Fanfic Shameless
I admit I did not barely read a single book the author made, except for the recent one surrounding Mass Effect 3. To be honest, 95% or more of dialogue is blatantly plagiarizing from the game, and it fits more of a novelization of M.E.3. Sure there are some chapters that had these super-Reapers engaging other realities and have their self-contained unique stories, but the author shamelessly doesn't diverge anything from canon and has no creativity to create their own dialogues or story-telling. So it isn't worth a penny to read this, nor I will be reading the other stories of this series [removed dig at author - Septimus Heap]
FanFic What happens when you write fix fic a bad one at that.
Note this is an update of a review that I posted some time ago that I felt was substandard.
Teanas travel to me is a fix fic and a bad one at that. let's start with power. Characters are given power ups for no justifiably reason the best example would be that Teana has as a Sharingan the author attempt to justify it but contradicts canon witch latter on becomes Mangekyō. Kaede Fuyuo somehow has the Dead Bone Pulse blood line for no reason and several characters are Jinchūriki again no reason and not justified. There are more cases like this but you should get the point. Teana comes off as a Mary sue. The first example would be she found a forerunner ship on a planet that it has no right to be on.
The second is her reaction when the ship in question performs several modifications on her body similar to what you would find in HALO it also given her an extra bust size for no reason other than the pointless fanservices. The author has demonstrated no knowledge on military law and elevates the UNSC to a group of sues to.
That is all I am willing to say for now the longer I type the more grammar errors I make. I do at least recommend you read it only to make your own opinion.
FanFic Disappointing
I'm going to be honest, I used to enjoy these fics a lot more. When the author actually tries, they can be pretty good. It's just that... Well, let's see.
First off, there are a lot of extraneous details. The books that introduce the RWBY, Pretty Cure, and Kill la Kill characters are are decent, but they are thrown into the mix without any prior planning, and ultimately have no effect on the plot. The author even admitted that they had simply discovered and enjoyed the later two and just decided to introduce them.
Second, there's the matter of Teana herself. In canon, Teana's magical capabilities are on the weaker end of the spectrum (it's why she is taught Starlight Breaker, which bypasses this weakness). It makes her battles more interesting—she doesn't just fight physically, she outsmarts and traps her enemies. Soooo, what to do but give her the Sharingan? And make her half-Saiyan? And give her loads and LOADS of magical power? I initially thought any 'Mary Sue-ness' was mitigated by the fact that she acknowledged that she was wrong in the matters of Nanoha's training. Except, she isn't. Nanoha's training program is poorly conceived. So Teana is still in the right.
Oh, and it's not just Teana—power ups for everybody! Subaru is a jinchuuriki! Homura can use variations of Kakashi's jutsu, I forget what it's name is. If the author ever read Batman, they would give Bruce Wayne the Rinnegan to make things more interesting. It wouldn't be too bad if they held back some, but these people are merciless.Teana actually murders a prisoner to get another one to talk.
And let's not even get into the Fanservice. One of the first things to happen in the series? A Halo ship gives Teana a bigger bust. I am not kidding. And then we have the huge web of polyamorous relationships that encompass most of the female cast and maybe four or five of the males. And THEN there's the DIAPERS. Why the diapers? Why? It doesn't serve the plot, it doesn't... why.
That's not to say it's all bad. The action is somewhat enjoyable if you ignore (or fail to notice) the glaring issues. That's the problem—they're hard to miss.