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* OCStandIn: Stephanie Santiago, Ironwood's NumberTwo, is from the show, but only ever appears as a name on a screen. Her personality and role in the fic is largely original.
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* WhipItGood: Orchid Morrigan, a rival huntress from Beacon May fights during the Vytal tournament, uses a fencing sword that can turn into a whip.
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* WhipItGood: WhipSword: Orchid Morrigan, a rival huntress from Beacon May fights during the Vytal tournament, uses a fencing sword that can turn into a whip.
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* {{Flanderization}}: May eating pizza with chopsticks is a reference to ''Fanfic/ConnectFour'' by Badendchan. There, May eats a pizza with chopsticks as a joke because [[ExactWords Robyn forbid her from eating it with fork and knife]]. In this fic, on the other hand, she does it regularily.
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* CharacterFocus: May is the main character of the entire story, with Cinder, Winter, and Marrow serving as deuteragonists.
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* AccidentalMisnaming:
** The amount of times May is called by her deadname is kept to a minimum, since she [[LastNameBasis mostly goes by her last name]], but it happens occasionally. The fic censors it with five asterisks and her real name in parenthesis.
** On a lighter note, May refers to Ozpin almost exclusively as Ozma, since everything she knows about him is from Salem, who doesn't care about the distinction.
* AdaptationalBadass: Due to showing up [[AdaptationalEarlyAppearance several years earlier than she does in the show]], Fria is still a physically fit, if elderly, huntress. Whereas she had to rely entirely on her (extremely powerful) Maiden powers for defense in the show, here she's able to go toe-to-toe with Cinder in sparring matches.
* AdaptationalContextChange: Cinder still [[spoiler:loses an eye, but in this continuity it's taken out by an arrow from May, rather than Ruby's silver eyes]].
* AdaptationalEarlyAppearance: InUniverse;
** Cinder meets Fria the Winter Maiden years before she (or Winter) would in canon.
** May ends up running into Emerald while on a mission in Vacuo, unlike Cinder in canon, who only met Emerald a year at most before the Fall of Beacon.
** The amount of times May is called by her deadname is kept to a minimum, since she [[LastNameBasis mostly goes by her last name]], but it happens occasionally. The fic censors it with five asterisks and her real name in parenthesis.
** On a lighter note, May refers to Ozpin almost exclusively as Ozma, since everything she knows about him is from Salem, who doesn't care about the distinction.
* AdaptationalBadass: Due to showing up [[AdaptationalEarlyAppearance several years earlier than she does in the show]], Fria is still a physically fit, if elderly, huntress. Whereas she had to rely entirely on her (extremely powerful) Maiden powers for defense in the show, here she's able to go toe-to-toe with Cinder in sparring matches.
* AdaptationalContextChange: Cinder still [[spoiler:loses an eye, but in this continuity it's taken out by an arrow from May, rather than Ruby's silver eyes]].
* AdaptationalEarlyAppearance: InUniverse;
** Cinder meets Fria the Winter Maiden years before she (or Winter) would in canon.
** May ends up running into Emerald while on a mission in Vacuo, unlike Cinder in canon, who only met Emerald a year at most before the Fall of Beacon.
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* AccidentalMisnaming:
**AccidentalMisnaming: The amount of times May is called by her deadname is kept to a minimum, since she [[LastNameBasis mostly goes by her last name]], but it happens occasionally. The fic censors it with five asterisks and her real name in parenthesis.
** On a lighter note, May refers to Ozpin almost exclusively as Ozma, since everything she knows about him is from Salem, who doesn't care about the distinction.
* AdaptationalBadass: Due to showing up [[AdaptationalEarlyAppearance several years earlier than she does in the show]], Fria is still a physically fit, if elderly, huntress. Whereas she had to rely entirely on her (extremely powerful) Maiden powers for defense in the show, here she's able to go toe-to-toe with Cinder in sparring matches.
* AdaptationalContextChange: Cinder still [[spoiler:loses an eye, but in this continuity it's taken out by an arrow from May, rather than Ruby's silver eyes]].
* AdaptationalEarlyAppearance: InUniverse;
** Cinder meets Fria the Winter Maiden years before she (or Winter) would in canon.
** May ends up running into Emerald while on a mission in Vacuo, unlike Cinder in canon, who only met Emerald a year at most before the Fall of Beacon.parenthesis.
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** On a lighter note, May refers to Ozpin almost exclusively as Ozma, since everything she knows about him is from Salem, who doesn't care about the distinction.
* AdaptationalBadass: Due to showing up [[AdaptationalEarlyAppearance several years earlier than she does in the show]], Fria is still a physically fit, if elderly, huntress. Whereas she had to rely entirely on her (extremely powerful) Maiden powers for defense in the show, here she's able to go toe-to-toe with Cinder in sparring matches.
* AdaptationalContextChange: Cinder still [[spoiler:loses an eye, but in this continuity it's taken out by an arrow from May, rather than Ruby's silver eyes]].
* AdaptationalEarlyAppearance: InUniverse;
** Cinder meets Fria the Winter Maiden years before she (or Winter) would in canon.
** May ends up running into Emerald while on a mission in Vacuo, unlike Cinder in canon, who only met Emerald a year at most before the Fall of Beacon.
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** In this continuity, May becomes the agent of [[BigBad Salem]] in place of Cinder, meaning that she is, among many other things, directly responsible for the fall of Beacon. Even if she's a WellIntentionedExtremist, it's a far cry from the civil rights activist she is in canon.
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** In this continuity, May becomes the agent of [[BigBad Salem]] in place of Cinder, meaning that she is, among many other things, directly responsible for the fall of Beacon. Even if she's a WellIntentionedExtremist, it's a far cry from the civil rights activist she is Admittedly, this [[spoiler:does not happen in canon.''HTWOTS'']].
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* AdaptationExpansion: While the parasitic grimm Cinder used to steal the maiden powers was left largely unexplained in the show, the fic dedicates a lengthy arc to show how May retrieved the amulet of health that was used to create something similar.
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** Fria tells [[spoiler:Cinder]] that she was friends with Cordowin in their academy days.
* AddedAlliterativeAppeal: Forrest, a minor vol 7 characters and supporter of Robyn Hill, shows up briefly in chapter 37 to throw out team name suggestions for Robyn, Fiona, Joanna and Winter. They settle on "Happy Huntresses", but his other suggestions are equally alliterative. Daring Damsels, Cheery Champions, [[DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment Heroic Heroines]], etc.
* AffablyEvil: Salem keeps a constant calm and maternal tone around May, unlike in canon, where she [[FauxAffablyEvil often let her anger shine through]].
* AffectionateNickname: After [[spoiler:May comes out to Winter]], Winter starts calling her "Princess", partially as an insult, partially as [[spoiler:gender affirmation]]. She also later adds "Bluebird".
* AllLoveIsUnrequited: [[spoiler:May was in love with Winter, but Salem's gaslighting convinces her that Winter only saw her as someone to use and discard. It's strongly implied that Winter would have reciprocated if May confessed]].
* AddedAlliterativeAppeal: Forrest, a minor vol 7 characters and supporter of Robyn Hill, shows up briefly in chapter 37 to throw out team name suggestions for Robyn, Fiona, Joanna and Winter. They settle on "Happy Huntresses", but his other suggestions are equally alliterative. Daring Damsels, Cheery Champions, [[DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment Heroic Heroines]], etc.
* AffablyEvil: Salem keeps a constant calm and maternal tone around May, unlike in canon, where she [[FauxAffablyEvil often let her anger shine through]].
* AffectionateNickname: After [[spoiler:May comes out to Winter]], Winter starts calling her "Princess", partially as an insult, partially as [[spoiler:gender affirmation]]. She also later adds "Bluebird".
* AllLoveIsUnrequited: [[spoiler:May was in love with Winter, but Salem's gaslighting convinces her that Winter only saw her as someone to use and discard. It's strongly implied that Winter would have reciprocated if May confessed]].
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* AddedAlliterativeAppeal: Forrest, a minor vol 7 characters and supporter of Robyn Hill, shows up briefly in chapter 37 to throw out team name suggestions for Robyn, Fiona, Joanna and Winter. They settle on "Happy Huntresses", but his other suggestions are equally alliterative. Daring Damsels, Cheery Champions, [[DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment Heroic Heroines]], etc.
* AffablyEvil: Salem keeps a constant calm and maternal tone around May, unlike in canon, where she [[FauxAffablyEvil often let her anger shine through]].
* AllLoveIsUnrequited: [[spoiler:May was in love with Winter, but Salem's gaslighting convinces her that Winter only saw her as someone to use and discard. It's strongly implied that Winter would have reciprocated if May confessed]].
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** While pondering her old friends after joining Salem, May notes to herself that she felt more like Robyn, Joanna and Fiona were her team, and thinks there must've been some sort of cosmic joke that prevented it.
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* AnguishedDeclarationOfLove: In chapter 47, after having [[spoiler:had a {{Utopia}}n dreamworld where she was dating Winter cruelly ripped away, May admits that she was in love with Winter. At that point, Salem's manipulations have made her resent Winter, so she doesn't act on it]].
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* AntiVillain: [[VillainProtagonist May]] works for an omnicidal witch on a SuicidalCosmicTemperTantrum, but she is also [[ObliviouslyEvil oblivious to Salem's true goal]], and her goal is to upheave a status quo that allowed Atlas to get away with prejudice, oppression, authoritarianism and a ''long'' list of war crimes and civil rights violations.
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* AuthorAppeal: The decision to have May [[spoiler:transition using a magical mirror instead of more conventional medical care was brought on by the author's love for magical transition wish fulfillment stories]].
* AutomaticCrossbow: May's weapons, Matilda and Clorinda, in their crossbow configuration are loaded with "clips" containing several crossbow bolts that can be shot in rapid succession, though she can also load them with {{Trick Arrow}}s. After Vacuo, she replaces Clorinda's crossbow with a more conventional recurve bow.
* AutomaticCrossbow: May's weapons, Matilda and Clorinda, in their crossbow configuration are loaded with "clips" containing several crossbow bolts that can be shot in rapid succession, though she can also load them with {{Trick Arrow}}s. After Vacuo, she replaces Clorinda's crossbow with a more conventional recurve bow.
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* BaitAndSwitch:
** When Winter returns home to visit her "brother", RWBY fans will expect her to meet Whitley. She's actually meeting [[spoiler:Weiss, who hasn't come out as a trans girl yet]].
** Salem offers May a way to draw out her deepest anger and hatred, to make her magic stronger. Most readers will expect it to be a NightmareSequence with all of May's worst fears. [[spoiler:It is actually a DreamSequence of May's ideal life, one where she's living as a woman, in a relationship with Winter, and has the support of her family. The anger and hatred comes from her [[ShatteringTheIllusion waking up]]]].
** When Winter returns home to visit her "brother", RWBY fans will expect her to meet Whitley. She's actually meeting [[spoiler:Weiss, who hasn't come out as a trans girl yet]].
** Salem offers May a way to draw out her deepest anger and hatred, to make her magic stronger. Most readers will expect it to be a NightmareSequence with all of May's worst fears. [[spoiler:It is actually a DreamSequence of May's ideal life, one where she's living as a woman, in a relationship with Winter, and has the support of her family. The anger and hatred comes from her [[ShatteringTheIllusion waking up]]]].
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* BaitAndSwitch:
**BaitAndSwitch: When Winter returns home to visit her "brother", RWBY fans will expect her to meet Whitley. She's actually meeting [[spoiler:Weiss, who hasn't come out as a trans girl yet]].
** Salem offers May a way to draw out her deepest anger and hatred, to make her magic stronger. Most readers will expect it to be a NightmareSequence with all of May's worst fears. [[spoiler:It is actually a DreamSequence of May's ideal life, one where she's living as a woman, in a relationship with Winter, and has the support of her family. The anger and hatred comes from her [[ShatteringTheIllusion waking up]]]].yet]].
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** Salem offers May a way to draw out her deepest anger and hatred, to make her magic stronger. Most readers will expect it to be a NightmareSequence with all of May's worst fears. [[spoiler:It is actually a DreamSequence of May's ideal life, one where she's living as a woman, in a relationship with Winter, and has the support of her family. The anger and hatred comes from her [[ShatteringTheIllusion waking up]]]].
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* {{BFS}}: May's second weapon, Clorinda, is a greatsword that transforms into a heavy crossbow (later a normal bow), symbolic of her desire to take up more space in her life. She has to downsize it slightly to wield it effectively, but intends to return it to proper size once she has built up a bit of muscle.
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** The Cerberus site is a more traditional prison, where Atlas sends prisoners to be tortured, along with containing those who work with or know about Salem. The first prisoner seen is a union organizer who got mistakenly blamed for dr. Merlot's escape. [[spoiler:May is sent there after learning about the Maidens and the "Witch" from the Janus site]].
** After [[spoiler:Cerberus is wrecked by Salem to free May]], Atlas builds another named Tartarus. This time, it's [[spoiler:May who arranges a breakout and lets it blow up to cover her tracks]].
* BookEnds: The first and the final chapter both open on a FakeOutOpening of a battle eerily similar to one in the show, which turns out to merely be a sparring match.
* BornUnlucky: May considers herself this, both for her abusive upbringing, and because she tends to attract the biggest and most dangerous grimm. Justified, as grimm are attracted by negativity and, between the trauma, dysphoria, anxiety and depression, May pings the radar of every grimm within miles.
* BothSidesHaveAPoint: Discussed by Joanna and Marrow. Marrow believes that the tension between Atlas and Mantle is nuanced, that Atlas may not be innocent, but their treatment of the lower city is not entirely unjustified. Joanna counters that Atlas is exploiting Mantle for labor while giving nothing back. Mantle is fighting to survive, Atlas is fighting to remain wealthy. [[spoiler:It is ultimately averted, as Atlas is rotten to the core, to the point where even Marrow can't stand working for them after May's "death"]].
* BowAndSwordInAccord: After taking a liking to the weapon while in Vacuo, May replaces her sword's crossbow mode with a normal bow, splitting the sword's blade down the middle to form the bow's curve.
* BreakingSpeech: Tyrian gives a minor one to May in chapter 48, trying to make May admit to herself that she has a sadistic streak. May tries to wave it of, but it stays with her.
* BreakingTheFellowship: Team CASM were hardly TrueCompanions at the best of time, but they truly fragment from chapter 26 onwards; [[spoiler:May is sent to a secret prison and later picked up by Salem, Cinder lets it happen and keeps it secret from the others, and Winter and Marrow suspect that Cinder is hiding something about May, causing them to avoid her at all costs]].
* BreakTheCutie: Marrow started out as the most hopeful and idealistic member of team CASM. Over the course of the fic, he sees [[spoiler:firsthand evidence of Atlas' crimes, one of his teammates succumb to Ironwood's grooming, one of them dies (seemingly), and ultimately resigns from the military, falling into depression]]. The entire fic can also be considered one for May, but she was never happy to begin with.
* BreatherEpisode: Between each major storybeat, there are a few chapters detailing May and her ex-friends hanging out and not doing anything while the major players are active. In an unusual twist, the ''final chapter'' is a breather episode, mostly setting up for the sequel with very few major story beats happening.
* BrokenPedestal: Marrow is initially what May calls a "centrist", still admiring and looking up to Atlas while also wanting to help Mantle. After [[spoiler:the Janus archive and seeing proof of Atlas' war crimes, he loses that faith in Atlas, though he's still conflicted about what to do]].
** After [[spoiler:Cerberus is wrecked by Salem to free May]], Atlas builds another named Tartarus. This time, it's [[spoiler:May who arranges a breakout and lets it blow up to cover her tracks]].
* BookEnds: The first and the final chapter both open on a FakeOutOpening of a battle eerily similar to one in the show, which turns out to merely be a sparring match.
* BornUnlucky: May considers herself this, both for her abusive upbringing, and because she tends to attract the biggest and most dangerous grimm. Justified, as grimm are attracted by negativity and, between the trauma, dysphoria, anxiety and depression, May pings the radar of every grimm within miles.
* BothSidesHaveAPoint: Discussed by Joanna and Marrow. Marrow believes that the tension between Atlas and Mantle is nuanced, that Atlas may not be innocent, but their treatment of the lower city is not entirely unjustified. Joanna counters that Atlas is exploiting Mantle for labor while giving nothing back. Mantle is fighting to survive, Atlas is fighting to remain wealthy. [[spoiler:It is ultimately averted, as Atlas is rotten to the core, to the point where even Marrow can't stand working for them after May's "death"]].
* BowAndSwordInAccord: After taking a liking to the weapon while in Vacuo, May replaces her sword's crossbow mode with a normal bow, splitting the sword's blade down the middle to form the bow's curve.
* BreakingSpeech: Tyrian gives a minor one to May in chapter 48, trying to make May admit to herself that she has a sadistic streak. May tries to wave it of, but it stays with her.
* BreakingTheFellowship: Team CASM were hardly TrueCompanions at the best of time, but they truly fragment from chapter 26 onwards; [[spoiler:May is sent to a secret prison and later picked up by Salem, Cinder lets it happen and keeps it secret from the others, and Winter and Marrow suspect that Cinder is hiding something about May, causing them to avoid her at all costs]].
* BreakTheCutie: Marrow started out as the most hopeful and idealistic member of team CASM. Over the course of the fic, he sees [[spoiler:firsthand evidence of Atlas' crimes, one of his teammates succumb to Ironwood's grooming, one of them dies (seemingly), and ultimately resigns from the military, falling into depression]]. The entire fic can also be considered one for May, but she was never happy to begin with.
* BreatherEpisode: Between each major storybeat, there are a few chapters detailing May and her ex-friends hanging out and not doing anything while the major players are active. In an unusual twist, the ''final chapter'' is a breather episode, mostly setting up for the sequel with very few major story beats happening.
* BrokenPedestal: Marrow is initially what May calls a "centrist", still admiring and looking up to Atlas while also wanting to help Mantle. After [[spoiler:the Janus archive and seeing proof of Atlas' war crimes, he loses that faith in Atlas, though he's still conflicted about what to do]].
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** The Cerberus site is a more traditional prison, where Atlas sends prisoners to be tortured, along with containing those who work with or know about Salem. The first prisoner seen is a union organizer who got mistakenly blamed for dr. Merlot's escape. [[spoiler:May is sent there after learning about the Maidens and the "Witch" from the Janus site]].
** After [[spoiler:Cerberus is wrecked by Salem to free May]], Atlas builds another named Tartarus. This time, it's [[spoiler:May who arranges a breakout and lets it blow up to cover her tracks]].
* BookEnds: The first and the final chapter both open on a FakeOutOpening of a battle eerily similar to one in the show, which turns out to merely be a sparring match.
* BornUnlucky: May considers herself this, both for her abusive upbringing, and because she tends to attract the biggest and most dangerous grimm. Justified, as grimm are attracted by negativity and, between the trauma, dysphoria, anxiety and depression, May pings the radar of every grimm within miles.
escape.
* BothSidesHaveAPoint: Discussed by Joanna and Marrow. Marrow believes that the tension between Atlas and Mantle is nuanced, that Atlas may not be innocent, but their treatment of the lower city is not entirely unjustified. Joanna counters that Atlas is exploiting Mantle for labor while giving nothing back. Mantle is fighting to survive, Atlas is fighting to remain wealthy. [[spoiler:It is ultimately averted, as Atlas is rotten to thecore, to the point where even Marrow can't stand working for them after May's "death"]].
* BowAndSwordInAccord: After taking a liking to the weapon while in Vacuo, May replaces her sword's crossbow mode with a normal bow, splitting the sword's blade down the middle to form the bow's curve.
* BreakingSpeech: Tyrian gives a minor one to May in chapter 48, trying to make May admit to herself that she has a sadistic streak. May tries to wave it of, but it stays with her.
* BreakingTheFellowship: Team CASM were hardly TrueCompanions at the best of time, but they truly fragment from chapter 26 onwards; [[spoiler:May is sent to a secret prison and later picked up by Salem, Cinder lets it happen and keeps it secret from the others, and Winter and Marrow suspect that Cinder is hiding something about May, causing them to avoid her at all costs]].
core]].
* BreakTheCutie: Marrow started out as the most hopeful and idealistic member of team CASM. Over the course of the fic, he sees [[spoiler:firsthand evidence of Atlas' crimes, one of his teammates succumb to Ironwood'sgrooming, one of them dies (seemingly), grooming and ultimately resigns from the military, falling into depression]]. The entire fic can also be considered one for May, but she was never happy to begin with.
his partner die]].
* BreatherEpisode: Between each major storybeat, there are a few chapters detailing May and her ex-friends hanging out and not doing anything while the major players are active. In an unusual twist, the ''final chapter'' is a breather episode, mostly setting up for the sequel with very few major story beats happening.\n* BrokenPedestal: Marrow is initially what May calls a "centrist", still admiring and looking up to Atlas while also wanting to help Mantle. After [[spoiler:the Janus archive and seeing proof of Atlas' war crimes, he loses that faith in Atlas, though he's still conflicted about what to do]].
** After [[spoiler:Cerberus is wrecked by Salem to free May]], Atlas builds another named Tartarus. This time, it's [[spoiler:May who arranges a breakout and lets it blow up to cover her tracks]].
* BookEnds: The first and the final chapter both open on a FakeOutOpening of a battle eerily similar to one in the show, which turns out to merely be a sparring match.
* BornUnlucky: May considers herself this, both for her abusive upbringing, and because she tends to attract the biggest and most dangerous grimm. Justified, as grimm are attracted by negativity and, between the trauma, dysphoria, anxiety and depression, May pings the radar of every grimm within miles.
* BothSidesHaveAPoint: Discussed by Joanna and Marrow. Marrow believes that the tension between Atlas and Mantle is nuanced, that Atlas may not be innocent, but their treatment of the lower city is not entirely unjustified. Joanna counters that Atlas is exploiting Mantle for labor while giving nothing back. Mantle is fighting to survive, Atlas is fighting to remain wealthy. [[spoiler:It is ultimately averted, as Atlas is rotten to the
* BowAndSwordInAccord: After taking a liking to the weapon while in Vacuo, May replaces her sword's crossbow mode with a normal bow, splitting the sword's blade down the middle to form the bow's curve.
* BreakingSpeech: Tyrian gives a minor one to May in chapter 48, trying to make May admit to herself that she has a sadistic streak. May tries to wave it of, but it stays with her.
* BreakingTheFellowship: Team CASM were hardly TrueCompanions at the best of time, but they truly fragment from chapter 26 onwards; [[spoiler:May is sent to a secret prison and later picked up by Salem, Cinder lets it happen and keeps it secret from the others, and Winter and Marrow suspect that Cinder is hiding something about May, causing them to avoid her at all costs]].
* BreakTheCutie: Marrow started out as the most hopeful and idealistic member of team CASM. Over the course of the fic, he sees [[spoiler:firsthand evidence of Atlas' crimes, one of his teammates succumb to Ironwood's
* BreatherEpisode: Between each major storybeat, there are a few chapters detailing May and her ex-friends hanging out and not doing anything while the major players are active.
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* ChekhovsGun:
** The charybdis grimm May encounters in Vacuo ends up [[spoiler:excavating enough of the buried temple she couldn't get into on her own]].
** The doppler grimm Salem is seen working on in the early chapters come back in chapter 56 as [[spoiler:the means by which Salem will have May steal the Maiden powers]].
* ChekhovsSkill: In chapter 48, May demonstrates to Salem that she has learned to use the Windcoil to curve her arrows. [[spoiler:In chapter 49, she shoots an arrow that would've killed Cinder if she hadn't doubted it the last moment and caused the arrow to only take out her eye]].
** The charybdis grimm May encounters in Vacuo ends up [[spoiler:excavating enough of the buried temple she couldn't get into on her own]].
** The doppler grimm Salem is seen working on in the early chapters come back in chapter 56 as [[spoiler:the means by which Salem will have May steal the Maiden powers]].
* ChekhovsSkill: In chapter 48, May demonstrates to Salem that she has learned to use the Windcoil to curve her arrows. [[spoiler:In chapter 49, she shoots an arrow that would've killed Cinder if she hadn't doubted it the last moment and caused the arrow to only take out her eye]].
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* TheChosenOne: Cinder and May are both chosen as inheritors of the Maiden powers. Downplayed in that the people who choose them are, respectively, a very fallible mortal and a DarkMessiah and it's framed less like a quirk of destiny and more like grooming.
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* CoolBigSis: May's relationship to Emerald, giving her advice about trans things and being the first in her life to offer support with no alterior motive.
* TheCorruptor:
** Ironwood grooms Atlas students into mindless obedience to the kingdom of Atlas, and, by extension, him. Clover has already fallen for it by the time the fic stars, which is how the happy huntresses know to warn May and Winter about Ironwood's tactics. Cinder's arc revolves around her falling for his grooming, while [[spoiler:Marrow manages to avoid it]].
** After getting away from Atlas, May ends up in the arms of an even ''worse'' corruptor; [[SatanicArchetype Salem]], who proceeds to play on May's anxieties, need for affirmation and lack of maternal love for all her life to make her cut off any potential contact with her old friends and make her fiercly loyal to Salem herself. When Stella warns that May's lack of closure over her old friends is going to turn into anger and hatred, Salem remarks that May's emotional progression is going just as planned.
* CreateYourOwnVillain: [[spoiler:Ironwood's authoritarian actions, culminating in throwing May in a secret prison after she glimpses the skeletons in Atlas' closet, are what ultimately led her to falling into Salem's arms and becoming a powerful sorceress hellbent on seing Atlas torn from the sky]].
* {{Cult}}: Several characters, including May herself, note that Salem's whole setup is very cult-like. While it's not technically a cult, Salem still uses very cult-like tactics to recruit May; Sepparating her from her support network, offer her everything she wants, and shower her with love and affection.
* TheCorruptor:
** Ironwood grooms Atlas students into mindless obedience to the kingdom of Atlas, and, by extension, him. Clover has already fallen for it by the time the fic stars, which is how the happy huntresses know to warn May and Winter about Ironwood's tactics. Cinder's arc revolves around her falling for his grooming, while [[spoiler:Marrow manages to avoid it]].
** After getting away from Atlas, May ends up in the arms of an even ''worse'' corruptor; [[SatanicArchetype Salem]], who proceeds to play on May's anxieties, need for affirmation and lack of maternal love for all her life to make her cut off any potential contact with her old friends and make her fiercly loyal to Salem herself. When Stella warns that May's lack of closure over her old friends is going to turn into anger and hatred, Salem remarks that May's emotional progression is going just as planned.
* CreateYourOwnVillain: [[spoiler:Ironwood's authoritarian actions, culminating in throwing May in a secret prison after she glimpses the skeletons in Atlas' closet, are what ultimately led her to falling into Salem's arms and becoming a powerful sorceress hellbent on seing Atlas torn from the sky]].
* {{Cult}}: Several characters, including May herself, note that Salem's whole setup is very cult-like. While it's not technically a cult, Salem still uses very cult-like tactics to recruit May; Sepparating her from her support network, offer her everything she wants, and shower her with love and affection.
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* CoolBigSis: May's relationship to Emerald, giving her advice about trans things and being the first in her life to offer support with no alterior motive.
* TheCorruptor:
**TheCorruptor: Ironwood grooms Atlas students into mindless obedience to the kingdom of Atlas, and, by extension, him. Clover has already fallen for it by the time the fic stars, which is how the happy huntresses know to warn May and Winter about Ironwood's tactics. Cinder's arc revolves around her falling for his grooming, while [[spoiler:Marrow manages to avoid it]].
** After getting away from Atlas, May ends up in the arms of an even ''worse'' corruptor; [[SatanicArchetype Salem]], who proceeds to play on May's anxieties, need for affirmation and lack of maternal love for all her life to make her cut off any potential contact with her old friends and make her fiercly loyal to Salem herself. When Stella warns that May's lack of closure over her old friends is going to turn into anger and hatred, Salem remarks that May's emotional progression is going just as planned.
* CreateYourOwnVillain: [[spoiler:Ironwood's authoritarian actions, culminating in throwing May in a secret prison after she glimpses the skeletons in Atlas' closet, are what ultimately led her to falling into Salem's arms and becoming a powerful sorceress hellbent on seing Atlas torn from the sky]].
* {{Cult}}: Several characters, including May herself, note that Salem's whole setup is very cult-like. While it's not technically a cult, Salem still uses very cult-like tactics to recruit May; Sepparating her from her support network, offer her everything she wants, and shower her with love and affection.it]].
* TheCorruptor:
**
** After getting away from Atlas, May ends up in the arms of an even ''worse'' corruptor; [[SatanicArchetype Salem]], who proceeds to play on May's anxieties, need for affirmation and lack of maternal love for all her life to make her cut off any potential contact with her old friends and make her fiercly loyal to Salem herself. When Stella warns that May's lack of closure over her old friends is going to turn into anger and hatred, Salem remarks that May's emotional progression is going just as planned.
* CreateYourOwnVillain: [[spoiler:Ironwood's authoritarian actions, culminating in throwing May in a secret prison after she glimpses the skeletons in Atlas' closet, are what ultimately led her to falling into Salem's arms and becoming a powerful sorceress hellbent on seing Atlas torn from the sky]].
* {{Cult}}: Several characters, including May herself, note that Salem's whole setup is very cult-like. While it's not technically a cult, Salem still uses very cult-like tactics to recruit May; Sepparating her from her support network, offer her everything she wants, and shower her with love and affection.
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* DeadpanSnarker: Tyrian, of all people, gets a moment of snark with [[spoiler:Juni]].
-->'''[[spoiler:Juni]]:''' I'd be careful. Snakes eat scorpions out here.\\
'''Tyrian:''' But not bluebirds, it would seem.
* DeathFakedForYou: [[spoiler:When May gets blackbaged and escapes from the BlackSite with Salem's help, Ironwood puts out the story that she defected and fled to an outlying village, but dies in a grimm attack. May runs with it, but Winter is less convinced]].
-->'''[[spoiler:Juni]]:''' I'd be careful. Snakes eat scorpions out here.\\
'''Tyrian:''' But not bluebirds, it would seem.
* DeathFakedForYou: [[spoiler:When May gets blackbaged and escapes from the BlackSite with Salem's help, Ironwood puts out the story that she defected and fled to an outlying village, but dies in a grimm attack. May runs with it, but Winter is less convinced]].
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* DoorStopper: Not egregiously so, but at 560,000 words split across 58 chapters, it's the length of a respectable epic, and that's not even counting in ''Reignfall''.
* TheDragon: May ends up becoming the primary agent of Salem's will.
* TheDragon: May ends up becoming the primary agent of Salem's will.
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** PlayedForDrama. After joining Salem, a combination of Salem's manipulations and her own anxieties cause May to doubt her friendship with Winter, worrying that Winter was just manipulating her, and has probably forgotten her completely. The scenes from Winter's perspective shows that she is desperately looking for May, even when everyone else insists that she's in denial.
** While in Vacuo, May goes into a negative spiral about her relationship to the happy huntresses and Winter, convincing herself that the HH didn't actually see her as a friend and Winter was just manipulating her. Not only does the reader know that's not true at all, but the previous chapter focused on [[spoiler:the Happy Huntresses, including Winter, finding May's old weapon and growing more determined than ever to find her]].
** The above is taken a step further in chapter 45, where [[spoiler:Salem trains May to use her anger to channel magic, convincing her that the Happy Huntresses abandoned her to rot in a BlackSite but were happy to take in Winter Schnee as one of their own because they apparently cared more about her than May. GilliganCut to the Happy Huntresses staying up all night to find any sort of clue that could lead them to May despite knowing it could get them thrown in a BlackSite]].
** While out looking for May, Robyn jokingly suggests the dark continent as a good vacation spot, which Winter rolls her eyes at. Guess where May is at right that moment.
** While in Vacuo, May goes into a negative spiral about her relationship to the happy huntresses and Winter, convincing herself that the HH didn't actually see her as a friend and Winter was just manipulating her. Not only does the reader know that's not true at all, but the previous chapter focused on [[spoiler:the Happy Huntresses, including Winter, finding May's old weapon and growing more determined than ever to find her]].
** The above is taken a step further in chapter 45, where [[spoiler:Salem trains May to use her anger to channel magic, convincing her that the Happy Huntresses abandoned her to rot in a BlackSite but were happy to take in Winter Schnee as one of their own because they apparently cared more about her than May. GilliganCut to the Happy Huntresses staying up all night to find any sort of clue that could lead them to May despite knowing it could get them thrown in a BlackSite]].
** While out looking for May, Robyn jokingly suggests the dark continent as a good vacation spot, which Winter rolls her eyes at. Guess where May is at right that moment.
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* EasySexChange: Salem guides May towards an [[spoiler:antediluvian artifact known as the Mirror of Reflection, which still holds some of the ancient magic from humanity's first go-around. With it, May is able to modify her body to be more comfortable and fit with her gender. It's not an instant fix, taking around nine months of daily use to get full effect and draining her aura everytime she uses it, but it's far quicker than mundane hormone replacement therapy. She later lets Emerald use it for her own transition]].
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* EmotionalPowers: Salem advices May that she will have to channel her strongest emotions, particularily fury and grief, to use the maiden powers, [[spoiler:encouraging her to think of her friends abandoning her to rot and clearly caring more about Winter than her]]. Strong emotions are not the only way to use the Maiden powers (Amber is quite calm, for instance), but Salem wants May as angry as possible to manipulate her easier.
* EmpathicWeapon: The [[spoiler:Mirror of Reflection is technically not a weapon, but it is a MagicItem that responds to and interracts with its user. Being a mirror, it reflects their appearance and personality back at them, but given that the user in question is [[DeadpanSnarker May]], it gets rather expressive]].
* EmpathicWeapon: The [[spoiler:Mirror of Reflection is technically not a weapon, but it is a MagicItem that responds to and interracts with its user. Being a mirror, it reflects their appearance and personality back at them, but given that the user in question is [[DeadpanSnarker May]], it gets rather expressive]].
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* EveryoneHasStandards:
** Ironwood, for all his many ''many'' faults, defends Marrow from the Marigolds' racism.
** Rusty and Juni, the Vacuan thugs, will threaten to murder May, ransom her to her abusive family, or sell her to the Atlesian military. But they draw the line at transphobia.
* EvilIsBurningHot: The Dark Continent, where Salem (and later May) lives, is described as swelteringly hot.
* EvilIsPetty: After Marrow leaves Atlas on ethical concerns, Ironwood [[spoiler:has Prometheus, the only combat school in Mantle and Marrow's alma mater, investigated, branded as revolutionaries, and shut down, and all their graduates are put on the suspected terrorist list]].
** Ironwood, for all his many ''many'' faults, defends Marrow from the Marigolds' racism.
** Rusty and Juni, the Vacuan thugs, will threaten to murder May, ransom her to her abusive family, or sell her to the Atlesian military. But they draw the line at transphobia.
* EvilIsBurningHot: The Dark Continent, where Salem (and later May) lives, is described as swelteringly hot.
* EvilIsPetty: After Marrow leaves Atlas on ethical concerns, Ironwood [[spoiler:has Prometheus, the only combat school in Mantle and Marrow's alma mater, investigated, branded as revolutionaries, and shut down, and all their graduates are put on the suspected terrorist list]].
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* EveryoneHasStandards:
**EveryoneHasStandards: Ironwood, for all his many ''many'' faults, defends Marrow from the Marigolds' racism.
** Rusty and Juni, the Vacuan thugs,racism. Downplayed in that he will threaten to murder May, ransom her to her abusive family, or sell her to the Atlesian military. But they draw the line at transphobia.
* EvilIsBurningHot: The Dark Continent, where Salem (and later May) lives, is described as swelteringly hot.
* EvilIsPetty: After Marrow leaves Atlas on ethical concerns, Ironwood [[spoiler:has Prometheus, theonly combat school in Mantle object to it when faced with it personally, and Marrow's alma mater, investigated, branded as revolutionaries, and shut down, and all their graduates are put on doesn't actually care about the suspected terrorist list]].way his kingdom oppresses faunus.
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** Rusty and Juni, the Vacuan thugs,
* EvilIsBurningHot: The Dark Continent, where Salem (and later May) lives, is described as swelteringly hot.
* EvilIsPetty: After Marrow leaves Atlas on ethical concerns, Ironwood [[spoiler:has Prometheus, the
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* EyeScream: [[spoiler:Cinder loses her eye to May in this version. May had initially intended to kill her to stop her from killing Amarillo, but regreted it in the last moment and used the windcoil to knock the arrow aside, so it only grazed Cinder's eye]].
* FakeOutOpening:
** The first chapter opens on Cinder fighting Rhodes in what seems to be a retread of their dramatic fight in the episode ''Midnight''. Turns out that Cinder is 17, soon to be attending Atlas, and they are merely having a sparring match.
** The last chapter opens on what appears to be May's assassination of the Fall Maiden, but turns out to be training for the real deal with Salem.
* FakingTheDead: Arthur Watts, like in canon, fakes his death to go work with Salem full-time. [[spoiler:May does the same, but in her case it's more a case of DeathFakedForYou that she ran with]].
-->[[spoiler:'''May''']]: Getting fake burned alive clearly did nothing to take the stick out of your ass.\\
'''Watts:''' And getting falsely mauled by an Ursa didn’t make you any more tolerable.
* FallenHero: The fic chronicles May Marigold's fall from grace, from a WhiteSheep wanting to make up for her family's crimes, to a willing agent for the setting's UnseenEvil, set on ripping Atlas from the sky no matter the cost.
* FakeOutOpening:
** The first chapter opens on Cinder fighting Rhodes in what seems to be a retread of their dramatic fight in the episode ''Midnight''. Turns out that Cinder is 17, soon to be attending Atlas, and they are merely having a sparring match.
** The last chapter opens on what appears to be May's assassination of the Fall Maiden, but turns out to be training for the real deal with Salem.
* FakingTheDead: Arthur Watts, like in canon, fakes his death to go work with Salem full-time. [[spoiler:May does the same, but in her case it's more a case of DeathFakedForYou that she ran with]].
-->[[spoiler:'''May''']]: Getting fake burned alive clearly did nothing to take the stick out of your ass.\\
'''Watts:''' And getting falsely mauled by an Ursa didn’t make you any more tolerable.
* FallenHero: The fic chronicles May Marigold's fall from grace, from a WhiteSheep wanting to make up for her family's crimes, to a willing agent for the setting's UnseenEvil, set on ripping Atlas from the sky no matter the cost.
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* EyeScream: [[spoiler:Cinder loses her eye to May in this version. May had initially intended to kill her to stop her from killing Amarillo, but regreted it in the last moment and used the windcoil to knock the arrow aside, so it only grazed Cinder's eye]].
* FakeOutOpening:
**FakeOutOpening: The first chapter opens on Cinder fighting Rhodes in what seems to be a retread of their dramatic fight in the episode ''Midnight''. Turns out that Cinder is 17, soon to be attending Atlas, and they are merely having a sparring match.
** The last chapter opens on what appears to be May's assassination of the Fall Maiden, but turns out to be training for the real deal with Salem.
* FakingTheDead: Arthur Watts, like in canon, fakes his death to go work with Salem full-time. [[spoiler:May does the same, but in her case it's more a case of DeathFakedForYou that she ran with]].\n-->[[spoiler:'''May''']]: Getting fake burned alive clearly did nothing to take the stick out of your ass.\\\n'''Watts:''' And getting falsely mauled by an Ursa didn’t make you any more tolerable.\n* FallenHero: The fic chronicles May Marigold's fall from grace, from a WhiteSheep wanting to make up for her family's crimes, to a willing agent for the setting's UnseenEvil, set on ripping Atlas from the sky no matter the cost.
* FakeOutOpening:
**
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* ForWantOfANail:
** The main point of divergence for this entire continuity seems to be Rhodes taking in Cinder [[spoiler:after she murdered her adopted family]]. Because of this, she ends up on a team with Winter, May and Marrow, Winter ends up interracting more with the Happy Huntresses and learns more about her family's crimes, and Salem has to find a new Maiden candidate, setting her sights on May.
** The Janus incident also means that Cinder learns about the Maidens and the Relics far earlier than Winter did in the show.
* TheFriendNobodyLikes:
** Cinder Rhodes, to a T. While she isn't an AxCrazy powerhungry lunatic like in canon, her extremely competitive nature and dismissal of personal issues wins her no friends, even within her own team. She gets slightly better as she spends more time with her team.
** Tyrian is this to Salem's inner circle. May might not ''like'' working with Watts, but he's miles better than an insane SerialKiller.
* FromBadToWorse: Chapter 25 onward. Cinder learns that Rhodes was killed by a criminal Winter and Marrow failed to arrest, driving a further wedge between her and her team. Stella discovers May's real name and tricks her into thinking Winter accidentally outed her. Winter promises that she won't keep secrets from May, but soon after has to reveal that she knows something about Janus, but doesn't have time to elaborate why she didn't say anything sooner, causing May to distrust her further. May, Marrow and Winter learn about the wildly unethical stuff Atlas has been up to from the Janus archive. Winter and Marrow are hurt in the escape, leading to May confronting Ironwood about it alone. Ironwood gets a case of the old paranoia and [[spoiler:blackbags May, meaning that May is now completely sepparated from her support network and in a government prison, Winter and the happy huntresses thinks she simply ran away, and Cinder is more under Ironwood's thumb than ever. And then Salem shows up]].
** The main point of divergence for this entire continuity seems to be Rhodes taking in Cinder [[spoiler:after she murdered her adopted family]]. Because of this, she ends up on a team with Winter, May and Marrow, Winter ends up interracting more with the Happy Huntresses and learns more about her family's crimes, and Salem has to find a new Maiden candidate, setting her sights on May.
** The Janus incident also means that Cinder learns about the Maidens and the Relics far earlier than Winter did in the show.
* TheFriendNobodyLikes:
** Cinder Rhodes, to a T. While she isn't an AxCrazy powerhungry lunatic like in canon, her extremely competitive nature and dismissal of personal issues wins her no friends, even within her own team. She gets slightly better as she spends more time with her team.
** Tyrian is this to Salem's inner circle. May might not ''like'' working with Watts, but he's miles better than an insane SerialKiller.
* FromBadToWorse: Chapter 25 onward. Cinder learns that Rhodes was killed by a criminal Winter and Marrow failed to arrest, driving a further wedge between her and her team. Stella discovers May's real name and tricks her into thinking Winter accidentally outed her. Winter promises that she won't keep secrets from May, but soon after has to reveal that she knows something about Janus, but doesn't have time to elaborate why she didn't say anything sooner, causing May to distrust her further. May, Marrow and Winter learn about the wildly unethical stuff Atlas has been up to from the Janus archive. Winter and Marrow are hurt in the escape, leading to May confronting Ironwood about it alone. Ironwood gets a case of the old paranoia and [[spoiler:blackbags May, meaning that May is now completely sepparated from her support network and in a government prison, Winter and the happy huntresses thinks she simply ran away, and Cinder is more under Ironwood's thumb than ever. And then Salem shows up]].
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* ForWantOfANail:
**ForWantOfANail: The main point of divergence for this entire continuity seems to be Rhodes taking in Cinder [[spoiler:after she murdered her adopted family]]. Because of this, she ends up on a team with Winter, May and Marrow, Winter ends up interracting more with the Happy Huntresses and learns more about her family's crimes, and Salem has to find a new Maiden candidate, setting her sights on May.
** The Janus incident also means that Cinder learns about the Maidens and the Relics far earlier than Winter did in the show.
* TheFriendNobodyLikes:
**TheFriendNobodyLikes: Cinder Rhodes, to a T. While she isn't an AxCrazy powerhungry lunatic like in canon, her extremely competitive nature and dismissal of personal issues wins her no friends, even within her own team. She gets slightly better as she spends more time with her team.
** Tyrian is this to Salem's inner circle. May might not ''like'' working with Watts, but he's miles better than an insane SerialKiller.
* FromBadToWorse: Chapter 25 onward.and 26. Cinder learns that Rhodes was killed by a criminal Winter and Marrow failed to arrest, driving a further wedge between her and her team. Stella discovers May's real name and tricks her into thinking Winter accidentally outed her. Winter promises that she won't keep secrets from May, but soon after has to reveal that she knows something about Janus, but doesn't have time to elaborate why she didn't say anything sooner, causing May to distrust her further. May, Marrow and Winter learn about the wildly unethical stuff Atlas has been up to from the Janus archive. Winter and Marrow are hurt in the escape, leading to May confronting Ironwood about it alone. Ironwood gets a case of the old paranoia and [[spoiler:blackbags May, meaning that May is now completely sepparated from her support network and in a government prison, Winter and the happy huntresses thinks she simply ran away, and Cinder is more under Ironwood's thumb than ever. And then Salem shows up]].ever]].
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* GainingTheWillToKill: Salem wants her maiden to be willing to kill, so part of her training of May involves pushing her towards being more ruthless and embracing her anger. May is initially horrified when she kills someone for the first time, and [[spoiler:stops herself from killing Cinder]], but finally crosses the line with [[spoiler:Juni, killing her out of anger and spite after Juni kills several of May's companions]].
* {{Gaslighting}}: A favored part of Salem's manipulation of May. Particularily, she convinces May that Winter lied about not outing her to Stella, so if Winter lied about that, what else would she lie about? Winter and the Happy Huntresses didn't tell her about Janus, so were they keeping other things for her? If they were so happy to leave her out of things, did they even try to save her when she was [[spoiler:put in Cerberus]], or were they happy to be rid of her? Why would they embrace Winter, daughter of Atlas' most notorious CorruptCorporateExecutive, as one of them, but leave out May?
* GilliganCut: A rare PlayedForDrama example. In chapter 45, it cuts from May being manipulated by Salem into thinking Winter and the Happy Huntresses never cared about her, to the Happy Huntresses, Marrow and Winter risking their lives to find out what happened to her.
* GoMadFromTheIsolation: Downplayed. May doesn't go mad from [[spoiler:her time in Atlas' BlackSite, but it takes a heavy toll on her mental state and causes her anxiety to interfere with her reasoning, leaving her easy pickings for Salem's manipulations]].
* {{Gaslighting}}: A favored part of Salem's manipulation of May. Particularily, she convinces May that Winter lied about not outing her to Stella, so if Winter lied about that, what else would she lie about? Winter and the Happy Huntresses didn't tell her about Janus, so were they keeping other things for her? If they were so happy to leave her out of things, did they even try to save her when she was [[spoiler:put in Cerberus]], or were they happy to be rid of her? Why would they embrace Winter, daughter of Atlas' most notorious CorruptCorporateExecutive, as one of them, but leave out May?
* GilliganCut: A rare PlayedForDrama example. In chapter 45, it cuts from May being manipulated by Salem into thinking Winter and the Happy Huntresses never cared about her, to the Happy Huntresses, Marrow and Winter risking their lives to find out what happened to her.
* GoMadFromTheIsolation: Downplayed. May doesn't go mad from [[spoiler:her time in Atlas' BlackSite, but it takes a heavy toll on her mental state and causes her anxiety to interfere with her reasoning, leaving her easy pickings for Salem's manipulations]].
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* GreatEscape: Chapter 51 focuses on one. To get [[spoiler:Cassia Troy out of Tartarus, May and Emerald disguise themselves as soldiers, using Amarillo as a TrojanPrisoner. Everything goes great until it doesn't, and they are forced to release every prisoner at once, resulting in far more casualties among both guards and prisoners killed in the fight, as well as Tartarus being blown to bits as a security measure, though only after the remaining prisoners escape to safety]].
* TheGreatSerpent: May and Hazel run into an undiscovered type of grimm in Anima resembling a giant snake with a scorpion's stinger and [[MultipleHeadCase three heads]]. Its gaze induces panic in people who meet it, causing them to attract more grimm, which is likely why it was undiscovered until then. May names it a Gorgon.
* TheGreatSerpent: May and Hazel run into an undiscovered type of grimm in Anima resembling a giant snake with a scorpion's stinger and [[MultipleHeadCase three heads]]. Its gaze induces panic in people who meet it, causing them to attract more grimm, which is likely why it was undiscovered until then. May names it a Gorgon.
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* HeightAngst: May's uncertainty about wearing high heels is in part from not wanting to be taller than she already is. [[spoiler:Winter convinces her by saying that she finds [[ShipTease tall women hot]]]].
* HumanResources: Dust is formed from [[spoiler:ancient, magic-using humans who died and their magic crystalized. After finding a room in an ancient ruin filled with dust, May bitterly notes that Atlas would've mined it for profit]].
* HumanResources: Dust is formed from [[spoiler:ancient, magic-using humans who died and their magic crystalized. After finding a room in an ancient ruin filled with dust, May bitterly notes that Atlas would've mined it for profit]].
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* HeightAngst: May's uncertainty about wearing high heels is in part from not wanting to be taller than she already is. [[spoiler:Winter convinces her by saying that she finds [[ShipTease [[StatuesqueStunner tall women hot]]]].
* HumanResources: Dust is formed from [[spoiler:ancient, magic-using humans who died and their magic crystalized. After finding a room in an ancient ruin filled with dust, May bitterly notes that Atlas would've mined it for profit]].hot]]]].
* HumanResources: Dust is formed from [[spoiler:ancient, magic-using humans who died and their magic crystalized. After finding a room in an ancient ruin filled with dust, May bitterly notes that Atlas would've mined it for profit]].
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* IHaveNoDaughter: May is certain that she'd be disowned by the Marigolds if she ever came out as trans. [[spoiler:They don't get the chance before she "dies". Jacques also disowns Winter when she moves to Mantle, though she [[GlorifiedSpermDonor disowns him in turn first]].]]
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* IHaveNoDaughter: May is certain that she'd be disowned by the Marigolds if she ever came out as trans. [[spoiler:They don't get the chance before she "dies". Jacques also disowns Winter when she moves to Mantle, though she [[GlorifiedSpermDonor disowns him in turn first]].]]
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* InSpiteOfANail: Despite the vastly different circumstances, [[spoiler:Cinder still loses an eye, though in this case it's caused by May instead of Ruby]].
* InternalReveal: May and the Happy Huntresses learn the truth about various things at different paces, leading to a lot of this. It takes until chapter 55 for the HH to learn that [[spoiler:aura dampeners are essentially torture devices, whereas May has known that since chapter 27]].
* {{Irony}}: May's relationship to Cinder can be best described as "bad and deteriorating". However, after her trip to Vacuo, May swaps out her crossbow-sword for a bow-sword, which is Cinder's weapon in the show.
* ItsPersonalWithTheDragon: While they're not aware of it yet, the Happy Huntresses has no relationship to Salem, the BigBad OmnicidalManiac threatening the world. Her dragon, on the other hand, is their once close friend May.
* KingOfTheDinosaurs: [[spoiler:The grimm guarding the silent archive is modeled after a t-rex, and is by far the most dangerous grimm May fights in the entire fic, being fearsome enough that just the ancestral memory of it causes Cassia to freeze up]].
* InternalReveal: May and the Happy Huntresses learn the truth about various things at different paces, leading to a lot of this. It takes until chapter 55 for the HH to learn that [[spoiler:aura dampeners are essentially torture devices, whereas May has known that since chapter 27]].
* {{Irony}}: May's relationship to Cinder can be best described as "bad and deteriorating". However, after her trip to Vacuo, May swaps out her crossbow-sword for a bow-sword, which is Cinder's weapon in the show.
* ItsPersonalWithTheDragon: While they're not aware of it yet, the Happy Huntresses has no relationship to Salem, the BigBad OmnicidalManiac threatening the world. Her dragon, on the other hand, is their once close friend May.
* KingOfTheDinosaurs: [[spoiler:The grimm guarding the silent archive is modeled after a t-rex, and is by far the most dangerous grimm May fights in the entire fic, being fearsome enough that just the ancestral memory of it causes Cassia to freeze up]].
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* LegacyCharacter: Maidens, as per canon, passes their powers onto someone else when they die, either the person they think about when they die if they qualify, or someone random if they don't. The fic also runs with the idea that [[spoiler:the Maiden powers originate not from Ozma [[SuperEmpowering empowering worthy mortals]], but from Salem and Ozma's children, who inherited part of their father's ResurrectiveImmortality causing their powers (but not souls) to reincarnate]]. The fic shows the previous Fall Maiden pass her powers along to Amber, and May and Cinder are both being groomed as Maidens.
* LikeADaughterToMe: [[spoiler:Salem tells May that she has started to see her as a daughter of sorts, and would be proud to have May inherit the Maiden powers that originated from Salem and Ozma's daughters. It's part of her manipulation tactic, but May buys into it wholesale, having been starved for maternal affection her entire life. She is genuine, but is also so ancient and detached from humanity that even her surrogate daughter is just a tool for her to use]].
* LikeADaughterToMe: [[spoiler:Salem tells May that she has started to see her as a daughter of sorts, and would be proud to have May inherit the Maiden powers that originated from Salem and Ozma's daughters. It's part of her manipulation tactic, but May buys into it wholesale, having been starved for maternal affection her entire life. She is genuine, but is also so ancient and detached from humanity that even her surrogate daughter is just a tool for her to use]].
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* LotusEaterMachine: Chapter 47 is one long one, induced by Salem to help May embrace her anger. [[spoiler:It depicts a perfect world where May is living openly as a woman and in a happy relationship with Winter, Ironwood, his lackeys and Jacques have been arrested for their crimes thanks to Ozpin, the Marigolds are both accepting of May being a woman and have decided to stop exploiting Mantle, Winter's family are happy and contributing to building up Mantle, and Amarillo is the new headmaster of Atlas with Marrow as his right hand man. When the dream finally breaks (just as Ladon Marigold was about to call May "daughter"), May directs her anger and grief at Winter, the Happy Huntresses, Marrow and Ozpin. [[JustAsPlanned Exactly as Salem hoped she would]]]].
* MagicKnight: May after gaining a weaker version of the Maiden powers in the form of [[spoiler:the Windcoil and the Lightning Rod]] still prefers to use them to supplement her conventional weapons, particularily using [[spoiler:the windcoil to curve the trajectory of her arrows]].
* TheManBehindTheMan: Salem frames Ozpin as this, the last in a line of Ozma's reincarnations who realized he couldn't rule the world openly and instead chose to become a force hidden in the shadows, working to uphold his tyrannical regime. She's heavily exaggerating his flaws, as he's actually the head of a BenevolentConspiracy.
* MagicKnight: May after gaining a weaker version of the Maiden powers in the form of [[spoiler:the Windcoil and the Lightning Rod]] still prefers to use them to supplement her conventional weapons, particularily using [[spoiler:the windcoil to curve the trajectory of her arrows]].
* TheManBehindTheMan: Salem frames Ozpin as this, the last in a line of Ozma's reincarnations who realized he couldn't rule the world openly and instead chose to become a force hidden in the shadows, working to uphold his tyrannical regime. She's heavily exaggerating his flaws, as he's actually the head of a BenevolentConspiracy.
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* MercyKill: How Salem justifies the death of Cerberus site's prisoners to May. She couldn't bring them with her, so her options were to let them be recaptured and most likely executed or tortured by Atlas, or let them go, in which case they'd freeze to death in the tundra.
* MirrorCharacter: May and Cinder have strong parallels in their respective arcs, and notably are both driving forces in each other's fall from grace. [[spoiler:May initially falls into Salem's hand because Cinder didn't take her side when she was arrested. This leads to May's corruption arc, including shooting out Cinder's eye in retribution, which in turn leads to Cinder getting a prosthetic that can see through May's [[{{Invisibility}} Semblance]]. May's preference for ShockAndAwe for her Maiden powers also stems from her anger at Atlas, which Cinder was part of, unintentionally giving her the ability to press Cinder's TraumaButton. Every step of the way, Cinder and May push each other to become worse and arm each other to better fight one another]].
* MundaneUtility: It's suggested at a few points that [[spoiler:the mirror of reflection]] could be used to both instantly clean up and apply makeup, though both are [[SubvertedTrope deemed too costly in aura]].
* MyRuleFuIsStrongerThanYours: When Cinder and Clover show up on the Happy Huntresses doorstep to ask about the location of a fugitive, Robyn and Fiona list the exact legal protections they have against being forced to say anything, and several good reasons they could make a lawsuit if Cinder does anything to force them.
* MirrorCharacter: May and Cinder have strong parallels in their respective arcs, and notably are both driving forces in each other's fall from grace. [[spoiler:May initially falls into Salem's hand because Cinder didn't take her side when she was arrested. This leads to May's corruption arc, including shooting out Cinder's eye in retribution, which in turn leads to Cinder getting a prosthetic that can see through May's [[{{Invisibility}} Semblance]]. May's preference for ShockAndAwe for her Maiden powers also stems from her anger at Atlas, which Cinder was part of, unintentionally giving her the ability to press Cinder's TraumaButton. Every step of the way, Cinder and May push each other to become worse and arm each other to better fight one another]].
* MundaneUtility: It's suggested at a few points that [[spoiler:the mirror of reflection]] could be used to both instantly clean up and apply makeup, though both are [[SubvertedTrope deemed too costly in aura]].
* MyRuleFuIsStrongerThanYours: When Cinder and Clover show up on the Happy Huntresses doorstep to ask about the location of a fugitive, Robyn and Fiona list the exact legal protections they have against being forced to say anything, and several good reasons they could make a lawsuit if Cinder does anything to force them.
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** To reach the Mirror of Reflection, May has to fight a giant multi-headed serpent that can petrify her with a look (from panic, not literal TakenForGranite), which she names a Gorgon. Gorgons were the species of monster Medusa was part of, and the hero Theseus famously used a mirrored shield when fighting her.
** When looking for the second artifact, May runs into a grimm named the Charybdis, which has the ability to breathe in sand and spit it out again. Charybdis was a monster faced by [[Literature/TheOdyssey Odysseus]], which had the ability to do the same with water.
** When on a mission in Solitas for the third artifact, May get the help of Amarillo Suadere, who alludes to Orpheus, to get [[spoiler:Cassia Troy]] out of Tartarus, mirroring both Orpheus going into Hades to save Eurydice, and Odysseus seeking the dead prophet Tiresias.
** Cassia Troy is based on Cassandra of Troy and the blind prophet Tiresias. She is knowledgeable, like a prophet. Like Cassandra, her warnings to Marrow about attending Atlas went ignored. Like Tiresias, she is [[spoiler:sought out by a hero who needs her guidance]].
** The combat school in Mantle is named Prometheus. In Greek myth, the titan Prometheus gave Fire to mankind, giving them the tools to survive, but in doing so angered Zeus, who punished Prometheus severely. The combat school Prometheus equipped the people of Mantle with the knowldge and tools to protect themselves, but when some of its graduates defies Atlas, [[spoiler:it angers Ironwood, who has Prometheus shut down and its teachers arrested]].
** When looking for the second artifact, May runs into a grimm named the Charybdis, which has the ability to breathe in sand and spit it out again. Charybdis was a monster faced by [[Literature/TheOdyssey Odysseus]], which had the ability to do the same with water.
** When on a mission in Solitas for the third artifact, May get the help of Amarillo Suadere, who alludes to Orpheus, to get [[spoiler:Cassia Troy]] out of Tartarus, mirroring both Orpheus going into Hades to save Eurydice, and Odysseus seeking the dead prophet Tiresias.
** Cassia Troy is based on Cassandra of Troy and the blind prophet Tiresias. She is knowledgeable, like a prophet. Like Cassandra, her warnings to Marrow about attending Atlas went ignored. Like Tiresias, she is [[spoiler:sought out by a hero who needs her guidance]].
** The combat school in Mantle is named Prometheus. In Greek myth, the titan Prometheus gave Fire to mankind, giving them the tools to survive, but in doing so angered Zeus, who punished Prometheus severely. The combat school Prometheus equipped the people of Mantle with the knowldge and tools to protect themselves, but when some of its graduates defies Atlas, [[spoiler:it angers Ironwood, who has Prometheus shut down and its teachers arrested]].
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* NeverFoundTheBody: [[spoiler:May's]] body is not found in the aftermath of the grimm attack that supposedly killed her, something Cinder and Winter both take as indication that she's alive. [[spoiler:She is, of course, but on a different continent]].
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* NightmareSequence:
** Chapter 42 ends with May suffering a nightmare where she and Winter try to escape from the Marigold manor, helped by the Happy Huntresses, only for them all to leave her behind and mock her. It not-so-subtly reflects how she is starting to feel about her old friends, however unjustified.
** Chapter 56 has May suffer a nightmare about her various anxieties and traumas. First, she sees the Happy Huntresses in a bar in Mantle being happy that they got rid of her, then [[spoiler:Emerald, Cassia and Silver dying]], and finally Cinder accusing her of being responsible for their deaths]].
** Chapter 42 ends with May suffering a nightmare where she and Winter try to escape from the Marigold manor, helped by the Happy Huntresses, only for them all to leave her behind and mock her. It not-so-subtly reflects how she is starting to feel about her old friends, however unjustified.
** Chapter 56 has May suffer a nightmare about her various anxieties and traumas. First, she sees the Happy Huntresses in a bar in Mantle being happy that they got rid of her, then [[spoiler:Emerald, Cassia and Silver dying]], and finally Cinder accusing her of being responsible for their deaths]].
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* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: Discussed. After she and May camp together in a sandstorm, Emerald considers that the smart thing to do would be to steal May's supplies and leave her to rot. [[spoiler:She decides against it, reasoning that May could probably take her in a fight but still let Emerald use her supplies freely]].
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* OldFriendNewGender: On a mission to Mantle for Salem, May recruits a miner who's wounds she treated when she was still attending Atlas, giving him a bit of a shock when revealing that she's ''that'' Marigold.
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* {{Panacea}}: The third artifact May recovers, the Amulet of Protection, can heal any wound or disease short of death. [[spoiler:She uses it to save Emerald from a lethal poisoning, but is too late to save her other companions]].
* PastExperienceNightmare: May suffers trauma-induced nightmares about [[spoiler:being kept in [[BlackSite Cerberus]]]].
* APlaceHoldsMemories: On the mission to Solitas, May struggles with her memories from before [[spoiler:her faked death]]. Both the happy memories of spending time with Winter and the Happy Huntresses, and more traumatic memories about Atlas in particular.
* PastExperienceNightmare: May suffers trauma-induced nightmares about [[spoiler:being kept in [[BlackSite Cerberus]]]].
* APlaceHoldsMemories: On the mission to Solitas, May struggles with her memories from before [[spoiler:her faked death]]. Both the happy memories of spending time with Winter and the Happy Huntresses, and more traumatic memories about Atlas in particular.
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* PowerIncontinence: Semblances can misfire if the user is under extreme stress. May's semblance in particular activates when she's in situations she wants to escape from, such as the first time she admits to herself that she's trans. [[spoiler:It happens again, more tragically, when she returns to Mantle on a mission for Salem and runs into the Happy Huntresses. She panics and cloaks herself so completely that even when she builds up the courage to call out to Winter, her semblance quiets her]].
* PowerNullifier: Atlas uses Aura Dampening Handcuffs that prevent prisoners from manifesting their aura or use their semblance. As [[spoiler:May learns firsthand after being blackbagged, however, they are less power ''nullifiers'' and more power ''drainers''. They automatically detect when a prisoner's aura is recharging, then gives them a shock strong enough to drain it again]].
* ProtagonistJourneyToVillain: The entire fic follows May as she slips down the slippery slope thanks to a highly traumatic life and Salem's subtle pushes.
* RageBreakingPoint: May reaches hers in chapter 55, after [[spoiler:Juni Syntrichia kills Barry, Silver and Cassia, and fatally poisons Emerald. She goes completely feral and murders Juni in anger, rather than desperation as her previous kill had been]].
* TheReasonYouSuckSpeech:
** May gives on to Ironwood in "Janus", calling out all the horrific civil rights violations she saw evidence of in the Janus archive, the fact that Ironwood collaborated with Jacques Schnee to break up unions, the [[spoiler:false accusations]] of Amarillo Suadere, and the many, ''many'' censored documents indicating even worse things. [[spoiler:It gets her blackbagged and sent to a secret prison]].
** In chapter 31, Marrow, Winter and Cinder have a mutual one. Cinder and Marrow accuse Winter of being naïve and unwilling to accept [[spoiler:[[DeathFakedForYou Marigold's death]]. Winter and Marrow call Cinder out for being an incessant rules heckler who never even tried to be close with her team, only playing nice with them if they did as she asked, and being so mindlessly obedient that she didn't even support May when she was objecting to war crimes]].
** Qrow Branwen gives one to Ironwood in the final chapter, pointing out how [[spoiler:killing Amarillo]] would only cause more trouble and caused the loss of a possible asset. He also peppers in complaints about Ironwood's generally authoritarian methods.
* PowerNullifier: Atlas uses Aura Dampening Handcuffs that prevent prisoners from manifesting their aura or use their semblance. As [[spoiler:May learns firsthand after being blackbagged, however, they are less power ''nullifiers'' and more power ''drainers''. They automatically detect when a prisoner's aura is recharging, then gives them a shock strong enough to drain it again]].
* ProtagonistJourneyToVillain: The entire fic follows May as she slips down the slippery slope thanks to a highly traumatic life and Salem's subtle pushes.
* RageBreakingPoint: May reaches hers in chapter 55, after [[spoiler:Juni Syntrichia kills Barry, Silver and Cassia, and fatally poisons Emerald. She goes completely feral and murders Juni in anger, rather than desperation as her previous kill had been]].
* TheReasonYouSuckSpeech:
** May gives on to Ironwood in "Janus", calling out all the horrific civil rights violations she saw evidence of in the Janus archive, the fact that Ironwood collaborated with Jacques Schnee to break up unions, the [[spoiler:false accusations]] of Amarillo Suadere, and the many, ''many'' censored documents indicating even worse things. [[spoiler:It gets her blackbagged and sent to a secret prison]].
** In chapter 31, Marrow, Winter and Cinder have a mutual one. Cinder and Marrow accuse Winter of being naïve and unwilling to accept [[spoiler:[[DeathFakedForYou Marigold's death]]. Winter and Marrow call Cinder out for being an incessant rules heckler who never even tried to be close with her team, only playing nice with them if they did as she asked, and being so mindlessly obedient that she didn't even support May when she was objecting to war crimes]].
** Qrow Branwen gives one to Ironwood in the final chapter, pointing out how [[spoiler:killing Amarillo]] would only cause more trouble and caused the loss of a possible asset. He also peppers in complaints about Ironwood's generally authoritarian methods.
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* PowerIncontinence: Semblances can misfire if the user is under extreme stress. May's semblance in particular activates when she's in situations she wants to escape from, such as the first time she admits to herself that she's trans. [[spoiler:It happens again, more tragically, when she returns to Mantle on a mission for Salem and runs into the Happy Huntresses. She panics and cloaks herself so completely that even when she builds up the courage to call out to Winter, her semblance quiets her]].\n
* PowerNullifier: Atlas uses Aura Dampening Handcuffs that prevent prisoners from manifesting their aura or use theirsemblance. As [[spoiler:May learns firsthand after being blackbagged, however, they are less power ''nullifiers'' and more power ''drainers''. They automatically detect when a prisoner's aura is recharging, then gives them a shock strong enough to drain it again]].
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*ProtagonistJourneyToVillain: The entire fic follows May as she slips down the slippery slope thanks to a highly traumatic life and Salem's subtle pushes.
* RageBreakingPoint: May reaches hers in chapter 55, after [[spoiler:Juni Syntrichia kills Barry, Silver and Cassia, and fatally poisons Emerald. She goes completely feral and murders Juni in anger, rather than desperation as her previous kill had been]].
* TheReasonYouSuckSpeech:
**TheReasonYouSuckSpeech: May gives on to Ironwood in "Janus", calling out all the horrific civil rights violations she saw evidence of in the Janus archive, the fact that Ironwood collaborated with Jacques Schnee to break up unions, the [[spoiler:false accusations]] of Amarillo Suadere, and the many, ''many'' censored documents indicating even worse things. [[spoiler:It gets her blackbagged and sent to a secret prison]].
** In chapter 31, Marrow, Winter and Cinder have a mutual one. Cinder and Marrow accuse Winter of being naïve and unwilling to accept [[spoiler:[[DeathFakedForYou Marigold's death]]. Winter and Marrow call Cinder out for being an incessant rules heckler who never even tried to be close with her team, only playing nice with them if they did as she asked, and being so mindlessly obedient that she didn't even support May when she was objecting to war crimes]].
** Qrow Branwen gives one to Ironwood in the final chapter, pointing out how [[spoiler:killing Amarillo]] would only cause more trouble and caused the loss of a possible asset. He also peppers in complaints about Ironwood's generally authoritarian methods.prison]].
* PowerNullifier: Atlas uses Aura Dampening Handcuffs that prevent prisoners from manifesting their aura or use their
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* RageBreakingPoint: May reaches hers in chapter 55, after [[spoiler:Juni Syntrichia kills Barry, Silver and Cassia, and fatally poisons Emerald. She goes completely feral and murders Juni in anger, rather than desperation as her previous kill had been]].
* TheReasonYouSuckSpeech:
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** In chapter 31, Marrow, Winter and Cinder have a mutual one. Cinder and Marrow accuse Winter of being naïve and unwilling to accept [[spoiler:[[DeathFakedForYou Marigold's death]]. Winter and Marrow call Cinder out for being an incessant rules heckler who never even tried to be close with her team, only playing nice with them if they did as she asked, and being so mindlessly obedient that she didn't even support May when she was objecting to war crimes]].
** Qrow Branwen gives one to Ironwood in the final chapter, pointing out how [[spoiler:killing Amarillo]] would only cause more trouble and caused the loss of a possible asset. He also peppers in complaints about Ironwood's generally authoritarian methods.
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* RevengeBeforeReason: [[spoiler:Juni Syntrichia is so determined to get revenge on May for killing her partner that she makes her way across a desert while heavily wounded on foot, goes back into said desert for clues on where May went with barely a second of rest, and completely neglects her safety and health in the process. This is despite the fact that May only killed Rusty out of desperation, after specifically warning that any fight would end in death for one of them, and then saving Juni's life because she could]].
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** The basic premise is that May Marigold becomes Salem's subordinate in place of Cinder, Cinder [[AdoptiveNameChange Rhodes]] becomes Ironwood's right hand woman in place of Winter, and Winter Schnee becomes a happy huntress in place of May. The meat of the fic is exploring how this swap actually happens, while ''Reignfall'' explores how this will impact the main plot of the show.
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** The basic premise is that May Marigold becomes Salem's subordinate in place of Cinder, Cinder [[AdoptiveNameChange Rhodes]] becomes Ironwood's right hand woman in place of Winter, and Winter Schnee becomes a happy huntress in place of May. The meat of HTWOTS and ''Lost in the fic is Storm'' are dedicated to exploring how this swap actually happens, while ''Reignfall'' explores how this will impact the main plot of the show.
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* RudelyHangingUp: PlayedForDrama. When calling to inform Amarillo of [[spoiler:Cassia, Barry and Silver's deaths]], May hangs up as soon as he mentions the Happy Huntresses.
* RuleOfSymbolism:
** When making her new weapon, May plays into the symbolism of it all; Her previous weapon, Matilda, was a comparably small and light bastard sword that worked for proper duels. Her new weapon, Clorinda, is a massive greatsword, representing her not constraining herself and taking up space.
** In case it wasn't obvious, Salem spells out why May is the perfect symbolic fit for Fall Maiden; Fall is the season of Change, and may has gone through extreme change, for better or worse, in recent years, from her joining Atlas, defecting from Atlas, and transitioning. The Fall Maiden guards the relic of Choice, and May ''chose'' to leave her family to join Atlas, then ''chose'' to defect, and finally ''chose'' to join Salem.
* RuleOfSymbolism:
** When making her new weapon, May plays into the symbolism of it all; Her previous weapon, Matilda, was a comparably small and light bastard sword that worked for proper duels. Her new weapon, Clorinda, is a massive greatsword, representing her not constraining herself and taking up space.
** In case it wasn't obvious, Salem spells out why May is the perfect symbolic fit for Fall Maiden; Fall is the season of Change, and may has gone through extreme change, for better or worse, in recent years, from her joining Atlas, defecting from Atlas, and transitioning. The Fall Maiden guards the relic of Choice, and May ''chose'' to leave her family to join Atlas, then ''chose'' to defect, and finally ''chose'' to join Salem.
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* SandWorm: May runs into a grimm resembling one after crashing in the Vacuo deserts. It's large enough to swallow her ship whole.
* ShaggyDogStory: A minor sideplot follows a union organizer from Mantle who sneaks into Atlas to recover evidence of Ironwood's misdoings. She's unluky enough to do so at the same time as Salem's agents are breaking out dr. Merlot, and Ironwood arrests her on the suspicion that she is an agent of Salem. The last the reader sees of her is that she's being tortured at the Cerberus BlackSite. [[spoiler:Considering that Cerberus was destroyed by Salem, who only wanted May alive, it's safe to say that the organizer didn't make it]].
* ShatteringTheIllusion: [[spoiler:The perfect world dream sequence Salem puts May in shatters just as Ladon Marigold was about to call May his daughter. Salem stands ready to call give her maternal love and gender affirmation instead, driving May further under Salem's sway]].
* ShaggyDogStory: A minor sideplot follows a union organizer from Mantle who sneaks into Atlas to recover evidence of Ironwood's misdoings. She's unluky enough to do so at the same time as Salem's agents are breaking out dr. Merlot, and Ironwood arrests her on the suspicion that she is an agent of Salem. The last the reader sees of her is that she's being tortured at the Cerberus BlackSite. [[spoiler:Considering that Cerberus was destroyed by Salem, who only wanted May alive, it's safe to say that the organizer didn't make it]].
* ShatteringTheIllusion: [[spoiler:The perfect world dream sequence Salem puts May in shatters just as Ladon Marigold was about to call May his daughter. Salem stands ready to call give her maternal love and gender affirmation instead, driving May further under Salem's sway]].
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* ShipTease: The fic features a lot for Hellbore (Winter/May) and is even tagged as such. May is closer with Winter than any other member of team CASM, they frequently have private talks about their respective issues from being raised in abusive enviroments, Winter even mistakenly thinks May asked her out on a date once, and [[spoiler:Winter is the first person May comes out to. Finally goes beyond mere teasing in chapter 47, which features a DreamWorld built on May's view of a perfect world. Not only are May and Winter dating in it, but after the illusion falls apart, May admits that she was in love with Winter]].
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** A few to ''WesternAnimation/{{Arcane}}'':
*** Marrow's old instructors at combat school were named Vander and Greyson, and one scene takes place at a bar in Mantle named the Last Drop.
*** Chapter 47 is [[TitledAfterTheSong titled after]] ''What Could Have Been'' by Music/{{Sting}}, which was featured in the ''WesternAnimation/{{Arcane}}'' soundtrack. Appropriately, [[spoiler:the chapter is a DreamSequence of May's ideal happy world, which could have been if not for Ironwood, Ozpin, Winter and the Happy Huntresses (or so Salem tells her, at least]].
--->''I want you to hurt like you hurt me today\\
I want you to lose like I lose when I play\\
What could have been''
*** Marrow's old instructors at combat school were named Vander and Greyson, and one scene takes place at a bar in Mantle named the Last Drop.
*** Chapter 47 is [[TitledAfterTheSong titled after]] ''What Could Have Been'' by Music/{{Sting}}, which was featured in the ''WesternAnimation/{{Arcane}}'' soundtrack. Appropriately, [[spoiler:the chapter is a DreamSequence of May's ideal happy world, which could have been if not for Ironwood, Ozpin, Winter and the Happy Huntresses (or so Salem tells her, at least]].
--->''I want you to hurt like you hurt me today\\
I want you to lose like I lose when I play\\
What could have been''
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** A few to ''WesternAnimation/{{Arcane}}'':
***Marrow's old instructors at combat school were named [[WesternAnimation/{{Arcane}} Vander and Greyson, and one scene takes place at a bar in Mantle named the Last Drop.
*** Chapter 47 is [[TitledAfterTheSong titled after]] ''What Could Have Been'' by Music/{{Sting}}, which was featured in the ''WesternAnimation/{{Arcane}}'' soundtrack. Appropriately, [[spoiler:the chapter is a DreamSequence of May's ideal happy world, which could have been if not for Ironwood, Ozpin, Winter and the Happy Huntresses (or so Salem tells her, at least]].
--->''I want you to hurt like you hurt me today\\
I want you to lose like I lose when I play\\
What could have been''Drop]].
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*** Chapter 47 is [[TitledAfterTheSong titled after]] ''What Could Have Been'' by Music/{{Sting}}, which was featured in the ''WesternAnimation/{{Arcane}}'' soundtrack. Appropriately, [[spoiler:the chapter is a DreamSequence of May's ideal happy world, which could have been if not for Ironwood, Ozpin, Winter and the Happy Huntresses (or so Salem tells her, at least]].
--->''I want you to hurt like you hurt me today\\
I want you to lose like I lose when I play\\
What could have been''
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** While talking about movies to watch with Emerald, May lists ''[[Film/TheFly1986 The Lancer]]'', ''[[Franchise/{{Terminator}} Executioner]]'', ''[[Film/{{Sharknado}} Jellyfishicane]]'' and ''[[Film/LegallyBlonde Constitutionally Brunette]]'' (featuring the song "Gay or Mistrali"). Emerald later compares May's outfit to a hippie girl getting lost in a ''[[Series/DoctorWho Professor When]]'' set.
** After being asked to identify [[spoiler:May]], Troy cracks a joke that it's [[WesternAnimation/{{Brave}} Princess Merida]] who dyed and straightened her hair.
** Along with Marigold and Ottendorf (the union organizer), the [[spoiler:Cerberus innmates]] Clover lists are [[VideoGame/{{Overwatch}} Lacroix]], [[Film/TheSuicideSquad Cazo, Lawton]] and [[ComicBook/HarleyQuinn Quinzell]].
* ShoutOutThemeNaming: The instructors at the Prometheus combat school are all shoutouts; [[WesternAnimation/{{Arcane}} Vander, Greyson,]] [[VideoGame/MassEffect Alenko]], [[ComicBook/SpiderMan Parker, Morales]] and [[WebVideo/CriticalRole de Rolo]].
** After being asked to identify [[spoiler:May]], Troy cracks a joke that it's [[WesternAnimation/{{Brave}} Princess Merida]] who dyed and straightened her hair.
** Along with Marigold and Ottendorf (the union organizer), the [[spoiler:Cerberus innmates]] Clover lists are [[VideoGame/{{Overwatch}} Lacroix]], [[Film/TheSuicideSquad Cazo, Lawton]] and [[ComicBook/HarleyQuinn Quinzell]].
* ShoutOutThemeNaming: The instructors at the Prometheus combat school are all shoutouts; [[WesternAnimation/{{Arcane}} Vander, Greyson,]] [[VideoGame/MassEffect Alenko]], [[ComicBook/SpiderMan Parker, Morales]] and [[WebVideo/CriticalRole de Rolo]].
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* SnarkToSnarkCombat:
** In their first appearance, Ozpin and Qrow end up having some back and forth. Qrow complains about feeling old, Ozpin points out that he's older than recorded history, Qrow fires back that Oz is an outlier that shouldn't be counted, etc.
** In their first appearance, Ozpin and Qrow end up having some back and forth. Qrow complains about feeling old, Ozpin points out that he's older than recorded history, Qrow fires back that Oz is an outlier that shouldn't be counted, etc.
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* SnarkToSnarkCombat:
**SnarkToSnarkCombat: In their first appearance, Ozpin and Qrow end up having some back and forth. Qrow complains about feeling old, Ozpin points out that he's older than recorded history, Qrow fires back that Oz is an outlier that shouldn't be counted, etc.
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** Also the case between May and Watts, May and Cinder, May and Winter. May and everyone, really. Taken to its logical conclusion when [[spoiler:the Mirror of Reflection manifests as a perfect replica of May]].
** May and Tyrian also get a moment:
-->'''May:''' The company sucks, but what else is new?\\
'''Tyrian:''' How rude! And I was hoping we’d all have a chat, maybe a sleepover. It’s been far too long since I’ve done truth or dare.\\
'''May:''' I dare you to leave.
* SpecialThanks: The endnotes of the final chapter, "At risk of potentially sounding pretentious for what is the endnotes of a fanfiction", has thanks given to the author's friends, fiancee, author of ''Fanfic/BlackenedBluebird'' and artist that inspired Winter and Cinder's designs.
** May and Tyrian also get a moment:
-->'''May:''' The company sucks, but what else is new?\\
'''Tyrian:''' How rude! And I was hoping we’d all have a chat, maybe a sleepover. It’s been far too long since I’ve done truth or dare.\\
'''May:''' I dare you to leave.
* SpecialThanks: The endnotes of the final chapter, "At risk of potentially sounding pretentious for what is the endnotes of a fanfiction", has thanks given to the author's friends, fiancee, author of ''Fanfic/BlackenedBluebird'' and artist that inspired Winter and Cinder's designs.
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** According to Salem, there have been previous trans maidens, and in one case, a trans boy who failed to inherit maidenhood because of his gender. She even chooses May as her perfect candidate, and tells her in no uncertain terms that May is a woman and the Maiden powers will accept her.
-->'''May:''' But… could I even be a maiden? You said it yourself, maidens have to be- \\
'''Salem:''' ''A woman.'' Which you are. Doubt ill-fits you.
-->'''May:''' But… could I even be a maiden? You said it yourself, maidens have to be- \\
'''Salem:''' ''A woman.'' Which you are. Doubt ill-fits you.
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* ThatWasTheLastEntry: May finds an ancient archeologist's diary while searching for the second artifact. It conveniently cuts of just after listing a series of landmarks pointing to May's goal.
* TheseHandsHaveKilled: [[spoiler:May gets her first kill in Vacuo, putting a crossbow bolt in the back of a mercenary to save Emerald. She ends up vomiting over it, and uses her medical knowledge to at least attempt to save the mercenary's companion out of guilt]].
* TitledAfterTheSong: Chapter 47 ("And All That Could Have Been") is named after "What Could Have Been" by Music/{{Sting}}, featured in ''WesternAnimation/{{Arcane}}''. The song is about someone who sees themselves as a monster and blames someone they loved for what they have become. The chapter [[spoiler:is about Salem {{Gaslighting}} May into blaming the Happy Huntresses for her suffering at Ironwood's hands]].
* TheseHandsHaveKilled: [[spoiler:May gets her first kill in Vacuo, putting a crossbow bolt in the back of a mercenary to save Emerald. She ends up vomiting over it, and uses her medical knowledge to at least attempt to save the mercenary's companion out of guilt]].
* TitledAfterTheSong: Chapter 47 ("And All That Could Have Been") is named after "What Could Have Been" by Music/{{Sting}}, featured in ''WesternAnimation/{{Arcane}}''. The song is about someone who sees themselves as a monster and blames someone they loved for what they have become. The chapter [[spoiler:is about Salem {{Gaslighting}} May into blaming the Happy Huntresses for her suffering at Ironwood's hands]].
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* TransformingWeapon: As is tradition in RWBY. Winter and Marrow use the same weapons they use in canon, a sword that can sepparate into a saber and a rapier named Erfrierung and a rifle that becomes a boomerang named Fetch, while Cinder and May's are different. Cinder's, while still a pair of swords named Midnight, turn into guns instead of a bow. May uses a bastard sword named Matilda that can transform into a repeating crossbow. After joining Salem, she switches to a greatsword that transforms into a heavy crossbow, then later modifies it to turn into a bow instead.
* TransTribulations:
** Marigold and [[spoiler:Weiss]] are both terrified of coming out, since Atlas society is not particularily kind to those who stand out. After coming out, while her mother and sister are supportive, [[spoiler:Weiss]] still deals with transphobia from her father and virtually every upper class person in Atlas.
** Emerald also suffers dysphoria, though less transphobia since Vacuo is comparably tolerant. She still doesn't have the means to transition, though, which leaves her in a bad mental place. Mercury, ironically, gets less than the others, since his dad doesn't give a shit about what gender his kid is as long as they can fight and kill.
* TransTribulations:
** Marigold and [[spoiler:Weiss]] are both terrified of coming out, since Atlas society is not particularily kind to those who stand out. After coming out, while her mother and sister are supportive, [[spoiler:Weiss]] still deals with transphobia from her father and virtually every upper class person in Atlas.
** Emerald also suffers dysphoria, though less transphobia since Vacuo is comparably tolerant. She still doesn't have the means to transition, though, which leaves her in a bad mental place. Mercury, ironically, gets less than the others, since his dad doesn't give a shit about what gender his kid is as long as they can fight and kill.
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* TransformingWeapon: As is tradition in RWBY. Winter and Marrow use the same weapons they use in canon, a sword that can sepparate into a saber and a rapier named Erfrierung and a rifle that becomes a boomerang named Fetch, while Cinder and May's are different. Cinder's, while still a pair of swords named Midnight, turn into guns instead of a bow. May uses a bastard sword named Matilda that can transform into a repeating crossbow. After joining Salem, she switches to a greatsword that transforms into a heavy crossbow, then later modifies it to turn into a bow instead.
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*TransTribulations:
**TransTribulations: Marigold and [[spoiler:Weiss]] are both terrified of coming out, since Atlas society is not particularily kind to those who stand out. After coming out, while her mother and sister are supportive, [[spoiler:Weiss]] still deals with transphobia from her father and virtually every upper class person in Atlas.
** Emerald also suffers dysphoria, though less transphobia since Vacuo is comparably tolerant. She still doesn't have the means to transition, though, which leaves her in a bad mental place. Mercury, ironically, gets less than the others, since his dad doesn't give a shit about what gender his kid is as long as they can fight and kill.Atlas.
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** Emerald also suffers dysphoria, though less transphobia since Vacuo is comparably tolerant. She still doesn't have the means to transition, though, which leaves her in a bad mental place. Mercury, ironically, gets less than the others, since his dad doesn't give a shit about what gender his kid is as long as they can fight and kill.
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* TraumaCongaLine: The leadup (and immediate aftermath) of May defecting from Atlas is nothing but trauma for the poor girl. [[spoiler:A villain who can give her nightmares learns that she's trans and implies that Winter outed her, Winter turns out to have been keeping secrets from her, she learns that Atlas is even worse than she previously thought from the Janus archive, her two best friends get wounded and leave her to face Ironwood alone, one of her friends stabs her in the back on Ironwood's orders, she gets sent to a BlackSite where merely being is torture, and she's saved by [[ManipulativeBitch Salem]]]].
* TrickArrow: May makes heavy use of a grappling hook arrow for her crossbows. After swapping her weapon to a bow, Watts offers to make her sonic arrows.
* TrojanPrisoner: To [[spoiler:retrieve Cassia Troy from the Tartarus facility, May and Emerald dress up as guards and pretend to escort Amarillo as a prisoner]].
* TrueCompanions: The Happy Huntresses, including Winter, and [[spoiler:Marrow]] grow into this over time, particularily on their quest to find May. May would have been part of it if not for Salem and Ironwood.
* UnreliableNarrator: Salem gives May a course in the history of her secret war with Ozma, which is extremely biased and rewritten to get May on her side. Ozma's flaws are played up to the point where she frames him as a tyrant ruling from the shadows, while her flaws are downplayed or ignored entirely. The death of their four daughters, in particular, is framed as Ozma attempting to brainwash them into weapons, as opposed to the reality, that Salem wanted to commit what amounted to genocide against humanity and Ozma wanted to keep his daughters away from her.
* UnwittingInstigatorOfDoom: Ladon Marigold blackmailing May from going into Mantle with the Happy Huntresses contributes to her depression and makes it easier for Salem to {{Gaslight}} her into thinking the HH never cared, which is a big part of her becoming a FallenHero.
* VengeanceFeelsEmpty: In Solitas, Juni admits to herself that she has no idea what to actually do once she kills May, since she has nothing to return to, but decides that she has come too far. [[spoiler:She never gets the chance to find out, since May kills her first]].
* VillainProtagonist: May, while [[AntiVillain highly sympathetic]] and ObliviouslyEvil, is TheDragon to ''RWBY'''s BigBad in this continuity, making her the villain in the larger narrative.
* TrickArrow: May makes heavy use of a grappling hook arrow for her crossbows. After swapping her weapon to a bow, Watts offers to make her sonic arrows.
* TrojanPrisoner: To [[spoiler:retrieve Cassia Troy from the Tartarus facility, May and Emerald dress up as guards and pretend to escort Amarillo as a prisoner]].
* TrueCompanions: The Happy Huntresses, including Winter, and [[spoiler:Marrow]] grow into this over time, particularily on their quest to find May. May would have been part of it if not for Salem and Ironwood.
* UnreliableNarrator: Salem gives May a course in the history of her secret war with Ozma, which is extremely biased and rewritten to get May on her side. Ozma's flaws are played up to the point where she frames him as a tyrant ruling from the shadows, while her flaws are downplayed or ignored entirely. The death of their four daughters, in particular, is framed as Ozma attempting to brainwash them into weapons, as opposed to the reality, that Salem wanted to commit what amounted to genocide against humanity and Ozma wanted to keep his daughters away from her.
* UnwittingInstigatorOfDoom: Ladon Marigold blackmailing May from going into Mantle with the Happy Huntresses contributes to her depression and makes it easier for Salem to {{Gaslight}} her into thinking the HH never cared, which is a big part of her becoming a FallenHero.
* VengeanceFeelsEmpty: In Solitas, Juni admits to herself that she has no idea what to actually do once she kills May, since she has nothing to return to, but decides that she has come too far. [[spoiler:She never gets the chance to find out, since May kills her first]].
* VillainProtagonist: May, while [[AntiVillain highly sympathetic]] and ObliviouslyEvil, is TheDragon to ''RWBY'''s BigBad in this continuity, making her the villain in the larger narrative.
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* TraumaCongaLine: The leadup (and immediate aftermath) of May defecting from Atlas is nothing but trauma for the poor girl. [[spoiler:A villain who can give her nightmares learns that she's trans and implies that Winter outed her, Winter turns out to have been keeping secrets from her, she learns that Atlas is even worse than she previously thought from the Janus archive, her two best friends get wounded and leave her to face Ironwood alone, one of her friends stabs her in the back on Ironwood's orders, she gets sent to a BlackSite where merely being is torture, and she's saved by [[ManipulativeBitch Salem]]]].
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* TrickArrow: May makes heavy use of a grappling hook arrow for her crossbows. After swapping her weapon to a bow, Watts offers to make her sonic arrows.\n* TrojanPrisoner: To [[spoiler:retrieve Cassia Troy from the Tartarus facility, May and Emerald dress up as guards and pretend to escort Amarillo as a prisoner]].\n* TrueCompanions: The Happy Huntresses, including Winter, and [[spoiler:Marrow]] grow into this over time, particularily on their quest to find May. May would have been part of it if not for Salem and Ironwood.\n* UnreliableNarrator: Salem gives May a course in the history of her secret war with Ozma, which is extremely biased and rewritten to get May on her side. Ozma's flaws are played up to the point where she frames him as a tyrant ruling from the shadows, while her flaws are downplayed or ignored entirely. The death of their four daughters, in particular, is framed as Ozma attempting to brainwash them into weapons, as opposed to the reality, that Salem wanted to commit what amounted to genocide against humanity and Ozma wanted to keep his daughters away from her.\n* UnwittingInstigatorOfDoom: Ladon Marigold blackmailing May from going into Mantle with the Happy Huntresses contributes to her depression and makes it easier for Salem to {{Gaslight}} her into thinking the HH never cared, which is a big part of her becoming a FallenHero.\n* VengeanceFeelsEmpty: In Solitas, Juni admits to herself that she has no idea what to actually do once she kills May, since she has nothing to return to, but decides that she has come too far. [[spoiler:She never gets the chance to find out, since May kills her first]].\n* VillainProtagonist: May, while [[AntiVillain highly sympathetic]] and ObliviouslyEvil, is TheDragon to ''RWBY'''s BigBad in this continuity, making her the villain in the larger narrative.
* TrickArrow: May makes heavy use of a grappling hook arrow for her crossbows.
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** May, while in Atlas, uses a crowssbow-bastard sword named Matilda. After joining Salem and losing Matilda, she builds a larger broadsword with an in-built heavy crossbow named Clorinda, symbollic of her deciding to take up more space in her life. She later replaces the crossbow with a normal bow after getting a taste for the weapon in Vacuo.
* WellDoneDaughterGirl:
** May, having been starved for any sort of affection from her parents her entire life, is easily manipulated by Salem with promises of maternal affection.
** Cinder has it similarily. Her parental figures include the physically abusive Madame and the emotionally distant Rhodes, leaving her clinging to any paternal approval from Ironwood. [[WordOfGod The author has stated that Cinder's relationship to Ironwood was foreshadowing for May and Salem.]]
* WellIntentionedExtremist: Even after becoming a FallenHero, May is motivated by a desire to undo a power structure that left her and others like her to rot in prison cells or under the yoke of oppression.
* WeUsedToBeFriends: Played heartwrenchingly straight on May's side after she joins Salem. A combination of her own anxiety and Salem's manipulations convinces her that any and all actual friendship she had with the Happy Huntresses and Winter was superficial, and she decides she's better of without them. Subverted by the Happy Huntresses, including Winter, themselves, who still see May as a close friend and want to find out what happened to her. [[DramaticIrony But May doesn't know that]].
* WellDoneDaughterGirl:
** May, having been starved for any sort of affection from her parents her entire life, is easily manipulated by Salem with promises of maternal affection.
** Cinder has it similarily. Her parental figures include the physically abusive Madame and the emotionally distant Rhodes, leaving her clinging to any paternal approval from Ironwood. [[WordOfGod The author has stated that Cinder's relationship to Ironwood was foreshadowing for May and Salem.]]
* WellIntentionedExtremist: Even after becoming a FallenHero, May is motivated by a desire to undo a power structure that left her and others like her to rot in prison cells or under the yoke of oppression.
* WeUsedToBeFriends: Played heartwrenchingly straight on May's side after she joins Salem. A combination of her own anxiety and Salem's manipulations convinces her that any and all actual friendship she had with the Happy Huntresses and Winter was superficial, and she decides she's better of without them. Subverted by the Happy Huntresses, including Winter, themselves, who still see May as a close friend and want to find out what happened to her. [[DramaticIrony But May doesn't know that]].
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** May, while in Atlas, uses a crowssbow-bastard sword named Matilda. After joining Salem and losing Matilda, she builds a larger broadsword with an in-built heavy crossbow named Clorinda, symbollic of her deciding to take up more space in her life. She later replaces the crossbow with a normal bow after getting a taste for the weapon in Vacuo.
* WellDoneDaughterGirl:
** May, having been starved for any sort of affection from her parents her entire life, is easily manipulated by Salem with promises of maternal affection.
** Cinder has it similarily. Her parental figures include the physically abusive Madame and the emotionally distant Rhodes, leaving her clinging to any paternal approval from Ironwood. [[WordOfGod The author has stated that Cinder's relationship to Ironwood was foreshadowing for May and Salem.]]
* WellIntentionedExtremist: Even after becoming a FallenHero, May is motivated by a desire to undo a power structure that left her and others like her to rot in prison cells or under the yoke of oppression.
* WeUsedToBeFriends: Played heartwrenchingly straight on May's side after she joins Salem. A combination of her own anxiety and Salem's manipulations convinces her that any and all actual friendship she had with the Happy Huntresses and Winter was superficial, and she decides she's better of without them. Subverted by the Happy Huntresses, including Winter, themselves, who still see May as a close friend and want to find out what happened to her. [[DramaticIrony But May doesn't know that]].
* WellDoneDaughterGirl:
** May, having been starved for any sort of affection from her parents her entire life, is easily manipulated by Salem with promises of maternal affection.
** Cinder has it similarily. Her parental figures include the physically abusive Madame and the emotionally distant Rhodes, leaving her clinging to any paternal approval from Ironwood. [[WordOfGod The author has stated that Cinder's relationship to Ironwood was foreshadowing for May and Salem.]]
* WellIntentionedExtremist: Even after becoming a FallenHero, May is motivated by a desire to undo a power structure that left her and others like her to rot in prison cells or under the yoke of oppression.
* WeUsedToBeFriends: Played heartwrenchingly straight on May's side after she joins Salem. A combination of her own anxiety and Salem's manipulations convinces her that any and all actual friendship she had with the Happy Huntresses and Winter was superficial, and she decides she's better of without them. Subverted by the Happy Huntresses, including Winter, themselves, who still see May as a close friend and want to find out what happened to her. [[DramaticIrony But May doesn't know that]].
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* WhamLine: In chapter 49, with Cinder in pursuit of Amarillo and May nearby, Amarillo is saved when Cinder gets an immense pain in her head, followed by this line making it clear that [[spoiler:May just [[EyeScream took out Cinder's eye]]]].
-->She tried to open her eyes, panic setting in when [[spoiler:her vision only returned on her right side]].
-->She tried to open her eyes, panic setting in when [[spoiler:her vision only returned on her right side]].
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* XanatosSpeedChess: Salem adapts her plans on the fly, making sure to always stay one step ahead of her enemies. When she realizes Cinder is no longer a viable Maiden candidate, she shifts her focus to find another candidate, then immediately puts all resources towards recruiting May. When May is [[spoiler:blackbaged by Ironwood]], Salem puts her people to work tracking her down so that she can offer her a hand when she's at her lowest.
* YankTheDogsChain:
** Marrow, Robyn and Winter gain hope that May is alive when they find Matilda. When they finally track down [[spoiler:the Cerberus site a year and a half after May was imprisoned there. With the obvious aftermath of a grimm attack, no security footage to go on (wiped by Watts), and no sign of May, they are forced to conclude that she is truly dead]].
** On a mission to Mantle for Salem, [[spoiler:May nearly runs into the Happy Huntresses, but panics and cloaks herself. She finally builds up enough courage to call out for Winter, only to suffer PowerIncontinence that quiets her voice so Winter doesn't hear her. By the time she calms enough to turn off her semblance, the happy huntresses have left without knowing May was there, and May decides it's better this way]].
** Amarillo [[spoiler:had just decided to defect from Salem and tell Ozpin everything he knows about her plans when Cinder catches up with and kills him on Ironwood's orders]].
* YouKilledMyFather: Specialist Cinder Rhodes has personal beef with Suadere Amarillo for this reason, [[spoiler:taking him on alone despite Clover having a more suited semblance]].
* YankTheDogsChain:
** Marrow, Robyn and Winter gain hope that May is alive when they find Matilda. When they finally track down [[spoiler:the Cerberus site a year and a half after May was imprisoned there. With the obvious aftermath of a grimm attack, no security footage to go on (wiped by Watts), and no sign of May, they are forced to conclude that she is truly dead]].
** On a mission to Mantle for Salem, [[spoiler:May nearly runs into the Happy Huntresses, but panics and cloaks herself. She finally builds up enough courage to call out for Winter, only to suffer PowerIncontinence that quiets her voice so Winter doesn't hear her. By the time she calms enough to turn off her semblance, the happy huntresses have left without knowing May was there, and May decides it's better this way]].
** Amarillo [[spoiler:had just decided to defect from Salem and tell Ozpin everything he knows about her plans when Cinder catches up with and kills him on Ironwood's orders]].
* YouKilledMyFather: Specialist Cinder Rhodes has personal beef with Suadere Amarillo for this reason, [[spoiler:taking him on alone despite Clover having a more suited semblance]].
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* XanatosSpeedChess: Salem adapts her plans on the fly, making sure to always stay one step ahead of her enemies. When she realizes Cinder is no longer a viable Maiden candidate, she shifts her focus to find another candidate, then immediately puts all resources towards recruiting May. When May is [[spoiler:blackbaged by Ironwood]], Salem puts her people to work tracking her down so that she can offer her a hand when she's at her lowest.\n* YankTheDogsChain:\n** Marrow, Robyn and Winter gain hope that May is alive when they find Matilda. When they finally track down [[spoiler:the Cerberus site a year and a half after May was imprisoned there. With the obvious aftermath of a grimm attack, no security footage to go on (wiped by Watts), and no sign of May, they are forced to conclude that she is truly dead]].\n** On a mission to Mantle for Salem, [[spoiler:May nearly runs into the Happy Huntresses, but panics and cloaks herself. She finally builds up enough courage to call out for Winter, only to suffer PowerIncontinence that quiets her voice so Winter doesn't hear her. By the time she calms enough to turn off her semblance, the happy huntresses have left without knowing May was there, and May decides it's better this way]].\n** Amarillo [[spoiler:had just decided to defect from Salem and tell Ozpin everything he knows about her plans when Cinder catches up with and kills him on Ironwood's orders]].\n* YouKilledMyFather: Specialist Cinder Rhodes has personal beef with Suadere Amarillo for this reason, [[spoiler:taking him on alone despite Clover having a more suited semblance]].
