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* MoralMyopia: Saint pats himself on the back while blithely using his stolen technology to [[spoiler:hack private information in an effort to kidnap a teenage girl and hold her to ransom to break a mind-controlling supervillain out of jail]], while Dragon, whom he stole it from, is entirely law-abiding and a wonderful person, simply because she's an artificial intelligence.
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* MoralMyopia: Saint pats himself on the back while blithely using his stolen technology to [[spoiler:hack private information in an effort to kidnap a teenage girl and hold her to ransom to break a mind-controlling supervillain out of jail]], while Dragon, whom he stole it from, is entirely law-abiding and a wonderful person, whom he mistrusts simply because she's an artificial intelligence.
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* MoralMyopia: Saint pats himself on the back while blithely using his stolen technology to [[spoiler:hack private information in an effort to kidnap a teenage girl and hold her to ransom to break a mind-controlling supervillain out of jail]], while Dragon, whom he stole it from, is entirely law-abiding and a wonderful person.
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* MoralMyopia: Saint pats himself on the back while blithely using his stolen technology to [[spoiler:hack private information in an effort to kidnap a teenage girl and hold her to ransom to break a mind-controlling supervillain out of jail]], while Dragon, whom he stole it from, is entirely law-abiding and a wonderful person.person, simply because she's an artificial intelligence.
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* ShortLivedOrganism: Amy engineers a bacterium to eat metal [[spoiler:to break Saint's PoweredArmor and get free]], but ensures it will only survive for an hour, lest it become a civilization-ending GreyGoo threat.
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* ShortLivedOrganism: Amy engineers a bacterium [[spoiler:that eats metal, to eat metal [[spoiler:to break Saint's PoweredArmor and get free]], but ensures it will only survive for an hour, lest it become a civilization-ending GreyGoo threat.
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* ShortLivedOrganism: Amy engineers a bacterium to eat metal [[spoiler:to break Saint's PoweredArmor and get free]], but ensures it will only survive for an hour, lest it become a civilization-ending GreyGoo threat.
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* TheAlcatraz: Despite no longer running jailbreaks as Madcap, Assault is still deeply unhappy about the existence of the Birdcage, and so he is unsympathetic to Director Piggot's desire for Marquis to stay there, calling it "the world's touchiest pressure cooker" and saying that Marquis was "denied his Constitutional rights."
--> '''Assault:''' The Birdcage is nothing but a slow-motion death sentence. I know it, and you know it. The difference between you and me is that you're ''just fine'' with it.
--> '''Assault:''' The Birdcage is nothing but a slow-motion death sentence. I know it, and you know it. The difference between you and me is that you're ''just fine'' with it.
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* HellholePrison: Despite no longer running jailbreaks as Madcap, Assault is still deeply unhappy about the existence of the Birdcage, and so he is unsympathetic to Director Piggot's desire for Marquis to stay there, calling it "the world's touchiest pressure cooker" and saying that Marquis was "denied his Constitutional rights."
--> '''Assault:''' The Birdcage is nothing but a slow-motion death sentence. I know it, and you know it. The difference between you and me is that you're ''just fine'' with it.
--> '''Assault:''' The Birdcage is nothing but a slow-motion death sentence. I know it, and you know it. The difference between you and me is that you're ''just fine'' with it.
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---> '''Amy:''' ''He'' never threatened harm to women or children, ever. He never dealt in drugs or prostitution. He made sure that the families of his men were cared for. The ABB and Merchants both deal in women and drugs, and they don't care much about whether the girls are of legal age. The Empire Eighty-Eight deals drugs, as well as beating up and murdering minorities of all kinds. Just recently, I had to help the victim of a vicious beating; she was a black college student. Her only crime was to walk down the wrong street at the wrong time of day. The beating could have left her crippled for life, or dead. And yet, Skidmark, Lung and Kaiser all walk free today. Nobody tries to capture ''them'' and send them to the Birdcage.
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* HellholePrison: Despite no longer running jailbreaks as Madcap, Assault is still deeply unhappy about the existence of the Birdcage, and so he is unsympathetic to Director Piggot's desire for Marquis to stay there, calling it "the world's touchiest pressure cooker" and saying that Marquis was "denied his Constitutional rights."
--> '''Assault:''' The Birdcage is nothing but a slow-motion death sentence. I know it, and you know it. The difference between you and me is that you're ''just fine'' with it.
--> '''Assault:''' The Birdcage is nothing but a slow-motion death sentence. I know it, and you know it. The difference between you and me is that you're ''just fine'' with it.
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* MuggingTheMonster: Three mundane ABB gang members accosting [[spoiler:both Panacea and Marquis together]] were never going to get very far.
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* DoubleStandard: Amy isn't impressed by Director Piggot's insistence that Marquis is an evil man who doesn't deserve to be released, because the gangs currently infesting Brockton Bay are all worse than he was and they're still walking free.
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** Amy isn't impressed by Director Piggot's insistence that Marquis is an evil man who doesn't deserve to be released, because the gangs currently infesting Brockton Bay are all worse than he was and they're still walkingfree.free.
** Mags [[spoiler:thinks it's grossly unfair that Panacea successfully blackmailed the Protectorate into releasing Marquis from the Birdcage and faced no consequences, but Geoff tried to blackmail them into releasing Teacher and he was obliterated by Purity -- who likewise suffered no repercussions. Of course, Panacea didn't break any laws, she just threatened to stop using her power to heal people, whereas Geoff kidnapped a teenager and threatened to murder her...but a grieving Mags [[MoralMyopia can't really see it that way]].]]
** Amy isn't impressed by Director Piggot's insistence that Marquis is an evil man who doesn't deserve to be released, because the gangs currently infesting Brockton Bay are all worse than he was and they're still walking
** Mags [[spoiler:thinks it's grossly unfair that Panacea successfully blackmailed the Protectorate into releasing Marquis from the Birdcage and faced no consequences, but Geoff tried to blackmail them into releasing Teacher and he was obliterated by Purity -- who likewise suffered no repercussions. Of course, Panacea didn't break any laws, she just threatened to stop using her power to heal people, whereas Geoff kidnapped a teenager and threatened to murder her...but a grieving Mags [[MoralMyopia can't really see it that way]].]]
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--> By the subsequent PRT chatter, there literally hadn't been enough left to scrape into a shoebox.
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* FingerInTheMail: Mags asks Saint if he would go to the extent of [[spoiler:sending Panacea's fingers to put pressure on the PRT to release Teacher]], and he seems inclined to say yes -- for which she sharply chastises him.
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* FingerInTheMail: Mags asks Saint if he would go to the extent of [[spoiler:sending Panacea's sending fingers [[spoiler:from Panacea to put pressure on the PRT to release Teacher]], and he seems inclined to say yes -- for which she sharply chastises him.
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* OneManArmy: Marquis never recruited any other capes, but he was able to hold his own against entire teams of them. His powers have high damage potential, they're extremely versatile, and he's very experienced in using them. [[spoiler:Within the span of minutes, he captures and binds Oni Lee, disables Bakuda and most of her unpowered minions in a single ambush, and kills Lung.]]
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* AndIMustScream: [[spoiler:The villain formerly known as Marquis takes out almost the entire ABB at once, including Bakuda, by spraying bone shards at them, hitting their bones and bringing their skeletons under his control, then fusing their skeletons into single pieces so they can't move at all. Followed by filling in their eye sockets so they can't use HUD interfaces to pull any tricks. The result is that Bakuda is fully conscious but blind and immobile.]]
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* LaserGuidedKarma: Ten years ago, Marquis put himself in harm's way to protect Amelia, and the Brockton Bay Brigade caught him and sent him to the Birdcage as a result. [[spoiler:He considers it an interesting twist of fate that Amelia is now putting herself on the line to free him.]]
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* PragmaticVillainy: Marquis' famous rule against harming women or children actually started simply because he recognised that villains who show that restraint tend to draw less backlash from law enforcement.
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* PersonOfMassDestruction: The PRT gets an inkling of Panacea's true power after [[spoiler:realising that she engineered a bacterium to eat plastic and metal]], and Director Costa-Brown wonders whether it's necessary to preemptively imprison or even kill her, since she's capable of returning North America to the stone age.
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* NotEnoughToBury: All that's left of [[spoiler:Saint and his PoweredArmor, after he's killed by a very angry Purity,]] is a few scraps of metal and just enough DNA to positively identify.
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* TrojanHorse: Saint [[spoiler:sees Amy coming back from the bathroom with a phone, and immediately confiscates it, crushing it in his armoured fist. Minutes later, his suit falls apart under the influence of the metal-eating bacteria that she engineered from colonies she found on the toilet and planted on the phone.]]
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* EnemyMine: Threatening the world's best healer has a tendency to unite the heroes and the villains against you. [[spoiler:As soon as Saint is distracted from threatening Amy, Vicky grabs her away and Purity leaves [[NotEnoughToBury not enough of him to bury]].]]
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* CutHisHeartOutWithASpoon: Amy warns that "Vicky's gonna see if your suit can do Transformer stuff, with you in it," and "Vicky's gonna hit you so hard, they're gonna have to pour you out of that suit." Vicky's own take is, "When I find you, I’m gonna feed your suit through a car crusher with you inside it. Feet first." [[spoiler:As it happens, Saint doesn't survive long enough for Vicky to get the chance.]]
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* CutHisHeartOutWithASpoon: Amy warns that "Vicky's gonna see if your suit can do Transformer stuff, with you in it," and "Vicky's gonna hit you so hard, they're gonna have to pour you out of that suit." Vicky's own take is, "When I find you, I’m gonna feed your suit through a car crusher with you inside it. Feet first.first," or possibly creating "a living testament regarding how many bone fractures a person could survive at one time." [[spoiler:As it happens, Saint doesn't survive long enough for Vicky to get the chance.]]
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* CutHisHeartOutWithASpoon: Amy warns that "Vicky's gonna see if your suit can do Transformer stuff, with you in it," and "Vicky's gonna hit you so hard, they're gonna have to pour you out of that suit." [[spoiler:As it happens, he doesn't survive long enough for Vicky to get the chance.]]
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* CutHisHeartOutWithASpoon: Amy warns that "Vicky's gonna see if your suit can do Transformer stuff, with you in it," and "Vicky's gonna hit you so hard, they're gonna have to pour you out of that suit." Vicky's own take is, "When I find you, I’m gonna feed your suit through a car crusher with you inside it. Feet first." [[spoiler:As it happens, he Saint doesn't survive long enough for Vicky to get the chance.]]
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* CutHisHeartOutWithASpoon: Amy warns that "Vicky's gonna see if your suit can do Transformer stuff, with you in it," and "Vicky's gonna hit you so hard, they're gonna have to pour you out of that suit." [[spoiler:As it happens, he doesn't survive long enough for Vicky to get the chance.]]
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* BullyingADragon: Mischa is smart enough to know that it wouldn't be smart to mess with Panacea. Geoff isn't convinced. [[spoiler:Geoff gets himself killed by Purity over it.]]
--> '''Mischa:''' You have seen her sister, the girl of glory? She is Alexandria package who does not pull punches. Mother has lightsaber like in Star Wars, father throws bombs. Uncle is giant from fairy tale, aunt and cousins fly ''and'' have zap lasers. Our armour is good, but against them we are walnut against hammer...Please do not be inciting war we cannot win against scary cape family.
--> '''Mischa:''' You have seen her sister, the girl of glory? She is Alexandria package who does not pull punches. Mother has lightsaber like in Star Wars, father throws bombs. Uncle is giant from fairy tale, aunt and cousins fly ''and'' have zap lasers. Our armour is good, but against them we are walnut against hammer...Please do not be inciting war we cannot win against scary cape family.
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* BullyingADragon: Mischa is smart enough to know that it wouldn't be smart to mess with Panacea. Geoff isn't convinced. [[spoiler:Geoff gets himself killed by Purity over it.]]
--> '''Mischa:''' You have seen her sister, the girl of glory? She is Alexandria package who does not pull punches. Mother has lightsaber like in Star Wars, father throws bombs. Uncle is giant from fairy tale, aunt and cousins fly ''and'' have zap lasers. Our armour is good, but against them we are walnut against hammer.
--> '''Mischa:''' You have seen her sister, the girl of glory? She is Alexandria package who does not pull punches. Mother has lightsaber like in Star Wars, father throws bombs. Uncle is giant from fairy tale, aunt and cousins fly ''and'' have zap lasers. Our armour is good, but against them we are walnut against hammer.
