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Do you ink or tablet-trace your line art at all? It looks like you're scanning in pencil, and that's never going to look very good. You also need some professional guidance on shapes and perspective, (in "the brothers (something)" the character in back is higher but larger than the characters in front which is not how perspective works) but those aren't too bad and I'm sure a how-to-draw-people-and-faces book or a few online guides could sort it out—it's already pretty clear what you're trying to communicate either way.
The biggest problem is that you're drawing seven lines for every one, and all of them are in pencil. You're going to have to reign in that impulse to quadruple back over everything, and I found that inking my drawings in fountain pen helped tremendously. Your pencil can still look like crap, just put a thin sheet of computer paper over something you've already drawn (but something you don't mind mussing a bit because it might bleed through, and if you can't see through it you can lay it across the flattened screen of a laptop) and ink.
If you don't have a fountain pen, use one of those pilot pens—the kind that gives a thick black line no matter how hard you press. If you can see the ink wet on the paper for a second or two after you draw and don't have to make an indent in the paper, it's probably the right kind of pen. You only get one stroke per line with those things, so you have to be steady and careful, but you have to keep moving. The experience of having done this also helped tremendously when I started using a tablet, because you can go back and do little touch-ups, but you still have to ink in a fountain-pen frame of mind.
I know you came looking for someone to clean or touch-up your art, but the odds of finding that someone are rather long. It's not something beyond your grasp, and you're not going to get better unless you do it yourself.
edited 11th Dec '10 12:17:23 PM by DaeBrayk
Thank you very much. I have just started using GIMP to ink my drawings. I'm planning to get some tracing paper though a dark pen could work too. I guess it was a stupid thing to ask 'can I get some help at this point.
I'm still working on my webcomic but I need help maybe an assistant artist or a touch up artist.
Here are a few samples of my work: http://hoodiegurl.deviantart.com/#/d34lhrp
http://hoodiegurl.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d30stb8
http://hoodiegurl.deviantart.com/gallery/?q=comic#/d2z0apg
(currently redoing)
http://hoodiegurl.deviantart.com/art/Lineart-The-Brothers-Stryke-188085535?q=gallery:hoodiegurl/15473662&qo=2
I know my art is sketchy and not exactly the cleanest but I'm working on it