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* While Elizabeth will have a lot of Awesome moments after her reincarnation, the first one we can see happens ''before'' she gets reincarnated. God is uncomfortable at her [[JumpedAtTheCall Jumping at the Call]] before he can finish describing what she's reincarnating into. So she stands up and makes her ScrewDestiny declaration... After ''spending '''a whole page''' struggling to just stand up from where she's sitting'', and she's ''still wheezing'' as she makes the statement. It a [[ShowDontTell clear demonstration]] of how {{determin|ator}}ed she is, where her [[DelicateAndSickly physical limitations]] lie, and, by extension, ''why'' [[IJustWantToBeNormal she wants a healthy body that bad]]. Yes, the latter two points means this doubles as a TearJerker.
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* While Elizabeth will have a lot of Awesome moments after her reincarnation, the first one we can see happens ''before'' she gets reincarnated. God is uncomfortable at her [[JumpedAtTheCall Jumping at the Call]] before he can finish describing what she's reincarnating into. So she stands up and makes declares that [[ScrewDestiny she just wants a healthy body so she can live her ScrewDestiny declaration...own life, everything else be damned]]... After ''spending '''a whole page''' struggling to just stand up from where she's sitting'', and she's ''still wheezing'' as she makes the statement. It It's a [[ShowDontTell clear powerful demonstration]] of how {{determin|ator}}ed DelicateAndSickly she is, where was, that the mere act of ''standing up'' was extremely taxing to her--and by performing such an extremely taxing act to make her [[DelicateAndSickly physical limitations]] lie, and, by extension, ''why'' [[IJustWantToBeNormal point across, demonstrates how {{determinat|or}}ed she wants is in that. Many a DelicateAndSickly character would want a healthy body body, but going that bad]]. Yes, far just to make that point across needs a ton of determination. No wonder the latter two points means this doubles as a TearJerker.''God'' is impressed.
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* While Elizabeth will have a lot of Awesome moments after her reincarnation, the first one we can see happens ''before'' she gets reincarnated. God is uncomfortable at her [[JumpedAtTheCall Jumping at the Call]] before he can finish describing what she's reincarnating into. So she stands up and makes her ScrewDestiny declaration... After ''spending '''a whole page''' struggling to just stand up from where she's sitting'', and she's ''still wheezing'' as she makes the statement. It a [[ShowDontTell clear demonstration]] of how {{determin|ator}}ed she is, where her [[DelicateAndSickly physical limitations]] lie, and, by extension, ''why'' [[IJustWantToBeNormal she wants a healthy body that bad]]. Yes, the latter two points means this doubles as a TearJerker.
-->'''God:''' Are you certain about this?\\
'''Elizabeth:''' ''(hand on face, clearly out of breath)'' (Hack!) Y-yes! I don't mind! ''(wheezes)'' If I can get a ticket to a new life... ''(pants)'' ..I'll forge my own destiny!
-->'''God:''' Are you certain about this?\\
'''Elizabeth:''' ''(hand on face, clearly out of breath)'' (Hack!) Y-yes! I don't mind! ''(wheezes)'' If I can get a ticket to a new life... ''(pants)'' ..I'll forge my own destiny!
