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*** After the war, more ships are made: ''[[Franchise/StarWars Falcon,]]'' ''Niel Armstrong'', ''[[Franchise/MassEffect Normandy]]'', ''Colombia,'' and ''[[Franchise/BattlestarGalactica Galactica.]]'' It's mentioned that other nations have other ships, but these are the only ones mentioned.
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*** After the war, more ships are made: ''[[Franchise/StarWars Falcon,]]'' ''Niel Armstrong'', Falcon]]'', ''UsefulNotes/NeilArmstrong'', ''[[Franchise/MassEffect Normandy]]'', ''Colombia,'' ''Columbia'', and ''[[Franchise/BattlestarGalactica Galactica.]]'' Galactica]]''. It's mentioned that other nations have other ships, but these are the only ones mentioned.
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** He nicknames the manticore that chases him around "Chewy," a shout-out to StarWars.
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** He nicknames the manticore that chases him around "Chewy," "Chewy", a shout-out to StarWars.''Franchise/StarWars''.
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%% * GettingCrapPastThe Radar: Due to overwhelming and persistent misuse, GCPTR is on-page examples only until 01 June 2021. If you are reading this in the future, please check the trope page to make sure your example fits the current definition.
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See [[Fanfic/HandsOmori here]] for the VideoGame/{{Omori}} fanfic.
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See [[Fanfic/HandsOmori here]] for the VideoGame/{{Omori}} ''VideoGame/{{Omori}}'' fanfic.
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See [[Fanfic/HandsOmori here]] for the VideoGame/{{Omori}} fanfic.
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* TyrannosaurusRex: Fluttershy faces down one in chapter 2.
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* GettingCrapPastTheRadar: Lampshaded when a changeling, just beaten up by a pissed-off Fluttershy, says Andrew has begun "corrupting" her.
-->'''Chrysalis''': I believe he already has.\\
(''beat'')\\
'''Twilight''': Was... Was that an innuendo?
-->'''Chrysalis''': I believe he already has.\\
(''beat'')\\
'''Twilight''': Was... Was that an innuendo?
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%% * GettingCrapPastTheRadar: Lampshaded when a changeling, just beaten up by a pissed-off Fluttershy, says Andrew has begun "corrupting" her.
-->'''Chrysalis''': I believe he already has.\\
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'''Twilight''': Was... Was that an innuendo?GettingCrapPastThe Radar: Due to overwhelming and persistent misuse, GCPTR is on-page examples only until 01 June 2021. If you are reading this in the future, please check the trope page to make sure your example fits the current definition.
-->'''Chrysalis''': I believe he already has.\\
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'''Twilight''': Was... Was that an innuendo?
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However, it has a reboot called ''[[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/456306/the-stars-revolt The Stars Revolt!]]'', which has a sequel called ''[[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/471931/short-hand Short Hand]]''.
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On July 1, 2020, the author announced the fic was canceled.
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** His dragon name is [[LordOfTheRings Smaug]].
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** His dragon name is [[LordOfTheRings [[Literature/TheHobbit Smaug]].
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[[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/14407/hands "Hands"]] (also found [[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8465282/1/Hands here]]) is a fic by Andrew Joshua Talon, better known for the fic "FanFic/{{Progress}}".
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* BerserkButton: Hurting Andrew for Twilight and Fluttershy, and vice versa.
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* BerserkButton: BerserkButton:
** Hurting Andrew for Twilight and Fluttershy, and vice versa.
** Hurting Andrew for Twilight and Fluttershy, and vice versa.
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-->'''Chrysalis''': I believe he already has.
-->(''beat'')
-->'''Twilight''': Was... Was that an innuendo?
* GodzillaThreshold: Despite the seriousness of the situation, played for laughs -- when warning Ponyville about the impending changeling invasion, Andrew says things are bad enough he's going to have to ''ask the CMC for help''. Played a bit more seriously when we find out this means ''giving them guns''.
** And MORTARS.
-->(''beat'')
-->'''Twilight''': Was... Was that an innuendo?
* GodzillaThreshold: Despite the seriousness of the situation, played for laughs -- when warning Ponyville about the impending changeling invasion, Andrew says things are bad enough he's going to have to ''ask the CMC for help''. Played a bit more seriously when we find out this means ''giving them guns''.
** And MORTARS.
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-->'''Chrysalis''': I believe he already has.
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-->'''Twilight''':has.\\
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'''Twilight''': Was... Was that an innuendo?
* GodzillaThreshold: Despite the seriousness of the situation, played for laughs -- when warning Ponyville about the impending changeling invasion, Andrew says things are bad enough he's going to have to ''ask the CMC for help''. Played a bit more seriously when we find out this means ''giving themguns''.
**guns''. And MORTARS.
-->(''beat'')
-->'''Twilight''':
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'''Twilight''': Was... Was that an innuendo?
* GodzillaThreshold: Despite the seriousness of the situation, played for laughs -- when warning Ponyville about the impending changeling invasion, Andrew says things are bad enough he's going to have to ''ask the CMC for help''. Played a bit more seriously when we find out this means ''giving them
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* [[spoiler: HeelFaceTurn: The changelings are offered a second chance after being defeated. They take it, and Chrysalis herself ends up living with Twilight and Andrew as a "Friendship Intern".]]
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* [[spoiler: HeelFaceTurn: The [[spoiler:The changelings are offered a second chance after being defeated. They take it, and Chrysalis herself ends up living with Twilight and Andrew as a "Friendship Intern".]]
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* HumansAreTheRealMonsters: At least, according to the changelings. Though their opinion is somewhat justified by the fact that [[spoiler: humanity not only fought them off but also [[EarthShatteringKaboom destroyed their Hive]].]]
** Andrew does shoot this down by pointing out that the Changelings did try to take over his species using mind control and was planning on draining all their love energy.
** Andrew does shoot this down by pointing out that the Changelings did try to take over his species using mind control and was planning on draining all their love energy.
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* HumansAreTheRealMonsters: At least, according to the changelings. Though their opinion is somewhat justified by the fact that [[spoiler: humanity not only fought them off but also [[EarthShatteringKaboom destroyed their Hive]].]]
**Hive]]]]. Andrew does shoot shoots this down by pointing out that the Changelings did try to take over his species using mind control and was were planning on draining all their love energy.
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** {{Polyamory}}: Eventually, they reluctantly decide to live in a threesome. [[spoiler: And then Chrysalis gets in on it (sorta).]]
* [[MegatonPunch Megaton Kick]]: Applejack accidentally kicks Andrew through a wall, breaking his jaw, when Granny Smith tries to help Andrew massage Applejack's stiff leg muscle. She surprised Applejack by pressing Andrew's hand onto Applejack's lower flank.
* [[MegatonPunch Megaton Kick]]: Applejack accidentally kicks Andrew through a wall, breaking his jaw, when Granny Smith tries to help Andrew massage Applejack's stiff leg muscle. She surprised Applejack by pressing Andrew's hand onto Applejack's lower flank.
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* [[spoiler: OrionDrive: The human space warship ''Enterprise'' (yes, this is lampshaded in the text) uses one.]]
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* [[spoiler: OrionDrive: The [[spoiler:The human space warship ''Enterprise'' (yes, this is lampshaded in the text) uses one.]]
* {{Polyamory}}: Eventually, Twilight, Andrew and Fluttershy reluctantly decide to live in a threesome. [[spoiler: And then Chrysalis gets in on it, sorta.]]
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* RememberWhenYouBlewUpASun: The Mane Six like to keep bringing up all of Andrew's adventures, whether he wants to talk about them or not.
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* RememberWhenYouBlewUpASun: RememberWhenYouBlewUpASun:
** The Mane Six like to keep bringing up all of Andrew's adventures, whether he wants to talk about them or not.
** The Mane Six like to keep bringing up all of Andrew's adventures, whether he wants to talk about them or not.
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* SteamPunk: Among the various reinforcements at the climax of the changeling invasion is a "steampunk version of a Stryker armored vehicle, complete with whistles and guns", with the main gun being manned by the Ponyville blacksmith.
** Although perhaps more worrying is that it's implied the drivers were the CMC!
** Andrew later amends his description, pointing out that the gas engine detracts from the steampunk style.
** Although perhaps more worrying is that it's implied the drivers were the CMC!
** Andrew later amends his description, pointing out that the gas engine detracts from the steampunk style.
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* SteamPunk: Among the various reinforcements at the climax of the changeling invasion is a "steampunk version of a Stryker armored vehicle, complete with whistles and guns", with the main gun being manned by the Ponyville blacksmith.
** Although perhaps more worrying is that it's implied the drivers were the CMC!
**blacksmith. Andrew later amends his description, pointing out that the gas engine detracts from the steampunk style.
** Although perhaps more worrying is that it's implied the drivers were the CMC!
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* TheTease: The rest of the Mane Six tend to fake flirt with Andrew just to mess with his head.
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* TheTease: TheTease:
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** The rest of the Mane Six tend to fake flirt with Andrew just to mess with his head.
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* VoluntaryShapeshifting: Twilight creates a spell that transforms ponies into humans. She refines it over the course of the story, going from merely being anthropomorphized ponies to being practically indistinguishable from real humans, barring wings or horns depending on what race they were prior, of course.
** Twilight eventually learns to perform the reverse on Andrew.
** Twilight eventually learns to perform the reverse on Andrew.
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* VoluntaryShapeshifting: Twilight creates a spell that transforms ponies into humans. She refines it over the course of the story, going from merely being anthropomorphized ponies to being practically indistinguishable from real humans, barring wings or horns depending on what race they were prior, of course.
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* YouHaveGotToBeKiddingMe: Andrew says this almost word-for-word when, fleeing from the manticore in the Everfree, he finds an opening back to Ponyville... only to find himself on top of a large cliff.
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* YouHaveGotToBeKiddingMe: Andrew says this almost word-for-word when, fleeing from the manticore in the Everfree, he finds an opening back to Ponyville... only to find himself on top of a large cliff.cliff.
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* ExtendedDisarming: A mild, almost non-example occurs in chapter 16. As Andrew is accompanying Twilight and the Mane 6 to Shining's wedding, they must pass through a security checkpoint at the Canterlot train station. Disarming ensues.
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* ExtendedDisarming: A mild, almost non-example occurs in In chapter 16. As 16., as Andrew is accompanying Twilight and the Mane 6 to Shining's wedding, they must pass through a security checkpoint at the Canterlot train station. Disarming and the removal of many objects, including multiple weapons, ensues.
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* ExtendedDisarming: In chapter 16, as Andrew is accompanying Twilight and the Mane 6 to Shining's wedding, they must pass through a security checkpoint at the Canterlot train station. Disarming ensues. As do references to the [=TSA=].
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* ExtendedDisarming: In A mild, almost non-example occurs in chapter 16, as 16. As Andrew is accompanying Twilight and the Mane 6 to Shining's wedding, they must pass through a security checkpoint at the Canterlot train station. Disarming ensues. As do references to the [=TSA=].
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* ExtendedDisarming: In chapter 16, as Andrew is accompanying Twilight and the Mane 6 to Shining's wedding, they must pass through a security checkpoint at the Canterlot train station. Disarming ensues. As do references to the [=TSA=].
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** In chapter nine, he explains the plot of ''TheMagicGoesAway'' by Larry Niven to some of his friends.
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** In chapter nine, he explains the plot of ''TheMagicGoesAway'' ''Literature/TheMagicGoesAway'' by Larry Niven Creator/LarryNiven to some of his friends.
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* SelfDeprecation: According to the author, the story was meant to be a satire of Human In Equestria fics. [[TheProducers "Where did I go right?"]]
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* SelfDeprecation: According to the author, the story was meant to be a satire of Human In Equestria fics. [[TheProducers [[Film/TheProducers "Where did I go right?"]]
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* AwesomeButImpractical: The CMC produced three different bullets for their first gun. One shaped like the Apple family barn, one like Rainbow Dash, and one that was sort of bullet shaped. It's not hard to buess which one Andrew decided to use.
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* AwesomeButImpractical: The CMC produced three different bullets for their first gun. One shaped like the Apple family barn, one like Rainbow Dash, and one that was sort of bullet shaped. It's not hard to buess guess which one Andrew decided to use.
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* BonusMaterial: Andrew does his rough drafts on Spacebattles, naturally this has lead to a large number of omakes, world building, and possible future events posted by the forum goers there.
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* AwesomeButImpractical: The CMC produced three different bullets for their first gun. One shaped like the Apple family barn, one like Rainbow Dash, and one that was sort of bullet shaped.
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* AwesomeButImpractical: The CMC produced three different bullets for their first gun. One shaped like the Apple family barn, one like Rainbow Dash, and one that was sort of bullet shaped. It's not hard to buess which one Andrew decided to use.
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** The battle between the ''Enterprise'' and the Hive is based off the climax of ''Literature/{{Footfall}}''.