The Roleplaying Forum's GM and Player Critique Thread

You haven't read it, you don't get to say. *throws wrench*

I would love opinions on how I am handling my characters too. I don't want punctuation/grammar criticism nor I give you permission to do so. (sorry, but it's just redundant at this point ).

@tvtropesnoob

I would like interact with him a little more before giving a full review but I like him a lot so far .

edited 2nd Aug '14 3:58:07 PM by RPGLegend

"...I couldn't think of much else to do besides sitting and reading for those two weeks, alright! >.>"

Same with ye; I mean, you could put a tad more body language into your posts, but otherwise I can't really say anything good or bad. Character is a thing you get to see over a decent amount of time for the most part; what I have so far seems...like something I can't comment on from me not knowing her base character. >.> I haven't seen anything to break her image as the nice hero at least

edited 2nd Aug '14 5:05:48 PM by tvtropesnoob

Already fixed that . ARMANI isn't fat , sorry.

EDIT: thanks for the advice .

edited 2nd Aug '14 5:41:45 PM by RPGLegend

Hey guys, so how horrible am I?

(lel i'm so lacking in self esteem plox praise me)

(sersly gaise i need self assurance on how good i am laik, every 20 seconds)

@Lior Val: I think that fishing for compliments kind of defeats the purpose of this thread.

edited 2nd Aug '14 9:28:52 PM by FirockFinion

I'm pretty sure he was being ironic/coy, IE the switch into sillier language. Especially the over the top comment about every 20 seconds. Yup, that there is being hyperbolic for humor

edited 2nd Aug '14 9:31:19 PM by tvtropesnoob

Anyone got any criticism for me?

You seem to have a preference for a certain character archetype, so I think maybe trying to write something different might help expand your horizons, so to speak.

Thanks, that's a good point. I'm not very good at writing characters that are too different from me, I suppose. Thanks for the input!

Wait, the fact that I was joking wasn't obvious?

Waht?

Who uses "plox" "sersly gaise" and "laik" seriously?

What, do I look to you like Tommy Wiseau?

edited 3rd Aug '14 4:14:59 AM by LiorVal

Yes. Lemme critique you about that:

a) wash yourself, more, man. The actress in The Room complained all the time

b) Get a haircut

c) Have a better acted grin on your face

d) Seriously bro, all of your emotions are so plastic, take lessons on how to properly convey your emotions, you look almost like a very very poor actor

EDIT: Fuck you and your editting, it ruined my joke. =_=

edited 3rd Aug '14 4:14:07 AM by tvtropesnoob

Man, I look old for my age if I look like Tommy Wiseau.

Also, rather inhuman.

Opening myself to the dark realms of critique.

Trying to get a handle on what people here think of me but that's hampered by the fact I've been unable to join anything for quite some time.

Opening myself up to criticism, hopefully I would make use of it

This post was thumped by the Shillelagh of Whackingness

Huh?

Bah, I suck at counting. That was aimed at Bio.
EDIT: Bwuh, disregard.

edited 15th Aug '14 6:44:33 AM by desdendelle

Yeah, it did seem a bit weird to be called overly verbose when I've previously had people on my case for being too laconic.

I have never seen any of you role play.

You've brought your major problem, as I see it, yourself.

Ze major problem?

My posts wind up being too short. This is a problem for two reasons: One, because it makes it hard for people to react to because there's nothing there to do so, and Two because it slows up my posting rate because I struggle to find ways to expand what I've written to alleviate problem one, which eventually devolves into procrastination and I wind up falling off the metaphorical wagon.

Oh...

Well, are your posts short because you can't think of more to add? Because if that's the case, it might perhaps be better to PM a person in advance and work out what's gonna happen with him. I think.

edited 15th Aug '14 7:39:43 AM by joergenjetsam