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The interest in the books seems to have more to do with them \\\"revitalizing\\\" people\\\'s sex lives than good writing, but what I\\\'ve seen hasn\\\'t been impressive. I\\\'m kinda wondering if the people I\\\'ve seen going on about how inventive and daring it is and such have actually trolled around on the internet. Or even checked out any of a number of \\\"erotic\\\" publishers. If I can make a suggestion, check out the Brides of the Kindred series. Has the steamy bits but the characters are neither bland nor contemptable, the writing is good, and it has a good storyline. I don\\\'t want to get flagged, but I think everybody knows about a certain site online they could look up if they don\\\'t want to pay for an erotic story. Yes, a lot of it is just as bad as SoG but some of the stories are actually very good and would remain so even if all the sex scenes were removed or handled as a descretion shot.
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The interest in the books seems to have more to do with them \\\"revitalizing\\\" people\\\'s sex lives than good writing, but what I\\\'ve seen hasn\\\'t been impressive. I\\\'m kinda wondering if the people I\\\'ve seen going on about how inventive and daring it is and such have actually trolled around on the internet. Or even checked out any of a number of \\\"erotic\\\" publishers. If I can make a suggestion, check out the Brides of the Kindred series. Has the steamy bits but the characters are neither bland nor contemptable, the writing is good, and it has a good storyline. I don\\\'t want to get flagged, but I think everybody knows about a certain site online they could look up if they don\\\'t want to pay. Yes, a lot of it is just as bad as SoG but some of the stories are actually very good and would remain so even if all the sex scenes were removed or handled as a descretion shot.
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And I would like to say, My God the writing is horrible. Seriously, it\'s nearly painful to read through. As a tip to everyone out there, first person, present tense is a really difficult thing to pull off. And there\'s a reason most books are written in the past tense. The only good example I can think of where is was pulled off was in Witches Inc., and in that the tense had a point as the POV character had amnesia.
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And I would like to say, My God the writing is horrible. Seriously, it\\\'s nearly painful to read through. As a tip to everyone out there, first person, present tense is a really difficult thing to pull off. There\\\'s a reason most books are written in the past tense. The only good example I can think of where it was pulled off was in Witches Inc., and in that the tense had a point as the POV character had amnesia.
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The interest in the books seems to have more to do with them \\\"revitalizing\\\" people\\\'s sex lives than good writing, but what I\\\'ve seen hasn\\\'t been impressive. I\\\'m kinda wondering if the people I\\\'ve seen going on about how inventive and daring it is and such have actually trolled around on the internet. Or even checked out any of a number of \\\"erotic\\\" publishers. If I can make a suggestion, check out the Brides of the Kindred series. Has the steamy bits but the characters are neither bland nor contemptable, the writing is good, and it has a good storyline. Heck, if you want something for free just go over to Literotica. A good amount of it is on the same level as Shades of Grey, but just skim through stories with a red H beside them and it shouldn\\\'t take too long to find something that is actually publish worthy.
