#2: Apr 23rd 2022 at 6:43:23 AM
In order:
1. No. If anything, the other cavemen would try and kill this fella on sight for this form alone.
2. No. Make it in the reverse. The beast-form is the true form and he transform into a "normal" human when the situation calls for it.
3. Too long, too detailed. Shorten it.
4. Why not medieval times instead? Modern era has been done so many times that the story risk to fade away in the masses if done in it. Try a different time period for diversity's sake.
5. Have his beast-mode be the real one, but the human-mind stuck in that form as contrast to its appearance.
6. Make it shorter and more consist. "Serve the cake and eat it, not paint it off on a canvas first before serving it."
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Hope this helps.
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