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** Momo never takes umbrage at being called "Momo-chan." This includes Miho, even though Momo is within her rights to expect Miho to call her by her Student Council title or "[[LastNameBasis Kawashima]]-[[SenpaiKohai senpai]]."
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** Momo never takes umbrage at being called "Momo-chan." This includes Miho, even though Momo is within her rights to expect Miho to call her by her Student Council title or "[[LastNameBasis Kawashima]]-[[SenpaiKohai senpai]].Kawashima-senpai]]."
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* AluminumChristmasTrees: The author states that combat dogfighting, as an expensive sport, [[http://www.skycombatace.com/ exists]].
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* FandomSpecificPlot: This is not the first fic to do the "boys in tankery" plot, but it's one of the better-known ones. To a lesser extent, the boys flying fighter planes is another fandom specific plot, although it has yet to be implemented into the fic itself.
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''Boys und Sensha-dō!'' is a ''Anime/GirlsUndPanzer'' fanfic by [[Creator/PaulNaughton Stellar Magic]] about [[FandomSpecificPlot boys getting involved in sensha-do]]. After Oarai wins the tankery tournament under Miho's leadership, it is able to stay open, but as it requires more students, it becomes coed. Among them is Akio Sakai, a teenage boy who comes from a family that does Sentoki-do (essentially, tankery with fighter planes), but has not been willing to take part in Sentoki-do since his father's death in an accident. He, and several of the other male arrivals choose to take part in tankery, as one of the few electives suited to them. But even as boys start getting involved in tankery and more schools join tankery, some more traditional individuals, including Miho's mother oppose those changes.
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''Boys und Sensha-dō!'' is a ''Anime/GirlsUndPanzer'' fanfic by [[Creator/PaulNaughton Stellar Magic]] about [[FandomSpecificPlot boys getting involved in sensha-do]]. sensha-do]].
After Oarai wins the tankery tournament under Miho's leadership, it is able to stay open, but as it requires more students, it becomes coed. Among them is Akio Sakai, a teenage boy who comes from a family that does Sentoki-do (essentially, tankery with fighter planes), but has not been willing to take part in Sentoki-do since his father's death in an accident. He, and several of the other male arrivals choose to take part in tankery, as one of the few electives suited to them. But even as boys start getting involved in tankery and more schools join tankery, some more traditional individuals, including Miho's mother oppose those changes.
After Oarai wins the tankery tournament under Miho's leadership, it is able to stay open, but as it requires more students, it becomes coed. Among them is Akio Sakai, a teenage boy who comes from a family that does Sentoki-do (essentially, tankery with fighter planes), but has not been willing to take part in Sentoki-do since his father's death in an accident. He, and several of the other male arrivals choose to take part in tankery, as one of the few electives suited to them. But even as boys start getting involved in tankery and more schools join tankery, some more traditional individuals, including Miho's mother oppose those changes.
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-->'''Maho''': Mother, when you considered this, did you even think about Miho's feelings?
-->'''Shiho''': Sentimentality is a grave extravagance for a soldier, Maho. Miho has blossomed outside our family... could you see her taking a post in the Self Defense forces? Becoming an officer? By [[spoiler:disinheriting her]], [[IDidWhatIHadToDo I have done the best for her]]...She will no doubt find her own way forward.
-->'''Maho''': But what about her happiness, mother? She loves you and you [[spoiler:cast her out]]... don't you see how much that has hurt her. She wants to make you proud... why do you think she persisted in sensha-do as a freshman? You have hurt her mother.
-->'''Shiho''': Sentimentality is a grave extravagance for a soldier, Maho. Miho has blossomed outside our family... could you see her taking a post in the Self Defense forces? Becoming an officer? By [[spoiler:disinheriting her]], [[IDidWhatIHadToDo I have done the best for her]]...She will no doubt find her own way forward.
-->'''Maho''': But what about her happiness, mother? She loves you and you [[spoiler:cast her out]]... don't you see how much that has hurt her. She wants to make you proud... why do you think she persisted in sensha-do as a freshman? You have hurt her mother.
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-->'''Maho''': Mother, when you considered this, did you even think about Miho's feelings?
-->'''Shiho''':feelings?\\
'''Shiho''': Sentimentality is a grave extravagance for a soldier, Maho. Miho has blossomed outside our family... could you see her taking a post in the Self Defense forces? Becoming an officer? By [[spoiler:disinheriting her]], [[IDidWhatIHadToDo I have done the best for her]]...She will no doubt find her own wayforward.
-->'''Maho''':forward.\\
'''Maho''': But what about her happiness, mother? She loves you and you [[spoiler:cast her out]]... don't you see how much that has hurt her. She wants to make you proud... why do you think she persisted in sensha-do as a freshman? You have hurt her mother.
-->'''Shiho''':
'''Shiho''': Sentimentality is a grave extravagance for a soldier, Maho. Miho has blossomed outside our family... could you see her taking a post in the Self Defense forces? Becoming an officer? By [[spoiler:disinheriting her]], [[IDidWhatIHadToDo I have done the best for her]]...She will no doubt find her own way
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'''Maho''': But what about her happiness, mother? She loves you and you [[spoiler:cast her out]]... don't you see how much that has hurt her. She wants to make you proud... why do you think she persisted in sensha-do as a freshman? You have hurt her mother.
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-->'''Lady Grey''': Nishizumi-sama, the defeat of your school has led to an expansion of the sport. Surely this is a good thing?
-->'''Shiho''': Grey-sama, the participation of such schools as Ion Dumitru, Népe Boarding School, and Mt. Zion in this Federation may be beneficial, but that does not take away from the fact that tradition is being trampled upon—
-->'''Saburo''': Nishizumi-sama, I suggest you reconsider your words. I have been searching for years as to whom you remind me of, Nishizumi... and I believe, at last, that I have figured it out. You, Nishizumi, are much like my superiors in the war. Clinging to tradition and seniority, believing themselves to be the ideal of our world, and all the while leading our nation to its own destruction.
-->'''Shiho''': HOW DARE YOU!
-->'''Saburo''' How dare I? I dare speak the truth. What right does your school have to being the champions? What woman in their right mind plans to disown their own daughter for winning?
-->'''Woman''': You, you plan on disowning Miho, Nishizumi-san?
-->'''Lady Grey''': Whom is more honorable, the daughter or the mother?
-->'''Shiho''': Grey-sama, the participation of such schools as Ion Dumitru, Népe Boarding School, and Mt. Zion in this Federation may be beneficial, but that does not take away from the fact that tradition is being trampled upon—
-->'''Saburo''': Nishizumi-sama, I suggest you reconsider your words. I have been searching for years as to whom you remind me of, Nishizumi... and I believe, at last, that I have figured it out. You, Nishizumi, are much like my superiors in the war. Clinging to tradition and seniority, believing themselves to be the ideal of our world, and all the while leading our nation to its own destruction.
-->'''Shiho''': HOW DARE YOU!
-->'''Saburo''' How dare I? I dare speak the truth. What right does your school have to being the champions? What woman in their right mind plans to disown their own daughter for winning?
-->'''Woman''': You, you plan on disowning Miho, Nishizumi-san?
-->'''Lady Grey''': Whom is more honorable, the daughter or the mother?
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-->'''Shiho''':
'''Shiho''': Grey-sama, the participation of such schools as Ion Dumitru, Népe Boarding School, and Mt. Zion in this Federation may be beneficial, but that does not take away from the fact that tradition is being trampled
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'''Saburo''': Nishizumi-sama, I suggest you reconsider your words. I have been searching for years as to whom you remind me of, Nishizumi... and I believe, at last, that I have figured it out. You, Nishizumi, are much like my superiors in the war. Clinging to tradition and seniority, believing themselves to be the ideal of our world, and all the while leading our nation to its own
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'''Shiho''': HOW DARE
-->'''Saburo'''
'''Saburo''' How dare I? I dare speak the truth. What right does your school have to being the champions? What woman in their right mind plans to disown their own daughter for
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'''Woman''': You, you plan on disowning Miho,
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'''Lady Grey''': Whom is more honorable, the daughter or the mother?
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-->'''Akio''': If I had a sister, I’d be there for her all the time. Not just [[spoiler:when she’s in the hospital]].
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-->'''Akio''': The only one here that’s a disgrace here is you, Nishizumi. Victory or nothing? If that was true, wouldn’t Maho’s defeat have been enough for you to give her a chance? Miho is twice the tank commander you ever were Shiho.”
-->'''Shiho''': I will not be spoken to in such a fashion!
-->'''Akio''': It’s the only fashion you deserve to be spoken to. Sensha-do isn’t just about victory. It’s about camaraderie and friendship. Miho faced your team outnumbered more than two to one and she won. With her leadership a team made up of inferior tanks bested yours with their King Tigers, Maus, and Panthers. She beat Maho herself in a singular duel with a Panzer IV. Why are you punishing her for doing well?
-->'''Shiho''': That is not what Sensha-do is about, little boy!
-->'''Akio''': [[GetOut GET OUT]]! If [[spoiler:you’re not claiming her as your daughter]] you have no right to be here.
-->'''Shiho''': I will not be spoken to in such a fashion!
-->'''Akio''': It’s the only fashion you deserve to be spoken to. Sensha-do isn’t just about victory. It’s about camaraderie and friendship. Miho faced your team outnumbered more than two to one and she won. With her leadership a team made up of inferior tanks bested yours with their King Tigers, Maus, and Panthers. She beat Maho herself in a singular duel with a Panzer IV. Why are you punishing her for doing well?
-->'''Shiho''': That is not what Sensha-do is about, little boy!
-->'''Akio''': [[GetOut GET OUT]]! If [[spoiler:you’re not claiming her as your daughter]] you have no right to be here.
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'''Shiho''': I will not be spoken to in such a
-->'''Akio''': It’s
'''Akio''': It's the only fashion you deserve to be spoken to. Sensha-do
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'''Shiho''': That is not what Sensha-do is about, little
-->'''Akio''':
'''Akio''': [[GetOut GET OUT]]! If
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-->'''Shiho''': Miho Nishizumi, you are [[spoiler:[[IHaveNoSon no daughter]] of mine]].
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* WritersCannotDoMath: Miho is described as weighing 80 kg(176 pounds), a weight that is far too heavy for Miho, who's 5'2" and seems to be of average weight for a Japanese girl.
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* WritersCannotDoMath: Miho is described as weighing 80 kg(176 pounds), a weight that is far too heavy for Miho, who's 5'2" and seems to be of average weight for a Japanese girl.girl.
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* LoadsAndLoadsOfCharacters: Not only has a large amount of the Girls Und Panzer cast shown up so far, but there are also many original characters.
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* CrashIntoHello: Miho and Akio.
* CurbStompBattle: Oarai defeats all 20 of Saunders' tanks with only three losses.
* CurbStompBattle: Oarai defeats all 20 of Saunders' tanks with only three losses.
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* CrashIntoHello: Miho and Akio.
Akio officially meet by running into each other near Miho's apartment.
* CurbStompBattle: Oarai defeats all 20 of Saunders' tankswith while only losing three losses.out of ten of their own.
* CurbStompBattle: Oarai defeats all 20 of Saunders' tanks
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* TheLastStraw: Shiho claims that she wasn't completely sure about [[spoiler:disowning Miho]] until [[spoiler:Miho decided not to remove Mako from the team after the near-accident]].
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* OutdatedByCanon: In a few ways.
** The fic picks up soon after canon left off, with no mention of the events of ''der Film.''
** It's suggested that a large part of the reason why young tankers are so troubled by Shiho's decision to [[spoiler:disown Miho]] is that they'll have to train under her with the Self-Defense Forces if they want to do tankery after high school. Canon reveals that there are other tankery houses and university teams, so students aren't stuck with the Nishizumis.
* OutOfCharacterMoment: No one in Anglerfish Team invites Miho to go with them while they're in port in Chapter 4- not even Yukari, who's practically obsessed with Miho.
** The fic picks up soon after canon left off, with no mention of the events of ''der Film.''
** It's suggested that a large part of the reason why young tankers are so troubled by Shiho's decision to [[spoiler:disown Miho]] is that they'll have to train under her with the Self-Defense Forces if they want to do tankery after high school. Canon reveals that there are other tankery houses and university teams, so students aren't stuck with the Nishizumis.
* OutOfCharacterMoment: No one in Anglerfish Team invites Miho to go with them while they're in port in Chapter 4- not even Yukari, who's practically obsessed with Miho.
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* OutdatedByCanon: In a few ways.
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**The fic picks up soon after canon left off, with no mention of the events of ''der Film.''
** It's suggested that a large part of the reason why young tankers are so troubled by Shiho's decision to [[spoiler:disown Miho]] is that they'll have to train under her with the Self-Defense Forces if they want to do tankery after high school. Canon reveals that there are other tankery houses and university teams, so students aren't stuck with the Nishizumis.
* OutOfCharacterMoment:No one in Anglerfish Team invites Miho to go with them while they're in port in Chapter 4- not even Yukari, who's practically obsessed with Miho.
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** It's suggested that a large part of the reason why young tankers are so troubled by Shiho's decision to [[spoiler:disown Miho]] is that they'll have to train under her with the Self-Defense Forces if they want to do tankery after high school. Canon reveals that there are other tankery houses and university teams, so students aren't stuck with the Nishizumis.
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* SpoilerTitle: While it's not a terribly obvious example, the title of Chapter 6, "[[spoiler:Accident Against Anzio]]", makes it clear that [[WhamEpisode the battle against Anzio will be no ordinary match]].
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* SpoilerTitle: SpoilerTitle:
** While it's not a terribly obvious example, the title of Chapter 6, "[[spoiler:Accident Against Anzio]]", makes it clear that [[WhamEpisode the battle against Anzio will be no ordinarymatch]].match]].
** Likewise, Chapter 7 is titled, "Miho's Heartache," which indicates that something worse than [[spoiler:being injured]] will happen to Miho.
** While it's not a terribly obvious example, the title of Chapter 6, "[[spoiler:Accident Against Anzio]]", makes it clear that [[WhamEpisode the battle against Anzio will be no ordinary
** Likewise, Chapter 7 is titled, "Miho's Heartache," which indicates that something worse than [[spoiler:being injured]] will happen to Miho.
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* JerkassToOne: Akio is a decent person, but he's unusually hostile to Maho, as well as Shiho (although considering no one likes her, that's hardly surprising).
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* OutdatedByCanon: In a few ways.
** The fic picks up soon after canon left off, with no mention of the events of ''der Film.''
** It's suggested that a large part of the reason why young tankers are so troubled by Shiho's decision to [[spoiler:disown Miho]] is that they'll have to train under her with the Self-Defense Forces if they want to do tankery after high school. Canon reveals that there are other tankery houses and university teams, so students aren't stuck with the Nishizumis.
** The fic picks up soon after canon left off, with no mention of the events of ''der Film.''
** It's suggested that a large part of the reason why young tankers are so troubled by Shiho's decision to [[spoiler:disown Miho]] is that they'll have to train under her with the Self-Defense Forces if they want to do tankery after high school. Canon reveals that there are other tankery houses and university teams, so students aren't stuck with the Nishizumis.
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* AuthorAppeal: It's evident that the author holds Gajin Entertainment's ''VideoGame/WarThunder'' Ground Forces and Air Combat components in higher regard than Wargaming's [[VideoGame/WorldOfTanks similar]] [[VideoGame/WorldOfWarplanes efforts]].
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* TheFriendNobodyLikes: Shark Team isn't especially close with each other, with only Akio and Masaru being close to each other, as well as Gunjin and Keiibin, but all of them find Heishi annoying.
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* TheFriendNobodyLikes: Shark Team isn't especially close with each other, with only Akio and Masaru being close to each other, as well as Gunjin and Keiibin, but all of them find Heishi annoying. Since they need him to load their tank, he's a case of Necessity, though.
* TheLastStraw: Shiho claims that she wasn't completely sure about [[spoiler:disowning Miho]] until [[spoiler:Miho decided not to remove Mako from the team after the near-accident]].
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** One member of Rabbit Team underestimates Continuance, although Maho points out that even for Kuromorimine, victory is not guaranteed when facing Continuance on their home territory.
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** One member of Rabbit Team underestimates Continuance, Continuance after the fairly rough match against Dalian, although Maho points out that even for Kuromorimine, victory is not guaranteed when facing Continuance on their home territory.
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* ActionPrologue: Much like Girls Und Panzer.
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* ActionPrologue: Much like Girls Und Panzer.Panzer, the fic begins in the middle of the first tankery match against another school.
* AdaptationPersonalityChange: Several facets of Miho's personality are changed. She's said to be "[[AdaptationalIntelligence more tactically astute]]" than in the anime, even if she isn't much good at raising morale or inspiring others. As a leader, she's also a bit more decisive and resolute than in the anime, and doesn't hesitate to relieve Momo of her position as second-in-command after the near-loss to Dalian. She's also a bit more distant from her friends, since none of them invite her out after the match with Saunders, and she's scared of letting them down. She also [[WellDoneSonGuy once wanted her mother's approval]], although she's apparently grown out of that by the time she saved the tanks in the finals.
* AdaptationPersonalityChange: Several facets of Miho's personality are changed. She's said to be "[[AdaptationalIntelligence more tactically astute]]" than in the anime, even if she isn't much good at raising morale or inspiring others. As a leader, she's also a bit more decisive and resolute than in the anime, and doesn't hesitate to relieve Momo of her position as second-in-command after the near-loss to Dalian. She's also a bit more distant from her friends, since none of them invite her out after the match with Saunders, and she's scared of letting them down. She also [[WellDoneSonGuy once wanted her mother's approval]], although she's apparently grown out of that by the time she saved the tanks in the finals.
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* EveryoneHasStandards: Anchovy doesn't think much of Miho and is desperate to win against her to prove that her school's "not a joke", but she's [[spoiler:horrified when Miho accidentally gets shot]].
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* EveryoneHasStandards: Anchovy doesn't think much of Miho and is desperate to win against her to prove that her school's "not a joke", but she's [[spoiler:horrified when still horrified [[spoiler:when Miho accidentally gets shot]].
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** Momo never takes umbrage at being called "Momo-chan," even by Miho, whom Momo could reasonably expect to call her by her title or "[[LastNameBasis Kawashima]]-[[SenpaiKohai senpai]]."
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** Momo never takes umbrage at being called "Momo-chan," even by "Momo-chan." This includes Miho, whom even though Momo could reasonably is within her rights to expect Miho to call her by her Student Council title or "[[LastNameBasis Kawashima]]-[[SenpaiKohai senpai]]."
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** Saburo to Shiho in Chapter 3.
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** Saburo gives one to Shiho in Chapter 3.3 during a meeting in which Shiho expresses displeasure about boys getting involved in sensha-do.
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** Soon afterward, Akio gives a longer one to Shiho.Shiho, after hearing about [[spoiler:Miho being disowned]].
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* ScrewTheRulesImDoingWhatsRight: Akio breaks safety rules to [[spoiler:save Miho from accidentally being run over after she gets shot]].
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* ScrewTheRulesImDoingWhatsRight: Akio breaks safety rules to [[spoiler:save Miho from accidentally being run over after she gets shot]].shot, leaping out of his tank in the middle of a match]].
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** The team's overall performance is reduced as a result of [[spoiler:Miho being injured and replaced with the decidedly less competent Momo]].
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** The team's overall performance is reduced as a result of [[spoiler:Miho being injured and replaced with the decidedly less competent Momo]].Momo]].
* WritersCannotDoMath: Miho is described as weighing 80 kg(176 pounds), a weight that is far too heavy for Miho, who's 5'2" and seems to be of average weight for a Japanese girl.
* WritersCannotDoMath: Miho is described as weighing 80 kg(176 pounds), a weight that is far too heavy for Miho, who's 5'2" and seems to be of average weight for a Japanese girl.
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''Boys und Sensha-dō!'' is a Anime/GirlsUndPanzer fanfic by [[Creator/PaulNaughton Stellar Magic]] about [[FandomSpecificPlot boys getting involved in sensha-do]]. After Oarai wins the tankery tournament under Miho's leadership, it is able to stay open, but as it requires more students, it becomes coed. Among them is Akio Sakai, a teenage boy who comes from a family that does Sentoki-do (essentially, tankery with fighter planes), but has not been willing to take part in Sentoki-do since his father's death in an accident. He, and several of the other male arrivals choose to take part in tankery, as one of the few electives suited to them. But even as boys start getting involved in tankery and more schools join tankery, some more traditional individuals, including Miho's mother oppose those changes.
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''Boys und Sensha-dō!'' is a Anime/GirlsUndPanzer ''Anime/GirlsUndPanzer'' fanfic by [[Creator/PaulNaughton Stellar Magic]] about [[FandomSpecificPlot boys getting involved in sensha-do]]. After Oarai wins the tankery tournament under Miho's leadership, it is able to stay open, but as it requires more students, it becomes coed. Among them is Akio Sakai, a teenage boy who comes from a family that does Sentoki-do (essentially, tankery with fighter planes), but has not been willing to take part in Sentoki-do since his father's death in an accident. He, and several of the other male arrivals choose to take part in tankery, as one of the few electives suited to them. But even as boys start getting involved in tankery and more schools join tankery, some more traditional individuals, including Miho's mother oppose those changes.
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''Fanfic/BoysUndSenshado'' is a Anime/GirlsUndPanzer fanfic by [[Creator/PaulNaughton Stellar Magic]] about [[FandomSpecificPlot boys getting involved in sensha-do]]. After Oarai wins the tankery tournament under Miho's leadership, it is able to stay open, but as it requires more students, it becomes coed. Among them is Akio Sakai, a teenage boy who comes from a family that does Sentoki-do (essentially, tankery with fighter planes), but has not been willing to take part in Sentoki-do since his father's death in an accident. He, and several of the other male arrivals choose to take part in tankery, as one of the few electives suited to them. But even as boys start getting involved in tankery and more schools join tankery, some more traditional individuals, including Miho's mother oppose those changes.
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* TheFriendsThatDontHang: Anglerfish Team, in contrast to canon. Miho doesn't spend all that much time with them out of tankery matches, and when they're in port after the match with Saunders, [[OutOfCharacterMoment none of them invite her to come with them]].
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* TheFriendsThatDontHang: TheFriendsWhoNeverHang: Anglerfish Team, in contrast to canon. Miho doesn't spend all that much time with them out of tankery matches, and when they're in port after the match with Saunders, [[OutOfCharacterMoment none of them invite her to come with them]].
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* GoodParents: Rebecca Sakai, Akio's mother. She's supportive of her son even though she's half the world away, and stands in stark contrast to Shiho on that regad.
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* IceQueen: Shiho and her protege, [[OriginalCharacter Katsuko Hideyoshi]].
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* IceQueen: Shiho and her protege, [[OriginalCharacter Katsuko Hideyoshi]].Hideyoshi]], who's said to be even more like Shiho than Maho is. Both are cold, ruthlessly devoted to the Nishizumi style, and determined to repair the damage they believe including boys has done to tankery
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* ShippingTorpedo: After meeting Akio and realizing that he's the grandson of Saburo Sakai, Shiho's political adversary, Maho wonders if her mother will force her to drive a wedge between them, but refuses to do so. It's unclear how accurate Maho's prediction is [[spoiler:or whether it's still possible now that Shiho has disowned Miho]].
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* CoolOldGuy: [[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sabur%C5%8D_Sakai Saburo Sakai]], Akio’s grandfather
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* {{Chickification}}: Miho's more timid and emotionally vulnerable than she was in canon, and the author believes that she needs Akio to build up her self-esteem and realize that her mother's treatment of her is wrong.
* CoolOldGuy: [[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sabur%C5%8D_Sakai Saburo Sakai]], Akio’sgrandfathergrandfather, who's quite supportive of his grandson, and enthusiastically supports Oarai.
* CoolOldGuy: [[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sabur%C5%8D_Sakai Saburo Sakai]], Akio’s
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* ExternalRetcon: The author said that sensha-do uses simunition,
* EyepatchOfPower: Saburo
* EyepatchOfPower: Saburo
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* ExternalRetcon: The author said that sensha-do uses simunition,
simunition, since he believes it's unsafe enough even without live rounds.
* EyepatchOfPower:SaburoSaburo wears an eyepatch over the eye he lost in World War II.
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* TheFriendsThatDontHang: Anglerfish Team, in contrast to canon. Miho doesn't spend all that much time with them out of tankery matches, and when they're in port after the match with Saunders, [[OutOfCharacterMoment none of them invite her to come with them]].
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* JerkWithAHeartOfGold: Akio can be fairly harsh sometimes, whether with those who don't deserve it (such as Maho) or those who do (such as Shiho, but he ultimately means well.
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* JerkWithAHeartOfGold: Akio can be fairly harsh sometimes, whether with those who don't deserve it (such as Maho) or those who do (such as Shiho, Shiho), but he ultimately means well.
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* OutOfCharacterMoment: No one in Anglerfish Team invites Miho to go with them while they're in port in Chapter 4- not even Yukari, who's practically obsessed with Miho.
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* BetaCouple: Hoshino and Tsubasa. They officially become a couple in Chapter 12, at the same point at which [[SheIsNotMyGirlfriend Akio is denying his relationship with Miho]].
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* TheFriendNobodyLikes: Shark Team isn't especially close with each other, with only Akio and Masaru being close to each other, as well as the other two boys, but all of them find Heishi annoying.
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* TheFriendNobodyLikes: Shark Team isn't especially close with each other, with only Akio and Masaru being close to each other, as well as the other two boys, Gunjin and Keiibin, but all of them find Heishi annoying.
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* RougeAnglesOfSatin: It's fairly common in this fic, especially using "then" instead of "than," and a few other cases, such as saying that Mako has a "board" expression.
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** Similarly, Tsubasa points out that Miho must be keeping Akio busy, but Akio points out that [[spoiler:because of Miho's aforementioned injury]], she has needed a lot of help. He then gets Tsubasa back by pointing out his relationship with Kazuko, which Tsubasa can't deny.
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* SuddenNameChange: Yakuin Takuma's nickname is "Yakuma" in Chapter 2, but it's "Yakota" in Chapter 7.
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* HufflepuffHouse: The model team gets barely any presence in the story, despite also being a new arrival.
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* JerkWithAHeartOfGold: Akio can be fairly harsh sometimes, whether with those who don't deserve it (such as Maho) or those who do (such as Shiho, but he ultimately means well.
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* ThoseTwoGuys: Gunjin Hayate and Keibiin Kenji, the other two OriginalCharacter members of Akio's crew.
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* FlatCharacter: Some of the original members of the cast come off as this. For example, the model club are defined by their love of historical models, while Hideyoshi is little more than a clone of Shiho.
* IgnorantOfTheirOwnIgnorance: According to WordOfGod, Akio not only doesn't understand Maho's complicated family situation and desire to support Miho as best as she can given the circumstances, but he doesn't know that he doesn't understand.
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** Akio gives a brief one to Maho in Chapter 7, possibly unaware that all of Maho's efforts have been to allow Miho to live freely.
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** Akio gives a brief one to Maho in Chapter 7, possibly unaware that all of Maho's efforts have been to allow Miho to live freely.
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* FacePalm: Maho does this as well-placed shots by St. Gloriana's tanks remove the Maus' treads.
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* GeneralFailure: Momo is just as ineffective of a leader as in canon, [[spoiler:which leads to severe problems when she's forced to step in for Miho while she's injured. It gets bad enough that Erwin has to relieve Momo of command]].
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* GeneralFailure: Momo is just as ineffective of a leader as in canon, [[spoiler:which leads to severe problems when she's forced to step in for Miho while she's injured. It gets bad enough that Erwin has to relieve Momo of command]].command mid-battle, and Miho makes it official afterward]].
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* GracefulLoser: Kay, as per canon, as well as [[spoiler:Dalian's commander, Akane Zainichi]].
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* ShowerOfAngst: Ayumi goes to take one after the match with Dalian, upset over her unrequited love for Yoshi and her team doing poorly.
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** One member of Rabbit Team underestimates Continuance, although Maho points out that even for Kuromorimine, victory is not guaranteed when facing Continuance on their home territory.
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* OutOfFocus: Many of the characters besides Akio and Miho fade into the background, particularly the rest of Anglerfish Team.
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** The author's notes go into details about the setting. For example, they describe how the tanks are using "simunition" instead of actual rounds.
** The forums also provide information about the story, such as canonically confirming the Akio/Miho and [[OriginalCharacter Tsubasa]]/Hoshino[[note]]Leopon Team/The Auto Club's gunner[[/note]] pairings.
** The author's notes go into details about the setting. For example, they describe how the tanks are using "simunition" instead of actual rounds.
** The forums also provide information about the story, such as canonically confirming the Akio/Miho and [[OriginalCharacter Tsubasa]]/Hoshino[[note]]Leopon Team/The Auto Club's gunner[[/note]] pairings.
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**Chapter 6: As Anzio's Semovente fires, the narration describes what the "simunition" rounds do before describing what was hit.
-->"In this case, it struck [[spoiler:an eighty kilo girl straight in the chest]]."
**Chapter 7: Shiho delivers a surprising announcement.
-->'''Shiho''': Miho Nishizumi, you are [[spoiler:[[IHaveNoSon no daughter]] of mine]].
**Chapter 6: As Anzio's Semovente fires, the narration describes what the "simunition" rounds do before describing what was hit.
-->"In this case, it struck [[spoiler:an eighty kilo girl straight in the chest]]."
**Chapter 7: Shiho delivers a surprising announcement.
-->'''Shiho''': Miho Nishizumi, you are [[spoiler:[[IHaveNoSon no daughter]] of mine]].
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* NotSoStoic: Maho after [[spoiler:Miho gets injured; she even ''cries'' when she sees Miho in the hospital]].
* SpoilerTitle: While it's not a terribly obvious example, the title of Chapter 6, "[[spoiler:Accident Against Anzio]]", makes it clear that [[WhamEpisode the battle against Anzio will be no ordinary match]].
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** The team's overall performance is reduced as a result of [[spoiler:Miho being injured and replaced with Momo]].
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** The team's overall performance is reduced as a result of [[spoiler:Miho being injured and replaced with the decidedly less competent Momo]].
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* EveryoneHasStandards: Anchovy doesn't think much of Miho and is desperate to win against her to prove that her school's "not a joke", but she's [[spoiler:horrified when Miho accidentally gets shot]].