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* ArtisticLicensePhysics: "he puled ot the camera adn went to hand it to jcak but his hand sliped adn he acidentaly dropped it into teh fontain adn it EXPLODE."
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'''DAVE STDIDER POKEMON TRANER''' could quite possibly be in the running for the worst fanfiction to ever exist in this world. It is truly a special kind of awful in a way that not even MY IMMORTAL could hope to be. Reading DAVE STDIDER is a feeling comparable to getting a colonoscopy performed on you with a cactus.
Basically, it's really, ''really'' bad.
Basically, it's really, ''really'' bad.
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'''DAVE STDIDER POKEMON TRANER''' is a Homestuck fanfiction along the same lines as FanFic/HomestuckHigh and FanFic/TarvosAndFaerieALoveStory, but arguably even more insane. It could quite possibly be in the running for the worst fanfiction to ever exist in this world. world, provided it is not a Stealth Parody, which it probably is. It is truly a special kind of awful in a way that not even MY IMMORTAL FanFic/MyImmortal could hope to be. Reading DAVE STDIDER is a feeling comparable to getting a colonoscopy performed on you with a cactus.
Basically, it's really, ''really'' bad.
be.
Basically, it's really, ''really'' bad.
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The story details Dave Strider's quest to obtain the Kanto Region's 8 badges and become champion with the help of his friends Will Turner and Terezi Pyrope. Along the way he catches ghosts, meets Thor, enters the battle of the bands, goes on a cruise, and more, all the while thwarting the evil Team Bad (Made up of Homestuck characters Karkat Vantas and Jack Noir) and JAKE ENGLAND THE EVIL POACHER.
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The story details Dave Strider's quest to obtain the Kanto Region's 8 eight badges and become champion with the help of his friends Will Turner and Terezi Pyrope. Along the way he catches ghosts, meets Thor, enters the battle of the bands, goes on a cruise, and more, all the while thwarting the evil Team Bad (Made up of Homestuck characters Karkat Vantas and Jack Noir) and JAKE ENGLAND THE EVIL POACHER.
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Compare FanFic/TarvosAndFairieALoveStory.
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* StealthParody: Likely, albeit unconfirmed.
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* TrollFic: Most likely, and a brilliant one at that.
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* BreakingTheFourthWall: "it is becuz all teh gym leders excpt the ones you hav not faced yet becuz the writer hasnt decided who tey are yet."
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** "it sed we hav burned down tis manner becuz it wuz relty a lab adn we made mewtoo here but he tuned evil so we had to bum bown thi mansion to kil him becuz he turned evil."
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* EvilLaugh: Jack and Karkat both have one.
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* CantYouReadTheSign: "they wlaked o the manion and loked at the sin BURMED MANOR STAY OT! iT SIAD. lets go in gus! terezi said. no dude the sig says stay out will sed lets stay out. im sure it wondt be that bad will." They of course ignore the sign and go inside.
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* OnlyMostlyDead: Subverted when John takes a bullet for Dave: "JHON YOU WERE MY FRIEND WHY DID YOU DIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIE. he is not dead you idiot moron only almost you dumb idiot. jake seed.
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* OnlyMostlyDead: Subverted when John takes a bullet for Dave: "JHON YOU WERE MY FRIEND WHY DID YOU DIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIE. he is not dead you idiot moron only almost you dumb idiot. jake seed."
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* OnlyMostlyDead: Subverted when John takes a bullet for Dave: "JHON YOU WERE MY FRIEND WHY DID YOU DIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIE. he is not dead you idiot moron only almost you dumb idiot. jake seed.
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* CallingYourAttacks: After Jake shoots at Dave with his DAVE KILL LAZER and misses, he says "I WILL BE BACK WITH MORE AMMO DAV." Yes, ammo. In a laser.
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* CallingYourAttacks: After Jake shoots at Dave with his DAVE KILL LAZER and misses, he says "I WILL BE BACK WITH MORE AMMO DAV." Yes, ammo. In a laser."
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* TakingTheBullet: When Jake shoots at Dave with his DAVE KILL LAZER, John takes the bullet.
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* TakingTheBullet: When Jake shoots at Dave with his DAVE KILL LAZER, John takes the bullet. Yes, bullets. In a laser.
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* CallingYourAttacks: After Jake shoots at Dave with his DAVE KILL LAZER and misses, he says "I WILL BE BACK WITH MORE AMMO DAV." Yes, ammo. In a laser.
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* TakingTheBullet: When Jake shoots at Dave with his DAVE KILL LAZER, John takes the bullet.
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* NoPunctuationPeriod: To an extent. The author does not use commas, and stops using quotation marks entirely by chapter five.
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**In Chapter 15, "terezi wuz sad becuz dave was not dededicated."
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* HypocriticallyHeartwarming: "dave knew he wuz not gey and he punched karkar in the face. he fell bak in2 the fountarn. jack got up form the bench. ONLY I CAN BEAT UP KARKART. he yelled at dave."
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* HypocriticallyHeartwarming: HypocriticalHeartwarming: "dave knew he wuz not gey and he punched karkar in the face. he fell bak in2 the fountarn. jack got up form the bench. ONLY I CAN BEAT UP KARKART. he yelled at dave."
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* HypocriticallyHeartwarming: "dave knew he wuz not gey and he punched karkar in the face. he fell bak in2 the fountarn. jack got up form the bench. ONLY I CAN BEAT UP KARKART. he yelled at dave."
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** This is especially OOC, considering how in the webcomic, Trolls are pansexual; Karkat has been in a canon relationship with Gamzee, a male.
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** This is especially OOC, considering how in the webcomic, Trolls are pansexual; Karkat has been in a canon relationship with Gamzee, a male.male, and previously had a crush on John.
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* ArtisticLicensePhysics: "he puled ot the camera adn went to hand it to jcak but his hand sliped adn he acidentaly dropped it into teh fontain adn it EXPLODE."
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* UselessBoyfriend: In chapter 14, Terezi comes crying to Dave, distraught about Team Bad blackmailing her with a picture of her naked. This is his response:
**"oh no dave said. i have to get the next dabge i cant help u right now."
**Granted, he does eventually give in, but only after John protests.
**"oh no dave said. i have to get the next dabge i cant help u right now."
**Granted, he does eventually give in, but only after John protests.
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* RougeAnglesOfSatin: A typo shows up every few words. A lot of them are easy mistakes, with typo possibly being made because of the closeness of some keys to others. Other typos involve the letters being out of order, such as when Dave falls into Jack's "Tarp" in chapter 3, as well as the frequent misspellings of Dave as "Dvea" and Jack as "Jcak". Karkat's name is spelled about twenty different ways in three chapters.
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* RougeAnglesOfSatin: A typo shows up every few words. A lot of them are easy mistakes, with typo possibly being made because of the closeness of some keys to others. Other typos involve the letters being out of order, such as when Dave falls into Jack's "Tarp" in chapter 3, as well as the frequent misspellings of Dave as "Dvea" and Jack as "Jcak". Karkat's name is spelled about twenty different ways in three chapters.chapters; the most amusing is probably "kitkat" which is used most often.
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* BlatantLies: Chapter 13 is entitled "STEAMY SEX! WITH GOSTBUSTERS!" The chapter does not actually include any sex in it, let alone with Ghostbusters.
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* DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment:DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment: This story has a LOT of these.
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**"girantina wuz flyig out of celadon. he hate dave. "I HATE TAT DAVE he yelled."
**"THAT RETARDED RETARD MUST DIE! jake proclamed."
**"THAT RETARDED RETARD MUST DIE! jake proclamed."
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* ArsonMurderAndJaywalking: "this has abeen a bad day. jack sed. first we lost the thriforce adn then the davekill gun adn now giratina wont join us... and i gort called a homo!111 kitkart snacked.
**This is especially OOC, considering how in the webcomic, Trolls are pansexual; Karkat has been in a canon relationship with Gamzee, a male.
**This is especially OOC, considering how in the webcomic, Trolls are pansexual; Karkat has been in a canon relationship with Gamzee, a male.
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** ""kitkat loooked at the sin that sed 'FLOR 3; EVIL STUFF' and sed jack we shud go the 3 floor and get sum evil stuf becuz we are evil adn can beat dav with the evil stuf."
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** ""kitkat "kitkat loooked at the sin that sed 'FLOR 3; EVIL STUFF' and sed jack we shud go the 3 floor and get sum evil stuf becuz we are evil adn can beat dav with the evil stuf."
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* DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment: "it bunced off thog and jake saed what was that for you gay homosexual?"
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* DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment: "it DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment:
**""kitkat loooked at the sin that sed 'FLOR 3; EVIL STUFF' and sed jack we shud go the 3 floor and get sum evil stuf becuz we are evil adn can beat dav with the evil stuf."
**"it bunced off thog and jake saed what was that for you gayhomosexual?"homosexual?"
**"i cannot beet john becuz he is my friend he sed to her sadly before turnig and loooking sadly at the gym in sadness wit sad eyes"
**""kitkat loooked at the sin that sed 'FLOR 3; EVIL STUFF' and sed jack we shud go the 3 floor and get sum evil stuf becuz we are evil adn can beat dav with the evil stuf."
**"it bunced off thog and jake saed what was that for you gay
**"i cannot beet john becuz he is my friend he sed to her sadly before turnig and loooking sadly at the gym in sadness wit sad eyes"
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* BigNO: "jack confornted him. hey you we saw it frist give it here! NO. jake siad."
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* RougeAnglesOfSatin: A typo shows up every few words. A lot of them are easy mistakes, with typo possibly being made because of the closeness of some keys to others. Other typos involve the letters being out of order, such as when Dave falls into Jack's "Tarp" in chapter 3, as well as the frequent misspellings of Dave as "Dvea" and Jack as "Jcak". Karkat's name is spelled about fifty twenty different ways in three chapters.
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* RougeAnglesOfSatin: A typo shows up every few words. A lot of them are easy mistakes, with typo possibly being made because of the closeness of some keys to others. Other typos involve the letters being out of order, such as when Dave falls into Jack's "Tarp" in chapter 3, as well as the frequent misspellings of Dave as "Dvea" and Jack as "Jcak".
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* RougeAnglesOfSatin: A typo shows up every few words. A lot of them are easy mistakes, with typo possibly being made because of the closeness of some keys to others. Other typos involve the letters being out of order, such as when Dave falls into Jack's "Tarp" in chapter 3, as well as the frequent misspellings of Dave as "Dvea" and Jack as "Jcak". Karkat's name is spelled about fifty different ways in three chapters.
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FF.net nuked it, but the ever-vigilant[=XxXCascadaerXxX=]re-uploaded it. You can now find it here: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9794517/1/DAVE-STDIDER-POKEMON-TRANER
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FF.net nuked it, but the ever-vigilant[=XxXCascadaerXxX=]re-uploaded ever-vigilant [=XxXCascadaerXxX=] re-uploaded it. You can now find it here: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9794517/1/DAVE-STDIDER-POKEMON-TRANER
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FF.net nuked it, but the ever-vigilant XxXCascadaerXxX re-uploaded it. You can now find it here: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9794517/1/DAVE-STDIDER-POKEMON-TRANER
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FF.net nuked it, but the ever-vigilant XxXCascadaerXxX re-uploaded ever-vigilant[=XxXCascadaerXxX=]re-uploaded it. You can now find it here: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9794517/1/DAVE-STDIDER-POKEMON-TRANER
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You can find it here: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7942034/1/DAVE_STDIDER_POKEMON_TRANER
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FF.net nuked it, but the ever-vigilant XxXCascadaerXxX re-uploaded it. You can now find it here: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7942034/1/DAVE_STDIDER_POKEMON_TRANER
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** It's later revealed that [[spoiler:Dave still stole Terezi from Karkat]] as in canon, and that this is why Karkat hates Dave. As for Jack, he just wants to kill everyone, but his grudge against Dave is unexplained. Unless, of course, they both just hate him from what happened in ''HartShapedLove'', as Dead Bowser comes directly from that fic -- maybe they did too.
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** It's later revealed that [[spoiler:Dave still stole Terezi from Karkat]] as in canon, and that this is why Karkat hates Dave. As for Jack, he just wants to kill everyone, but his grudge against Dave is unexplained. Unless, of course, they both just hate him from what happened in ''HartShapedLove'', ''Hart Shaped Love'', as Dead Bowser comes directly from that fic -- maybe they did too.
