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This reads like review-style analysis rather than a pair of example works. Needs to be re-written as two examples with the works de-potholed and in italics, with separated details of how the trope is used in the story. Saying they are examples of another trope again doesn\'t really substitute for specifics, particularly when the reader isn\'t assumed to necessarily have read the work. Please see HowToWriteAnExample for more.
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This reads like review-style commentary rather than a pair of example works. Needs to be re-written as two examples with the works de-potholed and in italics, with separated details of how the trope is used in the story. Saying they are examples of another trope again doesn\\\'t really substitute for specifics, particularly when the reader isn\\\'t assumed to necessarily have read the work. Please see HowToWriteAnExample for more.
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This reads like review-style analysis rather than a pair of example works. Needs to be re-written as two examples with the works de-potholed and in italics, with separated details of how these characters work in terms of the trope. Saying they are examples of another trope again doesn\'t really substitute for specifics. Please see HowToWriteAnExample for more.
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This reads like review-style analysis rather than a pair of example works. Needs to be re-written as two examples with the works de-potholed and in italics, with separated details of how the trope is used in the story. Saying they are examples of another trope again doesn\\\'t really substitute for specifics, particularly when the reader isn\\\'t assumed to necessarily have read the work. Please see HowToWriteAnExample for more.
