shot*
--> '''[[spoiler: [=Crazy56U=]]]''': (hides gun, turns to you, the reader) You owe me.

* CardCarryingVillain: [[EpicFailure Spell Nexus]].
* CatchPhrase: Midnight's "Too easy."
** [=RLYoshi=] often says "Next time on [[DragonBallZ Ponyball Z!]]" after several questions have been asked in a row.

* DisproportionateRetribution: Celestia banishes ponies to the moon for mundane reasons.

-->'''Pemberton''': A humorous analogy given the context of the story thus far.
-->'''Ezn''': Celestia later banished the cultists to the moon, [[FelonyMisdemeanor for daring to serve her cocoa with froth]], as she much prefers it plain.
-->'''Alcoremortis''': Mmm...chocolate... [[AttentionDeficitOohShiny Wait. What were we talking about again?]]

* EvilMinions: Night Wind, Gray Gale, and [[AmericanCivilWar Stonewall.]]

-->'''Diamond Tiara''': But Daddy, how could they cheer louder for ''her''? She was the bad mare, and ''I'' was Princess Celestia.
-->'''[=Crazy56U=]''': Easy, villains are cooler.

--> '''Disco''': I need to cleanse myself of your horrid, potentially evil stench.

--> '''Vimbert:''' [[Advertising/HeadOn APPLY DIRECTLY TO THE EYE]]
--> '''[=Crazy56U:=]''' Hmm... Unicorn horn... plus eyeballs... ...[[SarcasmMode I don't see anything wrong there!]]

--> '''soFreeKey''': Because nothing beats a stolen cookie after an attempted murder.
--> '''Disco''': Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon stole cookies. [[AndThatsTerrible And that's terrible.]]
--> '''Vimbert''': Those FIENDS.

* FourOneNineScam: When Nyx's black coat is first described.

--> '''Disco''': There are worse rhymes they could have used.
* GoodThingYouCanHeal: Not in the fanfic itself, but when it's brought up how Nightmare Moon's armor feels uncomfortable in chapter 12, a comment [=RLYoshi=] makes[[note]]"At least she wasn't a stallion. Then it would just [[{{Squick}} start riding up in the crotch]]."[[/note]] apparently [[spoiler: causes [=Crazy56U=] to [[BlackComedy die]] ''[[BlackComedy of an aneurysm]]'' [[note]]"Image... can't... remove... eyes... brain... bleeding... (drops dead)"[[/note]]... only to [[{{Series/DoctorWho}} regenerate]] [[DeathIsCheap immediately after]].]]

** IdiotPlot: Also brought up.
* ImStandingRightHere: During the scene where Nyx prepares to reveal her wings to the Cutie Mark Crusaders, [=Crazy56U=] begins counting how much more uncomfortable things are getting [[note]]starting with "Hmm...I can't tell, but I think things got 20% more uncomfortable."[[/note]]. When he misses one point:
--> '''[=RLYoshi=]''': [=Crazy56U=] isn't around to say it, so... 70%...
--> '''[=Crazy56U=]''': ...I'M SITTING RIGHT HERE, MAN.

--> '''Wild Trotter''': And good God I need a stiff drink.
* IneffectualSympatheticVillain: [[EpicFailure Spell Nexus]].

* [[spoiler: MathematiciansAnswer:]] When posed with the question "How does a queen work?", [=Crazy56U=] decides to consult an expert. [[spoiler: The answer he gets from his (Russian) Magic 8-Ball is "Как мне кажется, да." Or, "As I see it, yes."]]
-->'''[[spoiler: [=Crazy56U=]]]''' [[spoiler: ...that’s the last time I buy a Magic 8-Ball from {{eBay}}.]]

--> '''Vimbert''': Giving implied permission for everypony to abuse and traumatize Nyx like good children.
--> '''Ezn''': That's what school is for! Trauma builds character!

--> '''[=Crazy56U=]''': (dazed) What? I don’t think I can hear anymore. The wall broke my space... (falls over) ...I’m alright...

--> '''Isphone''': More data! Let's see...so [[BloodMagic hero blood]] + [[KnifeNut dagger]] + [[SpikesOfVillainy broken bits of evil armor]] + [[PlayingWithFire fire]] = [[SummoningRitual evil demon summoning]] divided by underwear stealing squared. [[ItRunsOnNonsensoleum Seems legit.]]
--> '''Distort''': I'd say "[[AWizardDidIt It's magic, he doesn't have to explain it]]," but I don't think he's earned that liberty.

--> '''Ezn''': Good to know.
--> '''Midnight''': only the one sister. We don't like to talk about... the accident.
--> '''Nuke.Equestria''': Didn't that sister use to be a brother?
--> '''Lightsideluc''': You would have to ask Midnight about that.
--> '''Midnight''':...don't judge me!
--> '''intangiblepony''': Well, damn, I feel awkward now...

* ObstructiveBureaucrat: ''Tonight we, the Children of Nightmare, shall see our queen given life, blood, and a form of her own.''
--> '''Midnight''': I have many forms! Chief amongst them, form 14b, the requisition order for an [[BeardOfEvil evil moustache!]]
--> '''Lightsideluc''': Bah! Everyone knows that form 12A, the requisition form for an [[GoodHairEvilHair evil goatee]], is far superior!

--> '''Ezn''': Rarity's word of the day: "harrowing".
--> '''Nuke.Equestria''': Can everyone spell "Harrowing"? H... A... R... R... O... W... I... N... G!
--> '''Anon13''': She couldn't wait to just harrow all over the place.
--> '''Ezn''': Later that day, [[JapaneseRanguage she offended an Asian tourist with what she thought was a clever greeting pun.]]
* PaperThinDisguise: Nyx's glasses and vest, which also double for a [[ScoobyDoo Velma]] cosplay costume.

--> '''Nelighan''': If only we had a witness who was there when the villains attacked her with plot exposition!

--> '''Hellioning''': What were they burning with before, burnt umber flames?
--> '''Nuke.Equestria''': It was more of a burnt sienna.
--> '''Alcoremortis''': Ah, crimson, another one of my old enemies. Overused in fanfictions everywhere. Protip: Just say "red." [[RedScare Nobody will think you're a Communist if you do.]] These are more enlightened times.
* PutOnABus: [[spoiler: Pen Stroke]], who riffed in Part 1, is absent during parts 2 and 3.

* RememberTheNewGuy: Some riffers don't start making comments until later chapters, but nobody brings up their sudden arrival. Justified, as sometimes riffers don't show up until some of the earlier chapters have been closed from more comments, so they have to start at later chapters.
** For example, Wild Trotter showed up to riff on chapters 9 through 13, thinking that the [[ItGetsBetter first eight chapters were boring]].
* RunningGag:

** Luna's [[{{Fanfic/Progress}} obsession with her abacus.]]

** Anytime there's a ''FLASH'', the riffers start singing lyrics from [[{{Queen}} Queen's]] Film/FlashGordon theme.

** Ponies are either suffering from [[SkewedPriorities Skewed Priorities Syndrome]] or Common Sense Syndrome.
** Rarity ''really'' likes Nyx's coat...as material for her next dress.

** [=Crazy56U=] referencing WebVideo/AtopTheFourthWall.

* SarcasmMode: All of the riffers run on it. Especially when Twilight has to return to the Everfree Forest:
--> '''Distort''': [[{{Sting}} DUN DUN DUN]]
--> '''Vimbert''': ORIGINALITY STRIKES AGAIN
--> '''Nuke.Equestria''': [[DoesNotUnderstandSarcasm That's not original, everyone uses the Everfree Forest.]]
--> '''Anon13''': Nuke, are you familiar with irony?
--> '''Nuke.Equestria''': [[CompletelyMissingThePoint That's when something has a lot of iron, right?]]
** At the end of Chapter 10, [[spoiler: after Nyx has been turned into Nightmare Moon by the cult [[TooDumbToLive Celestia trusted]]]]:
--> '''[=Crazy56U=]''': Well... I can safely say that Celestia's well-thought out plan of dealing with Nyx went over PERFECTLY!

* SelfDeprecation: Pen Stroke, the author of [[FanFic/PastSins Past Sins]], not only volunteered his work to be riffed, but he joins in as well.
--> '''Pen Stroke''': *facehoof* Oh yes, [[EvilGloating let's have the villain]] [[JustBetweenYouAndMe explain exactly what's going on.]]
* SequelHook: [[InvokedTrope Invoked]] by [=Crazy56U=] in Chapter 13 (the last chapter of the original edit) by mentioning a Past Sins [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/1919/Point-of-No-Return fan sequel]].
* SeriousBusiness: Recess and Pinkie's parties.

-->'''Vimbert:''' TWIST AND SHOUT! Twist and shout. C'mon, c'mon, c'mon, baby now...
-->'''Alcoremortis:''' Please. If we're going to start quoting songs... "Let me in, get me out. Can't do more than twist and shout..."

* SixthRanger: All of the readers from Equestria Daily who joined up with the established /fic/ group.

* SquishyWizard: When Celestia interrupts the resurrection ceremony, [[EpicFailure Spell Nexus]] attempts to [[SuicidalOverconfidence take her down single-handedly]]...and gets knocked out and dragged to safety by his underlings.

--> '''eycor0''': Never mind the fact that a bunch of pegasi in cloaks pushing clouds around over the Everfree forest would probably draw more attention than just leaving it be.
* StupidEvil: [[EpicFailure Spell Nexus]].

* TakeThat: Whenever the plot is mentioned.

--> '''Ezn''': and half whispered, creating an interesting vocal effect.
--> '''intangiblepony''': What's with all the half talking?
--> '''Nuke.Equestria''': They're half-decided on what to say.
--> '''Anon13''': It's a half-assed fic. Er, half-flanked.
** There's also a reference to ''[[http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/04/conversion-bureau-compilation.html The Conversion Bureau]]'', a series of [[FanficRecs/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic fanfics]] that the /fic/ {{MST}} group [[https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ERvIakzNX5y1zeIgLYZZKVtAYO8d6_YQNVHl9CK_WMM/edit?hl=en_US&pli=1 riffed]] [[FanFic/TheConversionBureauMST before]] [[Fanfic/PastSins Past Sins.]]

-->'''Disco''': The smell was horrendous.
-->'''[=Crazy56U=]''': Ah. So it smelled like coffee.

-->'''Svensvenderson''': [[CSIMiami That makes Pinkie Pie a]] *[[GlassesPull slips glasses on]]* [[CSIMiami one trick pony]].
-->'''[=Crazy56U=]''': (takes glasses) [[DefiedTrope NO!]] [[DiscreditedMeme We’re not doing that CSI meme!]] [[TakeThat This is a CLASSY riffing!]] (throws them away)
-->'''[=RLYoshi=]''': [[SarcasmMode If what we’re doing is classy, I’m the]] [[RunningGag Polish Nightmare Moon]].
-->'''Svensvenderson''': [[CompletelyMissingThePoint Aw, my glasses...]]

-->'''[=Crazy56U=]:''' OK, I know Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon are jerks, but singling them out as the main reason you're now Nightmare Moon? ...I'm shocked that I have to say this, but... [[SincerityMode that's a little... harsh.]]
-->'''[=RLYoshi=]:''' That's not the important part! The point is that they stole cookies! [[AndThatsTerrible AND. THAT'S. TERRIBLE.]]
-->'''[=Crazy56U=]:''' OK, that joke is running thin. Knock it off.

-->'''[=CTOONfan1=]''': Especially that one people have been calling [[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Stop_Online_Piracy_Act SOPA]].
-->'''[=Crazy56U=]''': Sooooo... ''Spell Nexus'' wrote that in this universe. ... (pulls out shot gun) ...[[TranquilFury interestin’]]. (pumps gun)
* ThisIsGonnaSuck: When Rarity gets an ''iiiiiddddddeeeaaaa~!''
--> '''Disco''': This won't end well.

-->'''Wild Trotter''': [[TearJerker This is gonna hurt, isn't it?]]
-->'''[=Crazy56U=]''': Ooooooh, yeah. (pulls out tissues)

--> '''Nuke.Equestria''': Twilight's time travel spell malfunctioned. [[QuantumLeap And so, Twilight Sparkle finds herself leaping from life to life; trying to put right what once went wrong, and hoping that her next leap will be the leap home.]]
--> '''Ezn''': And suddenly I started liking this fic a whole lot more!

--> '''Vimbert''': I don't think deicide is quite as easy as Nexus thinks it is.

--> '''eycor0''': I'm lying of course, I'm in denial.
--> '''Nuke.Equestria''': Repression is a healthy thing.
--> '''Anon13''': "I'll probably have a breakdown later. Screaming and everything."
* ViewersAreGeniuses: While the riffers are instructed to stay away from anything too obscure, there are a few good ones regarding TheAmericanCivilWar and the [[QueerAsTropes Stonewall Riots.]]

** Don't forget [[ProgrammingLanguage programming]].

--> '''Disco''': Yet it happens in nearly every episode.
--> '''intangiblepony''': Saying a phrase like that is the same as saying "What could possibly go wrong".
--> '''Pemberton''': Which is proven by how she was kidnapped less than 24 hours ago.
--> '''Alcoremortis''': Personally, I'm a fan of, "There's no turning back now" and talking about the wife and kids in a war movie.
* WhatTheHellHero: Pretty much any time Twilight does something foolish.

** When it's revealed that [[spoiler: Celestia planned on ''killing'' Nyx if it turned out she's Nightmare Moon]].
--> '''Celestia''': “She is a product of a spell, and well be dealt with as such. [[spoiler: She will be dispelled and the lingering energy purified.]]”
--> '''[=Crazy56U=]''': So... in other words, you're going to [[spoiler: kill a filly to confirm your paranoid suspicions]]... ...yeah, um, lady? [[BerserkButton WHAT IN HOLY HELL IS WRONG WITH YOU?!?]]

--> '''Ezn''': “I can do that in ten seconds fl-” *[[RunningGag is shot]]*
--> '''[=Crazy56U=]''': (turns to the reader) What? ...[[NotMeThisTime It wasn’t me this time,]] [[SincerityMode swear to Luna]]!
--> '''[[spoiler: [=RLYoshi=]]]''': (turns to reader) He's telling the truth. (cocks gun) [[FaceHeelTurn It was]] ''[[FaceHeelTurn me]]''. [[FaceHeelTurn (shoots [=Crazy56U=])]]
--> '''[=Crazy56U=]''': ([[BulletDodge dodges bullet]]) ... ...dude, what the hell?!

--> '''[=Crazy56U=]:''' So... she's about to give... birth to breath babies?
--> '''Disco:''' Epic Failure must be so proud.
--> '''[=Crazy56U=]:''' His approval fills me with shame.

--> '''Sven''': Wait, so [[ItMakesJustAsMuchSenseInContext her eyes are adjusting to the light of her eyes?]] How does that- *head asplodes*

[[Fanfic/PastSins Past Sins]] is one of the most popular fanfics in the WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic fanbase. Months after completing the story, its author Pen Stroke decided to give various writers from the /fic/ board on PonyChan a chance to [[{{MST}} riff]] the original, previously unseen and unrevised version of the story. Readers from the Equestria Daily fansite were also recruited to add riffs of their own. The result is an {{MST}}, which can be found [[https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uJ8FqW1zBIzsYZoe4M1ILS9H8wgk2zjEEGQqmgNsfIg/edit?hl=en_US here.]]

--> '''Vimbert:''' [[MemeticMutation APPLY DIRECTLY TO THE EYE]]

--> '''[=RLYoshi=]''': [=Crazy56U=] isn't around to say it, so...70%...