Improving work and creator page descriptions

I'm proposing a rewrite of two paragraphs in Literature.Momo Creepypasta, because I feel they're kinda awkwardly written. They're also kinda incorrect? One sentence says it won't provide contact info for the Momo account, as if it were real, but there is no evidence it exists, and it seems the "reports of private information being leaked" were unsubstantiated.

Momo is a July 2018 meme and the name given to a photograph of a woman possessing a large grin, pointed nose, and bulging eyes. The image was first uploaded onto reddit's subreddit /r/creepy. While the image itself is actually of a modern art sculpture and was cropped down as well, an urban legend had arisen about the image, believing it has some connection to the WhatsApp app. Given reports of private information being leaked, there will be no number to get into contact with the "Momo" account.

After a surge of controversy, it was announced that the original sculptor, Keisuke Aiso, had dismantled the sculpture of Momo (its real name being the Mother Bird), largely because of the controversy as well as it additionally beginning to rot.

Momo is a July 2018 meme featuring a photograph of a woman possessing a large grin, pointed nose, and bulging eyes, first uploaded onto reddit's subreddit /r/creepy. Urban legends claim that a WhatsApp account using this image is encouraging children to participate in the "Momo Challenge" urging participants to hurt themselves, attack other people, and, eventually, kill themselves. In reality, this is all a hoax; no such account exists, and there is no evidence of anybody taking their own life after participating in such a game.

The image is actually of a modern art sculpture created by sculptor Keisuke Aiso, who named it Mother Bird. He later dismantled the sculpture, in part because it had began to decay, in part because he felt partially responsible for all the emotional distress the hoax caused to children.

Edited by Diesel on Jan 17th 2024 at 11:31:54 AM

WesternAnimation.Daisy Head Mayzie needs a longer description.

VideoGame.Submachine: Given that the free online versions still are up and stuff, should I rewrite the game links to use the free ones instead of the newer paid versions? Also linking to free stuff is less advertise-y?

Found Bizarre Restaurant during wick cleaning, and its description is just one sentence long.

The Sandbox version has a actual description but grammar bad?

Theatre.Slave Play doesn't actually seem to have a description...

My Hero Academia Laugh As If You Are In Hell lacks any kind of description.

The Blue Bird has the entire recap. It may be better suited for Recap.The Blue Bird and replaced with more publishing info.

(The ZCE state is also very poor)

Just looking at It Ain't Half Hot, Mum. As a starting point, I'd like to replace the end of the description. It's currently this:

Proposed replacement:

Edited by Mrph1 on May 7th 2024 at 12:41:14 PM

Sounds good.

That's a big improvement.

Much better.

Fallout has this sentence: "Compared to the rest of the series, it is unarguably the most straightforward, and most true to the original vision for the franchise."

I'm not sure about the "straightforward" part (it is remarkably non-linear, though short) and the second clause is pretty much self-evident. I suggest changing it to "It is shorter than any later game, but set most of the franchise's signature elements."

Edited by Reymma on May 7th 2024 at 1:19:26 PM

Support your suggestion.

Updated It Ain't Half Hot, Mum - thanks for the feedback.