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* AdaptationalJerkass: Ron is a cheating bastard who later gets killed by a Death Eater.
* AdaptationalVillainy:
** Lavender Brown of all people becomes a Death Eater. Needless to say, Book!Lavender showed no such inclination.
** The Death Eaters themselves are subjected to this, since [[GratuitousRape apparently they're all serial rapists]]. Dolohov demonstrates this when he appears, then Draco reveals in an ALLCAPS rant in part two that they had massive rape parties at Malfoy Manor.
* AdaptationalVillainy:
** Lavender Brown of all people becomes a Death Eater. Needless to say, Book!Lavender showed no such inclination.
** The Death Eaters themselves are subjected to this, since [[GratuitousRape apparently they're all serial rapists]]. Dolohov demonstrates this when he appears, then Draco reveals in an ALLCAPS rant in part two that they had massive rape parties at Malfoy Manor.
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* PrettyFlyForAWhiteGuy: Neville Longbottom performs Music/{{BoB}}'s rap from the song "Airplanes". The audience initially reacts by staring at him "like he had just sprout''(sic)'' three heads", but they quickly warm up to his performance.
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* PrettyFlyForAWhiteGuy: Neville Longbottom performs Music/{{BoB}}'s Music/{{BoB|Rapper}}'s rap from the song "Airplanes". The audience initially reacts by staring at him "like he had just sprout''(sic)'' three heads", but they quickly warm up to his performance.
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* ObviousBeta: Those parts of the fic that aren't copy-pasted song lyrics appear to be somewhere between an outline and a first draft, making it more of an Obvious Pre-Alpha.
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''[[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6147425/1/Hemiones_Talent Hermione's Talent]]'' by hotttopicgirl is a Literature/HarryPotter fanfic in which, according to the summary, Hermione demonstrates her titular talent of [[SongFic singing]] (!) to prove that [[FantasticRacism Muggles can be just as good as wizards]]. Then the angst lands.
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''[[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6147425/1/Hemiones_Talent Hermione's Talent]]'' by hotttopicgirl is a Literature/HarryPotter ''Literature/HarryPotter'' fanfic in which, according to the summary, Hermione demonstrates her titular talent of [[SongFic singing]] (!) to prove that [[FantasticRacism Muggles can be just as good as wizards]]. Then the angst lands.
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* SoundtrackDissonance: None of the songs are a particularly good fit for anything to do with Harry Potter.
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* SoundtrackDissonance: None of the songs are a particularly good fit for anything to do with Harry Potter.''Harry Potter''.
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%%* AlphaBitch: This fic's version of Hermione is one. [[OutOfCharacter Yes.]]
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%%* AlphaBitch: This fic's version of Hermione is one. [[OutOfCharacter Yes.]]Yes]].
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* IfICantHaveYou: "If I can't have you, neither can that ferret," Ron to Hermione
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* IfICantHaveYou: "If I can't have you, neither can that ferret," Ron to HermioneHermione.
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* NoIndoorVoice: Hermione, Ron and Lavender hold entire conversations in ALLCAPS.
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* NoIndoorVoice: Hermione, Ron and Lavender hold have entire conversations in ALLCAPS.
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* CreatorsCultureCarryover: Even aside from the anachronisms, a lot of the musical choices are not well known in the UK. To say nothing of how the characters talk.
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* WeAllLiveInAmerica: Even aside from the anachronisms, a lot of the musical choices are not well known in the UK. To say nothing of how the characters talk.
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* LampshadeHanging: Neville notes that people in-universe are surprised by him rapping. As are people out-of-universe.
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* LampshadeHanging: Neville notes that people in-universe are surprised by him rapping. As are people out-of-universe.
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* MoodWhiplash: As the [[http://szaleniec1000.livejournal.com/59699.html review]] put it: "You don't get to be all Hot Topic brand mock-edgy teen drama complete with kewl soundtrack and rapping Neville for seventeen chapters and then drop a completely unforeshadowed ''graphic rape scene'' on the reader, not even if the mock-edgy teen drama uses more F-words than I do."
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* SoundtrackDissonance: Perhaps best epitomised by [[http://wtffanfiction.tumblr.com/post/29153709861/fandom-harry-potter-now-ms-granger-shall-be this]] [=WTFFanfiction=] post, but none of the songs are a particularly good fit for anything to do with Harry Potter.
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* SoundtrackDissonance: Perhaps best epitomised by [[http://wtffanfiction.tumblr.com/post/29153709861/fandom-harry-potter-now-ms-granger-shall-be this]] [=WTFFanfiction=] post, but none None of the songs are a particularly good fit for anything to do with Harry Potter.
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* LampshadeHanging: The author notes that people in-universe are surprised by Neville rapping. As are people out-of-universe.
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* LampshadeHanging: The author Neville notes that people in-universe are surprised by Neville him rapping. As are people out-of-universe.
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* ObligatorySwearing: Hermione, who doesn't say anything stronger than "arse" in canon and that was her equivalent of a PrecisionFStrike, is now saying "fuck" every other word.
* ObviousBeta: Those parts of the fic that aren't copy-pasted from azlyrics.com appear to be somewhere between an outline and a first draft, making it more of an Obvious Pre-Alpha.
* ObviousBeta: Those parts of the fic that aren't copy-pasted from azlyrics.com appear to be somewhere between an outline and a first draft, making it more of an Obvious Pre-Alpha.
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* ObligatorySwearing: Hermione, who doesn't say anything stronger than "arse" in canon and that was her equivalent of a PrecisionFStrike, canon, is now saying "fuck" every other word.
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* ObviousBeta: Those parts of the fic that aren't copy-pastedfrom azlyrics.com song lyrics appear to be somewhere between an outline and a first draft, making it more of an Obvious Pre-Alpha.
* ObviousBeta: Those parts of the fic that aren't copy-pasted
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* PrettyFlyForAWhiteGuy: Neville. Yes, ''Neville''.
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* PrettyFlyForAWhiteGuy: Neville. Yes, ''Neville''.Neville Longbottom performs Music/{{BoB}}'s rap from the song "Airplanes". The audience initially reacts by staring at him "like he had just sprout''(sic)'' three heads", but they quickly warm up to his performance.
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* PresentDayPast: ''None'' of the songs Hermione sings would have been released during her time at Hogwarts. In fact, some of the artists (e.g. Music/{{Paramore}}) would not exist for a few more years.
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* PresentDayPast: ''None'' of ''Harry Potter'' is set in the 90s. All the songs Hermione sings were released in the late 2000s, a full decade after she would have been released during her time at Hogwarts. In fact, some of the artists (e.g. Music/{{Paramore}}) would not exist for a few more years.graduated from Hogwarts.
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* WeAllLiveInAmerica: Even aside from the anachronism, a lot of the musical choices are not well known in the UK. To say nothing of how the characters talk.
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* WeAllLiveInAmerica: Even aside from the anachronism, anachronisms, a lot of the musical choices are not well known in the UK. To say nothing of how the characters talk.
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* AbsentAnimalCompanion: Draco buys Hermione a kitten named Merlin to replace Crookshanks, but he only appears in the scene where he's introduced.
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* KarmaHoudini: Dolohov, via WhatHappenedToTheMouse.
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* LifetimeMovieOfTheWeek: In Potterfic form.
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* PresentDayPast: Again,''none'' of the songs Hermione sings would have been released during her time at Hogwarts. In fact, some of the artists (e.g. Music/{{Paramore}}) would not exist for a few more years.
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* ProductPlacement: The author's username.
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* PresentDayPast: Again,''none'' ''None'' of the songs Hermione sings would have been released during her time at Hogwarts. In fact, some of the artists (e.g. Music/{{Paramore}}) would not exist for a few more years.
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* RedemptionEqualsDeath: Ron's death is presented as this in-universe.
* ReplacementGoldfish: Draco buys Merlin for Hermione to replace Crookshanks, but he only appears in the scene where he's introduced.
* ReplacementGoldfish: Draco buys Merlin for Hermione to replace Crookshanks, but he only appears in the scene where he's introduced.
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* ReplacementGoldfish: Draco buys Merlin for Hermione to replace Crookshanks, but he only appears in the scene where he's introduced.
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* SlutShaming: Hermione tells Lavender that she's worse than Ron, even though ''he's'' the one who actually betrayed her, because she's a "slut". Lovely.
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* SongFic: Several times over.
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* SlutShaming: Hermione tells Lavender that she's worse than Ron, even though ''he's'' the one who actually betrayed cheated on her, because she's a "slut". Lovely.
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* UnusuallyUninterestingSight: How Harry and Ginny react (or rather, don't react) to Hermione dating Draco.
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* UnusuallyUninterestingSight: How Harry and Ginny react (or rather, don't react) to think it's unusual that Hermione is dating Draco.
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* WhatHappenedToTheMouse: Lavender becomes a Death Eater (!) but then disappears from the story. As does Dolohov after Draco punches him. Merlin the [[ReplacementGoldfish Replacement Cat]] appears in all of one scene.
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* WhatHappenedToTheMouse: WhatHappenedToTheMouse:
** Lavender becomes a Death Eater(!) but then disappears from the story. As does story.
** The Death Eater Dolohov vanishes after Draco puncheshim. him.
** Merlin the[[ReplacementGoldfish Replacement Cat]] kitten only appears in all of one scene.the scene where he's initially given to Hermione.
** Lavender becomes a Death Eater
** The Death Eater Dolohov vanishes after Draco punches
** Merlin the