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* GenreBlindness: Layla's first day in the camp is full of moments that border on the WhatAnIdiot trope. The fact that she's been hauled off into an extrajudicial concentration camp on order of the President seems to have not fully dawned on her...
-->'''Layla''': There are tons of people outside. Besides, there are so many armed Exclusion Guards around, it's not like I can get mugged.
-->'''Mom''': The men with the guns ''are the ones I'm worried about.''
-->'''Layla''': There are tons of people outside. Besides, there are so many armed Exclusion Guards around, it's not like I can get mugged.
-->'''Mom''': The men with the guns ''are the ones I'm worried about.''
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* GenreBlindness: Layla's first day in the camp is full of moments that border on the WhatAnIdiot TooDumbToLive trope. The fact that she's been hauled off into an extrajudicial concentration camp on order of the President seems to have not fully dawned on her...
-->'''Layla''': There are tons of people outside. Besides, there are so many armed Exclusion Guards around, it's not like I can getmugged.
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'''Mom''': The men with the guns ''are the ones I'm worried about.''
-->'''Layla''': There are tons of people outside. Besides, there are so many armed Exclusion Guards around, it's not like I can get
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'''Mom''': The men with the guns ''are the ones I'm worried about.''
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* InvisiblePresident: For being spoken of as a raging demagogue, racist, and the one who gave the order to implement Mobius, the President is never "shown" in the story- even through a TV or phone screen.
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* InvisiblePresident: For being spoken of as a raging demagogue, racist, and the one who gave the order to implement Mobius, the President is never "shown" in the story- even story—even through a TV or phone screen.
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* ArtisticLicenseMilitary: The U.S. Army shutting down the camp is likely a breach of the chain of command, effectively a full on military coup. The Army may swear an oath to protect and defend the Constitution, but the President is still the commander-in-chief and most soldiers aren't exactly scholars of Constitutional Law.
* ArtisticLicensePolitics: The camp being cleaned up into a Potemkin village so it can be presented to the Red Cross as if they'd have power over the United States Government is laughably absurd- and the Director says as much after Layla's initial "hunger strike" prompts an outburst from him.
* ArtisticLicensePolitics: The camp being cleaned up into a Potemkin village so it can be presented to the Red Cross as if they'd have power over the United States Government is laughably absurd- and the Director says as much after Layla's initial "hunger strike" prompts an outburst from him.
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* NoCelebritiesWereHarmed: You have to squint (or in some cases, do some research) but most members of the Administration are based on current U.S. politicians. [[Administrivia/RuleOfCautiousEditingJudgment And that's all we'll say about that.]]
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* NoCelebritiesWereHarmed: You have to squint (or in some cases, do some research) but most members of the Administration are based on current modern U.S. politicians. [[Administrivia/RuleOfCautiousEditingJudgment And that's all we'll say about that.]]
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** Layla and her friends in the ad-hoc resistance movement compare themselves to a famous Nazi resistance group. One that was ''guillotined''.
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** Layla and her friends in the ad-hoc resistance movement compare themselves to a famous Nazi anti-Nazi resistance group. One that was ''guillotined''.''guillotined'' by the Nazis.
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* FauxAffablyEvil: The Director, who keeps a fake grin on his face and talks about unity and prosperity to hide what a horrible place the internment camps really is. None of the inmates are fooled.
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* AgonizingStomachWound: [[spoiler:Delivered to Jake by the Director after ordering his private security to shoot on Layla and the other young protesters. He dies surrounded by the prisoners.]]
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* AgonizingStomachWound: [[spoiler:Delivered to Jake by [[spoiler:Jake suffers one from the Director after ordering his he orders the private security team to shoot on Layla and the other young protesters. He Jake dies surrounded by the prisoners.]]
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* BlackSite: [[spoiler:Jake]] implies the Director has access to one, where the adults that go missing are sent. Even [[spoiler:he]] doesn't know if they're merely locked up, tortured, or quietly killed.
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* BlackSite: [[spoiler:Jake]] implies the Director has access to one, where the adults that go missing are sent. Even [[spoiler:he]] doesn't know if they're merely locked up, tortured, or quietly killed.killed, or all of the above.
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* [[DangerousSixteenthBirthday Dangerous Eighteenth Birthday]]: For some reason, the Director and the guards won't inflict any of the worst tortures and punishments on anyone under the age of 18.
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* [[DangerousSixteenthBirthday Dangerous Eighteenth Birthday]]: For some reason, the Director and the guards won't inflict any of the worst tortures and punishments on anyone under the age of 18. Layla is conveniently a few weeks from her eighteenth birthday.
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* FakeRelationship: How Layla and [[spoiler:Jake]] are able to subvert the Director. [[spoiler:Jake]] pretends that he's "taking advantage" of Layla to secure enough privacy to get her burner phones to call out of the camp and helps smuggle out her written blog posts.
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* FakeRelationship: How Layla and [[spoiler:Jake]] are able to subvert the Director. [[spoiler:Jake]] pretends that he's "taking advantage" of Layla to secure enough privacy to get her smuggle in burner phones to call out of the camp and helps smuggle out her written blog posts.
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* TheGenerationGap: The adult prisoners within Mobius are absolutely against the idea of any resistance to the Director, rationalizing that the situation won't get any worse or just blow over if they quietly follow orders. The younger generation realize the camp is a prototype, that the suffering will be inflicted nationwide if it's allowed to become a perfect model, and work to subvert the Director through any means.
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* TheGenerationGap: The adult prisoners within Mobius are absolutely against the idea of any resistance to the Director, rationalizing that the situation won't get any worse or just blow over if they quietly follow orders. The younger generation realize the camp is a prototype, that the their suffering will be inflicted nationwide if it's allowed to become a perfect model, and work to subvert the Director through any means.
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* NoCelebritiesWereHarmed: You have to squint (or in some cases, do some research) but most members of the Administration are based on U.S. politicians. [[Administrivia/RuleOfCautiousEditingJudgment And that's all we'll say about that.]]
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* NoCelebritiesWereHarmed: You have to squint (or in some cases, do some research) but most members of the Administration are based on current U.S. politicians. [[Administrivia/RuleOfCautiousEditingJudgment And that's all we'll say about that.]]
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* NotSoOmniscientCouncilOfBickering: The vague "High Command" referred to by the camp guards. [[spoiler:Jake]] hints that the Command includes the Secretary of War, the C.I.A. Director, and the F.B.I. Director. [[spoiler:By the end of the book, the Command is in a circular firing squad mode trying to escape the wrath of the public and not be the President's scapegoat to escape political consequences of the Mobius camp.]]
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* NotSoOmniscientCouncilOfBickering: The vague "High Command" referred to by the camp guards. [[spoiler:Jake]] hints that the Command includes the Secretary of War, the C.I.A. Director, and the F.B.I. Director. [[spoiler:By the end of the book, the Command is in a circular firing squad mode trying to escape the wrath of the public and not be the President's scapegoat as he tries to escape avoid the political consequences of the Mobius camp.]]
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* ReleasedToElsewhere: Layla and Ayesha begin to notice people in the camp are disappearing in the night, then they watch as a trio of Hijab-wearing protestors are hauled off after starting a brawl with camp guards. [[spoiler:Jake indicates they were taken to an illegal black site and probably killed.]]
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* ReleasedToElsewhere: Layla and Ayesha begin to notice people in the camp are disappearing in the night, then they watch as a trio of Hijab-wearing protestors protesters are hauled off after starting a brawl with camp guards. [[spoiler:Jake indicates they were taken to an illegal black site and probably killed.]]
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* SecretPolice: Aside from the Patriot Alliance groups that monitor the streets, the Exclusion Authority is a new government force formed to carry out the roundup and internment of Muslim Americans. The guards are a glaringly all-white paramilitary organization that manage the internment operations and security of the camp. [[spoiler:Some of the guards (Jake and Fred) are actually National Guardsmen, quietly inserted to document and close the camps before they can be implemented en masse.]]
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* SecretPolice: Aside from the Patriot Alliance groups that monitor the streets, the Exclusion Authority is a new government force formed to carry out the roundup and internment of Muslim Americans. The guards are a glaringly all-white paramilitary organization that manage the internment operations and security of the camp. [[spoiler:Some of the guards (Jake and Fred) are actually National Guardsmen, quietly inserted to document and close the camps before they can be implemented en masse.nationwide.]]
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* VoiceOfTheResistance: Layla's blog posts, which become an overnight social media post as they detail conditions inside the camp.
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* VoiceOfTheResistance: Layla's blog posts, which become an overnight social media post hit as they detail conditions inside the camp.
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* BlackSite: [[spoiler:Jake]] implies the Director has access to one, where the adults that go missing are sent to. Even [[spoiler:he]] doesn't know if they're merely locked up, being tortured, or quietly outright killed.
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* BlackSite: [[spoiler:Jake]] implies the Director has access to one, where the adults that go missing are sent to. sent. Even [[spoiler:he]] doesn't know if they're merely locked up, being tortured, or quietly outright killed.
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* SlaveToPR: The only thing seeming to prevent the Director and President from stepping into FinalSolution territory. The camp has been sold to the public as necessary to prevent terrorist attacks and Sharia law, but Mobius needs to be proven as a successful endeavor before the camps will be built nationwide. As soon as the Red Cross, the media, and the protesters show up the pressure is on to maintain a facade of a perfect, clean, and safe camp with no resistance or violence in sight. [[spoiler:The President throws the whole Mobius crew under the bus to try and preserve his re-election chances when the model fails and the public learns the truth of the Director's torture.]]
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* SlaveToPR: The only thing seeming to prevent the Director and President from stepping into FinalSolution territory. The camp has been sold to the public as necessary to prevent terrorist attacks and Sharia law, but Mobius needs to be proven as a successful endeavor before the camps will be built nationwide. As [[spoiler:As soon as the Red Cross, the media, and the protesters show up the pressure is on to maintain a facade of a perfect, clean, and safe camp with no resistance or violence in sight. [[spoiler:The The President throws the whole Mobius crew under the bus to try and preserve his re-election chances when the model fails and the public learns the truth of the Director's torture.]]
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* SlaveToPR: The only thing seeming to prevent the Director and President from stepping into FinalSolution territory. The camp has been sold to the public as necessary to prevent terrorist attacks and Sharia law, but Mobius needs to be proven as a successful endeavor before the camps will be built nationwide. As soon as the Red Cross, the media, and the protesters show up the pressure is on to maintain a facade of a perfect, clean, and safe camp with no resistance or violence in sight. [[spoiler:The President throws the whole Mobius crew under the bus to try and preserve his re-election chances when the model fails and the public learns the truth of the Director's torture.]]
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* BlackSite: [[spoiler:Jake]] implies the Director has access to one, where the adults that go missing are sent to. Even [[spoiler:he]] doesn't know if they're merely locked up, being tortured, or quietly outright killed.
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* [[DangerousSixteenthBirthday Dangerous Eighteenth Birthday]]: For some reason, the Director and the guards won't inflict any of the worst tortures and punishments on anyone under the age of 18.
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* LastStandVillain: [[spoiler:After the National Guardsmen initiate a takeover of Mobius and leak the Director's actions to the public, he holes up in his office with his private security group and Layla's parents as hostages all while the guardsmen and the prisoners gather outside. He uses Layla's family to break the siege, but tries to have her shot by his private security group. The bullet grazes Layla's father and kills Jake.]]
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* LastStandVillain: LastVillainStand: [[spoiler:After the National Guardsmen initiate a takeover of Mobius and leak the Director's actions to the public, he holes up in his office with his private security group and Layla's parents as hostages all while the guardsmen and the prisoners gather outside. He uses Layla's family to break the siege, but tries to have her shot by his private security group. The bullet grazes Layla's father and kills Jake.]]
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* LastStandVillain: [[spoiler:After the National Guardsmen initiate a takeover of Mobius and leak the Director's actions to the public, he holes up in his office with his private security group and Layla's parents as hostages all while the guardsmen and the prisoners gather outside. He uses Layla's family to break the siege, but tries to have her shot by his private security group. The bullet grazes Layla's father and kills Jake.]]
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* DivideAndConquer: Subverted and played straight. The Director separates the Muslims in the camp by nationality and shared languages, hoping to pit the different groups against one another. The strategy fails, but there is a generational gap between young and old that forms inside the camps and leads to blows at one point.
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* TheGenerationGap: The adult prisoners within Mobius are absolutely against the idea of any resistance to the Director, rationalizing that the situation won't get any worse or just blow over if they quietly follow orders. The younger generation realize the camp is a prototype, that the suffering will be inflicted nationwide if it's allowed to become a perfect model, and work to subvert the Director through any means.
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** Layla and her friends in the ad-hoc resistance movement compare themselves to a famous Nazi resistance group. One that was ''guillotined''.
* PoliticallyIncorrectVillain: The Director, on top of assuming that his Muslim prisoners are all latent MiddleEasternTerrorists who harbor desires to implement [[TheFundamentalist Sharia law]] and are undeserving of the rights of (white) Americans, also holds barely concealed anti-Semitic hatred.
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* TheScapegoat: Muslims for this administration. David's comments indicate Jewish Americans are next in line.
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* TheScapegoat: Muslims serve as one for this the administration. David's comments indicate Jewish Americans are probably next in line.
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* VoiceOfTheResistance: Layla's blog posts, which become an overnight social media post as they detail conditions inside the camp.
* WallsOfTyranny: The camp barriers are made up of guard towers with armed sentries, searchlights, barbed wire, and electric fences with enough power coursing through them to kill a man. [[spoiler:As Soheil finds out.]]
* WallsOfTyranny: The camp barriers are made up of guard towers with armed sentries, searchlights, barbed wire, and electric fences with enough power coursing through them to kill a man. [[spoiler:As Soheil finds out.]]
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* FakeRelationship: How Layla and [[spoiler:Jake]] are able to subvert the director. [[spoiler:Jake]] pretends that he's "taking advantage" of Layla to secure enough privacy to get her burner phones to call her real boyfriend David and helps smuggle out her written blog posts.
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* FakeRelationship: How Layla and [[spoiler:Jake]] are able to subvert the director. Director. [[spoiler:Jake]] pretends that he's "taking advantage" of Layla to secure enough privacy to get her burner phones to call her real boyfriend David out of the camp and helps smuggle out her written blog posts.
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* TotalitarianUtilitarian: The Director sells the Mobius camp to the inmates as a borderline summer camp experience, for their own benefit and protection. It's implied that the camp is going to be sold to the American public as a necessary defense against Sharia law, illegal immigration, and terrorism.
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* OffstageVillainy: The actions of the President and the "High Command" (the ones who green light the Mobius project) are ''never'' shown on the page. The closest we get to seeing their actions or orders are the Director's monologues.
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* WouldHurtAChild: The Director has no qualms about beating teenagers and breaking noses. ''Often''.
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* VelvetRevolution: [[spoiler:The entire resistance movement as set up by Layla and the other teenagers amounts to several blog posts, a video, a hunger strike, and two quiet marches to the front door. None of them lifts a finger against the camp guards.]]
* WouldHurtAChild: The Director has no qualms about beating teenagers and breaking noses.''Often''.''Often''.
* YouAreNumberSix: All prisoners are given a QR code tattoo with invisible ink prior to being sent to Mobius. No one can see it, but the prisoners know they have a number.
* WouldHurtAChild: The Director has no qualms about beating teenagers and breaking noses.
* YouAreNumberSix: All prisoners are given a QR code tattoo with invisible ink prior to being sent to Mobius. No one can see it, but the prisoners know they have a number.
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In the near future, the Federal Government of the United States of America falls to a far-right electoral coup. Neo-Nazis march on Washington to support the new regime. The annual census is used to catalog and register American Muslims in government databases. The Attorney General argues that the Supreme Court decision ''Koremetsu v. United States'' allows the internment of Muslims during times of war. The Secretary of War (formerly Secretary of Defense), a die hard theocrat who envisions a grand war between Muslims and "The West" is confirmed by the Senate. Though a popular Resistance movement pushes back, a lack of media coverage and quick use of overwhelming police force quickly sweep them under the rug and label them as "rioters".
Layla is a teenage Muslim girl in a small college town, trying to live her life in the new reality of America but it's getting harder by the day. Her father is unceremoniously fired from his tenured teaching gig at college, she is suspended from school for kissing her Jewish boyfriend in the hallway, and her neighbors are enthusiastically attending a BookBurning of Muslim texts.
After breaking curfew to meet her boyfriend for a late-night makeout session, Layla finds herself and her parents shipped off to Mobius, a Concentration Camp in the American Southwest. Under constant surveillance by a sadistic BlackShirt security force and a Camp Director trying to create a perfect model for implementing such camps nationwide, Layla struggles within the prison walls to find a way out of the living nightmare.
Layla is a teenage Muslim girl in a small college town, trying to live her life in the new reality of America but it's getting harder by the day. Her father is unceremoniously fired from his tenured teaching gig at college, she is suspended from school for kissing her Jewish boyfriend in the hallway, and her neighbors are enthusiastically attending a BookBurning of Muslim texts.
After breaking curfew to meet her boyfriend for a late-night makeout session, Layla finds herself and her parents shipped off to Mobius, a Concentration Camp in the American Southwest. Under constant surveillance by a sadistic BlackShirt security force and a Camp Director trying to create a perfect model for implementing such camps nationwide, Layla struggles within the prison walls to find a way out of the living nightmare.
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In the near future, the Federal Government of the United States of America falls to a far-right electoral coup. Neo-Nazis march on Washington to support the new regime.regime and receive its tacit approval. The annual census is used to catalog and register American Muslims in government databases. The Attorney General argues that the Supreme Court decision ''Koremetsu v. United States'' allows the internment of Muslims during times of war. The Secretary of War (formerly Secretary of Defense), a die hard theocrat who envisions a grand war between Muslims and "The West" is confirmed by the Senate. Though a popular Resistance movement pushes back, a lack of media coverage and quick use of overwhelming police force quickly sweep them under the rug and label them as "rioters".
Layla is a teenage Muslim girl in a small collegetown, town out in the suburbs of California, trying to live her life in the new reality of America but it's getting harder by the day. Her father is unceremoniously fired from his tenured teaching gig at college, her mother's chiropractor practice is seeing fewer customers every week, she is suspended from school for kissing her Jewish boyfriend David in the hallway, and her neighbors are enthusiastically attending a BookBurning of Muslim texts.
After breaking curfew to meether boyfriend David for a late-night makeout session, Layla finds herself and her parents shipped off to Mobius, a Concentration Camp in the American Southwest. Under constant surveillance by a sadistic BlackShirt security force and a Camp Director trying to create a perfect model for implementing such camps nationwide, Layla struggles within the prison walls to find a way out of the living nightmare.
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* BlackShirt: Layla remembers the President's tacit support of a Neo-Nazi march on Washington D.C., along with neighborhood "Patriot Alliance" organizations that allow individuals to report on their neighbors to the government via a phone app.
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* BlackShirt: Layla remembers the President's tacit support of a Neo-Nazi march on Washington D.C., gave him increased power to enact his anti-Muslim policies, along with the activation of neighborhood "Patriot Alliance" organizations that allow individuals to report on their neighbors to the government via a phone app.
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* LesCollaborateurs: The camp "Minders" are Muslim Americans that speak both English and the language of their charges and reporting to the Director with word of any unrest.
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* JustFollowingOrders: The chief of police tries to offer this as a defense for helping the SecretPolice arrest and intern Layla and her family.
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* LesCollaborateurs: The camp "Minders" are Muslim Americans that speak both English and the language of their charges and
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* NoCelebritiesWereHarmed: You have to squint (or in some cases, do some research) but most members of the current Administration are based on U.S. politicians. [[Administrivia/RuleOfCautiousEditingJudgment And that's all we'll say about that.]]
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* NoCelebritiesWereHarmed: You have to squint (or in some cases, do some research) but most members of the current Administration are based on U.S. politicians. [[Administrivia/RuleOfCautiousEditingJudgment And that's all we'll say about that.]]
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* OppressiveStatesOfAmerica: The United States is utterly transformed over a period of three years. Police crackdowns, BlackShirt "Patriot Alliance" organizations, public book barbecues, destruction of Mosques, and a weaponization of the Census are regular things in this universe.
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* OppressiveStatesOfAmerica: The United States is utterly transformed over a period of three years. years prior to the beginning of the story. Police crackdowns, BlackShirt "Patriot Alliance" organizations, public book barbecues, destruction of Mosques, and a weaponization of the Census are become regular things in this universe.by the time Layla is imprisoned.
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* BlackShirt: Aside from the Patriot Alliance groups that monitor the streets, the Exclusion Authority is a new government force formed to carry out the internment of Muslim Americans. The guards are a glaringly all-white paramilitary organization that manage the internment operations and security of the camp. [[spoiler:Some of the guards (Jake and Fred) are actually National Guardsmen, quietly inserted to document and close the camps before they can be implemented en masse.]]
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* BlackShirt: Aside from Layla remembers the Patriot Alliance groups President's tacit support of a Neo-Nazi march on Washington D.C., along with neighborhood "Patriot Alliance" organizations that monitor allow individuals to report on their neighbors to the streets, the Exclusion Authority is a new government force formed to carry out the internment of Muslim Americans. The guards are via a glaringly all-white paramilitary organization that manage the internment operations and security of the camp. [[spoiler:Some of the guards (Jake and Fred) are actually National Guardsmen, quietly inserted to document and close the camps before they can be implemented en masse.]]phone app.
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