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* OurElvesAreBetter: The Wood Elf variety. Mostly anecdotal, since the party only encounters a few in the flesh.
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** The orcs tend to be this as well, though without the lofty Tygrin concepts of honor. They're more like [[ThreeHundred [[Film/ThreeHundred 300's spartans]].
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The story is definitely an XMeetsY: JustForFun/XMeetsY: ComicBooks meets [=WoW=]. Hopefully I disguise it enough that it's more of an homage with original elements than a rip off. Hopefully.
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It was around this time that I read the first, and maybe even the second (memory is a little jumbled) books of the Literature/InheritanceCycle, and I put ''Eragon'' down and said, "shit, I can do better than that". So I tried. I based the story off of my WoW character and my best in game friend. The character is female (I'm not, hey I hit the random button and took what it gave me) as was the other character (and player). We started about the same time, joined the same guild, leveled together, dungeon crawled together, PvPed together, and had about the same play schedule. Since this was an RP server (Again, I hit a random button), people would joke that these characters are sisters. And that's how it started...
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It was around this time that I read the first, and maybe even the second (memory is a little jumbled) books of the Literature/InheritanceCycle, and I put ''Eragon'' down and said, "shit, I can do better than that". So I tried. I based the story off of my WoW [=WoW=] character and my best in game friend. The character is female (I'm not, hey I hit the random button and took what it gave me) as was the other character (and player). We started about the same time, joined the same guild, leveled together, dungeon crawled together, PvPed together, and had about the same play schedule. Since this was an RP server (Again, I hit a random button), people would joke that these characters are sisters. And that's how it started...
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The story is definitely an XMeetsY: ComicBooks meets WoW.[=WoW=]. Hopefully I disguise it enough that it's more of an homage with original elements than a rip off. Hopefully.
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** Kilgorath His race is a shout out...okay mabe even a blatant rip-off of the [[Videogame/WingCommander Kilrathi]]. His inspiration is primarily The Beast from X-Men with the traditions of unarmed warrior monks influencing his fighting style. He isn't as learned as Dr. [=McCoy=], but he is something of a WarriorPoet, borrowed from [[LookingForGroup Krunch Bloodrage]]. He keeps the sisters minds to task and mentors them.
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** Kilgorath His race is a shout out...okay mabe even a blatant rip-off of the [[Videogame/WingCommander Kilrathi]]. His inspiration is primarily The Beast from X-Men with the traditions of unarmed warrior monks influencing his fighting style. He isn't as learned as Dr. [=McCoy=], but he is something of a WarriorPoet, borrowed from [[LookingForGroup [[Webcomic/LookingForGroup Krunch Bloodrage]]. He keeps the sisters minds to task and mentors them.
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* CompleteMonster: Ryssia's husband, Ylvan Taloncrest. Making him an AssholeVictim when Ryssia finally snaps and kills him.
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* HeroicSociopath: Ryssia. Having snuck onto a buccaneer ship and killed her way onto the crew (through blind luck, though she receives proper training later on) Ryssia's morality is [[BlackAndGrayMorality shaded]] at best. She served as a pirate for almost ten years before she was reunited with her sister.
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* HeroicSociopath: Ryssia. Having snuck onto a buccaneer ship and killed her way onto the crew (through blind luck, though she receives proper training later on) Ryssia's morality is [[BlackAndGrayMorality shaded]] at best. She served as a pirate for almost ten GambitRoulette: [[spoiler: Larkin Hendel has spent 2000 years planning his. Some of the highlights, in chronological order: engineering the extermination of the orcs (they got better, because he wanted them to) imprisoning the most powerful entity (a big fuck-off dragon) in the world until he had a plan in place to manipulate him and steal his power, engineering a bio-plague which triggered a racial defense to put the rest of the dragons into hibernation so they could not oppose him, creating [[{{Unobtanium}} Draconium]] a [[GameBreaker nigh indestructible metal]] with which he arms his EliteMooks and constructs the Dread Knight, an armored colossus of unbelievable power. Then he manipulates the [[TitleDrop bloodline]] of a forgotten royal line which has claim to an InfinityPlusOneSword that was designed to kill gods! His endgame begins by starting a civil war to weaken the two most powerful nations on the continent. And that's all before she was reunited the book starts (prequels are possible). In the books his plan has come to fruition by luring out the only remaining powerful army in the land by promising to help then with her sister. a coup. The heroes wind up killing them, but if they hadn't he would have. It survives unforeseen contact with his enemies.]]
* SociopathicHero: Ryssia. Having snuck onto a buccaneer ship and killed her way onto the crew (through blind luck, though she receives proper training later on) Ryssia's morality is [[BlackAndGrayMorality shaded]] at best. She served as a pirate for almost ten years before she was reunited with her sister.
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* XanatosGambit: [[spoiler: Larkin Hendel has spent 2000 years planning his. Some of the highlights, in chronological order: engineering the extermination of the orcs (they got better, because he wanted them to) imprisoning the most powerful entity (a big fuck-off dragon) in the world until he had a plan in place to manipulate him and steal his power, engineering a bio-plague which triggered a racial defense to put the rest of the dragons into hibernation so they could not oppose him, creating [[{{Unobtanium}} Draconium]] a [[GameBreaker nigh indestructible metal]] with which he arms his EliteMooks and constructs the Dread Knight, an armored colossus of unbelievable power. Then he manipulates the [[TitleDrop bloodline]] of a forgotten royal line which has claim to an InfinityPlusOneSword that was designed to kill gods! His endgame begins by starting a civil war to weaken the two most powerful nations on the continent. And that's all before the book starts (I may write prequels). In the books his plan has come to fruition by luring out the only remaining powerful army in the land by promising to help then with a coup. The heroes wind up killing them, but if they hadn't he would have. Like any good Xanatos Gambit, his plan survives unforeseen contact with his enemies.]]
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My own crack at High Fantasy. Basically, circa 2005 I wanna say, my mother became very ill and nearly died from a rare illness. No snarky doctor with a cane or a vicodin addiction was handy, so her recovery took place in real time instead of TV time. I quit my job and moved back home to take care of her (her family is scattered around the country, and my father died when I was sixteen, she has no other children, I was all she had). I spent the better part of two years pulling 20-48 hour days caring for her. And let's face it, you can only play so much X-Box before your mind starts turning to Jell-O.
It was around this time that I read the first, and maybe even the second (memory is a little jumbled) books of the Literature/InheritanceCycle, and I put ''Eragon'' down and said, "shit, I can do better than that". So I tried. I based the story off of my WoW character and my best in game friend. The character is female (I'm not, hey I hit the random button and took what it gave me) as was the other character (and player). We started about the same time, joined the same guild, leveled together, dungeon crawled together, PvPed together, and had about the same play schedule. Since this was an RP server (Again, I hit a random button), people would joke that these characters are sisters. And that's how it started...
The first novel is complete and publishing is, well, going as smoothly as an unknown author can get it to go. I've heard some good things, and I keep shining it up. The second novel is half done, put on hold because I returned to school to change careers (I was a computer tech, but living in a small area and not desiring to leave it, the recession has made finding work in the field a chore), until this summer when I anticipate completing it.
I do confess without apology, comic books being my favorite medium, that their influence can be felt in the characters.
The story is definitely an XMeetsY: ComicBooks meets WoW. Hopefully I disguise it enough that it's more of an homage with original elements than a rip off. Hopefully.
Some of these tropes are about where I plan to take the series (four books) as a whole, and as such are spoilers and subject to change. When/if it's ever published, well, I'll cross that bridge then :)
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!!This series of books provides examples of:
* ActionGirl: Aeldra Delvorne
* AMechByAnyOtherName: The Dread Knight is a small scale one. It's not a HumongousMecha, standing only 8 feet tall, but it's definitely mech like.
* AppliedPhlebotinum: The basis for much of the technology. Borders on MadeOfPhlebotinum in some cases.
* ArrangedMarriage: Being of noble birth, both sisters had planned marriages in the works. Ryssia's went through, Aeldra's was canceled.
* AscendToAHigherPlaneOfExistence: Combined with YouKillItYouBoughtIt, a mortal can replace a god if they can [[DefeatingTheUndefeatable kill them.]]
* BigBad: [[spoiler: Larkin Hendel. A [[BodySurf body surfing]] [[{{Immortality}} immortal]] ChessMaster running an elaborate XanatosGambit.]]
* BodyHorror: The Dreadknight's armored exoskeleton is '''fused to its operators body'''.
* CompleteMonster: Ryssia's husband, Ylvan Taloncrest. Making him an AssholeVictim when Ryssia finally snaps and kills him.
* CursedWithAwesome: [[spoiler: Larkin Hendel. Once upon a time he was a powerful archmage who challenged the human god of death in a bid to replace him (which is possible with the gods of this world). He lost and the god of death punished him to live until he learned to properly respect the gods. He ''intended'' for Hendel to live this life in an increasingly aging and enfeebling body until he learned humility. Instead he learned to BodySurf and has spent about 2000 years planning his rematch.]]
* DarkActionGirl: Ryssia Delvorne
* DrivenToSuicide: Aeldra's fiancee when the ArrangedMarriage is canceled.
* Expy: I admit to several. The characters are a salmagundi of comic book characters with fantasy elements, random brain bits and my own invention. The story is my own, as much as any story can be.
** Ryssia Delvorne has elements of Batman, Wolverine, Sarah Walker, and The Dread Pirate Roberts. She's had a tragic past that forced her to take extreme measures to survive and prosper.
** Aeldra Delvorne is more altruistic. She has elements of Superman and Captain America in that regard. She will kill as necessary but she has a moral code. She doesn't kill innocents, the unarmed, etc. Frequently tosses WhatTheHellHero to her older sister.
** Kilgorath His race is a shout out...okay mabe even a blatant rip-off of the [[Videogame/WingCommander Kilrathi]]. His inspiration is primarily The Beast from X-Men with the traditions of unarmed warrior monks influencing his fighting style. He isn't as learned as Dr. [=McCoy=], but he is something of a WarriorPoet, borrowed from [[LookingForGroup Krunch Bloodrage]]. He keeps the sisters minds to task and mentors them.
** Rynn Kendar. Sorceror, inventer. Kind of Reed Richards meets Harry Potter.
* HeroicSociopath: Ryssia. Having snuck onto a buccaneer ship and killed her way onto the crew (through blind luck, though she receives proper training later on) Ryssia's morality is [[BlackAndGrayMorality shaded]] at best. She served as a pirate for almost ten years before she was reunited with her sister.
* LukeIAmYourFather: [[spoiler: Larkin Hendel is Rynn Kendar's father.]] Father and son are aware of the relationship, but the revelation has an negative effect on the latter's LoveInterest.
* MadScientist: Larkin Hendel is the villainous version. [[spoiler: His son]] Rynn Kendar is a more benevolent example. Both of them fuse magic and science for a healthy does of AWizardDidIt AppliedPhlebotinum.
* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: Ryssia killes her husband, a very bad man who spent his free time torturing and raping her. However murdering him lets Larkin Hendel take power. His first act is to sell Ryssia into an overseas harem. Then he implicates the whole Delvorne family in the murder and orders their death. Aeldra's father is killed while she and her mother escape to exile.
** This further leads to the series of events which gets Aeldra and Ryssia's mother killed.
** And the enslavement of their hometown.
* NotQuiteDead: Ryssia. Her family was told she was caught red-handed killing her husband and killed on the spot, but she was actually sold into a harem.
** [[spoiler: Ylvan Taloncrest. Ryssia herself said she thought she killed him, but he was barely alive when she was caught in the midst of torturing him. Larkin Hendel instead [[WeCanRebuildHim rebuilds him]] into a BodyHorror MightyGlacier [[AMechByAnyOtherName Dread Knight]]]].
** Tallangar
** [[spoiler: Goldenbane]]
** Lets face it, since this is written by a comic book fan, this happens a lot. Ryssia [[LampshadeHanging lampshades it]] in book two.
* OurDwarvesAreAllTheSame: Subterranean? Check. Strong? Check. Masters artificers of metal and stone? Check. Boisterous? Check. Alcoholic? Check. Bearded? Check.
* OurElvesAreBetter: The Wood Elf variety. Mostly anecdotal, since the party only encounters a few in the flesh.
* ProudWarriorRaceGuy: Kilgorath. The Tygrin culture is largely based on an (admittedly) westernized cinematic romanticized version of Samurai culture.
** The orcs tend to be this as well, though without the lofty Tygrin concepts of honor. They're more like [[ThreeHundred 300's spartans]].
* SiblingYinYang: Aeldra and Ryssia. To be fair they've been apart for ten years, Aeldra has been living as a soldier, Ryssia as an assassin. Also, Aeldra wasn't aware of the circumstances which led her sister to kill her husband, so she initially blames Ryssia for the death of their parents and her finacee.
* SpyCatsuit: Ryssia wears an armored version.
* XanatosGambit: [[spoiler: Larkin Hendel has spent 2000 years planning his. Some of the highlights, in chronological order: engineering the extermination of the orcs (they got better, because he wanted them to) imprisoning the most powerful entity (a big fuck-off dragon) in the world until he had a plan in place to manipulate him and steal his power, engineering a bio-plague which triggered a racial defense to put the rest of the dragons into hibernation so they could not oppose him, creating [[{{Unobtanium}} Draconium]] a [[GameBreaker nigh indestructible metal]] with which he arms his EliteMooks and constructs the Dread Knight, an armored colossus of unbelievable power. Then he manipulates the [[TitleDrop bloodline]] of a forgotten royal line which has claim to an InfinityPlusOneSword that was designed to kill gods! His endgame begins by starting a civil war to weaken the two most powerful nations on the continent. And that's all before the book starts (I may write prequels). In the books his plan has come to fruition by luring out the only remaining powerful army in the land by promising to help then with a coup. The heroes wind up killing them, but if they hadn't he would have. Like any good Xanatos Gambit, his plan survives unforeseen contact with his enemies.]]
It was around this time that I read the first, and maybe even the second (memory is a little jumbled) books of the Literature/InheritanceCycle, and I put ''Eragon'' down and said, "shit, I can do better than that". So I tried. I based the story off of my WoW character and my best in game friend. The character is female (I'm not, hey I hit the random button and took what it gave me) as was the other character (and player). We started about the same time, joined the same guild, leveled together, dungeon crawled together, PvPed together, and had about the same play schedule. Since this was an RP server (Again, I hit a random button), people would joke that these characters are sisters. And that's how it started...
The first novel is complete and publishing is, well, going as smoothly as an unknown author can get it to go. I've heard some good things, and I keep shining it up. The second novel is half done, put on hold because I returned to school to change careers (I was a computer tech, but living in a small area and not desiring to leave it, the recession has made finding work in the field a chore), until this summer when I anticipate completing it.
I do confess without apology, comic books being my favorite medium, that their influence can be felt in the characters.
The story is definitely an XMeetsY: ComicBooks meets WoW. Hopefully I disguise it enough that it's more of an homage with original elements than a rip off. Hopefully.
Some of these tropes are about where I plan to take the series (four books) as a whole, and as such are spoilers and subject to change. When/if it's ever published, well, I'll cross that bridge then :)
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!!This series of books provides examples of:
* ActionGirl: Aeldra Delvorne
* AMechByAnyOtherName: The Dread Knight is a small scale one. It's not a HumongousMecha, standing only 8 feet tall, but it's definitely mech like.
* AppliedPhlebotinum: The basis for much of the technology. Borders on MadeOfPhlebotinum in some cases.
* ArrangedMarriage: Being of noble birth, both sisters had planned marriages in the works. Ryssia's went through, Aeldra's was canceled.
* AscendToAHigherPlaneOfExistence: Combined with YouKillItYouBoughtIt, a mortal can replace a god if they can [[DefeatingTheUndefeatable kill them.]]
* BigBad: [[spoiler: Larkin Hendel. A [[BodySurf body surfing]] [[{{Immortality}} immortal]] ChessMaster running an elaborate XanatosGambit.]]
* BodyHorror: The Dreadknight's armored exoskeleton is '''fused to its operators body'''.
* CompleteMonster: Ryssia's husband, Ylvan Taloncrest. Making him an AssholeVictim when Ryssia finally snaps and kills him.
* CursedWithAwesome: [[spoiler: Larkin Hendel. Once upon a time he was a powerful archmage who challenged the human god of death in a bid to replace him (which is possible with the gods of this world). He lost and the god of death punished him to live until he learned to properly respect the gods. He ''intended'' for Hendel to live this life in an increasingly aging and enfeebling body until he learned humility. Instead he learned to BodySurf and has spent about 2000 years planning his rematch.]]
* DarkActionGirl: Ryssia Delvorne
* DrivenToSuicide: Aeldra's fiancee when the ArrangedMarriage is canceled.
* Expy: I admit to several. The characters are a salmagundi of comic book characters with fantasy elements, random brain bits and my own invention. The story is my own, as much as any story can be.
** Ryssia Delvorne has elements of Batman, Wolverine, Sarah Walker, and The Dread Pirate Roberts. She's had a tragic past that forced her to take extreme measures to survive and prosper.
** Aeldra Delvorne is more altruistic. She has elements of Superman and Captain America in that regard. She will kill as necessary but she has a moral code. She doesn't kill innocents, the unarmed, etc. Frequently tosses WhatTheHellHero to her older sister.
** Kilgorath His race is a shout out...okay mabe even a blatant rip-off of the [[Videogame/WingCommander Kilrathi]]. His inspiration is primarily The Beast from X-Men with the traditions of unarmed warrior monks influencing his fighting style. He isn't as learned as Dr. [=McCoy=], but he is something of a WarriorPoet, borrowed from [[LookingForGroup Krunch Bloodrage]]. He keeps the sisters minds to task and mentors them.
** Rynn Kendar. Sorceror, inventer. Kind of Reed Richards meets Harry Potter.
* HeroicSociopath: Ryssia. Having snuck onto a buccaneer ship and killed her way onto the crew (through blind luck, though she receives proper training later on) Ryssia's morality is [[BlackAndGrayMorality shaded]] at best. She served as a pirate for almost ten years before she was reunited with her sister.
* LukeIAmYourFather: [[spoiler: Larkin Hendel is Rynn Kendar's father.]] Father and son are aware of the relationship, but the revelation has an negative effect on the latter's LoveInterest.
* MadScientist: Larkin Hendel is the villainous version. [[spoiler: His son]] Rynn Kendar is a more benevolent example. Both of them fuse magic and science for a healthy does of AWizardDidIt AppliedPhlebotinum.
* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: Ryssia killes her husband, a very bad man who spent his free time torturing and raping her. However murdering him lets Larkin Hendel take power. His first act is to sell Ryssia into an overseas harem. Then he implicates the whole Delvorne family in the murder and orders their death. Aeldra's father is killed while she and her mother escape to exile.
** This further leads to the series of events which gets Aeldra and Ryssia's mother killed.
** And the enslavement of their hometown.
* NotQuiteDead: Ryssia. Her family was told she was caught red-handed killing her husband and killed on the spot, but she was actually sold into a harem.
** [[spoiler: Ylvan Taloncrest. Ryssia herself said she thought she killed him, but he was barely alive when she was caught in the midst of torturing him. Larkin Hendel instead [[WeCanRebuildHim rebuilds him]] into a BodyHorror MightyGlacier [[AMechByAnyOtherName Dread Knight]]]].
** Tallangar
** [[spoiler: Goldenbane]]
** Lets face it, since this is written by a comic book fan, this happens a lot. Ryssia [[LampshadeHanging lampshades it]] in book two.
* OurDwarvesAreAllTheSame: Subterranean? Check. Strong? Check. Masters artificers of metal and stone? Check. Boisterous? Check. Alcoholic? Check. Bearded? Check.
* OurElvesAreBetter: The Wood Elf variety. Mostly anecdotal, since the party only encounters a few in the flesh.
* ProudWarriorRaceGuy: Kilgorath. The Tygrin culture is largely based on an (admittedly) westernized cinematic romanticized version of Samurai culture.
** The orcs tend to be this as well, though without the lofty Tygrin concepts of honor. They're more like [[ThreeHundred 300's spartans]].
* SiblingYinYang: Aeldra and Ryssia. To be fair they've been apart for ten years, Aeldra has been living as a soldier, Ryssia as an assassin. Also, Aeldra wasn't aware of the circumstances which led her sister to kill her husband, so she initially blames Ryssia for the death of their parents and her finacee.
* SpyCatsuit: Ryssia wears an armored version.
* XanatosGambit: [[spoiler: Larkin Hendel has spent 2000 years planning his. Some of the highlights, in chronological order: engineering the extermination of the orcs (they got better, because he wanted them to) imprisoning the most powerful entity (a big fuck-off dragon) in the world until he had a plan in place to manipulate him and steal his power, engineering a bio-plague which triggered a racial defense to put the rest of the dragons into hibernation so they could not oppose him, creating [[{{Unobtanium}} Draconium]] a [[GameBreaker nigh indestructible metal]] with which he arms his EliteMooks and constructs the Dread Knight, an armored colossus of unbelievable power. Then he manipulates the [[TitleDrop bloodline]] of a forgotten royal line which has claim to an InfinityPlusOneSword that was designed to kill gods! His endgame begins by starting a civil war to weaken the two most powerful nations on the continent. And that's all before the book starts (I may write prequels). In the books his plan has come to fruition by luring out the only remaining powerful army in the land by promising to help then with a coup. The heroes wind up killing them, but if they hadn't he would have. Like any good Xanatos Gambit, his plan survives unforeseen contact with his enemies.]]
