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If you open your entry saying it\'s played, I believe it\'s redundant to say, \
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If you open your entry saying it\\\'s played with, I believe it\\\'s redundant to say, \\\"So we aren\\\'t dealing with a standard example of the trope\\\" in the third sentence. Also, at this point, it sounds like it\\\'s a non-standard example because it involves a magic house.
This, \\\"magically heal up of their own accord before anyone else can see them\\\" is speculative. It\\\'s possible, and I myself think so -- but the movie doesn\\\'t show this. From this entry, one can easily get the impression that the movie shows the cracks healing, and Mirabel sees it.
Similarly, Alma being \\\"already aware that there have been cracks in the Casita before\\\" is not stated in the movie.
This, \\\"Alma finds it more important to hide the vulnerabilities of her family and their magic, than supporting Mirabel\\\" and next, \\\"Alma is willing to leave Mirabel confused and questioning what she saw to in order to preserve \\\"La Familia Madrigal\\\"\\\" say almost the same thing.
Your opening post in this discussion is rather well-structured, and the rewrite really isn\\\'t. I didn\\\'t expect this from you.
And a little thing: to me, it\\\'s odd to say Alma prays to Pedro: he\\\'s not a god or a saint or something. Do I miss something indicating it\\\'s really a prayer?
edit: added a missed preposition
This, \\\"magically heal up of their own accord before anyone else can see them\\\" is speculative. It\\\'s possible, and I myself think so -- but the movie doesn\\\'t show this. From this entry, one can easily get the impression that the movie shows the cracks healing, and Mirabel sees it.
Similarly, Alma being \\\"already aware that there have been cracks in the Casita before\\\" is not stated in the movie.
This, \\\"Alma finds it more important to hide the vulnerabilities of her family and their magic, than supporting Mirabel\\\" and next, \\\"Alma is willing to leave Mirabel confused and questioning what she saw to in order to preserve \\\"La Familia Madrigal\\\"\\\" say almost the same thing.
Your opening post in this discussion is rather well-structured, and the rewrite really isn\\\'t. I didn\\\'t expect this from you.
And a little thing: to me, it\\\'s odd to say Alma prays to Pedro: he\\\'s not a god or a saint or something. Do I miss something indicating it\\\'s really a prayer?
edit: added a missed preposition
