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* TimeTravelRomance: Beginning with Chapter 27, Ebony is tasked with seducing Voldemort before he became Voldemort. She dresses in a sexy gothic outfit and goes with Tom Rid to the movies, where they make out in their seats. Ebony is presumably from the 2000s (since the fic was originaly published between 2006-2007), and the time travel segment, per the author's notes, happens in the 1980s.
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* BatteredBouquet: Hargrid gives Ebony a bouquet of flowers. This enrages her, since they are pink (''“You know I fucking hate the color pink anyway, and I don’t like fucked up preps like you.”''). Seeing her displeasure, Hargrid then casts a spell (by singing Music/MyChemicalRomance lyrics combined with broken Latin) to turn the roses into balls of black fire.
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* ATeamFiring: To quote Szaleniec in his dramatic reading, "This story would be a lot shorter if the characters could shoot straight."
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* ImperialStormtrooperMarksmanshipAcademy: To quote Szaleniec in his dramatic reading, "This story would be a lot shorter if the characters could shoot straight."
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What this fic ''does'' have, however, is sex, torture, rape, time travel ([[Film/BackToTheFuture Marty McFly]] makes an inexplicable cameo), guns, goth concerts, ludicrous and confusing nicknames, dramatic entrances, tears of blood, wrist-cutting, homo-/bisexuality, fishnets, and clothing descriptions worthy of ''Literature/AmericanPsycho''. This is not to mention the OOC drama, ranging from Tara's constant interaction with her incensed reviewers, the rocky relationship between Tara and her best friend, Raven, and back-and-forth between Tara and a mysterious "hacker." The [[RougeAnglesOfSatin constant spelling mistakes]] don't help the reader's understanding either. [[FigureItOutYourself Depending on who you believe]], it's either one of the worst fanfics ever written or a shining example of a TrollFic.
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What this fic ''does'' have, however, is sex, torture, rape, time travel ([[Film/BackToTheFuture ([[Franchise/BackToTheFuture Marty McFly]] makes an inexplicable cameo), guns, goth concerts, ludicrous and confusing nicknames, dramatic entrances, tears of blood, wrist-cutting, homo-/bisexuality, fishnets, and clothing descriptions worthy of ''Literature/AmericanPsycho''. This is not to mention the OOC drama, ranging from Tara's constant interaction with her incensed reviewers, the rocky relationship between Tara and her best friend, Raven, and back-and-forth between Tara and a mysterious "hacker." The [[RougeAnglesOfSatin constant spelling mistakes]] don't help the reader's understanding either. [[FigureItOutYourself Depending on who you believe]], it's either one of the worst fanfics ever written or a shining example of a TrollFic.
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** [[Film/BackToTheFuture Marty McFly]] appears for no real reason other than to take Ebony back to the present.
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** [[Film/BackToTheFuture [[Franchise/BackToTheFuture Marty McFly]] appears for no real reason other than to take Ebony back to the present.
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* WeirdnessSearchAndRescue: Ebony briefly ends up trapped in the past until [[Film/BackToTheFuture Marty McFly]] turns up to rescue her.
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* WeirdnessSearchAndRescue: Ebony briefly ends up trapped in the past until [[Film/BackToTheFuture [[Franchise/BackToTheFuture Marty McFly]] turns up to rescue her.
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* RecycledScript: At least two sections are repeated almost verbatim:
** In chapter 11, Ebony is spied on by Snape and Loopin, then Hargrid announces he loves her. At the start of the next chapter, Ebony is ready to kill herself with a knife Draco gave her, when Vampire Potter screams in agony and reveals that he saw in a vision Draco in Volfemort's bondage. The scene then breaks off and we return to Ebony hospitalized in the school nurse's "office", where she is visited by Hargrid. At the end of the same chapter, Vampire and Ebony's scene occurs again, this time without the mention about the knife.
** At the end of chapter 15, a MCR concert is announced to happen at Hogsmeade. At the start of chapter 16, Ebony narrates that she and Draco went to the concert, when Gerard and his band unmasked themselves to show their true faces: Voldemort and the Death Dealers. However, in the next paragraph, Ebony declines Draco's invitation. Later on, the scene of the band's unmasking at the concert is described again, at the "climax" of chapter 17, when Dumbledore comes to rescue Ebony and the gang.
** In chapter 11, Ebony is spied on by Snape and Loopin, then Hargrid announces he loves her. At the start of the next chapter, Ebony is ready to kill herself with a knife Draco gave her, when Vampire Potter screams in agony and reveals that he saw in a vision Draco in Volfemort's bondage. The scene then breaks off and we return to Ebony hospitalized in the school nurse's "office", where she is visited by Hargrid. At the end of the same chapter, Vampire and Ebony's scene occurs again, this time without the mention about the knife.
** At the end of chapter 15, a MCR concert is announced to happen at Hogsmeade. At the start of chapter 16, Ebony narrates that she and Draco went to the concert, when Gerard and his band unmasked themselves to show their true faces: Voldemort and the Death Dealers. However, in the next paragraph, Ebony declines Draco's invitation. Later on, the scene of the band's unmasking at the concert is described again, at the "climax" of chapter 17, when Dumbledore comes to rescue Ebony and the gang.
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* BigDamnHeroes: At the end of chapter 17, Ebony and gang attend a MCR concert, unaware the band are the Death Dealers in disguise. They unmask themselves and Voldemort threatens to kill Ebony and Draco, when, suddenly, Dumbledore flies in on a broomstick and chases Voldemort away with a spell.
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For the ''Manga/DeathNote'' version, see ''Fanfic/LightAndDarkTheAdventuresOfDarkYagami''. For ''Literature/TheTwilightSaga'' version, see ''Fanfic/TwilaTheGirlWhoWazInLuvWithAVampyre'' or ''FanFic/ForbidenFruitTheTempationOfEdwardCullen''. For the ''Franchise/{{Pokemon}}'' version, see ''FanFic/PokemonAttackOfMewtwo''. For the ''{{Literature/Redwall}}'' version, see [[FanFic/SoullessShell soulless shell]], though that one's closer to [[Fanfic/LegolasByLaura legolas by laura]] in some ways. For the ''Literature/WarriorCats'' version, see ''FanFic/StarKitsProphecy''. For ''Franchise/TheLegendOfZelda'' version, see ''FanFic/MyInnerLife''. For the ''Literature/PercyJacksonAndTheOlympians'' version, see ''Fanfic/MoonDaughter''.
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For the ''Manga/DeathNote'' version, see ''Fanfic/LightAndDarkTheAdventuresOfDarkYagami''. For ''Literature/TheTwilightSaga'' version, see ''Fanfic/TwilaTheGirlWhoWazInLuvWithAVampyre'' or ''FanFic/ForbidenFruitTheTempationOfEdwardCullen''. For the ''Franchise/{{Pokemon}}'' version, see ''FanFic/PokemonAttackOfMewtwo''. For the ''{{Literature/Redwall}}'' version, see [[FanFic/SoullessShell [[FanFic/SoullessShellRedwall soulless shell]], though that one's closer to [[Fanfic/LegolasByLaura legolas by laura]] in some ways. For the ''Literature/WarriorCats'' version, see ''FanFic/StarKitsProphecy''. For ''Franchise/TheLegendOfZelda'' version, see ''FanFic/MyInnerLife''. For the ''Literature/PercyJacksonAndTheOlympians'' version, see ''Fanfic/MoonDaughter''.
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* SpiritualSuccessor: Several imitations of this infamous fanfic have cropped up, none quite as hilarious in their badness as the original.
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For the ''Manga/DeathNote'' version, see ''Fanfic/LightAndDarkTheAdventuresOfDarkYagami''. For the ''Literature/{{Twilight}}'' version, see ''Fanfic/TwilaTheGirlWhoWazInLuvWithAVampyre'' or ''FanFic/ForbidenFruitTheTempationOfEdwardCullen''. For the ''Franchise/{{Pokemon}}'' version, see ''FanFic/PokemonAttackOfMewtwo''. For the ''{{Literature/Redwall}}'' version, see [[FanFic/SoullessShell soulless shell]], though that one's closer to [[Fanfic/LegolasByLaura legolas by laura]] in some ways. For the ''Literature/WarriorCats'' version, see ''FanFic/StarKitsProphecy''. For ''Franchise/TheLegendOfZelda'' version, see ''FanFic/MyInnerLife''. For the ''Literature/PercyJacksonAndTheOlympians'' version, see ''Fanfic/MoonDaughter''.
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For the ''Manga/DeathNote'' version, see ''Fanfic/LightAndDarkTheAdventuresOfDarkYagami''. For the ''Literature/{{Twilight}}'' ''Literature/TheTwilightSaga'' version, see ''Fanfic/TwilaTheGirlWhoWazInLuvWithAVampyre'' or ''FanFic/ForbidenFruitTheTempationOfEdwardCullen''. For the ''Franchise/{{Pokemon}}'' version, see ''FanFic/PokemonAttackOfMewtwo''. For the ''{{Literature/Redwall}}'' version, see [[FanFic/SoullessShell soulless shell]], though that one's closer to [[Fanfic/LegolasByLaura legolas by laura]] in some ways. For the ''Literature/WarriorCats'' version, see ''FanFic/StarKitsProphecy''. For ''Franchise/TheLegendOfZelda'' version, see ''FanFic/MyInnerLife''. For the ''Literature/PercyJacksonAndTheOlympians'' version, see ''Fanfic/MoonDaughter''.
